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Posted: 7 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: IAdoreYou


Rusha 🤗🤗 So long, so very long since we last interacted.

Of course, I do. Have you forgotten that I never forget anyone? I don't even remember when we talked last. So I take that as you don't know what has happened to me. I was diagnosed with CVST in last october. In case you aren't aware of what CVST is, then it is Cerebral Venous Sinus Thrombosis, a life threatening blood clot in brain. I haven't been much on IF post that. Life has been crazy messy. I had a recent scan a few days back. The clot was supposed to be have gone by now but it hasn't and which is frightening.

You missed my writing and I missed the beautiful time I had on IF with you Sweethearts. IF is no more the same IF, is it? Probably I have lost my all interest in it. Oh don't worry about old PMs, Rusha. My whole inbox got deleted a while before. I have lost all the messages and trust me, they were so dear to me. It included precious conversations, sweet birthday wishes by you guys and so much more than that.

Oh Nagin 3 is all for Bella and Mahir aka Surbhi and Pearl for me. Honestly, this season lacks in charm of Nagins but I adore Bela and Mahir so my reason for watching the show is truly them. I am equally glad to have you here.

There you started with your usual kind words. Thank you so much. I am glad that you liked this small teaser. I have posted the full update. Read if and when time permits and let me know how you find it.

@Blue above - That means a lot to me.❤️

How have you been?

Much love and many hugs
-Harshada


Harshu!!!🤗🤗

I am doing good hun. Well,being a would-be-doctor,I know what CVST is. It's very rare. As you are seeing a doctor,I won't talk much on that. I would just say that please take care of yourself properly. Don't be scared. Everything will be alright. We,doctors are here for that only.😊

I am coming to IF after almost a year. Life has been pretty hectic and yeah I also feel IF isn't the same like we had before. Due to this one year gap,my inbox is flooded with pms and all. I am too scared to open them because I have no clue where to start.😆 Hoping that with time,I will be able to get back to everyone.😳😛😆

I was never a fan of Naagin. But due to previous two season's casts,I used to watch few clips. And I really really feel season 3 lacks that charm. Season 1 was the best. I am huge fan of Arjun Bijlani & KVB.😳 Maybe because of that I loved S1 & S2.😛 But this season,am loving BeHir.

Coming to your update. It was as always outstanding. Totally Harshu's style,full of emotions.😉❤️ Loved how you have shown Bela's inner turmoil. Totally loved it sweetheart.👏⭐️ And am really really excited for next update because Bela will get to know Mahir's truth. And as in the show,that's not going to happen anytime soon,so am excited for your update. But take your time. We can wait for your update. Don't take stress about update.😈

love,
Rusha

P.S.- I talk to much.😆😛🤪


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Posted: 7 years ago
#52

Thank you Prithi ;)
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Dearest Shehnaaz, Roheena and Rusha, would get back by tomorrow to reply you three. Can't really type much from this phone. It is annoying.
With love
-Harshada
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02 |Until I'm Alive|

"Bela, come." Holding her hand, he was leading the way towards their room when she stopped him.

"Mujhe aapse bat karni hai."

Freeing her hand, he nodded. "Haan bolo."

"Aap Anu ko salo se jaante hai. Aur... aur hamari pehchaan bas kuch dino ki hai, fir bhi aapne mujh par bharosa kiya, uss par nahi. Aisa kyu?" She asked, curiosity flickering through her eyes. The moment they had stepped in the home, they were greeted with Police and Anu's accusations on Bela of having motive to harm Mahir, which Mahir had adamantly refused to even listen, let aside believe them. His unshakable trust and faith in her, had surprised her to the extent she could not understand him.

