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Posted: 14 years ago
Shubhu u knw i was so surprized ki tune ye os yaha post kar diya😳Can't believe u listened to me😛

Umm kaha se shuru karu samajh ni ara i am grinning like an idiotic fool while typing this😆...as i said in the pm it was totally☺️(to the power infinity) hehe...It totally beats all the romantic(ahem ahem) one shots i have ever read on MN till date😳😛😆 .U knw this concept was very tricky but u being my fav romance writer i just knew already this is gonna be great!!

I totally loved the "pehle ankhe band karo" wala part...ultra cute and totally nupurish:)

i liked the"like what u see?" wali line too..made me blush hard☺️🤣

Loved the ending the most...beautifully expressed!!It was so sensual yet serene😳...
⭐️from my side!!!

Ab mai kuch ni janti u HAVE to write that MN anniversary wala os too...that's my order!!!

keep rocking girl❤️
p.S i have commented here as i was too lazy to search for the page i ressed!😆

Edited by acAasthamayur - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: acAasthamayur

Shubhu u knw i was so surprized ki tune ye os yaha post kar diya😳Can't believe u listened to me😛

Umm kaha se shuru karu samajh ni ara i am grinning like an idiotic fool while typing this😆...as i said in the pm it was totally☺️(to the power infinity) hehe...It totally beats all the romantic(ahem ahem) one shots i have ever read on MN till date😳😛😆 .U knw this concept was very tricky but u being my fav romance writer i just knew already this is gonna be great!!

I totally loved the "pehle ankhe band karo" wala part...ultra cute and totally nupurish:)

i liked the"like what u see?" wali line too..made me blush hard☺️🤣

Loved the ending the most...beautifully expressed!!It was so sensual yet serene😳...
⭐️from my side!!!

Ab mai kuch ni janti u HAVE to write that MN anniversary wala os too...that's my order!!!

keep rocking girl❤️
p.S i have commented here as i was too lazy to search for the page i ressed!😆


awww... Aasthu 🤗🤗🤗
your comments always make my day girl.😃😃
aapka order sir-aankhon par.😆😆

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hey friends !!! i am back with another OS on Mayank Nupur.
this one is for Amu my friend. her complaint is i make her wait endlessly.


HUM AAPKE HAIN KAUN.


