Mukti Bandhan: a different perspective- SS - Page 3

Originally posted by: koolsadhu1000

You portrayed Sabina VERY objectively , just as the character originally was and is supposed to be . Thats EXACTLY the way Sabina wud have bid Vaibhav good bye . It shud have been THAT WAY only .

I decided to completely erase the 2nd innings of the melancholic Sabina.. I was mighty impressed with her when she left the wedding with her intrinsic strength.. showed what a powerful and mature woman she was.. If ppl wanted a closure to VS.. this was how it was in my mind.. Sabina should never have flinched from her stand. that was stupid..killed her totally

The dialogue u gave Vaibhav ...This dialogue wud have made this serial's TRPS sky rocket . The moment of self realization for him and recognising WHO nd WHAT he was . Not just Vaibhav but ALSO a VIRANI . There r two parts to his name , in the serial he forgot the second part . Oh HOW i wish this scene had been there in the serial ! I wud have forgiven him for running after Sabina had he come to this realisation of his own worth and self .

exactly we were on the same page on that.. the thing is..there was this easy companionship in VD.. V till that point had never disregarded D.. and We had seen sincerity in his promise to his mother.. he fell from his grace after tht.. his honor left him.. I loved V for being an amazing mix of intellect, practicality and humanity.. and take off any of these and he ends up being what he did.. and I wldnt let tht happen here..

As for Devki ...Yes she had made his life easy . Right from the day of the engagement when she had held his bandaged hand and ut the ring on his finger ...she had soothed him first and then thought of herself . It was a primary instinct with her ...soothing him . She simplified his life and thought of nothing but HIM and they showed he remained untouched and unmoved coz he was a great one month old lover , one of the most loyal and finest .

his reaction to Devki shud have been as u showed . That card shud have been put to rightfu luse .

I still have the V from the CP track in my mind.. the V who was objective enough to see the pain in Dalichand..to try to make D understand.. and this V wld have been instrumental in.. Lets just say I wld keep it at that.. and talk abt it in my future parts..😉 it was unfathomable for me too.. how the V who saw thro Dalichand and even his dad to an extent was so oblivious to D.. No he wasnt.. he was getting surprised at her during the picnic.. of how far she had come.. he was troubled by his past and somehow felt obliged to it.. and in tht way this VS closure was needed for his reconciliation and self worth.. on his b'day to some extent he was acknowledging D.. esp in the look he kept giving her... sigh.. I didnt want V to make a choice coz of Ds feelings.. I wanted him to do it irrespective.. and Ds feelings wld only be a perk.. his sign that he did the right thing.. his prize..😆

Excellently written .ity ur a scientist coz u wud have minted a fortune writing books . Ur a born writer .

oh wow.. now thts some compliment.. I have a tall order to fill now.. like I said this was the easy part.. and so will the next couple parts also will be.. once the layered protagonist's tracks start.. I am squirming at the thought of failing miserably..😆

Came home late today fell asleep on the sofa while typing this , got up now . finished my post and now going up😃

Monday can be tough.. I am still reeling from it in fact.. 😆 caught a viral so at home as I cant risk contaminating the lab😆 and the ppl there..

Originally posted by: intruderfast

u could have pmed me 😡😆anyways brilliant , i wish u had directed mb😆and u would have added kools hot ideas too

ahaaa wish these makers had never bought s , last ke 2 months mein jamkar vd romance dikhate

i am telling u if the show would have run for a long period of time, they would have never united vs

Originally posted by: ssshhh

Ah Sonali u r having MB d way u want it. U know me...I would always read ur analysis nd Anmol's updates b4 watching MB nd already d scene would hv been created in my mind. It feels d same now.😊 Now only d visuualisation will b all in my mind...BTW loved todays epi.😉

Munira... You wont believe when I was writing this part.. I was thinking that you may be the only one among us.. who may not like this part.. as you know my love for Sabina wld make it subjective😆 but the truth remains I did respect her choices in her first innings on the show.. and thts the image I furthered.. writing for VV was easy.. coz I never really got tht VV out of my mind.. 😆 lets just say m happy you liked it..😉

Sonali I was totally neutral with either VD or VS. I didn't want V for D coz, firstly D should have been d first choice, not d second😆 nd also d makers never ever showed V feeling more 4 D, other than a friend , so I didn't want tht...I too am not a romantic, nd agree dat love (especially d movie nd soap kind) is highly over-rated nd most Indian marraiges r arranged nd I strongly believe dat one has to conciously work on a marraige or for tht matter any relationship.

