Mayur's Scene analysis-updated pg 3

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey All,
I've been on IF for a while but left in between and now I'm back and all thanks to MJHT or rather Mayur. This is my first post on MJHT forum so I'm hoping you guys like it. Also this is to cheer everyone up.
This post is just a thorough analysis of the beautiful moments spent between Mayur from day one till now.
First meeting:
He heard a sweet voice of a girl in trouble. The voice sounded in trouble, then he looked towards the men's loo and wondered what is a girl's voice doing in there. He wondered and then walked inside the loo in hope to help whoever was in trouble. As he walked in and heard her cry, "please open the door."
Mayank asked, "What are you doing in Men's loo?"
Nupur answered, "Please don't ask questions and open the door."
Mayank tries to push the door, she asks in worry, "Are you still there?" he politely answered, "I'm not among the ones who leave. I think the door is jammed, you try opening from inside and I'll do my best from outside."
They both try at the knob together. It was as if both wanted to meet each other. And both pushed together and it was if they are meant to do great together. The door didn't stay jam for long and that just says it all about their pair: together they were stronger and can face any hardship together. That first meeting marked the beginning of their upcoming life. Their pair was made in heaven and as if the nature agreed with it too. The door didn't keep them away for too long. Both pushed and pulled and the door budged and there came trembling Nupur and fell directly in Mayank's arms.
As soon as he made contact with Nupur, Mayank felt an electric shock go through his body. The energy rushed from his fingertips, that were touching Nupur's shoulders, and slowly reached his brain. The rush of such enigmatic rush, made him realize that something was there and it tugged his heart. He ignored that feeling as some sort of imbalance. But in the background he could hear the music that was playing to show his heart's desire: a tingling feeling of being complete finally. He ignored all of that and realized that a girl was crying her heart out. He let his hands trail off her shoulder reluctantly. He didn't know what to do to console her. He was worried and looked on top of her head. Even if it was for a second, he let her cry on her shoulder. As she rose from his shoulder, her face was hidden and he couldn't see it. His heart was waiting to see the girl, who had this much affect on the first meeting. As she put her hands down slowly, her eyes spoke volumes. Strings in his heart pulled at it. He was shocked and happy inside to see such amazing eyes. He has never seen anything like them before. he has seen so many girls but never a girl like this. He was left speechless. He starred in those brown eyes, that were crying and innocent. He didn't know what to do, how to console her, what to say, so he looked away and tried to control the situation. He didn't want to break the eye contact but he had to. Before he could say anything, she ran out of the loo and left him wondering. he wanted to kill the person who did this to her. He didn't want her to go and and he did try stopping her but he couldn't find his voice. he followed her out but it was too late. he saw the guys laughing outside the loo and he starred at them hard. He looked after her and then left to go to his destination.
so that was mayank's POV. Nupur's I'll do in the next one. which is even better.
Cheer Up everyone!
Rooj😊
PS: if you guys really like I will def. continue with Nupur's POV and then their following scenes together. I know it is late but hey its better to be living in optimistic world then looking at pessimistic events!😉
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ripwan thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
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loved it... do continue writing further.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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U r juz amazing...i think u can start writing a mayur ff.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: ripwan

loved it... do continue writing further.

Thank you I most def. will
rooj-i thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: achoose

U r juz amazing...i think u can start writing a mayur ff.

Oh thanks hun😳 I dont think im that good😳 and as for mayur ff u never know😉
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Maybe u should write a FF ...or maybe a one shot!!
Amazing start!!!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: Aranya

Maybe u should write a FF ...or maybe a one shot!!

Amazing start!!!

thanks hun maybe i will once im free. can't write one shots coz well they are really small and i like to continue for long and go in details.
will write a Ff in the future maybe...
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Very well written..
Pls do continue and wen u do pls PM me .. ok..
Looking fwd to the next session..
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: rooj-i

thanks hun maybe i will once im free. can't write one shots coz well they are really small and i like to continue for long and go in details.

will write a Ff in the future maybe...

Yeah...it will be as good as this!!!😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: naj7

Very well written..

Pls do continue and wen u do pls PM me .. ok..
Looking fwd to the next session..

I'll def. let u know hun and next session i'll try to update this week but i can't promise...
and thank u
Everyone who commented,
Please tell me ur name so i can call u guys by something😳

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