Avneil: Kyun main jaagoon; FF; chapter 13 page 35(UPDATED 22/09) - Page 14

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Posted: 8 years ago
Nice update
Neela teasing Avni was superb
Neil got his hands on Avni's hot photos
Update soon please
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AvNeil romance...
Hayeee love them...
It was awesome..
And Neela teasing them was also nice...
Now waiting for Avni to come...
Neil is definitely smitten after seeing her pics... Hehehehe...
Update soon..

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Loved Neela's teasing...Avneil are so hot together
Neil saw her bikni shoot and he is going to be full on lattu on her again😆
plz continue soon
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Originally posted by: Gurveen

Nice update
Neela teasing Avni was superb
Neil got his hands on Avni's hot photos
Update soon please

thank you so much.. i am glad that u liked it. Updating soon..
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Originally posted by: Kshailja

AvNeil romance...

Hayeee love them...
It was awesome..
And Neela teasing them was also nice...
Now waiting for Avni to come...
Neil is definitely smitten after seeing her pics... Hehehehe...
Update soon..

thank you so much.. i am glad that u liked it. Will update soon...
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thank you so much
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Awesome update

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Amazing!

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Originally posted by: pri12

Loved Neela's teasing...Avneil are so hot together

Neil saw her bikni shoot and he is going to be full on lattu on her again😆
plz continue soon

thank you so much... yeah neil will be very much latto on her.. will update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago

chapter 10


This is my ff, hope you like it.

The lines in black is for what author is saying or describing, ( ) for translation. Blue for neel's pov.

Oh my god, I have completed 10 chapters, I cant believe this. Few days back I was asking if I should continue or not and now I have done 10 chapters.

Note: don't get me wrong, but the decrease in comments is kind of discouraging me to write more, I think you are not liking it, if so then I will wrap it up in next chapter. Share your valuable views. What should I do, wrap it up or continue to write more and more chapters. PM me if you don't like to comment. And sorry if I hurt the ones who comment, really sorry. i understand that everyone is busy in their life, but understand me too like i do. thanks

Sorry guys, this chapter is short but its a chota box bada dhamaka.

You broke my heart ,all of you, you didn't notice the upcoming twist I hinted in the previous chapter. Its ok I forgive you, so enjoy this surprise. I hope you like it.

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Author's POV

The whole afternoon, Neel saw her photos again and again, and other photos and videos too.

In the evening

While neel is watching avni's videos, he hears someone screaming his name and says "Bebe. He gets hell worried that what cause bebe to scream like this. Thousands bad thoughts came in his mind but he dismissed all because he don't want to waste even a single second thinking rather than doing some action. So he closes the laptop and jumps out of the bed and runs out of the room.

In the hall bebe is shouting "paani lao jaldi(bring water fast)

Neel reaches to the hall and sees avni half lying on the sofa and all the ladies surrounding her. Bebe is making her drink some water to which avni is refusing constantly.

Avni ko kya ho gaya, theek thi subha tak ab kya ho gaya, ye ladki mujhe hamesha heart attack deti h. I hope kuch jyada serious na ho.(what has happened to avni, till morning she was perfectly fine, this girl always gives me heart attack, I hope nothing is serious)

He goes to avni and everyone gives him way, he sits beside her on sofa, so that her weight is supported by him, with his front attached to her back. He asks bebe to hand over glass to him and he makes her drink some of it. She was refusing but neel is neel, he gives her an angry look and makes her drink some water. After taking a sip she faints.

Neel gets shocked and says "avni, he makes her head lie in his lap and sprinkles some water on her meanwhile shweta and neela rubs her hands and feet.

Neel says "bebe avni ko kya hua h(bebe what has happened to avni) he is at the verge of crying, he cant see his lady love in any trouble. For neel avni is life, he cant see even a single thing happening to her. Meanwhile prakash comes and gets astonishes seeing the scene. He is still sleepy, screaming had woken him up.

Bebe gets scared seeing neel and says "pata nhi kya hua, abhi tak to theek thi, (I don't know, she was fine)

Kareena says "she just felt nausea when we were coming back

Shweta saysbebe kahi vo bahar ke khane se to nhi kuch hua(bebe I think it happened because of the outside food)

Neela saysha ho sakta h kyuki usse pehle avni theek thi(yes, possible, because avni was fine before that)

maddy says "food poisoning hui hogi

Amol comes and sees fainted avni and says "kya hua di ko(what happened to di)

Neel says "shayad food poisioing hospital le kar chalte h(maybe food poisioning, lets take her to hospital)

Neel gets up then he bends down and picks her up in bridal style. He takes her to the car and makes her sit in it. Everyone sits in the cars, neel and amol drives. All the khanna family members with neela and amol reach hospital. On the way, neela has already called aru and explained everything to him, asked him to come fast.

Avni is shifted to a room and doctor comes to check her while the whole family waits outside. Aru comes and waits with them. After some time doctor comes outside. Before she could say anything neel asks "Doctor avni kaisi h, use kya hua h, vo theek kab hogi?(doctor how is avni, what has happened to her, when will she get fine?)

Doctor says "Aap(you)?

Neel replies "Me unka husband(I am her husband )

Doctor says "don't worry, she is fine

Bebe says "par meri bahu ko hua kya h(but what has happened to her)

Doctor says "Aapki bahu pregnant h(your daughter in law is pregnant), congratulations

Everyone gets shocked but only for 1 second, after that they gets happy.

Neel asks "are you sure

To this question, everyone thinks that he wants to be sure, and couldn't believe that he is going to be a father and they smile. but this was not the case, reality is different

Doctor says "ofcoure, I am 200% sure

Neel is hell shocked meanwhile the family is jumping with joy,

How's this possible, how can she be, we were never this close, and the doctor is 200% sure. How? this means that, oh god.

Prakash says "how is the baby

Doctor says "they are fine

Shweta exclaimed "they!!??

Doctor says "yes, she is pregnant with twins

Neela asks "really?

Doctor smiles and nods, she then goes leaving everyone very happy.

Meanwhile everyone is congratulating neel , he is having a deep thought. He is not listening to them

To vo sab jo hua vo sab ek sapna nhi tha balki sach tha, aur me itne same gulit me tha ki mujhe avni se dur rehna chahiye because I am having wild dreams about her so me galti se kuch kar na do. that we would regreat, i wont but avni would . Par avni ne mujhse jhoot kyo bola?(so that means, is was not a dream but reality, and I was in gulit, and that I should stay away from avni, because I am having wild dreams about her . so I don't do anything wrong. that we would regreat, i wont but avni would .But why did avni lie to me?)

Bebe shakes him and says " yaha kyo khada h, chal andar(why standing here, come inside)

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This is my avneil ff. Hope you guys like this, if yes don't forget to hit the like and comment down below please. Hope you like the surprise

The password for the forbidden folder was "Mehta

PM if have question

Sorry for any grammatical error or any other error.

Thank you for reading

Love you all

Mehak

Edited by mehak4 - 8 years ago

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