Love disclosed Concluded 12/4

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

apus fan

@sami01

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 16 years ago

#171

i read the conclusion skepy it was so so sweet re.......so now i know the reasons of .......... what a sweet conclusions we got .....so about accident we will knwo in mrd our way i guess ....so Dr. sahiba had same name as mine ...well that i like a lot and sana too got a part of story and yes ofcourse how could sana take her eyes of raj....i wil write more later at night for now me waiting for conmments of others .....

but it was too good.....

sohneya we pani panj daryaawaan da.....

haar main pa devaan gal goriyaan bawaan da....

(oh beloved waters of 5 rivers flowing , i want to put my gori arms around ur neck) this tappa will suit kranti na skepy ...chalo i must say happy reading to rest of crew take care

Quote

poetic

@poetic

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#172

Thanks Skep for the update.

Have read it, but I will comment in leisure tomorrow.

Thanks once again.

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

LOST SOUL

@chimuli

Dazzler

Posted: 16 years ago

#173

😲........😃............😳
ohhh!! Skep........so beautiful.....⭐️
"See there is your mother. Don't get worried, she is right here. Who would dare to displease you?"
yes,so true noone will dare to displease the little angel,the way seher was searching for Kranti....and Pammi too just knows everything about Kranti n Seher without them telling her....shows how close she is to them!!!
Kranti's concern about Jaya....oh!! shows how beautiful Kranti is!!..
Description of scenery there was too good!👍🏼
His parents got the seat made for Kranti''..just like the swing they got fixed on her balcony.
oh!!...glad our Kranti got so much loving family...they made that seat as soon as they could..n that swing too...so nice of them!shows how dearly she is loved by everyone..😳
"It hurts me when I see all of you working while I just sit around. It has started playing on my conscience and I don't know what to do about it."
oh!...thats our Kranti there,in show too she would always do one thing or outher and never let buaji,chaijee n BBR(though she was so evil there🤢) do any work.....oh!how much she cared for everyone...wah!!kya kudi hai..👏
It was strange she didn't come to meet him on the staircase and even now she seemed to be far away and distant.
ummm.......that shows she was really perturbed!!
"I can't bear to see you in pain ''' it tortures me even more when I can't do anything to help ease it."
ohh....ofcourse Raj too wanted a child,but he knew that could be at expense of Kranti...so he is rejecting idea!....ohh how much they love each outher..amazing!😍
Since he had to make a choice he chose his wife. Was that wrong?
nothing I would say....perfect!!choice,as perfect as you are.😆
Madhu returned and told Kranti she had made her favourite kheer.
glad that BBR here is a human....and so sweet of her to do that..😳
"Jaya is yours, Kranti''.see she calls you ma, choti ma," cajoled Madhu. "Take her I don't mind."
ohh!!...firstly she doesnt mind her child calling Kranti choti ma(ofcourse she should not)..I mean no insecurity type...n she says take her..ohh! how sweet of BBR...Everyone in family loves everyone else so dearly...couldnt those creatives show something like this?😡love BBR here...
He tried to retrace all the events since his return from England.
ohh.....how much he cared for her..leaves no stone unturned to make her feel happy...now searching for Doc!
Dr Sameera Kaur..Dr Sana...
😳.....
ohh!!.....I was surprised when I read...thank you so much skep...🤗...
you made me part of this beautiful story..😳..
yes yes how could I get my eyes off him?...ye bhi poochne ki baat!!😆😉
The child that would be born would be special.
yes ofcourse it will be...the wit of her father and strength of her mother....she will have...a perfect one!
She thought she looked ugly and ungainly but Raj teased her and told her that she could seduce him anytime.
🤣.....ohhh!!....what a remark!
The three sat in contentment enjoying the movement of the swaying.
aww!!...a perfect family...couldnt they show a scene like this in serial..
ohhh!!....Skep thank you for such a wonderful treat...
Its pleasure to read your MRD n stories.......wao!they are.....
Love Disclosed was very beautiful...thank you pen n poet!for concept too..

Edited by tetuty66 - 16 years ago

Quote

pennu

@pennu

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 16 years ago

#174

Thanks alot skep.... for such lovely treat... Sorry for the late reply.. I read both last two parts together... I was very happy to see three of them on the swing... what a lovely scene... BTW sad to say that it ended....

Second last part was ufhhhhh.... very thrilling.... I was feeling cold when both Kranti and Rajveer hide beneath the water.... And I was even looking for the crocodiles also.... Loved dthe was Raj made her ready to go into the water... he is very clever... he really deserves your kudi.... isnt it??... And about that night.... your carefully described everything... Awsome..... it was only the love they both share was highlighted....

