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Posted: 14 years ago
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Okay, i must say this- though i had no intention of writing anything more , after reading all comments , i got tempted by this idea of writing bauji-nupur reconciliation, thanks to pearl10 and sujaluvsmayur. and i gave in to temptation

So i went back and watched all the episodes of eveteasing time and found it very touching even now. The sayank conversations/ the gang scenes/ the nupur-sam-gunjan scene-bhavesh waala scene etc., were really well made also the nupur-bauji scene in hospital. But the reconcile part was kind of skipped over and left me feeling why do they do this at all times?

So heres my take on what it could have been.

the last thread-http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1675094&PID=42093718&#42093718

Background Story

The story stays as it was- lets say valentine day party with gunjan getting heartbroken and getting shot. All have come to the hospital- confusion . and bauji entry.


PART 1 page 1

PART 2 page 3

PART 3 page

PART 4 page 6

PART 5 and 6 page 8

PART 7 page 9

PART 8 page 11

PART 9 page 14

PART 10 page 17

PART 11 page 19

PART 12 page 21

PART 13 page 23

PART 14 and 15 page 25

PART 16 page 27

PART 17 page 29
PART 18 page 31
PART 19 page 34
PART 20 page 35
PART 21 page 38
PART 22 page 39
PART 23 page 41
PART 24 page 42

PART 25 page 43
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 1

Hospital desk

"yahaan koi sign karega?"

"kis ke liye?"

"consent form hai, koi relative hai is ladki ka aap logon main?"

"haan. Woh meri sister in law hain. Please..." mayank moved and signed on the form.

"TUM HOTE KAUN HO MERI BETI KE FORM PE SIGN KARNEWALE?"

Bauji had walked in and thundered at mayank, grabbing the pen from mayanks hands and pulling the forms .

"main ab bhi zinda hoon." And looked at the forms. Dia and benji had come running to mayank on hearing bauji s loud voice. mayank stood still not knowing how to respond

"dekha, koi bhi aisi form pe sign nahin karsaktha. Is form pe likha hai ki test ke dauraan kuch side effect ho sakthe hai . aur tum is pe apna consent de rahe ho? Agar tumhari hi kuch lagthi tho bhi..."

"nahin sir, yeh bas ek formality hain. Aap inpe kyun gussa ho rahe ho?" the nurse attempted to intervene.

"agar tumhari beti yahaan admit hoti tho tumhe pata chaltha ki main gussa kyun hoon."

Nurse got angry,picked the phone and called the doctor.

"taayaji, gunjan ki test karneke liye bas ek sign hi tho kiya hai..."dia tried not to sound angry at her uncle.

"tho tum logon ne kyun nahin kiya?" bauji turned to uday," tum? Kya tum ...?"

"excuse me , kya aap gunjan bhushan ke parent hai?" doctor asked and as bauji nodded," tho aap mere saath aasakthe hai? " Bauji walked with the doctor

Everyone looked at each other, dia walked to mayank and said," mayank agar yahaan koi decide karsaktha hai, tho woh tum ho. unke baton..."

"its okay Dia. Waise tests sab hojaaya tho kaafi hai."

"gunjan ko kuch serious hoga tho nahin na ?" uday asked him. He had been restless and quiet. All three turned to him and mayank patting him on the shoulder said,"main samrat ke saath jaata hoon. Pata nahin uspe kya beeth rahi hogi."

"haan, par nupur kahaan hain?" benji asked his arm around uday

"doctor ke saath thi." And walked away in search of samrat.


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Posted: 14 years ago
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sooo happy u cme back with nther ff... update soon...😊😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Awesome Start.. Add me in and Thanks a ton for the PM! Looking forward to the continuation..
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Posted: 14 years ago
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congo on ur new ff dear...😃

i m really glad that u r going to write on mayur - bauji re- collidation..😊 love to read it from u.

first part was awesome..!!

bauji always hated mayu bt he being a gud son always kept quiet.

update soon..!!

its gonna really amazing..!!

thnx for pm..

payal_
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Posted: 14 years ago
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congrats dear for ur new FF.
thank u so much ... m dying to read babuji-mayur reconcile.
its a grt grt emotion packed issue...bt i dnt knw why cvs nt shwn it in serial...i was lil sad then.
bt m so much happy that u start this storyline.
part1 is awesome.
beautiful.
babuji alwz shws his attitude towards mayur.
bt mayank usually kept quit...he alwz repect nupur's father as his own..
thats y it gonna really awesome to read.
update soon.
thanks for the pm.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wonderful part dear
me to wanna see mayur and bauji's reconciliation...nice updte
do cont.it

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edited my comment...😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
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dis is awesum...
i always wantd Mayu n Bauji ammendment track...😃
i'm soo glad u startd...
luvd it!
continue soon!
thnx 4 d pm!🤗
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Posted: 14 years ago
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PART 2

Doctors chamber-

Nupur was siting inside when bauji entered with doctor. Nupurs eyes which had hardly been clear since the time she had come to the hospital filled up immediately and she got up from her chair to move towards her father. The doctor motioning her to sit down, asked bauji to sit and began to explain in his own language what was happening . Nupur didn't understand his words and turned towards her father to see if he did. His face was impassive and he didn't look at her. Finally unable to sit quiet, she blurted ," meri behen teek hain na? Kab uthegi?"

