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Posted: 9 years ago
#31
Awwwew bebo!!! Janniii it was justtt Incredible!! Omg !! Im speechless yaar!!! U have extraordinary Writing skills... I cannot describe u in A word... But one word suits best on you and it is "BEST" ummm... But... I think it is alsooo sooo smalll for u myyy dearrr janniii !!! If u dnt mind can I ask u a ques? R u a girl ... I cannot recognize by ur nick sorryyy 😊
Coming to FF... It was mindblowing
... Fantasticooo... Awesome... Shewettyyy...
U r such a cutie Pie my dear...
Veerrryyy nyccc yar i Request you to continue... Plzzz its my humble request janiii
Loveee u dearrr
Tons of tons of tons of Love , Care , Happinesss, Hugs and Wishes for u
Keep smiling
Be happy
Be loving
Enjoy
Love U so Much
Regards,
Sonia ❤️😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#32
Oh... really nice start...
Plzz pm me next time...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: sakshi5050

Lovely one dear its nice to read
I could feel Ishani and Ranveer's friendship in the story
Ranveer staring her Ishani showing her hand in front of his face to bring him to the world

And Ranveer managing something
Everything was perfect clean and good keep updating 😉😉😉


Thank you solo much dear that you liked it 😃
Its only influenced by you people's writings..
Will try to enhance my skill..

Thanks for accepting
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Posted: 9 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: Bloomfield

Hey Bebo!

So congratulations on starting a new FF! Keep writing and growing!

The prologue was perfect the way it was...So Ranveer's now changed and none like that. Interesting! They seem to be ignorant too! Okay, it's going good ;) ;)

Now comes the first chapter and Ishani is waiting for Ranveer when he comes in, drenched, sneezing all the way to the mansion. And he promises that he would stay with her. That's something <3 <3

Their friendship is something! And I cannot describe them in words!

Update the next one soon, darling. And don't worry if my reviews are late. I'll catch up and review someday!

AV


Hi dear..
Thanks dear 😳
Glad that You liked both the prologue and part one as well ⭐️ ⭐️
You people are boosting my morale up..
Thanks for support..going to update in a while..
N problem with reviews..

Thanks once again
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Posted: 9 years ago
#35
Hey hi Sonia
Thank You so much for this much grand complemt 😳 😳
But truth be said.. I'm not even in the series of good ones..

To your ques yes I'm girl..

Happy that you liked FF, ⭐️ ⭐️
Thanks for these many wishes

LOve you too
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Posted: 9 years ago
#36

Originally posted by: Lovemyself...

Oh... really nice start...
Plzz pm me next time...


Thanks dear that you liked it..
Yeah sure will pm..
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Posted: 9 years ago
#37
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PART 2
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Here it goes...

Ranveer kept looking downstairs..,
after a few minutes he made himself to stand still,
with emotionless face he turned towards Ishani, where without meeting gaze with her he spoke in a blank voice,''how many times do I've to tell You the same thing?",Ishani was searching for something on his face.., which she was searching for many days,.., Ranveer when found no answer said in a bit authoritative voice,''leave my way'', Ishani who was still staring at him waiting for him to meet gaze with her so that she could find her answers., Ranveer now yelled at her,'' are You dumb!!!, can't You hear me?",his voice stammered due to the force of speech..., his breath heavy now,, Ishani tried to look in his eyes, but he was not allowing her.., but she noticed that those were red, tear fell off her eyes.,

Ranveer tried to push her aside and pass by, he barely had taken two steps where Ishani's voice made him stop..,''But Your Eyes speak something else Ranveer'', her voice was determinant still heavy due to weeping, Ranveer closed his eyes with a force as he was showing his back to her..a tear fell of his eyes..,he again heard Ishani saying..,
''You can lie Ranveer but Your eyes can't'' , this time she said to herself more than him,, Ranveer was in complete distress, finding no way to go, he said standing in the same position,''if You want to live in illusion, then I can't help...'',saying this he walked away, leaving Ishani there...who kept staring at his back, until he entered his room closing the door behind him with a force...he stood there for a while resting his head on door,closing his eyes...

he heard wind chime's sound..,which worked as alarm, he quickly moved from there..,
Ishani entered the room,opposite to his..,staring at the door of his room for a while,''I wish I could find the reason behind your this behavior''.., she then closed the door with a hopeless face.. Ranveer heard the sound of Ishani's closing door.., a sob left his lips..he sat on the floor resting his head on bed side, same did Ishani,
Both were trying to sleep...