Also all those lala scenes were basically shown to show D's love developing for V. I think wat D said abt V seeing world thru S's eyes, (where he was so blinded tht he didn't see D's love right in front of his eyes), sums up V's love 4 S. V wasn't a looser nd neither was S. So it was a little exterme him pursuing S, but tht does nott negate d fact tht d V we all loved nd admired was no more. He was d same

I'll tell U how I would hv develpoed d story (if I had ur brilliant gift😉). V chasing S nd finally finding her in d basti, nd taking her in his car for a long drive and telling her all abt his divorce and all nd asking 4 her acceptance. S refusing once again then bitter exchange of words nd V being extremely upset nd angry nd taking his eyes off the raod nd bang, meeting with an accident and both dying. I don't want IMV 2 be responsible for V's death. So V nd S bcum d immortal lovers😆 or maybe sum paparrazi catching a glimpse of them pursuing dem, a high speed chase nd den all over.😆 Totally real!😉

Den would really begin d story of MB, coz frm den on it would be all abt IMV nd D, wid CP being d link.

Will continue later.😆

Part 2 : Promises

It was amazing what her gift had done to me.. I felt fresh.. rejuvenated.. ready for a new day.. a new beginning.. I didn't bother to get any sleep; got dressed and decided to get to work early. As I sprinted through the hallway, I saw mamma from the corner of my eye.. sitting by herself with her morning tea.. at her usual spot by the pool..

Only when I got closer did I see her anxiety-stricken face, a turmoil surrounding her whole aura' She looked up at me as I witnessed the eclectic emotions in her eyes transpiring at the speed of light.. Underneath all of it was worry.. fear for everything she lived to protect.

She started "Vaibhav" as I sat across her.. placing my hand on hers softly..

"I feel like some of that gujrat special tea this morning" I smiled.

Her whole demeanor changed in a minute as a smile now adorned her beautiful face while she poured me some of her tea- signature Charulata Virani, stoic amidst the storm.. I couldn't help admire the women around me- the mother, the wife.. the past.. I felt all the more fortunate. I took a sip of the tea, as mamma finally let out

" How are YOU beta? Did you get any sleep last night?" she choked as I made my way towards her and sat in front of her, holding her hand.

"No, I didn't sleep at all last night but, ironically I haven't felt this rested, mamma.." Fiddling with her hand. I lay my head on her lap as she stroked my hair "Do you remember few months back, one such morning when we both sat by the pool sipping tea' the day after Baa had left the house with Manhar kaka's family?" I straightened up as she tried to see through me and I smiled.. still holding her hand

" You told me one thing that I finally put to practice.. You had told me -Sapno ke peechey apno ko nahi khotey" . Her face was calm now; as I reflected " the night before last, I did promise you that I would never cheat your daughter- my wife.. " Seeing through me she smiled.. now at peace that she wasn't going to have to fight that storm after all'

" But I had made a half-promise that night.." She looked up quizzically

"Let me complete it for you. I promise you that there wont be another Charulata in this household". That did it; her eyes welled up and she shed those silent tears, not meeting my eyes.. as I reached out to her and she took me in her arms and I finally paid requiem for my dream..

Regaining her composure she cupped my face, with pride in her eyes and a broad smile on her lips " You indeed have grown up in these past months." as I lightened the atmosphere "Correction! I blame the numerous candles on that grand cake last night.. No wonder I didn't care to celebrate before" as she let out her characteristic giggle and I continued

" I had to be worthy of the rank you placed on me- of a link between pappa and this household.. How could I let that down" She dropped me a kiss on the forehead and said "You are' so are.. He has been worried about all this too"

" He'll be fine mamma.."