At her simplistic question, the doctor replied," abhi kuch bhi kehna mushkil hai. bas jab saare tests ho jaaenge...aur jitne jaldi unhe hosh aayega,utni achhi hogi. Hum aapko batate rahenge." And escorted them out after taking baujis signature on the forms.

Nupur with her hand on her dads arm walked next to him outside the room where gunjan was still unconscious. Both peeped in to catch a glimpse but couldn't see gunjan clearly.

They sat on the chairs in the corridors quietly. After a few moments of silence, nupur began with asking him when he came and without waiting for any answer continued," achha hua aap jaldi aagaye. . kuch samaj mein nahin aaraha tha ki kya hone waala hain . woh doctor jo keh rahe the woh aap ki samaj mein agayi? Mujhe kuch ajeeb lag raha hain bauji. main ne kitni baar kaha hain gunjan se ki akeli sab jagah nahin jaana chahiye par woh ... Par abh kya hoga bauji? Mujhe bohot darr lag raha tha. agar aap nahin aate tho ..."

"tum kuch dher apna mooh bandh rakhogi?," bauji said brusquely, still not looking at her,"main apni beti ko dekhne aaya hoon. Sab ki bakwaas sunne nahin."

Nupur s eyes filled up again, whether from the shock of listening to baujis rude tone or gunjans state she didn't know.. She wiped her eyes and took her hand away from his arm.

Samrat came at that time with mayank close behind and asked her without registering that bauji was nearby what the doctor said. Nupur told him.

His face showing all the pain that he was feeling, walked away. Mayank looked at his receding back and turned to nupur. Her eyes still had tears and she was wiping them off. He controlled an urge to hug her .

"main abhi aaya. Tum yehi rehna . woh adhiraj ko bhi chot aaya hai tho main dekh ke aata hoon ki uski dressing hogayi ki nahin."nupur nodded .

Mayank looked at bauji s bent head and feeling something inside him contracting, moved away.

Father 'daughter sat quiet for a while.

"adhiraj yahaan hain?" bauji asked.

"haan. Woh bhi hamare saath college main padtha hain."

"matlab hospital main kyun hain? us se chot kyun lagi?"

"woh bauji..." nupur wondered how he had got hurt exactly," teek se nahin pata hain par jab gunjan ko goli lagi tab usko bhi kuch chot laga shayad"

"gunjan adhiraj ke saath thi?"

Nupur looked blank. She didn't know clearly.

"pata nahin bauji. woh main mayank ke saath thi." She sensed his disapproval and felt the guilt feeling wrap her again. She forced herself to continue, "matlab woh sab college mein party main the. "

"usko goli kaise lagi?" expressionless voice.

Nupur s eyes filled up immediately.

"kuch ladkon ne uski pehli bhi tangh kiya tha. usne mujhe bataya tha ki koi ladke usko ek hafthe se peecha kar rahe the, par maine usko seriously nahin liya. Kuch din pehle unki saath maine jagda bhi kiya tha. woh hamare college ke nahin hai"

Bauji gave her a reproachful look at which her heart tightened. Why was he giving her that look?

"kya hua bauji?"

"tho tumhare jagde ki sazaah meri beti bugathrahi hai. bachpan se lekar aaj tak tumhare wajah se usko bhi daant padtha aaraha hain. Aur ab...tumhari wajah se meri bachhi is haalat mein hain. Tumhari wajah se adhiraj ko bhi chot aayi hai. agar meri bachhi ko kuch hojatha hai tho..."

"tho kya? Gunjan meri behen hain, sirf aapki beti nahin. Aur uska khayal jitna aapko hain uthna mujhe bhi hain. Shayad zyaada. Jitna usne mereliye daant khaayi hain, us se kahi zyaada maine usko daant khaane se bachayi hain. Usko kya khaana hai, kya pehnaa hai, kiss se baat karni hai kisse nahin, sab kuch main jaanthi thi . bachpan se leke aaj tak. Lekin bauji aapko yeh sab pata nahin hoga . aap tho kaam pe jaathe the. Mujhe gunjan ke saath chod kar. Mera ek saal waste bhi hua hai bauji aur aap aaj is waqt mujhe uski haalat keliye zimeewar tehraarahe ho?!" nupur stopped to take a breath.

"tumhe kya badon se baat karne ki tameez bhi yaad dilaani padegi? "

"jab bade..." she stopped as the nurse came out and sprang up to ask her how gunjan was. The nurse gave a non committal answer and walked off.

Nupur sat down and after a while, looked at her father. He had his eyes closed and suddenly looked old. She felt angry, she wanted to fight with him for all the things he was saying and here he was looking tired and old. She got up and telling him she was going to see the doctor, walked off, not before catching the sudden loneliness which came over his face the moment she left.

Edited by np18 - 14 years ago

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