NiBir FF: It was REVENGE..till I fell in LOVE (Part 4 up!,pg-20 18/12)

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shrutigaur37

@shrutigaur37

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Posted: 9 years ago

#51

what a superb update. it was quite emotinal. dolly n kabir br-sis bonding is very ttouching.do continue soon n .ake a fast entry of nisha in kabir's life to lessen his pain. n thanks for d pm.

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arviabhigya

@arviabhigya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#52

Aaj toh tumhari lottery lag gayi Lily😆😆

Do do comment ek hi din mein woh bhi res queen se😆🤣

Chapter 2- Fabulous update yaar👏👏👏

I absolutely love ur writing style😳

Tumhare updates zyaada lambe nahin hote magar tum bade hi crisp tareeke se har cheez bayaan kar deti hun through ur writing👏👏👍🏼

The evening had already covered the starry city in its dark starry blanket. Kabir had been walking the roads of Mumbai since his arrival in the morning, carrying his green-black backpack around. He could not find any place to stay. Either they were too expensive or too uncomfortable. Nobody had extra time to negotiate with pure strangers. Indeed a busy city Mumbai was! Well, at least he had a nice wholesome lunch at a dhaba.- Your description was so on point 👍🏼👏👏Loved the way u conveyed the vibe the city gave !

The telephonic conversation with Dolly, his cousin, took him into a nostalgic stride. For him, she was like a second mother since childhood. Whenever his mom was busy in earning their livelihood, she took care of Kabir like her own kid, even though she was only two years elder. Rajbir never supported them financially and also charged them 50% room rent for staying at his place.- I love it how in just 4 lines u r able to explain Kabir's relation with Rajbir and Dolly so well👍🏼😆

Loved the bond shared by Dolly-Kabir😳 M happy atleast someone in that family cares for our Kabir😳

Kabir was enraged at the mention of his dead mother from Rajbir as if she was something to bet on. But instead of losing his head and to make Rajbir lose his for a change, he continued the cold war of words and replied calmly.- loved this part😆 Kabir is smart😆😉

The old man bursted, like a safety valve of a pressure cooker bursts when it gets blocked. Dolly intervened while her parents - Mohan and Rupan - came out at the entrance. Kabir was still drenched; his clothes, his eyes and his thoughts- Loved this part especially the last line👍🏼👏 U have penned down Kabir's state so well👍🏼

His chain of thoughts got interrupted when a slim, petite girl in her early twenties came running from a distance by his side and pushed him accidentally. He looked at her side. She was wearing a white ladies shirt and a jeans blue waistcoat, teamed with black jeggings. She was carrying a purple gift wrapped box. She glanced backwards at him, mouthed a sorry and left like a gust of wind. Her shiny open hair, black eyes and warm innocent smile made Kabir smile for the first time in two days.- Aaye hayye 😳 Nibir meeting😃 Loved it ❤️ Especially the last line

Edited by arviabhigya - 9 years ago

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star394

@star394

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Posted: 9 years ago

#53

Loved the concept..awesome update

Nisha's entry was superb thanks for the pm!

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Lily

@do0dleR

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Posted: 9 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: SaruSenan
Lissy👏👏👏 Superb update👍🏼

Kabir vo dhabe mein jo family ko dekha aur voh ghar wali baath socha nah mujhe vo part acha lga👍🏼 I liked the way U connected dat small scene with his present scenario😛

Rajbir's words towards Kabir too harsh🤔@BOLD well said👏👏👏

A person does not belong to a place, but to the people, his family...

Well Dolly-Kabir bonding

Rupan & Mohan still in their characters like dat in show.. 😊 Rupan thinking abt his daughter's future & Mohan standing like Statue🤢

Finally our Kabira smiled😃 aur vo bhi Nishu ki wajah se😳

Hehehe😆 I can guess Nishu hi hai voh Ladki jo destiny ki wajh se anjaan se takarayi taaki zindangi mein baar baar jaan boochkar takara sake🤣🤣🤣

Waiting 4 NiBir's meeting.. with proper Intro🤣 jo I m sure wll b filled with K & J nk jhoks 🤣

Thanks 4 PM 🤣

Do write More🤗 Q ki DMM😳😆🤣

Yeah Saaru ne phla comment kiya...!!

@ Red - Thank you Buasisyy...🤗 Glad that you loved those lines... it just came from my heart... 😳

@Bold Red - actually there is a little personal reason why it came from my heart. I am a Rajasthani but live in Delhi since childhood. Toh when I say in Delhi that where I am from, they think yeh Rajasthan ki h.. Nanaji k ghar jaati hu to thr ppl think Delhi ki h...😆😆... Toh whenever I think where I am from, the first thing I think is about my family..😳... Pta nhi why I said all this...😆... Anyway, thank you liked the lines...😉

@Blue - Ye RuHan change ho jaynge to maza nahi aayga (story mein)...🤣🤣

@Orange - Arey, they are made for each-other na...😉... It was bound to happen...😆

@BoldBlack - Sure anytime...🤣🤣...Will send you more...🤣🤣🤣...

Thank you for your lovely comment... 🤗

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Lily

@do0dleR

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: Amina...
Nice update 👏
Very beautifully written 👍🏼
Loved it ...

Thank you darling!...😳

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Lily

@do0dleR

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: maniwood
Beautiful update yaar...awesome!!!
You always have some mystery in your stories 😆
Update soon

Thank you Mansi...

@Bold - I can't help it...honestly...😆😆

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Lily

@do0dleR

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Posted: 9 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: alisha17
Dat was a lovely update
Felt bad for Kabir
Thnku for the pm

Aww... thank you Alisha...😊

And dnt feel bad, Nishu Kabir ko kabhi akela nhi chodegi...😉

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Lily

@do0dleR

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: itznimi003
res🤣

madam... Unres bhi kar dena...🤣🤣

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Lily

@do0dleR

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Posted: 9 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: shrutigaur37
what a superb update. it was quite emotinal. dolly n kabir br-sis bonding is very ttouching.do continue soon n .ake a fast entry of nisha in kabir's life to lessen his pain. n thanks for d pm.

thank you shruti...😊... glad that you liked it...

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Saranya Senan M C

@SaruSenan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: do0dleR

Yeah Saaru ne phla comment kiya...!!

@ Red - Thank you Buasisyy...🤗 Glad that you loved those lines... it just came from my heart... 😳

@Bold Red - actually there is a little personal reason why it came from my heart. I am a Rajasthani but live in Delhi since childhood. Toh when I say in Delhi that where I am from, they think yeh Rajasthan ki h.. Nanaji k ghar jaati hu to thr ppl think Delhi ki h...😆😆... Toh whenever I think where I am from, the first thing I think is about my family..😳... Pta nhi why I said all this...😆... Anyway, thank you liked the lines...😉

@Blue - Ye RuHan change ho jaynge to maza nahi aayga (story mein)...🤣🤣

@Orange - Arey, they are made for each-other na...😉... It was bound to happen...😆

@BoldBlack - Sure anytime...🤣🤣...Will send you more...🤣🤣🤣...

Thank you for your lovely comment... 🤗

First leeme recover frm shack & fainting😲🤣

Ziindagi mein maine sab logom ko aise colourful replies dia hai.. aur aaj mujhe kisine colourful reply dia aftr Lekhs who use only blue colour to reply me as I uses most of other colours🤣 par Tune toh usko bhi chakma de dia & U used almost all colours to reply for ME🤗 Thank u Lissy😃 Yaa 4 NiBir stories Pm's r welcomed❤️

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