Stepping closer, he smiled a bit. "Bela, maine tumse wada kiya hai. Wada kiya hai sath nibhane ka. Wada kiya hai, tumpe hamesha yakeen karne ka. Wada kiya hamesha tumhara sath dene ka aur mai apne wade kabhi nahi todta. Agar aage bhi kabhi aisi situation aati hai, to mai hamesha tumpar yakeen karunga. Hamesha. Ab chalo." Circling his hand around her back, he walked upstairs along with her without realizing in what state, his words had dropped her.

He seemed too good to be her criminal.

He seemed too good to be a murderer... her Vikrant's murderer.

He seemed too good to be punished.

What are Mahir? I don't understand you. It was easier for me earlier, to think that you were pretending everything but having spent this time with you, it is becoming tough for me to think that you killed Vikrant, that you were there to tarnish my respect that day. Though she silently kept walking with him, a tornado of emotions was inside her.

Every time she tried taking her revenge upon him, she had miserably failed. At times, her emotions betrayed her and at times, destiny.

*

Anu was furious with the entire drama created by Jamini, in Sehgal house.

She knew, Bela was wrong.

She knew, Bela was after Mahir.

She knew, Bela was up to something.

She knew it but damn, it was of no use because nobody was ready to believe her. The mere thought that Mahir had chosen to believe Bela over her despite having known her for years, infuriated her but whatever it was, she was not going to give up soon.

*

"Officer, I am telling you, that Jamini was lying. I am right about Bela. She is here to kill us. That Bela... that Bela is Nagin." Anu hadn't cared about the time when she showed up at ACP's home.

Already annoyed ACP about late night disturbance by Anu, he wanted to bang his head on the nearest wall hearing her childish accusations on Bela Ji as her husband had warned her to address as.

"Nagin nahi ichadhari Nagin." She corrected herself.

"Pehle to ek baat pe thehriye aap. Kabhi kehti hai Nagin kabhi kehti hai ichadhari Nagin." He shrugged her, not even finding it laugh worthy anymore.

"Officer, trust me. I am not lying. Maine khud dekha hai unko nag me badalte hue. Wo badla lene wapas ayi hai. Apne nag ka badla. Uss raat jo hua uska badla."

His eyes were suddenly focussed on her as he couldn't ignore what she said. "Kaunsi raat? Kis cheez ka badla?"

*

"Aapko iss samay kasht den eke liye shama chahte hai lekin ab kya kare, duty o karni hi padegi. Inn ke paas wajah hai aapki Bela Ji par shaq karne ke liye aur ye gawah bhi khade karsakti hai aapke hi pariwar me se, jo inki baat ko sabit karenge, aisa inka kehna hai." ACP pointed at Anu, trying to shift to glares of Mahir on her instead of him.

"Really Anu? Ham iss bare me baat karchuke hai." Sumitra had become irked with Anu, by then.

"Aunty, aap nahi thi uss din. Pratham tha. Ham sab the. Ham jaante hai. Ye Bela ek Nagin hai... ichadhari Nagin, jo apna badla lene ayi hai."

"Anu, shut up. I am not listening to a word more, against Bela." Mahir pulled Bela behind him as he walked forward towards Anu.

"Mahir, tum meri baat suno-"

"Anu bas." Sumitra stepped forward, cutting Anu in the middle.

"Before I file a complaint against you officer for the unreal stuff you are blaming my wife because of... just leave. Leave I said." Mahir stretched out his hand in the direction of the open door, clearly refusing to entertain the nonsense anymore. "And as far as I remember, that night a snake had died, but it wasn't anything of Ichadhari sort, right Pratham?" He turned towards Pratham who merely nodded in agreement whereas his face failed to mirror it rather the fear had embraced his face.

"Sun liya? Aur kuch sunana hai? LEAVE." Mahir's anger was at its peak. How dare they call his wife a nagin?

*

"Bela."

Her chain of thoughts broke with his call as he entered in the room, closing the door behind him. It had been a while since Anu left wrapping the drama she had brought along with her. The second, Anu had started reciting about that night, Bela had seen her revenge coming to, an end but Mahir changed it all by declining to believe what was being, said about her.