Early in the morning or to say late in night;
Ranveer was slowly coming out of sleep, but was able neither to open his eyes nor to lift his head..,irregular pace of his breath was growing harder..,
he hardly managed to sit straight holding his head in both hands...he called Ishani in a low voice...
then tried to look around, finding an empty room, his hands left his head slowly.. realising the fact, a tear fell of his eyes.., he tried to get on his feet, after struggling for almost 10 minutes he managed to reach the side table of his bed, he had to open the drawer but was not finding the keys in his pockets, as he keeps them always with him so that no one can open the drawer, he was remembering that where he kept them.., he suddenly realised the mistake he did.., though actually was not a mistake but for now it was a huge blunder, because the keys were in his car, he was cursing himself for keeping them in dashboard,while going in the rain, with the sole purpose of not losing them.., but even curse was of no use for now,

he tried to get up to find any pill to lessen his body temperature, which was really too high, or any pain killer,because for now it was impossible for him to reach his car...he slowly made his way towards study room,
he thanked his stars as he got the pill box as well as water over there,
he took 2 panadols and a neoproxen, and laid there on couch helplessly..

in Morning..;
Ishani came out of sleep, she slowly getting her surroundings let out a sigh.,''how I wish Ranveer that some morning I'll wake up and will find You beside me'',she stopped for a while then continued,''but still I hope that,the day will surely come'', she with a heavy heart got up and went to get prepared for the day...on the other hand Ranveer came out of sleep due to the disturbance created by sun beams, he with a little struggle made his way towards his room, he entered the room, where he was up to close the door at the same time Ishani opened her room's door, which made Ranveer stop for a while but before he could meet gaze with her, he instantly closed the door but Ishani in the meantime had noticed the dullness of his face...

after almost 45 minutes he came out of his room in his RV attire.. walking through corridor he came near staircase and looked at the dining table where all were sitting to have there breakfast where Ishani was serving to them, though there was silence but still the environment was a bit okay..he wished to stand here itself so that no one's day got spoil, but his phone rang in the meanwhile which got everyone's attention, Ranveer managed to took the call showing that he was walking rather standing and looking on them,

after completing the call he came downstairs his way was towards the exit of the hall.. where a voice came calling his name, which made him stop he closed his eyes and then turned towards the direction,the voice came from, the voice was of Amba,who now hesitatingly just managed to say a single word,''breakfast...??",
Ranveer with utmost stubbornness said in a bit loud voice..,''how many times do I've to tell you that never call me from behind whenever I'm up to leave?",he ended with the same stubbornness, which made Amba shed a tear..,

Ishani who was watching all this could not help it without showing anger on Ranveer.,''what's this way of talking with your mother!!?", she almost came near Ranveer , while the later in distress said,''have you anything more to say or may I leave now MADAM!", he uttered his last word with a greater force,which made Ishani stammer for a while,but bit managing herself she spoke in his tone,for a while ago,''yes Mr RV you can go, infact there is no need of your standing here, because it will only hurt the others so its better you leave'',Ranveer simply yelled,''had I ask you or that old woman to call me??!!!"
these were the words which made Ishani and Amba shiver where whole of the family was shocked ,, tears left Amba's eyes, Kailash tried to console Amba so did Baa where Ishani said with contempt,''I can't believe this Ranveer .. how can you be so cheap..I mean you called your mother----, just disgusting Ranveer!", where Ranveer with the same arrogance replied,''so now you got how cheap I'm! if not then try to get it and make them get this as well..,do what you people want but please spare me.., leave me please..'',he left with the same stubbornness while Ishani stared at his back where she saw Amba crying , and quickly went to her just to hug her,''Maa you please don't worry,every thing will be alright,just relax..'',
Amba coming out of hug questioned Ishani in a suggesting way,''do you still believe that everything will be alright??", Ishani in response simply refused to meet gaze with her...

