Pal Pal dil ke pass - Page 3

Originally posted by: sns23

Loved it! What I would give to see such a beautifully subtle scene in the show 😭

This was perfection Minami! Please continue soon ❤️❤️❤️

Thank you. This is the first time Im trying my hands on something like this. Would love your honest feedback.😊

Originally posted by: Minami_koi

Thank you. This is the first time Im trying my hands on something like this. Would love your honest feedback.😊

Sacchi mein! Loved it 😊 the only other thing I would say (and this is self serving), is longer chapters 😄 I am a glutton when it comes to a good story and I can’t wait to read more 😄😄
I love how you provided a visual guide as well - it makes the story vivid!

Originally posted by: sns23

Sacchi mein! Loved it 😊 the only other thing I would say (and this is self serving), is longer chapters 😄 I am a glutton when it comes to a good story and I can’t wait to read more 😄😄
I love how you provided a visual guide as well - it makes the story vivid!

Thank you.... 😀

Will try to add next chapter soon

Originally posted by: Minami_koi

Chapter-3 Dev meets Vidhi

Vidhi woke up to a pleasant morning with the gentle sea breeze greeting her. She tied her hair in a pony tail and lazily walked downstairs.She was still in her striped blue pajama pants and a pink t-shirt. Still sleepy, she dragged herself to kitchen to prepare coffee.

As she was reaching the dining table with her coffee mug,she did not notice a tall figure pass by her and ended up colliding and spilling hot coffee all over.

Its beautiful Minami! I loved the premise but the development of the story is so subtle yet moving at a good pace. Characterization is really good

And incl pics for our imagination is cherry on the cake

Really enjoying it. Please continue

Very well written Minami!! This is a story I would love to watch on screen!! Keep up the good work!!

Read both the parts together. I like the pace of the story. The addition of pictures to give the reader an idea of the premise is working well, it's increasing my involvement in the story. Please do upload the next parts soon, sooner, soonest!😃😃

Loved it Minami! Thank you for making the chapter longer ❤️❤️

Dev picked a really innovative way to get Vidhi out of her self doubt. It was good to see him try and get respond to it well too! I like Vidhi’s perspective on her friendship(maybe a little more too) with Arjun! It is good that she has someone like him as a friend to hang out with. Can’t wait for the next part and to see how Dev and Vidhi’s relationship progresses

Originally posted by: sns23

Loved it Minami! Thank you for making the chapter longer ❤️❤️

Dev picked a really innovative way to get Vidhi out of her self doubt. It was good to see him try and get respond to it well too! I like Vidhi’s perspective on her friendship(maybe a little more too) with Arjun! It is good that she has someone like him as a friend to hang out with. Can’t wait for the next part and to see how Dev and Vidhi’s relationship progresses

Sure... Hope the trampoline part dint sound weird. It has helped me overcome my anxiety so made it part of my Ff.

Originally posted by: Minami_koi

Sure... Hope the trampoline part dint sound weird. It has helped me overcome my anxiety so made it part of my Ff.

Not at all! It made sense - because that is a place where you’re forced to let go of your inhibitions!

Very nice premise and I loved the progression of the story. It is something new with Vidhi behaving age appropriately. Looking forward for further updates🤩🤩