"Oh! I don't doubt that one bit now" she conjectured.. as I walked back to my chair and worked on my tea..

*************

I met kaka on my way out and I swear everyone in the knowhow circle had like the same expression plastered on them.. I humored him nevertheless, pulling his cheeks like I often did to annoy him "Kaka mere kaka" as he started off "Vaibhav" but abruptly stopped. I turned around to see the cause and of course it was the bright smile on Charulata Virani that acts as a permanent assurance for almost everyone in Vaibhav Villa.. Praven Kaka rediscovered his morning charm "Good! Here I was thinking kaka wont get his gathiya this morning.. I better head off.. eh Vaibhav drop me off to the market.. I got late on your accord as it is.. " He held me by the shoulders and dragged me to my car..

Life was back to normal..

Well, almost.. Two hours after I had immersed myself into the intricacies of engineering drawing of the reception area of Mumbai float..I was interrupted by Manjusha, who had hurried to my cabin.. I sighed, knowing what it entails..

"Yes Manjusha"

" I.M. Sir just walked in and wanted to meet you first thing in the morning. He has an appointment scheduled in less than 20 minutes"

If I had to earn my bread by assuring everyone as I did all morning.. I better be good.. Well, my pleasant smile worked for Manjusha.. but I knew I had a colossal task ahead as I knocked on Pappa's cabin door.. He stood by his couch looking outside the window.. his hands rested in his coat pocket.. as he motioned for me to come in..

I let out a breath.. feeling like a child awaiting his progress report in the Principal's office. The rest of the world on one side.. Pappa..aka I.M.Virani was quite another ball game..

With mustered confidence I started " Paapa, about yesterday.. there's nothing to worry.. I have everything under control"

He half-smiled, his gaze fixed on me "Undoubtedly.. You do"

He patted my shoulders and took his place on the chair as I sat across his desk..

" Vaibhav, I have been invited to speak in the business convention in London next week.. Basically to talk about V. Industries' vision for the economic growth of India.. " Easing on his chair he continued " I want YOU to be the face of V. Industries there.. and in fact it's a good platform to showcase the vision for your Mumbai Floats project" he smirked with an assuring nod..

I had the benefit of observing pappa from close quarters.. and I think I knew what he was doing.. I smiled and prepared to hit this delivery to the boundaries'I caught on to this opportunity "Excellent idea pappa' I cant wait to talk about Mumbai Floats"

"That's my boy" he concluded, albeit with a staged excitement.. I slumped over the desk and stammered my way through the next bit "I was wondering if Devki could give me company.. You know she is the one who has taken control of the logistics of Mumbai float.. besides the film distribution wont demand her involvement beyond the next couple of days"

I hadn't seen the look in his eyes before.. its not that he was taken by surprise. Nothing unnerves him. But whatever it was, I just couldn't read it.. it wasn't pride.. it wasn't acceptance.. it wasn't anything definable.. It was personal..

I walked over to his side not knowing what to say.. as I held his shoulder and with utmost sincerity coz he deserved nothing less I blabbered "Apki tarah, Main apne zindagi mein har rishtey ki jagah mukarrar karna chahta hoon pappa"

He placed his wavering hand on mine and softly said "I'll ask Manjusha to arrange both of your trip.. Discuss your itinerary with her.."

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Something about the whole exchange moved me. I was seeing this different side to pappa off late. Something that he clearly wasn't comfortable sharing.. and by no means did I intend to trespass.. but it was strange.. My chain of thought was broken, as Manjusha stopped me on the way

"Sir, Devki mam had come.. She left you all these presentation files you will need for today. She said she was busy all day with the film distribution commitments and had to leave."

I felt a tug at my heart as I was consciously seeing all the little things, the minute details she took care of when It came to me, like it was her default setting.. Smiling instinctively, I picked up the stack of files and went into my cabin.

I began texting her as I opened the first presentation file and stopped midway.. She had placed the card in it for my benefit.. I let out a laugh at her childish innocence.. She really has this endearing quality .. that makes one want to protect her.. I read the card once again, deliberating on the words

Vaibhavji the wedding rites make a couple and being together makes them friends. Our wedding got us together and made us friends.. but your togetherness has instilled a desire in me.. of wanting to be your wife..