Ranveer hit his hand with full force on staring, and was crying his heart out..,''I'm sorry Maa..I'm really so sorry, please forgive me..please'',

all of the Paraikh's and Vaghella's had tears in their eyes, the only difference was that all were together except Ranveer who was alone...:(
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Done! criticism will be helpful for me so i'll b gratefull to people for that,sorry for typing mistakes or any wrong putting
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Posted: 9 years ago
#38
Again your writing skill has done wonder dear,👏👏👏

I loved the way Ishani consoled Amba nice saas bahu bond which we missed in the show
Ranveer's behavior to his family and crying alone reminded me of Ishani in MATSH original show because that was the complete thing Ishani done in the show. Do all the sacrifice talk rude to the family and finally sitting all alone and crying

Overall a perfect chapter keep updating 😉😉😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: sakshi5050

Again your writing skill has done wonder dear,👏👏👏

I loved the way Ishani consoled Amba nice saas bahu bond which we missed in the show
Ranveer's behavior to his family and crying alone reminded me of Ishani in MATSH original show because that was the complete thing Ishani done in the show. Do all the sacrifice talk rude to the family and finally sitting all alone and crying

Overall a perfect chapter keep updating 😉😉😉


Thanks dear Sakshi,
Glad that you liked it,
Yeah it reminds the same, but I actually wanted all that with Ranveer,
So I did thia
Thanks again,
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Posted: 9 years ago
#40
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PART 3
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here it goes...

He was sitting in his cabin, his hands on the table and his head on his hands...there was a light knock,
he composed himself and rested his head on chair's back and allowed the person at door to come in..
''good afternoon sir'', said Puneet in an official tone..
''good afternoon'', he said in the same way..,''is something important?", he asked in professional manner,
''aaam..,are You done with Your lunch sir?", asked Puneet hesitantly ,
''no,actually I had had a heavy breakfast at home itself so not feeling for lunch...'', he replied blankly.., though the man standing was not satisfied but he had no other way...,
''okay then sir here are the CV(s) of the current appliers for the vacancy of manager , can You look over them,, so that we may call Your approved ones for interview?", ...
"'aaa... Puneet will You please do a favor for me?", asked Ranveer appealingly,
''yes of course Sir, please do order..'',said Puneet being a good PA.,
''aam ..will You please check on them by Yourself.., and select which you feel capable, then brought those files to me.., I'm not feeling able to check them all.., and I think I can trust you for this more than anyone else..'',
''thanks sir'' said Puneet,''for the complement, and sure Sir I'll check them out..'',
he was up to leave where he turned back and said hesitantly ,''Sir.. aaa I mean if You are not feeling well then You may take off sir..,I mean there is no such work so..if You...'',
''its OK Puneet I'm fine..,thanks for concern'', he said softly, Puneet only noded his head and left...

he was still thinking on some point beside being guilty of his behavior in morning.., he was worried for something he just spoke to himself.,''from where I'll find someone for...'', he could not complete it..,

on the other hand Amba was on the way back from Mandir where her foot slipped a bit and she was up to fall, a man in his late twenties held her with one hand while his other hand was on her 'pooja ki thali' ,he held both skillfully , he made her stand still and asked''are you OK aunty...?'', where his last word was only years by himself when he looked upon the lady in front of him.., his features suddenly got loose and a smile appeared on his face which was confusing Amba and she even did not answered the man..,''You...you are Amba kaki right??!", asked man anthausiasticaly, Amba slowly nodded her head in the same confusion,''b...but how do you know?", asked she.., ''hey kaki ..,me Shekar,you remember?",
''shekar...Shekar...Shekar...''Amba was concentrating on thinking where she suddenly lifted her face up and spoke suddenly,pointing her finger at the man,,she said in a questioning yet confident voice,''Gollooo'', where Shekar's gaped mouth in excitement went close instantly along with his eyes,''kya kaki, from where m I gollooo now?!'', he spoke pointing at his physique with his both hands,, where Amba in surprise,''array haan, how my golloo became so smart?", Shekar simply said,''time kaki time'',
Amba ,''hmmm.that's good, by the way when you came in Mumbai?",
''just 2 days ago''answered Shekar simply,''actually in search of job'', Amba asked in the same tone as before,''so have got any?", ''no kaki, you know difficult it is to find it now a days'', Amba barely had nodded her head where Shekar took her with new question,
''what about Ranveer kaki?, and of course kaka?", where at the start of question he noted the colour of Amba's face fading,but he ignored, ''hmmm,fine'',said Amba ...