Nupur was gathering her notes together,about to leave for home.her best friend Dia was waiting impatiently for her." Nupur!!! jaldi kar yaar. kitni der lagaye gi?? mujhe phir mall bhi jaana hai Rita wahan mera wait karegi,time par nahi pohonchi to mera sir khaa jaayegi wo."said Dia . " bus ek minute Dia ,aa rahi hoon." said Nupur picking up her sack & slinging it up her back. Nupur & Dia were final year PG students just months away from getting their PG degree. Nupur was a good looking girl who exceled in academics as well as extra-curricular activities.
As both of them walked out of the library,a peon walked up to them," Miss. Bhushan, Deodhar sir aapko staff-room mein bula rahe hain abhi." As he walked off Dia let out a huge sigh," lo ho gayi chutti," she said throwing up her hands," ab to main zaroor late ho jaungi.Deodhar sir kam se kam 1 ghanta lenge hi na, pakau kahin ke." " Dia !!!!! kya bol rahi hai tu???"scolded Nupur. " ohhh come onnn Nupur !!!! as if wo tujhe pakau nahi lagte." scoffed Dia. "lagte hain par main teri tarah ye itni zor se broadcast karti nahi firti samjhi??? " said Nupur." aisa kar tu ghar jaa,late ho gayi to pehle Rita teri jaan khayegi aur tu meri."
" sach mein jau??" asked Dia. " main abhi greek mein bol rahi thi kya??" asked Nupur" ab jaa bhi jaldi". " oh Nupur you are a sweet heart " said Dia giving her a swift hug." cya tomorrow babes!!!" and she rushed away.
Nupur took a deep breath & turned toward staff-room to see what Deodhar sir wanted to see her about. " may i come in sir !! " she asked & entered after getting a nod from Deodhar sir.
" please sit down Nupur," invited Deodhar sir." i have called you here to tell you about a debate competition,you have to participate in it & speak on the topic 'ethical hacking' ok?? you have exactly seven days to prepare your speech. one of my ex-students is a computer programmer,he is just back from US ,he will be able to help you more with it. here is his address. i will call him & ask him to expect you tomorrow morning around 8 or so,ok?" It was not at all ok ,thought Nupur, but she simply took the card from Deodhar sir. She looked at the address,it was not far from her home* thank God for small mercies * she thought.
the next day Nupur got ready for her appointment with Deodhar sir's ex-student.dressed in a sky-blue chudidar she stood before mirror looking at herself critically. Satiesfied she picked up her bag & walked out of her house calling out a bye to her mom.* He is Deodhar sir's student so he is bound to be nerdy like him* ,thought Nupur.
Reaching her destination ,she rang the door-bell , stood tapping her fingers impatiently. the door opened ,there stood a guy clad in just track pants. He had tousled thick black hair & pair of deep chocolate brown eyes, sweat gleamed on his face & broad chest , he wiped his face with towel & draped it around his neck carelessly. He looked at her quizzically.
" errrm... Nupur Bhushan here to see Mr. Mayank Sharma." she managed to say.He moved aside & gestured her in. Nupur settled in a sofa & looked around the neatly arraged hall.
The guy came out again pulling on a black vest, Nupur could not decide whether it made any difference, all that black vest achieved was highlight his fit body. Mentally shaking her head she muttered "behave yourself Nupur."under her breath. " ummm... i wanted to meet Mr.Mayank Sharma,if you could just call him." said Nupur. " you are meeting him, Miss.Bhushan ," said he ," Mayank Sharma here what can i do for you??" Nupur felt her jaw drop open , * this gorgeous specimen is Mayank Sharma* she thought, * he is as far from a nerd as earth is from saturn*
"ummm!!! " she stuttered ,she did not understand what was happening to her why her tongue felt like it had been tied up in knots.
She cleared her throat & said," i have to prepare a speech on ethical hacking for a debate competition,Deodhar sir said you might be able to help me with it." " hmmm... help you as in i write the speech & you learn it by heart,go & deliver it on stage??" he asked a bit sarcastically. Nupur's temper flared up,"of course not . what do you take me for Mr.Sharma ??i meant help with some material on it. i never pass off somebody's work as my own."She said looking at him indignantly& got up . Suddenly he started to smile, a cute dimple appeared on his cheek, his eyes began twinkling, Nupur was flummoxed at the impact that smile had on her. "hmmm ...fascinating!!! who knew such a spit-fire hid behind such a serene exterior " ,said Mayank smiling widely.
" My apologies spit-fire!!!!" said Mayank smiling " plz be seated as i search for some material for you." He made the word spit -fire sound almost like an endearment. Nupur sat down trying to calm down her rapidly beating heart. He came back with some articles & papers. " here you go , go thru it prepare a draft & show it to me the day after.we will discuss & finalize it then ok??" asked Mayank. Nupur took the material ," thank you Mr.Sharma, i will take your leave now." " thank me after your speech is ready & can you call me Mayank, Mr.Sharma makes me feel like i am a senior citizen." said Mayank laughing. His laugh was infectious." ok ,then Mayank see you the day after ..." began Nupur. " wait , i will make us some coffee." interrupted Mayank.
when Nupur just looked at him without any comment he guffawed. " oh come now, spit -fire , why are you looking surprised ?? don't you offer some refreshments to your guests??come & give me company in the kitchen." Mayank invited her.
Nupur accompanied Mayank into the kitchen ,he pulled out a stool for her near his kitchen island & proceeded to make coffee. Nupur sat there silently watching him move around with ease & grace, he wasted no movements. with in a few minutes he put a steaming hot cup of coffee before her along with chocolate chip cookies.
Mayank sat across Nupur with his coffee. He asked her about herself ,her goals & aspirations. As Nupur began to tell him,gradually she relaxed ,her eyes glinted with excitement . Confidence & joy vied with each other in her voice.Mayank could not help himself,he was thoroughly charmed by her. he cupped his face in his palm,rested his elbow on the table & sat there admiring & listening to Nupur.
Suddenly Nupur realised that she had been talking alone for past few minutes,she stopped abruptly. " sorry !! i just go on & on when it comes to my future plans." she said in a embarassed voice.
" don't worry Spit-fire,its very refreshing to meet someone who has her future all chalked out & knows how to go about making her plans a reality."said Mayank setting down his empty cup.
Nupur picked both their cups & rinsed them at the kitchen sink,she turned around after putting them to dry.
" pretty domestic !!! are'nt you Spit-fire??" asked Mayank . " its to thank you for that awesome coffee. will you please stop calling me Spit-fire??" said Nupur." but it suits you so much ." said Mayank laughing.
Nupur bade him bye & left for her college.
whole day she was lost in her thoughts, once one of her teachers admonished her,for not paying attention. Nupur was brooding into her cup of coffee,she had just finished jotting down relevant points for a rough draft.