I closed the card and put it safely before making a silent promise.. the final one of the day' To Myself

Originally posted by: -Faith-

I had to be worthy of the rank you placed on me- of a link between pappa and this household.. How could I let that down

"Apki tarah, Main apne zindagi mein har rishtey ki jagah mukarrar karna chahta hoon pappa"

Sigh, sigh and some more sigh.. THIS.. and then what was done to VV in the show... Saddens me but then you know like Paaji I will pretend that the post-birthday MB never happened and pick up from whatever you wrote...

I forgot to mention in my previous post I really like how you chose it to narrate from V's pov.. just makes perfect sense

And gosh the reaction to the card... Never did I imagine it could be this soft and sweet.. *sigh*..

And the whole friendship part from her letter... *sigh* one of my biggest grouse he very conveniently gave ALL the credit of sikhaoing everything and being her only dost... 🤔 what about the mera aik hi dost hai devki.. tum... *roll eyes*.. Never mind *shrugging off the ghussa*
Gosh waisay seriously he totally lost it post the birthday...

Oh and I know the S redemption was accidental but nonetheless 😆

And WORD IMV needed reconciliation more than redemption.. And I know you have not exactly planned out how you will take everything to a conclusion.. but we have full faith in you...

LOL Munira you wanted to give S a Diana end as Sonali puts it LOL But I agree with her that would be way too glorified and V was definitely butchered .. Oh and would wait for you to continue.. :-) And you also have to tell me R.com kahan tak dekh liya?

Just a shout out and HELLO hello to Kools.. Miss you and your rants yaar

Oh haan I almost forgot Sonali JEEE esp Brownie points for you for mentioning and bringing my favourite character...😉 Manjusa😆 they tied all airey ghairey ends but they did not show her in the end :( Even Chinu Choksi and for that matter Dali and his sister :(😆

And when do I want the next part... take a wild guess.. begins with N ... ends with a W and there is a little O in between there*masoom muh*

Originally posted by: chandaursitare

Aww Manjusha!! I always liked her. I love that we had such interesting supporting characters. They are almost as fascinating as our leads.

Same here i LOVED manjusha.. and recently I was revisiting old epis and there was a scene btw Dali's sis and Manjusha where she invites her to the event for the soldiers calling her one.. tht was soo moving.. in its simplicity.. all tht lil cameos were so defined and everyone had such dignity.. sigh.. this show had so much potential.. it touched loads.. but it left loads too

I love the Vaibhav-Charu scene. I could just imagine their conversation at the same table by the pool. 😊

Yup.. I was watching the first one btw them.. the first tht established the depth in their relationship and Vs worth in the Virani household.. he wasnt a doted child for nothing.. I just couldn't not use it in reference at least.. i always loved V-Charu scenes.. it was the other dimension to IMV-D ones..

London, huh? It just reminded me of how V was upset at D for wanting to go on their honeymoon to Europe. LOL. He was like europe nahin ghooma kabhi.. when she lived their for years. 😆

you caught the irony😆 I had to get tht in.. for V to suggest it.. and somehow it was his gesture to affectively show his parents he was making an earnest effort with D.. thts how he wanted to put IMVs doubt to rest.. coz he knew his words alone wont..

I can't wait to see how VD relationship progresses in the saner and more mature version of their love story. 😃 I am also dying for CP to make an entry. 😃 you got it dude👍🏼 lets just say they are all on the way.. sooner than later..

You're a great writer. Keep it up!! and thank you for this!

