FF for Nocturnal Mission

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Guys .........Dew, once talked about "R following K on her nocturnal mission" scenario ……….. I thot I'll try my hand at an FF for that ………….here goes ………..

A few days after Kranti came into the Lal household ……..

She hears the famed freedom fighter Satnaam Singh is expected in Lahore ……

She makes up her mind to find out more……..

For this she has to meet the KK at night in the hideout ….

Problem here……….

In Mamiji's house, since she was the one doing all the chores ….

She could pretend to wind-up things in the kitchen ……..

And quietly slip out when the others slept ………

But here, it was different ……

After dinner, all she did was to retire to bed …….

Throw some accusations at Raj, threaten him with blackmail ………

After satisfying herself that she got under his skin well and proper ………

She retired with a contented smile ………..

But tonight she had to plan carefully ……

She finished dinner in a hurry ……..

Retired to her room ……….

And went to bed directly, pretending to be asleep ………

Raj entered after sometime ……..

And was surprised to see his wife asleep …..

"What?", he thot, "No accusations / threats today ??"….

He gave a wry smile and stretched out on the bed ………

Like other nights of late, he found it diff going to sleep ………

Try as he might, he could not ignore K across the room …….

He turned and looked at her …….

She seemed blissfully lost in dreamland …….

He wondered about the future of this marriage …..

He had accepted this marriage without love or even friendship ……..

He wondered about her, Has she accepted it too ?????

Is she even aware of the implications of her decision ??

Can any young girl be totally bereft of any romantic ideas …..

About love, marriage, a husband ………..

"If anyone, it would be her ", he mused ………

He wondered about her past …….

What had happened to her parents ?

Why was she forced to stay with her Mamaji ?

With Mamaji's overt hatred ………

Did she even have a choice?? ……

Maybe that explained her fanatic following of the KKs ……..

She must have grown up in that world ……….

With Sohan tauji being her friend, philosopher and guide……..

He turned over and closed his eyes ……….

Kranti's heart was beating wildly ….

The silence in the room was deafening…….

She could sense him relaxing ……….

She waited with bated breath…….

Then she heard his even breathing …….

Slowly she sat up, her bangles clinked …..

She cursed herself and stiffened …..

But the figure on the bed did not move ……….

She got up slowly and pulled the rug over the pillows ….

She twisted her dupatta over her bangles ……

And praying they would not tinkle ………

Pulled her shawl and tiptoed out of the room ………

Suddenly Raj eyes flew open ………..

Something had woken him ……..

As he turned, thru the window……….

He saw a shadowy figure moving across corridor ………

He sat up with a start ………

An intruder he thot ……

Quickly he glanced at Kranti ……

She seemed fast asleep ……..

Quietly he pulled on his robe ….

And silently went out of the room……..

He heard the front open with a creak …..

He soundlessly ran down the stairs ……..

The front door was ajar ……..

He hurried out ……..

Just in time to see a figure ……..

Walk out of the gate ……..

He quickly ran after the intruder …….

Very small made , he thot …….

Most likely a young boy …….

Forced into crime…….

The night was still and cloudy…..

Raj followed the shadowy figure ….

Suddenly the moon popped out ………

From behind a cloud ……..

He stood still , shocked …….

It was Kranti …….

OMG, he thot, this is bad news …..

She's off to meet the KKs

He cursed himself for his folly …..

With Satnaam's imminent arrival…..

He should have known…

She'll try to meet her fellow KKs……

He followed her at a safe distance ….

Debating on the best course of action now….

He knew, stopping her was useless ……..

She would not listen to him ……….

Soon they were near the KK hideout ….

Mute voices were audible ……..

She quickly ducked inside …..

And was soon out of sight …….

He entered cautiously ……

He was not afraid of the KKs……

He just wanted her back home ….

Before the family awoke ……..

He watched as she greeted her friends …….

It looked like she was loved by all ..….

She seems at home here ….

He thot with a small smile …..

They were discussing earnestly ….

Their words not very audible ….

"satnam', 'morcha', 'jail', 'gora'…….

He picked up a few words …….

Suddenly she stood up ………

She seemed to be taking leave ……..

That was quick, he thot ……..

And felt good, she wanted to return early too…..

She hurried out …….

With a quick look at the deserted road …

Began walking quickly homeward …….

He followed at a safe distance …

Suddenly they heard a whistle …..

Both of them froze in their tracks …….

It was the beat policeman ………

On his usual rounds …….

Without hesitation Kranti plunged into the thicket beside the road …….

Raj followed her and waited behind a tree………

Hearing footsteps behind her …..

Kranti panicked and ran deeper into the woods…..

Raj saw policeman alight from his cycle and listen …..

The policeman knew someone was in the woods by the road..

He parked his cycle and cautiously entered the thicket ….

Raj followed him his heart pounding …..

Thru the corner of his eye Raj saw a movement ……..

He guessed Kranti was in behind the tree on his right ….

Slowly he bent down, picked up a small rock

And threw it in the opposite direction….

The policeman hurried away in the direction of the sound ………

Raj breathed a sigh of relief …

And cautiously walked to the tree, in the moonlight ……..