"Ha...haan, Mahir Ji." Getting out of the bed, she greeted her feet with the ground.

"I am so sorry, Bela. Jabse tum yaha aayi ho, kuch na kuch ho raha hai jo nahi hona chahiye aur aaj to had hi ho gayi. This ichadhari nagin crap-"

"Kaunse incident ki baat kar rahi thi Anu?"

Bela didn't let Mahir finish his words. She had something more important to know from him. He sighed, taking the bed.

"Honestly, mujhe nahi pata. Matlab pata hai but not what she was blurting out here. Six months before, mai conference se wapas aa raha tha. The moment I reached here, I got a call from Pratham saying there was some problem there... in the Jungle. Jab mai waha pohocha, tab maine goli ki awaj suni. Maine Yuvi se pucha to usne kaha ki koi naag tha. So a kind of self defense it was."

By the time Mahir was, done talking about the incident, Bela had drowned in a pool of guilt. She always had a feeling, a doubt that maybe Mahir was not a part of crime happened with her. There was not a percent doubt that he was lying. She could see it in his eyes, in his voice, in his body language.

He was not lying. He himself did not know the entire incident.

He was not there that time.

He was not a part of the heinous crime happened there.

He did not shoot Vikrant.

He did not kill Vikrant.

The revelations and realizations pierced her heart like a sharp needle. She was going to kill him, an innocent guy. She recalled the memories of that night.

Mahir wasn't there when those guys block their path.

Mahir wasn't there when those guys were crossing the line with her.

Mahir wasn't there when those guys had attacked them.

Mahir wasn't.

He did not do anything.

He was innocent.

"Ye mujhse kya hone wala tha? Mai ek nirdosh ko maarne wali thi." Bela regretted mentally but the regret wasn't enough. It wasn't. What if she had been successful in killing him when they were at the Kuldevi's temple? Damn. He was trying to save her at the expense of his own life and she was trying to kill him. She would not be able to forgive herself for that. The realization hit her hard that he was being saved by destiny and Shiv Ji because he was innocent.

"Bela...Bela." He shook her, seeing her lost in her own self.

She immediately responded, looking up to him. "Ji?"

"Tum jada socho mat aur so jao. Mai aaj yaha couch pe so jata hu. Tumhe kuch laga to mujhe utha dena."

It just added more on her already guilty self. He was staying back because of her, thinking that he should be around for that night when so many accusations had been thrown upon her.

"Ji," she mumbled, crawling on the bed, and pulled the duvet over herself and she turned on her right side. Mahir quietly took the couch and fell asleep having stared at her for a while.

Bela had been clutching the duvet closer to her in her fists as a few tears rolled down her cheek. Everything he said to her, everything he did for her flashed before her eyes making her aware of how wrong she had been in judging him. He married to her for the sake of her when his brother disappeared. Even before the marriage, he was the one to stand up for her, and hear her when nobody else did. Even after they got married, he did not raise a word but silently tolerated her cold and rude behaviour. She had vowed to kill him and he had vowed to protect her.

The pain of the regret of misunderstanding him and accusing him for something he hadn't even done, the pain of the guilt of having hurt him, the pain of attempting to kill an innocent was making her heart heavy. Pushing the duvet, she sat straight on the bed, when she couldn't breathe.

Her gaze fell upon his sleeping form. She couldn't help but mumble an apology to him. I am sorry, Mahir. I was wrong. I did not know but Shiv Ji sure did. He did not let me commit a sin by killing an innocent like you. I am sorry. Sorry isn't enough. I had vowed of punishing those who killed my Vikrant and included you in them when you were never a part of them. Today, I promise you one thing... I'll keep you protected. I'll keep every danger away from you. I'll do this as a redemption... my redemption. You'll stay safe until I am alive.

*

This TS ends here. Thank you for reading.