Dia sprawled next to Nupur & asked her," wassup Nupur??? subah se dekh rahi hoon ,tu kahi aur hi hai. kya hua???" " mujhe bhi pata nahi kya hua hai mujhe,bas akeli chup-chap baithi rahoon,koi mujhe disturb na kare ,aisa lagta hai." said Nupur. " hmmm... accha ji to ye baat hai." said Dia smiling with mischief. "waise tu Deodhar sir ke student se milne gayi thi na??? kya hua wahan ?? kaisa hai wo?? unke jaisa hi hoga ,hai na. nerdy types." " mujhe bhi pehle aisa hi laga tha Dia,but we could'nt be more wrong.in fact he is not nerdy type at all, looks like a greek god ,with well chiselled body."said Nupur. " oohhhooo..." drawled Dia," to pehli hi mulaqat mein Nupurji ko yeh bhi pata chal gaya ke he has well chiselled body like a greek god ???hmmm...interesting." " aise kyon bol rahi hai tu Dia?ab wo agar sirf trackpants mein darwaza kholne chala aaya to main kya karti??aankhen baand kar leti??complained Nupur.
" maine aisa kab kaha??" said Dia." phir kya hua??" so Nupur shared every thing with Dia.Nupur had this dreamy look in her eyes as she spoke about Mayank,which did not escape Dia.* uh ooh!* thought Dia.* Nupur is a goner now.*but decided not to point the obvious to her friend.
As planned Nupur reached Mayank's place with the rough draft of her speech.Nupur checked out her face in her compact mirror, before pressing the door bell.
Mayank opened the door ,he looked entirely different today,hair neatly combed,he was dressed in all black. Full sleeved shirt with sleeves folded upto elbows,neatly tucked in.He smiled perfunctorily& gestured Nupur to come in.she handed him the draft she had prepared . Mayank went through it, asked some pertinent questions ,suggested some changes. while she was writing down ,the points Nupur was confused & was thinking *is this the same Mayank i met the day before,he seems so different.* " Nupur , you have any more questions?" Mayank's voice cut through her thoughts.* Nupur ?? did he just call me Nupur??" she thought, * whatever happened to Spit-fire?* * oh come on girl ,* said her mind * do you really want him to call you that??* * yes,she thought i do.* " Nupur !!!!"Mayank's voice sounded a tad impatient.
She startled & looked at him." no , i don't have anymore questions." Nupur said. " will you excuse me then? i have a urgent meeting to attend. " asked Mayank getting to his feet. " all the best for your competition".
now he smiled & it reached his eyes. " thanks a lot for all your help.bye ." said Nupur. she had expected something witty from him,but he just nodded.
Nupur was very disappointed when she left Mayank's place. * he could have smiled a bit more, uska kya jaata.* she thought. * tera kya chala gaya,if he did'nt smile?* asked her mind.she could not explain it even to herself why she was suddenly feeling low. * come on Nupur ,this is not the time to mope around,buck up* Nupur chided herself. she put her thoughts on back-burner & completed all her classes,assignments etc. on way back home Nupur was again lost in thoughts, Dia asked her ," kya hua hai Nupur tu aaj phir khayalon mein gum hai."
" main aaj phir Mayank ke ghar gayi thi Dia draft lekar, pata hai aaj wo bilkul alag sa laga,jaise koi aur hi ho.muskuraya bhi nahi aur usne mujhe Nupur bulaya." said Nupur,then bit her lip she had'nt meant to tell the last part. " Nupur nahi to kya tujhe Katrina Kaif bulata??? ooh ooh ooo!!! to itni jaldi janab ne aapka koi nick name bhi rakh diya hai hmmm...kya rakha hai bata na jaldi se??? asked Dia.
" kuch bhi to nahi ." Nupur denied. " dekh Nupur seedhe -seedhe bata de warna mujhe bulwana aata hai" said Dia moving her fingers to tickle Nupur. " ok ,ok plz don't .you know i am very ticklish. he called me
* Spit-fire* that day. he made it sound almost like an endearment Dia" sighed Nupur smiling to herself.Dia smiled too, now she was sure Nupur was falling for Mayank.