He could see Kranti's shadow crouching behind the tree…….

He walked up from behind her ……

A twig broke and she swiftly turned ……..

Before she could see him …….

He grabbed her by the waist and clamped his hand over her mouth ……

She struggled, but his grip was too strong …..

Finally she went limp ….

And he relaxed his hold …….

Just then the moon came out of the cloud …….

And she saw his face …….

She was visibly shocked …….

She opened her mouth …….

But he placed his finger over her lips ….

Together they waited & listened …..

There was no sound of the policeman …….

He looked at her ……….

His hold on her was so strong, she was pressed against him …..

Her face was in line with his shirt button ………

She seemed to be staring at it mesmerized ……

He has this sudden urge to hold her chin and lift her face to his ……..

As if on cue she lifted her head ……..

She looked into his eyes ……..

He felt himself drown in the limpid pool of her eyes ………

They looked at each other for what seemed like eternity …….

Suddenly she shivered ……

That broke the spell ……..

He released her and she stepped back …..

"Come", he said and turned towards the road …….

She followed him wordlessly ………

Together they made their way back …..

Each not wanting to break the silence …..

Soon they reached the house ….

He closed the gate behind them …….

He then locked the door ………..

And quietly they went up the stairs …….

Wordlessly Raj poured himself a glass of water ……

Kranti walked towards her bed ………

She wanted to ask him so many questions …..

But she could not find the words ……..

For the first time …….

She found herself wordless in front of him ……..

She sat on her bed and slowly looked towards him …….

He was stretched on the bed, staring at the ceiling ………

He was not asleep, she knew that …..

He was restless too, she realized……..

After a couple of minutes …..

Raj got up with an oath ……..

And walked into the adjoining balcony …..

Unable to restrain herself she followed him ……

She saw him silhouetted in the moonlight …….

Hesitantly, she stepped forward …..

He turned "It's late, go the bed", he said gruffly …

"What about you?", she asked, moving closer to him …….

She heard the sharp intake of his breath ……

And saw his fist clenching …….

The vein in his temple throbbed ….

His jaw was set ……

He looked thunderously angry …….

For a moment she was scared …….

Then she pulled herself together …

"So u followed me?", she tried to sound flippant

He did not answer ……

Nor did he look at her …….

Recklessly she went on ….

"Why? Did you think I'll run away?"….

"And your family's name would be sullied"

"The Lal bahu escapes under the cover of darkenss "

"That would be the headline right ??

She goaded, not understanding what had come over her ……

"I only …..she started", In a trice he pounced on her……..

"I only ,,,what?? ", he ground out …….

"Only went out to meet the KKs"

Only might have landed in jail …."

He caught her by the shoulders …….

And shook her hard ……..

She was like a rag doll in his hands ……….

She bit her lips and tasted blood ……..

Shocked, he stared at her lips …….

A dot of blood forming …….

He ran his fingers thru his hair …..

Unable to believe what he had just done ………

He was not a violent man…….

What had come over him? …….

Ever since he got entangled with her …….

He behaviour was totally out of character …….

All this while, she watched him ……….

Strangely she felt guilty …….

She could see he was distraught

She was not prepared for this ……….

It has always been her dream ……..

Her mission, to bring him to his knees ……….

Here she was on the verge of winning ……….

But, it did not taste like victory …….

Slowly she moved closer to him ……

He was staring at her, yet ….

Not seeing her ……..

He seemed to be in a state of shock …….

She raised her left hand …..

And caressed his cheek ……

She could feel him stiffen ……

He looked into her eyes …….

For what seemed like an eon they……..

Looked into each other's eyes …….

She was the first to lower her lashes …….

Her knees turning into jelly …….

She tried to pull back her hand ……

But he imprisoned it into his …….

Her hand felt soft and warm …….

In his clasp …….

She raised her face once again …….

He was looking at her with an intense look …..

"Kranti", he said softly ……..

She closed her eyes ………

Feeling weightless, she swayed slightly …..

He cupped her face in his hands …….

And placed a soft fleeting kiss on her cheek …….

With his thumb, he wiped away the spot of blood on her lips……….

He felt her relax, as her gathered her in his arms …….

Her head on his chest …….

Her arms around his waist …….

Hearts beating in unison ……..

They stood, like that, as time stopped …….

At peace with the world and with themselves ……..

Surrounded by the night sounds……

Feeling secure in the middle of a storm of emotions ……..

Tomorrow will bring new challenges …..

Along with old differences & priorities ………

But armed with a new found strength …………

They knew they would face it together ……….

Well friends .......... this is my first attempt ........ sorry if there are language/grammar errors / bloopers etc etc ........and this is only my POV of how I wanted the scene to go ......may be not everyone's idea of an ideal scene 😆
So .......plz forget the actual story line and just enjoy this ...........
I'd love to hear what you have to say ............

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morningdew thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Oh my GODDDDD !!! I had goosebumps Dawn !! How the hell did you come up with this?? This stuff is bloody brilliant !! I m still entranced.. I don't know what to say.. wordless..