Edited by IAdoreYou - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
#55

Originally posted by: -shenz-

Firstly, my name, it's Shahnaz (pronounced as Sheh-naaz) and I mostly go by my pen-name Shenz. You can opt to address me with any name that you wish to ;P

Secondly, I read about your health conditions and I just hope and pray you have a speedy recovery and a healthy life ahead.

Thirdly, coming to this reply. It's always good to appreciate good. I believe in reviewing things that I read, at least on a platform like this. And this is worth every penny to review and appreciate. Because I don't think I can come across flaws when it comes to this. You have mastered emotions. And I am cent percent sure that there's not a single way that I would be left disappointed with this story. If anything, I would be elated to read your work.About expectations, don't stress yourself with that. :)

This isn't silly! yes, it's high on emotions but not silly, neither is it low on anything else. Every story has a basic element to it. Yours has to be emotions. And it's no harm when you are so good with it.

If you are writing something, you should never be regret that decision of yours. According to me, you should always write for yourself, then comes the rest of the world. Frankly speaking, I've never been too kind. Blunt and straightforward at times but then, there's nothing that's not worth appreciating about this write-up. So, it's just my way of letting you know how amazingly do you weave your stories. And you shouldn't be thanking me either. You deserve each and every praise that comes your way.. in fact, even more.

That's where you are wrong, I am not lovely. But I get it when you say that you don't think you write good enough. I say that all the time :P Every writer says that, at least on this forum most of them do. What I can tell you is, you are good. There's a charm to your write up that is hard to find. I had to read that part even though it was a repeat, because it was not. It highlighted a different side from what we saw on screen. And I would have melted, if this was what they played on screen. But Alas!

There's nothing to not like about this story.. Thankfully. Because my obsession over the two isn't dying anytime soon either. You will survive and come out healthy and safe. I along with all your loved ones, friends and readers are praying for you!


Shehnaaz sounds lovely to me. Those good wishes mean a lot to me. Aww you are really being too kind towards me.

I don't know if I am good at writing at emotions but hearing from you makes me smile.

Oh that's the thing with me. I don't write for myself. I don't have a reason to. I write for others who are willing to read from me. That gives me a reason to write [and smile with their reviews]

You are lovely. I personally am a pretty straighforward person. So high five on that. I take it as a compliment and it is among the loveliest ones I have got so far.

Keep me included in your prayers. I believe they would work for me and knowing that you are a writer too [from your signature], when are you writing something on these two?😆😳

Thanks again.
With love
-Harshada
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: roheena_d

love it love it!!👏 continuuee



Thank you so much. Last part is up.
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Originally posted by: -Tadibaaaz-

Harshu!!!🤗🤗

I am doing good hun. Well,being a would-be-doctor,I know what CVST is. It's very rare. As you are seeing a doctor,I won't talk much on that. I would just say that please take care of yourself properly. Don't be scared. Everything will be alright. We,doctors are here for that only.😊

Rusha, 😳 Good to hear. That's surprising that you do. Oh please don't get offended but Doctors aren't god, they aren't good either.🤢 Most of them, I mean. I have had a lot of experiences. Seems they are interested only in money and have less knowledge than I do.


I am coming to IF after almost a year. Life has been pretty hectic and yeah I also feel IF isn't the same like we had before. Due to this one year gap,my inbox is flooded with pms and all. I am too scared to open them because I have no clue where to start.😆 Hoping that with time,I will be able to get back to everyone.😳😛😆

I know. IF is no longer same. I miss old golden days.


I was never a fan of Naagin. But due to previous two season's casts,I used to watch few clips. And I really really feel season 3 lacks that charm. Season 1 was the best. I am huge fan of Arjun Bijlani & KVB.😳 Maybe because of that I loved S1 & S2.😛 But this season,am loving BeHir.