The day of the competition dawned , Nupur was a little excited & a little nervous.She reached college on time,then accompanied by other participents& Deodhar sir started for the competition place.As they were entering the hall ,she received a msg on her cell. She checked it & was surprised as heck, as she read " All the best,Spit-fire.-Mayank"
* how did Mayank get my number,i did not give it to him.*thought Nupur. but she was very happy to have received it.As there was no time to ponder over the mystery as to how Mayank found out her number,she pushed it to back of her mind.as expected Nupur & her college won the competition.Nupur also won a special award for her elocution. they all reached back to their college & had a noisy celebration.
The next day Nupur got ready with special care , she picked up the box of chocolates & along with her award winning certificte, left for Mayank's place, she thought about calling him first,then thought against it. She wanted to share this news with him in person & gift him the chocolates,she was pretty excited.As she reached Mayank's flat ,she was greeted by a lock on his front door.Nupur's face fell & all her excitement vanished.* serves you right Nupur,you idiot.would not it be better to call him first & make sure he was going to be there.* she thought .* ok ,i can always come back in the evening after college.* so she went, the day seemed to drag at snail's pace. Nupur was getting impatient for the evening to come. the evening came but it was a repeat of morning Mayank's flat was still locked. feeling dejected Nupur left for her home. that night she decided to call Mayank & tell him that she would stop at his place before going to college.with trembling fingers she dialled his number," this number is out of coverage area " announced an annoying voice. Nupur let off a sigh & flopped on her bed. she tried to call Mayank three times more at regular intervals but did not succeed.
* may be i have jinxed it * thought Nupur,then shook her head at that negative thought.
Nupur was standing infront of Mayank's flat where the lock seemed to laugh at her.She took out her cell & tried to call him with negative result. she had spent whole day in college in melancholy , which was compounded by the fact that Dia had bunked the college that day.Nupur was trying to think what to do next, when the door of opposite flat opened.
there stood a old lady with infectious smile on her face.Nupur returned her smile." are you looking for Mayu then??" asked the old lady." i mean Mayank Sharma. i saw you come here yesterday morning & evening too." Nupur was dumbfounded so she just gave a nod to the lady." well he is not here ,as you can see. he told me he was going out for a few days." " any idea when he is coming back aunty?" asked Nupur. " none what so ever beti." replied the lady. hearing this Nupur was totally dejected. she thanked the lady & started back.
Nupur called Dia ," Dia !! kaisi hai tu?? kahan hai?? i want to see you right now. where shall we meet??" " i am on way back home Nupur, why don't you come over too?? if you reach before me no probs, ramu kaka will let you in. you can relax in my room till i come." said Dia.so within twenty minutes Nupur was waiting in Dia's room for her to get back.Ramu kaka had left too saying he had to go to market to get some things for dinner. Nupur stood in the window admiring the garden, she had opened her hair& rubbed her fingers in her hair trying to get rid of headache which had just started to niggle.feeling lonely suddenly she moved to the music-player & hit the start button. Nupur sat on the window seat ,her head leaning on the window-sill, listened to the song playing.
Hum Aapke Hain Kaun

