~~ AnYa Drabbles ~~ - Page 5

JZ , I always look forward to reading your posts in the forum . Honestly, I'm in awe of your writing style. Your words have got a poetic soothing touch to it .Not many people are gifted with such a talent. This is a fantastic piece of work! You managed to get Anant's dilemma, helplessness across so well.

I wanted to be happy thinking about her. I wanted to return to a flash back of a rare, arbitrary memory of her soft laughter, and revel in the wonderful feeling of freedom and fondness that evoked in me. I wanted to think of the times we had come close. Lose myself to that heady, mesmerized feeling, have my breath hitched somewhere on its way up, just remembering the abandon of restrain that exhilaration afforded me, an unprecedented, progressive high, each time…

A loner in the middle, with nothing but imposed obligations in sight, direction irrespective. Ironic was the assurance of love from all quarters, even genuine support from few.

These words just melted me. They are the highlight of your drabble. The flow of the narrative is fabulous. From who Anant actually is, a guy who wants to be happy with the one he loves, who reminisces the moments he spent with her, to a guy who has lost all hope and direction in family pressure. Extremely Ironic Situation, even after being surrounded by everyone who supposedly love and care for him, he is lonely, fighting between his tradition and his heart. He is not able to confide even in members who are genuinely giving him support, like Nimi/Mohan/His Mother. Great job done👍🏼

@Namesake Dig - You cracked me up with that😆

I hope you continue writing such brilliant drabbles in the future as well :)

Originally posted by: bebosallu4eva

Amazing update

cont soon...

Originally posted by: anantanant

Thanks for the post and the msg JZee!

I felt that your post filled a big void I felt when I watched the last few episodes... I had really wanted some scenes where Anant spoke out his thoughts - he has gone through a big transformation from being the "good" boy to discovering a totally unexpected side to him... The 3 scenes where he did speak to Navya about his feelings were fine but I was looking for more I guess... Your post is very satisfying to read because it goes through Anant's feelings the way I wanted to... He has suddenly grown up, his life is no longer simple and he has battles on his hand which he never ever imagined he would have... I felt that cvs should have dwelt on his dilemma with a lot more punch... Would've loved to see your writing enacted on-screen...

Makes me wonder, if there was no Navya, would he have accepted Shagun?

Thanks for giving us a bright spark - I have almost given up hope of seeing nayi soch in the serial, at least the forum is giving me the food for thought I crave!

Keep writing!

Originally posted by: Awesome.Sauce

Daymn I read This Yesterday...but real life stuff restrained me from commenting! 😆😕My apologies. 😃Alright!! Looks like I can finally comment😆😆😆: Gracias - your presence makes the thread live up more in style 😃 (and in emoticons of course! You're turning me into another version of yourself, slowly, but surely 😲 <--- see?!)

JZee: I dont usually read FFs (Although,I am assuming its not a Fan Fiction😆😆 ROFL!!! If you don't read FFs I assure you this is not one 😆 ) but dude, This is sheer brilliant piece of work.😃 I always wanted an insight of Anant's character about what he thinks,what he feels. Hence,you got me hooked.😃I always love the write-ups in the first person. Aye, aye, me too! Like you say - they add the personal touch... even reading first person is easier to relate to - I have to admit though, whenever I do write first person, it takes me far more many edits, cause I keep forgetting and lapsing into third person in between 😳 So much for habit! They somehow give the personal touch to the character (Whatever that's supposed to mean😕😆🥱). I could feel the suffocation/frustration of Anant's character while I was reading through. You have just given the words to what Shaheer has been trying to portray all this while. 😳 I especially liked the part where Sh*t-gun asks Ah-nant if he wants some "Meetha"😆😆😆 Hainaaa?!?!?! Dude, I can just imagine that scene - she's so perpetually dumb and stuck up and what not! and like Rama insisted, Meetha is her thing - hasn't she done it like... let's see, a gazillion times?! The excuse of mithai - cliche and what not! .I chuckled when I read Anant's reaction😆😆😆LOL. You actually feel sorry for this guy.😆😆 I loved how you introduced Sh*t-gun in this edition:

"Shagun, they call her, although her advent into my life has had no namesake effect. Quite the contrary. Looking back in retrospect, she has been bad news for me, from the word go, and it couldn't all be an innocent coincidence."🤣ROFLMAO to that! 🤣

I quite liked the closure.😃

Its nice that Anant is actually determined to do something for his love and is hoping to get answers from Navya as well.

Atta Girl!

I like... what I see...and hope to see some more !!😳

Peace<3

Neha.

Originally posted by: --Naina--

JZ , I always look forward to reading your posts in the forum . Honestly, I'm in awe of your writing style. Your words have got a poetic soothing touch to it .Not many people are gifted with such a talent. This is a fantastic piece of work! You managed to get Anant's dilemma, helplessness across so well. - Thank you Naina. I've received such an overwhelming response, i have to admit I didn't see it coming like this - but its nothing I complain about. Here's to hoping I shall keep it up 😳

I wanted to be happy thinking about her. I wanted to return to a flash back of a rare, arbitrary memory of her soft laughter, and revel in the wonderful feeling of freedom and fondness that evoked in me. I wanted to think of the times we had come close. Lose myself to that heady, mesmerized feeling, have my breath hitched somewhere on its way up, just remembering the abandon of restrain that exhilaration afforded me, an unprecedented, progressive high, each time'

A loner in the middle, with nothing but imposed obligations in sight, direction irrespective. Ironic was the assurance of love from all quarters, even genuine support from few.

These words just melted me. They are the highlight of your drabble. The flow of the narrative is fabulous. From who Anant actually is, a guy who wants to be happy with the one he loves, who reminisces the moments he spent with her, to a guy who has lost all hope and direction in family pressure. Extremely Ironic Situation, even after being surrounded by everyone who supposedly love and care for him, he is lonely, fighting between his tradition and his heart. He is not able to confide even in members who are genuinely giving him support, like Nimi/Mohan/His Mother. Great job done👍🏼 Thanks again. Yes I wanted to base it as a chain of thoughts inside his head, because I found that thinking process missing in the episodes even in the rare three encounters where he does set out to say his part - and as I begun doing it, I realized it couldn't be an independent thing and had to include everyone who had made up the situation this way - good and bad.

@Namesake Dig - You cracked me up with that😆

I hope you continue writing such brilliant drabbles in the future as well :)

Originally posted by: JZephyr

🤣 I was thinking the same JZ! Thats a nice nice nic!

Emmm btw...about your name...erm...didn't get that either! 🤔

Edited by sohn - 14 years ago

Originally posted by: sohn

🤣 I was thinking the same JZ! Thats a nice nice nic!

Emmm btw...about your name...erm...didn't get that either! 🤔

Originally posted by: JZephyr

It's just JZ - I turned the Z into Zephyr to sound fancy and enigmatic 😆

Originally posted by: barbie2011

Hey I am new to this forum, nd i ahve not read other wiritings form JZee.. can you please provide mewith te link or more details abt the Shakespeare in Ove- FF that you are talikng about and also some other. I'll aprrecite it.

Thank you