AvNeil: Heartstrings Chapter 3 -Page 4

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hello Forum members and Ardent AvNeilians!


I am here with a story, which i would love if u all read.It will be a very slow paced story, so if you like to go with the flow , i would love if you all read it and cherish.


Disclaimer: This story is basically a thriller / mystery type and is filled with suspense.


Constructive criticism is Appreciated and welcomed.


The story basically revolves Around Avni and Neil's lives.

Through the columns ,

Of your heart,

God has reshaped

The strings,

The heartstrings,

U have started living,

U have started healing,

No more worries engulfing u anymore,

Someone made a way to your heart,

Mended when it broke apart,

When you never knew knew knew,

Love made you once again what are,

It made your find yourself find what you are,

Unleash what you could do,

When your world was falling afar...

When your world was falling afar...



Meet Avni, who is successfully a grown up girl.(a deep secret will be revealed later) ...A computer engineer, hacker, and detective . Is a calm, but fierce lady at the same time. Tackles situations Really well. But never fails to be a miracle, a ajooba. .Believes in love, but feels she has not found the one she can trust.


Meet Neil, a successful detective, who has suffered some deep depression in his life(we will talk about it later in the story), a loyal son of his father and mother, and his beloved grandmother. He feels that other than his family, there is no one he can love. Is a work loyal person. But finds time for his close ones. He diverts his mind towards work ,to avoid the nightmares scaring him. Is very calm person, tackles situations efficiently.Never fails to admire people,he is a miracle, a ajooba , like a magic spell over people...Believes in love, but feels he has found none he can trust...


Many deep secrets will be revealed out further in the story. And Buddy me for the chapters. I will pm u all.



Word limit for each chapter- Based on the content for each.


Teasers will come after every 4 chapte


Will love to see your response



Love,
Sami
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Eager to read the story.
Do you write poetry yourself? Because it's amazing.❤️
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Posted: 7 years ago
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A good start, do continue. two detectives same choice in trusting people.Nice poetry 👍🏼
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: sugar_candy15

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Eager to read the story. Thanks
Do you write poetry yourself?Obviously. I am the biggest avid reader and writer in my class! Because it's amazing.❤️ Yes it is my own work.

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: canzasana

A good start, do continue. two detectives same choice in trusting people.Yeah.Nice poetry Thanks... 👍🏼

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Sami, this is amazeballs. Like from whatever I have read, it is very promising.

Their characterizations are really intriguing, obviously, mysterious to an extent. I am not gonna over analyze this because right now it's just the start. This does seem like their mysterious deep secrets, the scars of their past would only heal when they fall in each others arms.

Both of them being detectives gives me hope that they can work on same case, different level or probably against each other while they end up together, finding the truth about the case and in the peocess finding peace for themselves. I guess, I have already started over analysing 😆

Anyways, I would be looking forward to read this tale of mystery by you. With such stories, the pace gotta be a little slow, that's what helps you shape the characters and the story while you build the suspense as well as unviel it.

The poetry at the start is really beautiful.. have you attempted that on your own?

Do write whenever time permits. Hope that is sooner though. :D
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Eagerly waiting to read more of this
Update soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Their character sketch is so intriguing. They have so much baggage of their past which can only be healed when they find love cause only a broken soul can health another broken soul . Looks like Neil's past is haunting him till now as nightmare . I am always in for broken souls coming together . I guess soon they will work together. Avni being a hacker and Neil a detective .
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Originally posted by: -shenz-

Sami, this is amazeballs. Like from whatever I have read, it is very promising.

Their characterizations are really intriguing, obviously, mysterious to an extent. I am not gonna over analyze this because right now it's just the start. This does seem like their mysterious deep secrets, the scars of their past would only heal when they fall in each others arms. Past is so deep, i think i should reveal it much much later. Cliff hangers uff i love them 😃😆❤️

Both of them being detectives gives me hope that they can work on same case, different level or probably against each other while they end up together, finding the truth about the case and in the peocess finding peace for themselves. I guess, I have already started over analysing 😆 Nope u did very right.

Anyways, I would be looking forward to read this tale of mystery by you. With such stories, the pace gotta be a little slow, that's what helps you shape the characters and the story while you build the suspense as well as unviel it. Yup that's 100% true.

The poetry at the start is really beautiful.. have you attempted that on your own? Oh yes oh yes oh yes!!! That is all mine . 😃😆

Do write whenever time permits. Hope that is sooner though. :D Will try my best , as always!





Thank u so much for this! I loved reading your review!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: AgnesFan

Their character sketch is so intriguing. Thank u . They have so much baggage of their past which can only be healed when they find love cause only a broken soul can health another broken soul .

Well that maybe. See it your self further in the story .

Looks like Neil's past is haunting him till now as nightmare .
Haunts till as nightmare. Well some years before. Now they have stopped a little. But who knows when they again haunt. (It even haunts someone else, will reveal later in the story)


I am always in for broken souls coming together .
Even me! What a coincidence

I guess soon they will work together.
Yes they will. Surely

Avni being a hacker and a detective as well and Neil a detective .



Thank u so much!🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗


Love ,
Sami

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