she quickly changed the topic,''where have You stayed in Mumbai? '',
''in hostel'' said Shekar ruffeling his hair..,
Amba looked at his face for a while, then she said in a determinant voice,''tk then let us go to the hostel first and then to our home'', Shekar saw her in confession,Amba: ''what..why are you looking at me in this way, we will go hostel to pick your luggage that's it'',
''luggage!!?" asked Shekar,''haan,coz now onward you will live with us'', said Amba with a bright smile,where Shekar resisted many times but in vain, finally Amba accepted his objection and spoke,''tk you may leave our house as soon as you get your own apartment , but till then you will live with us only, now no more argument'', Amba's voice was firm, and Shekar bonded his head getting no other way...

Ranveer was still sitting in the same position rest in his head in chair's back, there was again a soft knock, RV recognising the way asked Puneet to come in.. Puneet coming forward spoke in professional tone,''sir I've check on all these files, and as you said I got 5 of the appliers the most capable of all, now you may suggest time for meeting of bord of directors for their interview, but before that you may take a glance at these 5 CV of the persons naming, Nikhil Sharma, Raj chopra, Shekar Mehra, Pre...'',where he was cut short by Ranveer,''wait.. which name you just told?,", Puneet said a bit confusingly,'' sh..Shekar Mehra..?",
''yeah.just give me his file!", said Ranveer instantly, where Puneet quickly handed it over to him.. by opening the first page his feeble features left a short smile,Puneet was looking at him curiously ,Ranveer then looked up and addressed the already attentive Puneet,''Puneet! just send this guy an appointment letter ,no need for interview, just email him to join in next 2 days itself., Puneet nodes his head,''OK sir!", he left where Ranveer was still wearing soft and relieved features...

Amba with Shekar inters home, where he was looking around the whole house, and wondering,''kaki!, Ranveer became more than I expected'', Amba in a lost tone said,''hmmm he really became more than any of us expected'', Shekar though noticed something weird but ignored...
Baa was sitting in the hall she saw them and asked about the man, where Amba replied,''he was our closest neighbour, Baa, in the town. Forsooth he and Ranveer were used to eat in the same plate, he was this much close to us'', where baa smilingly came toward them, where Shekar bowed to seek blessings, at the same time Kailash peeked the scenario as he heard the name of Shekar at distance , he came near him wearing a happy smile on his face,''goloo! how are you beta , and what about your parents?", where Shekar made a puppy face then again turning normal he spoke,''I'm smart kaka, and so far as my parents are concerned they are doing very well'', where Kailash looked at him with a smile on his face,'' you put it very right, you are really very smart __ in your body as well as in your mind!", where all lough happily, Shekar then asked about Ranveer, every one fell silent, where Shekar was looking at each face, Kailash managing a bit,''array bhai,he is the youngest billionaire , and its not so easy to get that place and than to maintain after attaining, it requires hard work, so for that only he remains at office more than at home'', Shekar lifted his brows and spoke in amazement,''oh is that the key to success! and Ranveer made it. I wish I may also do the same...''.