And the last part.... you beautifully told the bond between the whole family towards each other.... and the begining of the new family was very well wrtten skep..... lots of special/guest appearence also....huh??? in the form of Dr sana and sameer... wah skep... maza aa gaya... loved the way Sana looked towards Raj.... and Kranti even noticed that toooo....

Once again Thanks alot Skep.. for this lovely treat.... the real MRD was an incomplete on with lots of untied knots.... But you very well finished each and very knot in beautiful manner.... Sorry if you don't liked the way I compared it with the real mrd....

Quote

sasha722

@sasha722

Inactive

Posted: 16 years ago

#175

skepi
ur flash back was a amazing part
I really loved the conversation bet the MIL & DIL
every minute details u hve laid , their relation, emotion
the sadness of Kranti dat she wanted 2 bear a child & get de
complete happiness of being a women
so wel u hve written
I loved the innocence of Kranti
her love 4 Raj & his family is so PURE
wait 4 the next part when Raj reaches Shimla
continuation of An Unexpected Encounter

Quote

Ocean_deep

@Ocean_deep

Beginner

Posted: 16 years ago

#176

Skeptical that was too good!!
You concluded very nicely.......
Liked update.......
Keep it up!👍🏼

~Ocean

Quote

sim_ran

@sim_ran

Navigator

Posted: 16 years ago

#177

brilliant yaar seriously consider a carrer in writing stuffs your brilliant at it ............bravo 👏 and sry for late reply little busy but i do wait for your updates..

Quote

skeptical

@skeptical

Inactive

Posted: 16 years ago

#178

Originally posted by: sami01
i read the conclusion skepy it was so so sweet re.......so now i know the reasons of .......... what a sweet conclusions we got .....so about accident we will knwo in mrd our way i guess ....so Dr. sahiba had same name as mine ...well that i like a lot and sana too got a part of story and yes ofcourse how could sana take her eyes of raj....i wil write more later at night for now me waiting for conmments of others .....
but it was too good.....

sohneya we pani panj daryaawaan da.....

haar main pa devaan gal goriyaan bawaan da....

(oh beloved waters of 5 rivers flowing , i want to put my gori arms around ur neck) this tappa will suit kranti na skepy ...chalo i must say happy reading to rest of crew take care

this tappa will suit kranti na skepy ..... yes it certainly will 😊

Quote

skeptical

@skeptical

Inactive

Posted: 16 years ago

#179

Originally posted by: pennu
Thanks alot skep.... for such lovely treat... Sorry for the late reply.. I read both last two parts together... I was very happy to see three of them on the swing... what a lovely scene... BTW sad to say that it ended.... all good things come to an end

Second last part was ufhhhhh.... very thrilling.... I was feeling cold when both Kranti and Rajveer hide beneath the water.... And I was even looking for the crocodiles also.... Loved dthe was Raj made her ready to go into the water... he is very clever... he really deserves your kudi.... isnt it??This Raj does, the serialwala doesn't... And about that night.... your carefully described everything... Awsome..... it was only the love they both share was highlighted....

And the last part.... you beautifully told the bond between the whole family towards each other.... and the begining of the new family was very well wrtten skep..... lots of special/guest appearence also....huh??? in the form of Dr sana and sameer... wah skep... maza aa gaya... loved the way Sana looked towards Raj.... and Kranti even noticed that toooo.... hahahahahahaha

Once again Thanks alot Skep.. for this lovely treat.... the real MRD was an incomplete on with lots of untied knots.... But you very well finished each and very knot in beautiful manner.... Sorry if you don't liked the way I compared it with the real mrd....

I don't mind if you compare it with the serial ................... that was a classic (fit for the dustbin). It started off so well and it ended so badly. 🤢

Well because of that ------------- MRD ......my way was born 😉

Quote

skeptical

@skeptical

Inactive

Posted: 16 years ago

#180

Originally posted by: sasha722
skepi
ur flash back was a amazing part
I really loved the conversation bet the MIL & DIL
every minute details u hve laid , their relation, emotion
the sadness of Kranti dat she wanted 2 bear a child & get de
complete happiness of being a women
so wel u hve written
I loved the innocence of Kranti
her love 4 Raj & his family is so PURE
wait 4 the next part when Raj reaches Shimla
continuation of An Unexpected Encounter

Actually I dont like writing such long updates because I get bored doing so and the reader finds it tedious as well. But children are a sensitive issue with women. I wanted something different not the usual fairy tale stuff, so I put in a bit of pathos. I am a sucker for happy endings and so I had to devise that too. Sammy is fida on her munda, so I had to include her and of course T2.

Sequel to Love Disclosed is An Unexpected Encounter and following that is A wintry Night. It's in that order, Seema.