I never watched Nagin being a fan of anyone. First season was portrayed so well and each episode was such a filler one that the show made me love it, not any actor in particular. At times I wonder if this is really a Nagin show or a romantic or dramatic show.😆

Coming to your update. It was as always outstanding. Totally Harshu's style,full of emotions.😉❤️ Loved how you have shown Bela's inner turmoil. Totally loved it sweetheart.👏⭐️ And am really really excited for next update because Bela will get to know Mahir's truth. And as in the show,that's not going to happen anytime soon,so am excited for your update. But take your time. We can wait for your update. Don't take stress about update.😈

love,
Rusha

P.S.- I talk to much.😆😛🤪

Thank you so much. Haha. My style. 😆 Glad to know you liked it. I did update.
With love
-Harshada


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Posted: 7 years ago
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Super awesome end
Loved it
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Harshada, girl, you write beautifully. Currently I am in awe of this one. It was such a simple plot yet it held so much more. You've wrapped everything amazingly, joining the loose ends, closing all the loops and in such a crisp manner. There was nothing that I could not like about this write-up.

I have said this often but I can't help but say once again. You bring out the best emotions in the story. The highlight of your stories have been the way you play with emotions and have the limelight on emotions. That's the most touching thing about this story. The emotions were natural and smooth yet had a strong impact.


The way Bela didn't need a proof apart from the truth that his eyes held, was the moment I wished to capture. She didn't need anything else to claim him innocent. Phew! What I wouldn't do to watch such a scene on the television? But I guess my prayers would only be limited to such fictions. Poor me!

And lastly, her heartfelt apology, her promise. Drowned in guilt, she didn't just apologize but also made promises. Promise to protect him, shield him.. just like he had once vowed for her. Unaware of the promises they both made for each other, to each other.. until they're alive.

No matter, how much I have adored this story, it's too bad it ended this soon. Anyways, I hope to read more from you. Till then I will read this again ;P
Edited by -shenz- - 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: IAdoreYou


Shehnaaz sounds lovely to me. Those good wishes mean a lot to me. Aww you are really being too kind towards me.

I don't know if I am good at writing at emotions but hearing from you makes me smile.

Oh that's the thing with me. I don't write for myself. I don't have a reason to. I write for others who are willing to read from me. That gives me a reason to write [and smile with their reviews]

You are lovely. I personally am a pretty straighforward person. So high five on that. I take it as a compliment and it is among the loveliest ones I have got so far.

Keep me included in your prayers. I believe they would work for me and knowing that you are a writer too [from your signature], when are you writing something on these two?😆😳

Thanks again.
With love
-Harshada



You will only have good wishes coming your way. From me, it's a sure shot. Oh, come on! You are yourself a sweetheart. One can be nothing but kind to you. But I haven't been kind, I have been honest. You are a gem and I am glad to have come across you through BeHir and this story 😆


I am glad, I could make you smile through my words. Keep that smile plastered on your face, Always!

Whatever it is. Whether you write for yourself or for others, I just hope that you are showered with all the motivating factors; and you keep writing like this. Because this surely does bring a smile on my face. I had once told you that there's no way this story would disappoint me. Trust me it hasn't. This story has left me high on emotions and I am glad to have read this.

High five, I like straight forward people. Sugar-coated words and fake people are not the people I can gel up with. *No offence, to anyone but that's just me and who I am*

And just to add, I feel you should be receiving more compliments then 😛

I wouldn't forget to mention you in my prayers. No chance.

Me, writing? Well, I am more of a random write-up person. I write, but I write random stuffs. All crap and crazy shit. But never, I repeat, never would I wish to explore fantasy with crazy creatures. With all due respect, fantasy is just not my thing. I've tried it once and failed miserably. Also, I don't have an intriguing concept to start with. At least when it comes to this couple, I would want to explore a different side of these two. And right now, I have no clue. I have got vague ideas but I have nothing substantial to build upon it and transform it into a story.

So let's see!


Disclaimer: I speak a lot at times!

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