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lakshmi

@gnaneswari

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Posted: 14 years ago

#91

Originally posted by: SwaNia_2
Superb, Lakshmi. Read all the parts in one go. Lovely CS and storyline. And your style of writing is superb too.👏 And really liked the way you have explained each characters POV. Please do Pm me when you update next.😊

Swati.

thanks a lot for reading and commenting. I'm glad to receive the comments from my fav writers team. I'm happy that u liked my story line. And please give honest comments whenever u read. Don't think that i'll be hurt. Will add u in my pm list.

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lakshmi

@gnaneswari

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#92

Originally posted by: SajanRox

*Res!*
Four parts on this story and you did not even PM me?I am hurt! Nevertheless,
I am going to read and edit this comment!😳

thanks nivi for reading this ff. And i haven't pmed to any of my buddy, when i started this ff. Sorry, to hurt u. It was unintentional. Waiting for ur comment. Please, give frank comments and don't think that i'll be hurt. Its my request.

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lakshmi

@gnaneswari

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#93

Originally posted by: roknstarz_mjht
Nice

thanks a lot for commenting.

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Nivriti

@agreatperhaps

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#94

Originally posted by: gnaneswari
thanks nivi for reading this ff. And i haven't pmed to any of my buddy, when i started this ff. Sorry, to hurt u. It was unintentional. Waiting for ur comment. Please, give frank comments and don't think that i'll be hurt. Its my request.

It is okay Dear!😃 Will edit it soon! But next time do PM me😉

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Meera

@Meera1101

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#95

hey love everything..all the updates! its awesome..when will we have SaJan first meet? hope soon..waiting for more SaJan scenes eagerly and for your next update :)

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368758

Suspended

Posted: 14 years ago

#96

Laxmi...Really very nice update..You showed what Neil feel for Gunjan very nicely..U can feel how much he loves her & treasure each & everything about her..Gunjan & Uday's scene was very cute..Loved the concern he had for Gunjan in spite of his eating habit..😆..Plzz continue soon..The staory is going very nice..Waiting for SaJan meeting..😛

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lakshmi

@gnaneswari

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#97

Originally posted by: SIZZZLER
Reserve !!

Edited :-

Hi LAKSHMi !! First I want to say
sorry for my very late reply. Really extremely busy now days. Anyway,come to the
point...I mean update... It was really Awesome Part (Last both part) .GUNJAN and
NEiL entry scene was Fantastic so,no any complain from my side. 



Especially,GUNJAN's entry scene was
very impressive.Her pray reflects her soft and caring Nature,very well. NEiL
introduction is perfect... His past is clear through his dio to GUNJAN's pic.
Its a really Nice presentation. UDAY short scene is sufficient for sketch his
character so,again impressive work.

And,now SAMRAT convo with his Mom scene...
It was really good work. Now,after that conversation everything is clear about
his Profession and Project. So,as per my view...Your story and your work is
going so well.



But,I want to point-out 1 thing in
your Updates...And that is"Presentation".I M not satisfied with it...But,woh
suggestions PM mein...so,Please check your PM-Inbox. Please update Next part
soon...eagerly waiting for that. Thanx a lot for the PM.

Thanks a lot for commenting and u r suggestions. I'm very happy that u r guiding me. And don't be sorry. Even i'm replying late. Coz, i'm busy too in my college work. So, i can understand. I'm glad that u were not disappointed with gunjan and niel's entry. Actually, i had planned niel's entry in other way. But i was not satisfised with that outcome and wanted to clear his feelings about gunjan. Because, it is necessary in coming updates. That's why i have wrote this. But, very nervous while posting it thinking what will be the readers reaction! I'm happy to know that all r happy with the way story is going. And thanks a lot for the presentation suggestions. I'm glad that u r guiding and supporting me. But, the problem is, i use mobile so, i don't have font style options and much colours to use. But, once i get my pc i'll follow ur suggestions. Sorry, if u felt hurt. I'll update in few hours.

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lakshmi

@gnaneswari

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#98

Originally posted by: -MohitKiMeera-
hey love everything..all the updates! its awesome..when will we have SaJan first meet? hope soon..waiting for more SaJan scenes eagerly and for your next update :)

thanks a lot for commenting. I'm glad u liked every update. But, u have to wait a little for sajan first meeting.

