Made For Each Other Avneil fanfic Part 5 on Page 6

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hi guys this is my first post in this forum and hope that you people will like what I have written
The characters are same as in the show right now. And the story of my Fanfic starts from where yesterday's episode ended.

All the family members were very angry with Neil especially Shweta and Neela ma. They were not in a mood to talk to Neil.

Neil comes.home calling out for Avni but does not get any reply from Avni. So he asks his mom where Avni is

Shweta : Bahut jaldi yaad aagaya tujhe Avni ke bare mein Tillu.

Neil : Mom please bataiye na Avni kahan hai. Mujhe usse baat karna hai

Shweta: Tune ek Baar bhi nahi socha Tillu Avni Ko use mandap mein akela chodke jaane se pehle. Tune yehi nahi socha ki usse kaise lagega, woh kya feel karegi. Nahi tujhe toh sirf Juhi ki padi hai.

Neela ma : Shwetaji sahi keh rahi hai Neil. Tumne meri bachchi Ko woh yaad dilaya kisses woh bahut saalon se bhulne ki koshish kar rahi thi. Tumne Avni Ko kaha tha ki t Ashish Mehta nahi ho but aaj tumne bhi Ashish Mehta ki tarah mandap mein meri Avni Ko akele chodke chale gaye.

Neil was feeling very guilty.

Neela ma: Tumhari wajah se meri beti ne pyaar karna seekha tha aur tumhari wajah se hi uska pyaar se wapas bharosa uth gaya hai Neil.

Neil: Avni kahan ho tum mujhe tumse baat karni hai. I am sure tum mujhe samjhogi and meri madad karogi Avni. But he does not get any reply. Mom Avni kahan hai

Shweta: Jabse hospital se aayi hai Avni ne kisi se baat nahi kiya hai Tillu. Woh seedha Apne kamre mein chali gayi and uske baad humne usse dekha bhi nahi.

Neil runs towards his room but he has an unknown fear also.

When he reaches the room he does not find Avni there. He checks the washroom if she is there but could not find her. Then finally his eyes fall on the letter that Avni has written.

Dear Neil,

Jab tum yeh letter pad rahe hoge tab tak mein tumse bahut dur jaa chuki hongi. Neil aaj tumne mujhse yeh ehsaas dilaaya ki Ayesha ma ko kaisa laga hoga jab papa unhe mandap mein akela chodke gaye. Maine socha tha ki mera Neil Ashish Mehta nahi hai but tumne bhi mujhe mandap mein akela chodke diya. Aur jis baat Ko mein bhoolna chahthi thi usse hi tumne yaad dilaaya. Phir bhi maine himmat nahi Hari Neil. Maine saare ghar waalon Ko yeh kaha ki Neil Ko hamari zaroorat hogi toh hume uske saath chalna chahiye. But maine joh hospital mein dekha usne mere dil ko thod diya Neil. Tumne Juhi se vaada Kiya ki tum hamesha uske saath rahoge. This broke my heart and also it broke me. Mein nahi chahthi hoon ki kal tumhe mujhe ya Juhi mein se kisi ek Ko chun naa pade. Mein tumhe aise situation mein nahi dekhna chahti hoon. Isiliye tumhe chodke jaa rahi hoon Neil. Dont try to find me. Always stay happy with Juhi.

Yours

Avni

Neil broke down after seeing this letter. By then all the family members also arrive there and get to that Avni has left them forever.

Shweta: Yeh sab tere wajah se ho raha hai Tillu. Naa tu usse bachchi Ko dikh pahunchaata aur naa woh hum sab Ko chodke jaati.

Bebe: Shweta theek keh rahi hai Tillu. Naa jaane Avni bahu kis haalat mein hogi

Prakash: Neil tu Avni Ko dhoond aur ghar wapas le as

Neel who was till now not in his senses realises that it's because of him that Avni has left him. I hhave created this fear in Avni that I can leave her and choose Juhi. I will only clear all these misunderstanding Avni and get you back iny life.

U are my life Avni and I will get my life and my happiness back soon.

That's my first part. Hope you liked it. Will continue it if u all want me to continue it. Also help in finalising a title for this Fanfic.