Bechain Hai, Meri Nazar
Hai Pyar Ka, Kaisa Asar
Na Chup Raho, Itna Kaho
Hum Aapke, Aapke HainKaun

Khud Ko Sanam, Roka Bada
Aakhir Mujhe, Kehna Pada
Khwaabon Mein ,tum aate
ho kyon
Hum Aapke, Aapke Hain Kaun


Nupur sat there with closed eyes listening , she was so lost in the song that she did not realise when tears started flowing from her eyes. a soft breeze blew through the window playing with her open hair.

Bechain Hai, Meri Nazar
Hai Pyar Ka, Kaisa Asar
Hain Hosh Gum, Poocho Na Tum
Hum Aapke, Aapke Hain Kaun

Kaise Kahun, Dil Ki Lagi
Chehra Mera, Padh Lo Kabhi
Yeh Sharm Ki, Surkhi Kahe
Hum Aapke, Aapke Hain Kaun .
the song finished & still Nupur did not move , tears were streaming down her cheeks.
" hey !!! whats wrong , why are you crying Spit-fire??" asked a voice. Nupur's eyes opened & she blinked away the tears. Leaning against the door ,his arms folded across his chest ,stood Mayank.
Nupur could not believe her eyes,she got up & looked at him ,sure she was imagining him." hey !!! earth to Spit-fire, you are needed here," said he smiling with mischief. Nupur rushed across the room & flung herself at Mayank . They hugged each other tightly. Nupur put her head on Mayank's shoulder & started to sob in earnest.Mayank put his cheek on her head & held her close,rubbed her back.
" hush now sweet-heart, i am here,are'nt I ?? hush" said Mayank softly. Nupur raised her head & looked in Mayank's eyes they were misty too. she hit him lightly on his chest with her fist. " how could you?? how could you do this to me?? " she asked, " where did you go,without saying a word to me. I have been missing you so much." Mayank stood looking down in her eyes ,smiling ,his arms encircled Nupur's waist.
suddenly Nupur realised she stood in Mayank's arms & she had cried all over him. She tried to move away,but Mayank tightened his hold around her ,refusing to let her go. so she bit her lower
lip & looked down,she could feel blush creeping her cheeks." oh come now Sweet heart after taking this huge leap of faith ,don't try to back away." said Mayank raising her face by holding her chin.
looking deep in her eyes tenderly, Mayank said," i fell for you hard in our first meeting. i have never believed in love at first sight,so i did not want to accept it.not knowing what you thought of me , i decided to act distant with you in our second meeting.i saw you were baffled at my behaviour that day. i tried very hard but could not resist sending you my best wishes.then decided to test whether the adage " out of sight,out of mind " is true."
" well i can tell you it is entirely true," said Nupur smiling at him" because you were out of my sight & i was going out of my mind." Mayank laughed out & said " i love you Spit-fire."
" i love you,too Mayank " said Nupur hiding her face in his chest.They stood there embracing each-other,a feeling of pure bliss washed over them. something niggled in Nupur's mind she raised her head & asked Mayank," what are you doing here?? how did you know i was here??" Mayank sighed & pulled her across the room to sit on the bed . he pulled her closer to him putting his arm around her shoulder.then took out his cell & dialled some number , Nupur looked at him with puzzled expression.Mayak handed Nupur his cell saying," some one wants to talk to you,listen & you will get all your questions answered." Nupur took the cell & said " hello" tentatively. " kaisi ho meri hone wali bhabhiji ??" Dia's voice burst through. Nupur felt her jaw drop open." Dia tu??? " she said in disbelief.
" haan meri jaan main." said Dia laughing. " Mayank mera cousin hai, meri maasi ka beta.that day when you went on & on about Mayank Sharma i realised you must be talking about bhai only so i met him to find out,jab mili to dekha aag to dono taraf barabar lagi hai. but bhai was not ready to accept it,he had some wild haired idea about staying away from you & see whether he stops thinking about you.never happened & i thank all the Gods for that. so are you going to be my bhabhi then??"
Nupur blushed hard & said " i don't know ask your bhai" . " oohh so both of you have'nt reached any decision then?? ok never mind both of you have whole evening ahead to decide ," said Dia in a mischievous voice, " no body is going to disturb you till 10 o'clock .so hurry up & decide." saying so Dia cut the call.
Nupur looked up at Mayank ,he was looking at her with eyes so full of love that she felt overwhelmed.she leaned onto him putting her head on his shoulder.Mayank tightened his arm around Nupur.
After a few moments Mayank said," I love you very much Nupur.will you marry me??" '" I love you too Mayank .i will marry you,but you will have to talk to my parents first." said Nupur.
Mayank burst out laughing & Nupur looked at him with a frown. Mayank rubbed his fingers on Nupur's forehead smoothing out the lines. " that goes without saying my Spit -fire." he said lovingly.
then Mayank leaned in & kissed Nupur's lips tenderly. with that tender kiss, they pledged their lives to each other.
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this it then friends. waiting for all your precious comments.😃😃
PS- i know the part Nupur winning the competition sounds contrived & cliched
but it was necessary to take the story forward.so kindly pardon me.😆
& even then, there is a unwritten rule some where that our leads have to be perfect.😆


