That was damn spooky!
You write horror stories like a pro girl! 👏
Loved every bit of it!
The manner in which you showed that it was Kabir's nightmare at first and then the eventual build up to show that it was very much real and how you skillfully used Kabir's wound and Nisha getting hurt by the glass scenes for this was brilliant! 👏
I loved your description of Kabir's wound! So terrifyingly good!
Kabir in a dilemma whether to tell Nisha about the paranormal presence as she may tease or get worried was well portrayed. 👍🏼
You have shown the subtle changes in Kabir's behaviour and Nisha noticing it very nicely.
Nisha trying to flirt with Kabir while he was dressing her wound, him not responding and she trying to get the matter out of him and he finally revealing it, she consoling him and tending to all his wounds, him not knowing how to tell her something that he himself did not believe in a while ago but telling her neverthelaess and again, she being doubtful about the presence of any supernatural entity were very well written moments! 👍🏼
The fact that Kabir endured this for three months and was tight-lipped about this the whole time leaves me in awe of his strength!
Liked how you put in a light moment of Kabir feeling relaxed in Nisha's embrace while she hugged him to sleep, amidst all this.
Moving on, you have described the eerie silence of the midnight and that creepy sound, Nisha's fears, and how though she found horror movies fun to watch, the thought of it turning real gave her the chills wonderfully!
The next scene of that sinister shadow becoming bigger by the second and her feeling that its approaching her, that gutt-feeling of someone following her, she tripping and falling and the room door shutting right in front of her eyes, the feeling of someone pulling her from behind and her failed attempts to resist the force, she shouting for Kabir's help and wishing she hadn't given him the sleeping pills and at last falling unconscious was bang on! It was spine-chillingly amazing! 👏
A hair-rising update on the whole!
I'm so eager to read the next part!!
Please continue soon and thanks for pm 😊
Edited by .vishrutha. - 9 years ago
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