Thank you for the appreciation Chand (you should really tell me what I shld call u.. else I'll try all options😆).. I am doing it for myself too.. I need to give shape to this story.. the way I saw it.. the potential tracks.. I feel like I owe it to the MB that once was.. esp IMV-D-CP and VD .. sigh

Originally posted by: sonali.19281

you are the first to comment.. dies of shock🤣 wait what would be worse than that... thinks a lil.. of course.. Binis commenting first🤣🤣 tht wld kill me.. LOLLL I know I shocked myself too.. But hey it was thanks to the pm.. warna I have would have been my usual late lateef self... Binis will comment soon I have a feeling be prepared for the jhatka

as for VV.. its completely how I saw him.. and the thing is after his b'day in the show there was this disconnect btw V and Charu.. and V and IMV.. it just wasnt the same.. and in most ways.. they had shown both IMV and Charu reach out to only him and he being their silent pillar.. whether it was Charu sharing her grief or IMV after the CP episode. when he asked V to keep D happy.. thts d most humane moment of IMV.. tht VV got the benefit to see.. so obv.. I had those in mind.. and in my mind it had to happen first.. EXACTLY... the disconnect was there btwn V and Charu and V and IMV... and well in most of the other equations.. sab uthal puthal... V was just not the same V anymore...

Aah thanks to you...I now I feel like watching that scene again where V gets to see IMV's humane glimpse.. Now that was the tiny glimpse... How I wish they did not make IMV and Ishwar mutually exclusive... I can so imagine you will NOT have to kill IMV and to bring out the Ishwar... *trying to shrug of the Ishwariya clothes clad IMV tying the gajra*... ughhh lol

LMAO you counted all the ppl who were not in tht ensemble at the last scene.. dont kill me but I once imagined how funny it wld look if Dali stood in the corner.. wailing.. and Choksi in the other corner wid a sullen face as his mode of regular income was chopped off🤣is recession bhari duniya mein poor choksi.. my hrt goes out to him😆 another technical glitche was how Bha was missing from the ensemble when he had come to take D home😆 I guess he was pissed enough to go wait in the car..🤣 and not have to watch VS together..😆 as unsightly as it maybe for him..😆.. ok bak from my deviation.. Manjusa featured here for sure.. but I cant promise Choksi coz I think I lack the dimaag to come up with his gandey kaam😆 I am just about managing to not disturb the layers in IMV as of now.. and treading with cautionWell almost counted.. I am sure I did miss out someone🤣 ... Oh ya Dali in the corner doing his meri beti meri beti... hahaha choksi ki income gayi paani may...tch tch...

Oh ya bas iss ki hi kami thi that Bha also stood and welcomed S with the aarti ki thaali... But he was not in the ending bit? haha as you said must be waiting in the car.. But then like you mentioned in your finale analysis.. I loved the last shot with IMV and D and the coin tossing and baqi chindi losers like some random extras in the background.. because that was where they were supposed to be... in the background...

Oh btw I forgot to mention pehlay there was another glitch but blame the short notice and rushing... Woh bank manager ka naam Mehra tha na kuch.. But they actually took two different names.. Devki nay kuch aur kaha tha and his wife also said some other name.. I will have to watch the videos to remember woh doosray waley kya naam tha but Rakesh Mehra nahi tha😆

And I know yeh sab finale analysis wali post may comments karney bantey hain but I hope you would not mind me rambling here lol.. Haan so what was I saying.. Oh ya I also loved the fact that S could not meet D in the eyes😆

Oho you can not promise Choksi??? *disappointed muh*

LOL Chalo as long as Manjusa hai .. Mein samjhota kar loon gi😆

As for the narrative.. it wont be constantly from VVs POV.. coz obv he wont be the sutradhaar in everything.. altho he will be a focal point somewhr😉 so the narrative stands to change often..

Ooohhh that sounds even better... you do know when I want the next part right😆😆

as for the next part.. hmm I am sorta excited to start it.. in fact wrote all of 2 lines😆 already.. but it wont take too long as this is one part thts fully formed in my head.. after this is where I start treading carefully and getting wobbly..😆 Eee!!! Its fully formed in your head *dhak i tikki*
btw when you tried spelling Now.. I had a frk attack.. coz I read N and was like wait she wants Nirali in the next part.. now dont blame me if she does feature there😆HAHHAHAHAHA NAHIII...NO WAYYY!!!
Mere masoom NOW ko Nirali bana diya.. KATHORR!!
Spare me the horror! Agar dikhana hai nibtao her istory in one or two lines max!