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Edited by shubhsArti - 13 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
@ Amu, finally posted my OS Amu.😃
i hope you like it & feel your endless patience paid off.😉😆😆.

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Posted: 14 years ago
res! *edited*
awww...<3 this was magic !! An os that conveyed a full story !! this was so sweet and cute..I love these kinda osz the most !! You wrote it extremely well.. :D and yeah , It made me smile..:))..It had everythng..and u xplained each n everythng so vividly and perfectly..that made the os even more special !! <3
love uuu...>:D<
A spcl thanks to Amuu too ;)
I loved this story of the Greek God and the Spit fire..<3
keep writing!! *hugs*
Edited by Nikita-Sharma - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
awww i loved it...😃
i loved it...😊
i loved it lodsss...😳
wow...sis
it was an awesome OS...😳
i really loved it lodsss...
dis was such anawesome story...😍
i sooo loved MayUr in it...😍😍
it was a pleasure reading dis OS...
do write more...
love ya...🤗
Edited by 18anila1 - 14 years ago
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that was fantastic friend!!!...so cute...and very true...its the unwritten rule...that the leads have to be perfect...and when it is mayur they define perfection...😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
awesome OS... 😎thnk u plz continue ur work👍🏼
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Posted: 14 years ago
lovely os❤️
really awesome...
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RES😛
EDITED...
omg Shubhu i loved it sooo much
Loved it to bits sacchi.U were right this os is indeed innocent😆
I love the way u write ,its witty and its the kind of writing i enjoy to read...nothing OTT and full of humour haha

" sach mein jau??" asked Dia. " main abhi greek mein bol rahi thi kya??" asked Nupur" ab jaa bhi jaldi". " oh Nupur you are a sweet heart " said Dia giving her a swift hug." cya tomorrow babes!!!" and she rushed away.
It totally reminded me of my cousin...we both ae like this only😆
The kitchen scene reminded me of Damon Elena...I guess its the after effect of watching vampire diaries so much.I am pretty sure m turning into a mono maniac😳
Baki ka part was lovely and sweet
loved the ending...too cute

P.S in return of my biggg comment i want biggg reply😳
Edited by acAasthamayur - 14 years ago

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