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lakshmi

@gnaneswari

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#99

Originally posted by: Anjali_12
Laxmi...Really very nice update..You showed what Neil feel for Gunjan very nicely..U can feel how much he loves her & treasure each & everything about her..Gunjan & Uday's scene was very cute..Loved the concern he had for Gunjanin spiteof his eatinghabit..😆..Plzz continue soon..The staory is going very nice..Waiting for SaJan meeting..😛

thanks a lot for commenting, di. And i'm glad to know that u r happy with the way story is going. And it is important to understand niel's for upcoming parts, other wise all will feel that neil is a willan or a negative charector. Will update in few hours.

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lakshmi

@gnaneswari

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#100

Hi friends, thanks a lot for commenting and pressing like tab. I'm very sorry for updating late. I'm very busy with my project these days. I hope u'll understand. Here is the next part...
Part 5
In neil's room
N: Ab tak toh gunjan aa chuki hogi. Aur jab woh gayi thi, bahar barish bhi ho rahi thi toh gunjan jarur bheeg kar hi ayi hogi. Jake use medicine de deta hu, warna use fever hojayega(saying this he kept her photo back on table & opened draw to take the medicine).
He took the medicine and went towards door, but stopped there as he remembered something. And went towards his room's window and picked a small ''pink rose'' plant, which was placed there.
N: Gunjan ko pink roses bahut pasand hai, woh yeh dekh kar bahut khush hojayegi.(said smilingly and came out from his room).
In that time, gunjan also changed her dress and came out. Niel is coming from right side and gunjan is coming from left as stairs are in the middle.
Both are coming towards stairs. Just then, neil lifted his head and left mesmerized to see gunjan. She was looking like an angel in that blue dress and her slightly wet hair placed on her shoulder. He was lost in her and was smiling. Gunjan came towards stairs, mumbling to herself.
G: Aaj bahut der hogayi! Jaldi jaake sab ki chai banana hai, sab uthe hi honge. Aur uday bhaiyya bhi bahut bhuke honge!
After saying these she had noticed that neil is staring at her and smiling.
G: Good morning niel (She said smilingly and niel came out from trance as he heard her sweet voice).
N: Good morning, gunjan.
G: Mujhe dekh ke kyun smile kar rahe ho!(asked innocently).
N: Woh...woh main...(he mumbled as he confused what to say).
Just then uday came there and called gunjan.
U: Gunjan, tumne change kar lia. Good. Ab mujhe sandwiches dona, main ab aur wait nahi karsakta. Mujhe bahut zyada bhuk lag rahi hai.
G: Oh! Sorry uday bhaiyya, chaliye(she comes down and went with uday to kitchen).
Neil smiles at her and followed her.
In the kitchen,
Gunjan went to fridge and took sandwiches from it.
U: Gunjan inhe garam karne ki jarurath nahi hai, mein yeise hi kha lunga(saying this he took the plate from gunjan and started eating).
Gunjan smiled seeing this.
G: Teekh hai. Toh mein, sab ki chai banadeti hu.(saying this, she took the milk jar from fridge).
Neil came there and said
N: Aha! Sab se pehle tum medicine logi, phir kam.(said with concern).
G: Medicine?! Kyun?(asked confusingly).
N: Ha! Tumhe kya laga? Ki tum dress change kar logi aur baal dry kar logi, toh mujhe pata nahi chalega ki tum baarish mein bheeg kar ayi ho!

Uday opened his mouth in shock as neil said these, while gunjan smiled sweetly.
U: Sach mein! Tumhe kaise pata chala?!
G: Woh isliye kyun ki woh mujhe bahut achi tarah samajta hai.
N: jaise, tum mujhe samjti ho. Ki kab mujhe kya chahiye hota hai, mein kab kaise behave karta hu sab kuch.
G: woh isliye, kyun ki
G & N : Hum bestfriends hai.(both said in unision and smiled broadly while uday smiled confusingly and continued his eating).
After that, niel came towards fridge and took juice from it.
N: Tumhe khali pet medicine lene se chakkar ajate haina, ye lo is juice ke saath medicine le lo.(saying this, he gave juice and medicine to gunjan).
She accepted it and took the medicine with juice.
U: Good niel, tumne acha kiya use medicine deka, warna woh khud toh kabhi nahi leti aur beemar pad jaati(said smilingly).
G: Tum mera itna qayal kyu rakhte ho?(asked sweetly).
N: Kyun ki tum hum sab ki qayal rakhti ho, aur kudh ko bhul jaati ho. Tumhare khayal rakhne keliye bhi toh koi chahiye na.(said smilingly). Ruko, mein tumhare liye kuch laya hu.
Neil went to table present near the kitchen to pick the rose plant which he put there while coming towards kitchen.
In that time gunjan placed the milk on stove to boil. Niel came there and called her.

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Edited by gnaneswari - 13 years ago

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