Edited by Sandy1988 - 7 years ago

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Posted: 7 years ago
#2
I guess nobody likes the fanfic. So I will close the fanfic
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Posted: 7 years ago
#3
I like it. It was nice. Want to know what going to happen next. Continue please. It's title can be "Made for each other "
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Posted: 7 years ago
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😉 so so beautiful.. double thumbs up. 👏. Great start felt like watching the show 😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thanks guys. Will definitely continue it.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thanks for the title winxcute. I liked the title too
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Posted: 7 years ago
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I am loving the Start...Wish Avni takes a Firm stand against Neils Juhi jaap and Makes him Realise his mistake...Also I want A VP Avni Chemistry..With a jealous neil Like cherry on the cake.

Cont. Soon.

If possible PM me pls.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Title hona chahiye 'ek duje ke liye without chuzi'

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Part 2


After reading the letter of Avni, Neil tried thinking of where Avni could go. He immediately left the Khanna mansion in search of Avni.

Neil: Kahan ho yaar Avni. Jaanta hoon ki Maine galti ki hai par uske liye mujhe it badi sazaa mat do yaar.

While driving the car neil felt that Avni must have gone to chamko cafe. Usually when ever Avni feels sad she goes to cafe to meet Ali and talk to him. So Neil drove his car towards the cafe.

Ali: Arey yaar Neil tum yahan. Avni nahi aayi tere saath. Aaj kal cafe aayi hi nahi hai.

Neil: Darasal mein yahan se guzar raha tha toh socha tujhse milke jaaon.

Ali: Acha Kiya tu aagaya Milne.

Neil in thoughts Avni yahan nahi hai toh kahan gayi hogi. Neil thought that he should check at Ayesha ma's house. He drove his car in full speed and was feeling guilty to have hurt Avni.

When he reaches Ayesha ma's house he found it to be dark inside the house. He slowly reached towards the door and knocked it.

Somehow he felt that his Avni is here only. After a few knocks Neil heard the sound of door opening. There she was his Avni. Avni was in a terrible state crying throughout the day. Her eyes had become blood red and puffed.

Neil felt that he is responsible for Avni's condition. He slowly moved towards Avni to say sorry to her.
As he was nearing her, he heard a very feeble voice asking him to stop wherever he is.

Neil was shocked to hear such a thing from Avni. Avni yaar am really very sorry. Please meri galti ke liye mujhe daanto, maaro, chillao, gussa karo par mujhse dur mat rahi Avni. Mujhe itni badi sazaa mat do Avni

Avni: Kis haq se mein tumpe gussa karoon Neil. Tum mere ho kaun?

Neil: Aise mat kaho Avni. Tum meri sab kuch ho.

Avni : Agar aisa hota toh tum mujhe mandap mein akela chodke nahi jaate. Tumhare liye hamare rishte ki kya ahamiyat hai yeh mein jaan chuki hoon. Mein khud tumse kuch din pehle poocha tha ki ab Juhi as gayi hai toh humara kya.

Par tumne mujhse kaha ki Juhi tumhari ateet hai aur mein tumhaara aaj hoon. Tumne kaha ki ateet ki parchaayi humaare aaj par nahi padne doonga. Jab maine tumhe propose kiya tumne mujhe tumhaara aur Juhi ke bachchi ke baare mein bataya tha phir bhi maine tumhe ek maula diya. Par tumne mere saath joh aaj kiya naa Neil usse mein kabhi nahi bhoolongi aur naahi tumhe mein maaf karungi.

Neil : Avni yaar please mujhe ek mauka do mein sab kuch theek kar doonga.

Avni: Ab kuch theek nahi hoga Neil. Kuch din pehle tumne mujhe kaha tha ki tum Ashish Mehta nahi ho par joh harqat tumne ki hai mujhe ek pal ke liye Laga ki 20 saal baad mein wapas Ashish Mehta se mil rahi hoon.

Avni didn't want to talk to Neil anymore so she shut the door. Neil was continuously banging the door but Avni was reluctant to open.

Mein koi gudiya nahi hoon Neil jab chahe tum khelo aur jab chahe phek do.

Neil felt terrible that his one mistake cost him his life. His life Avni is not ready to talk to him or forgive him.

Neil : Kuch bhi ho jaate Avni mein tumhe apni zindagi mein wapas leke aaonga aur tumhe woh pyaar bhi doonga jiski tum haqdaar ho.

Precap: Avni meets Karan

Tried to write a long one. Looking forward for your comments guys. Do let me know how is it

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Edited by Sandy1988 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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A nice one. Thought that she would go out of station, but th at was also good. Egar to read how she gonna met Karan. If not wrong then he must be RP son. Continue. Update soon. Good going. 😊
Edited by Winxcute - 7 years ago

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