This is your first attempt? Kidding me? Look at the detailing, you even thought abt her bangles clinking..

Love the part where he was dwelling on her past..

Also the one where he entered the KK den, just coz he wanted to take her home soon..

And when he holds her in the woods, mannnnn, I was shivering..

Awww Dawn, am going to die..

Another thing, I have never, ever, read FFs.. am never tempted enuf.. yours was the first.. and it blew me.. totally.. way to go girl.. 👏 Take a bow sweetheart.. you rocked in this one !!

Edited by morningdew - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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The best part is, it totally looked like R&K in this one.. it was so totally believable.. it looked as if this is destined to be the way for them.. Hats off babe, you got their pulse bang on..
Edited by morningdew - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Aww Dew, your kind ..................Thanks man ........... 🤗
*Deep bow *
I was nervously waiting for some reaction ............
Your's was the first and I'm thrilled, ..........
This really my first .......
So it means a lot to me to hear from my pals here .......
Whenever I watch the serial, I'm like I wish they had shown it this way or that way .........
Finally I decided to try my hand on one particular scenario .........
And the "Nocturnal Mission" won hands down for the sheer romance and thrill it brings.......... alll the perfect elements darkness / solitude / calm / long & deserted route / ever present danger .......
Finally i sat down and did it ......... ☺️
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Posted: 16 years ago
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😲Dawn was this your first attempt😲😲😲
OH MY GODDD...I REALLY BOW DOWN IN FRONT OF YOU NOW👏...Its superb...Outstanding...fantabulous...extraordinary...Excellent...mindblowing...any other Adjectives left😕😆😳...Hats off to your Creativity and Imagination👏👏
The RK-Confrontation was simply sounding magical in your words😳...Kranti for the first time seeing the violent yet passionate side of Raj😍...
I was actually imagining both Raj and Kranti going through all the emotions that u mentioned in your FF😳..Now if the makers r secretly visiting this forum😉,then I really wish they see your FF and try to get inspiration from u on how to show an extremely passionate and scintillating encounter between the two...in a different and unique manner😳😳...
I m still hyperventillating and trying to get the sweat out of my body😆😳...
Superb Narration Dawn.,..there was no mistake at all😳...just continue soon...eager to know what happens next😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: jyoti06

😲Dawn was this your first attempt😲😲😲

OH MY GODDD...I REALLY BOW DOWN IN FRONT OF YOU NOW👏...Its superb...Outstanding...fantabulous...extraordinary...Excellent...mindblowing...any other Adjectives left😕😆😳...Hats off to your Creativity and Imagination👏👏
The RK-Confrontation was simply sounding magical in your words😳...Kranti for the first time seeing the violent yet passionate side of Raj😍...
I was actually imagining both Raj and Kranti going through all the emotions that u mentioned in your FF😳..Now if the makers r secretly visiting this forum😉,then I really wish they see your FF and try to get inspiration from u on how to show an extremely passionate and scintillating encounter between the two...in a different and unique manner😳😳...
I m still hyperventillating and trying to get the sweat out of my body😆😳...
Superb Narration Dawn.,..there was no mistake at all😳...just continue soon...eager to know what happens next😳

Thanks Jo ................... 😃😃 ..........I'm so happy you liked it ..........
Thanks for all those lovey adjectives ......
I'm encouraged ..........
Actually I meant for this to be just a one-post scenario .............So I dont think I can continue this ..........
But let me see ..........If I get some flash of inspiration ..........maybe .......
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Dawn Idol

Thanks Jo ................... 😃😃 ..........I'm so happy you liked it ..........
Thanks for all those lovey adjectives ......
I'm encouraged ..........
Actually I meant for this to be just a one-post scenario .............So I dont think I can continue this ..........
But let me see ..........If I get some flash of inspiration ..........maybe .......

Dawn u can continue the story after this na😳..every weekend u can update it...This way we will hv more activties in our forum too...Already we hv Skepti and Ananya as our FF writers..and now u will also b added in that list😉😳...if u wish,I can add your FF in the Archieves too..I hv already added Skepti and Ananya's FF also😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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COOL... simple, clean and has a flow... this is what I like about a narration... and I have only word... "Beautiful." Seems to be straight out of an M&B... 👏👏👏


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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: an12345678

COOL... simple, clean and has a flow... this is what I like about a narration... and I have only word... "Beautiful." Seems to be straight out of an M&B... 👏👏👏


Yes, completely agree.. when will I witness my RK in such glory for real? Or wud be have to contend ourselves with Dawn's FFs? 😔
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Well friends .......... this is my first attempt ........ sorry if there are language/grammar errors / bloopers etc etc ........and this is only my POV of how I wanted the scene to go ......may be not everyone's idea of an ideal scene 😆
So .......plz forget the actual story line and just enjoy this ...........
I'd love to hear what you have to say ............
Arre D_I,
Who cares about your language/grammar errors / bloopers etc. The reading was so quick and wonderful. 👍🏼 My mouse was scrolling down and down. I felt sad when it ended.
It was simply gr8. 👏
❤️😆😉 Please do attempt another one soon.

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