They all were talking, where vaghailas and paraikhs were happy after a long time, some around of car's arrival reaches their ears, Baa says,''it must be Ishani, she had went to Durga Maa's mandir too seek blessing and happiness for this house., and it seems Maa has full filled her prayers, because I saw my family smiling after this long'', Shekar was a bit confused but before he could say anything, all saw Ranveer on door entrance, Shekar saw Ranveer, same did the later, both were meeting gaze with each other like two threads passing overlapped, Ranveer went in his childhood,

two boys of age 9 and 10 , later the chubby one while former opposite to other, both were in each other's embrace and were crying their hearts out, the chubby one spoke sobbing,'' please don't go Ranveer please, who I will play with?,who I will eat with?, who I will lough with?, who I will fight with?, who I will speak with?, I've no other so close friend Ranveer please do not go please...'', Ranveer wiped his friend's tears while his own were not coming to stop,''I know Shekar, infect all what you said are my feelings as well, but you know what Shekar its time's demand, if our fate has decided our separation, than what can we do, but you know what distance increases the love, and we both will live in each other's heart ,and will grow their together...,and I'm sure one day destiny will let us meet and live together again, may be in good times or in worst of times.., where any of us may need the other too much...'', Shekar who was still shedding tears spoke,''hmmm,and then I'll not let the destiny to apart us again'', where Ranveer now to make the situation easy,''yeah I know you can fight with destiny well, after all my goloo is goloo'', where Shekar got annoyed and was about to hit Ranveer, Ranveer started to run both kept running for some time, where Ranveer stopped by catching hold of a tree, now gasping, where he saw Shekar running towards him, he stood still and waited for him, Shekar took almost 3 minutes to reach,Ranveer well him come by saying,''see you even can't catch hold of me, and you say...'', he stopped in mid way when he saw Shekar serious,''hey goloo what are you thinking about?", where Shekar coming out of thoughts,''Ranveer I'm thinking that if we meet after a considerable period, I mean after we grow up than how will we recognise each other'', Ranveer spoke instantly,''hey don't worry I'll recognise my goloo, after all he is different from others I mean different from other golooos'', Shekar got annoyed,''what Ranveer, you mean I'll remain the same ever?", Ranveer now spoke softly,''mm hmm, actually I want my goloo to b the same ever, and goloo doesn't mean your physique, for me goloo means a love name for my best friend, and you are different because you have something different in your heart, in your mind, in your fragrance, so I'll smell you in thousands of people even...'', this made Shekar emotional,''same is the case here Ranveer'', ...

a tear left his eyes where Shekar came towards him, with his cheeks wet due to tears, he suddenly hugged his childhood friend, where Ranveer had not still folded his Hans around his back, and was thinking about some thing, he controlled him for a long time, and let Shekar remain in hug, when Shekar felt that Ranveer has not hugged him back, he came out of his one sided hug, and looked at Ranveer's face in confusion,''means you have forgot your promise'',Ranveer look at him with a silent face, I'm Shekar..,your goloo, got remember?", said Shekar, where Ranveer pretend to be thinking for a while and then looked at him,'' hmmm , golooo,'',he looked at him from top to toe,''not bad you've held a lot of weight ,good'', he said every word in perfect RV tone, which made Shekar more confuse, while the family members were watching the whole scene in distress,
''nice to meet you again'', a said in a formal way even without forwarding his hand as formality, he then spoke to a servant,'' Ramdin, serve him well he is my childhood friend'',he then looked at Shekar and spoke,''excuse me please'', Shekar without getting gave him way, but he was still in shock.

another car noise ,Shekar who was watching Ranveer going upstairs turned his gaze towards door, Ranveer at the same time stopped in the corridor, to see in door's direction,from where he could see the all but no one was able to eye him, Ishani was entering the house, her saree's paloo was on her head in the way it was somehow covering her forehead so that her sindoor was invisible, same was the case with her mangalsutera which was hidden in her hair, Shekar was lost in the sight of a lady who was coming forward holding 'pooja's thaali', he was unable to take his eye from her, as Ishani got him first in her way she simply offered him 'parasad',he took it still lost, Ishani moved forward but Shekar was still lost, no one noticed him, except the one who was standing upstairs, a smile with a sob left Ranveer's lips along with tears, he closed his eyes in pain...

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Done!, sorry for typos and any wrong putting, and criticism will be helpfull so i'll b grateful on getting any from yours side
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