RM FF: Entwined - Thread II (Chapter 32 POSTED) 6/04 - Page 13

Originally posted by: ..Steph..

SURPRISE FOR YOU MAR :D ----> 131398310 🤣

Originally posted by: Valar.Morghulis

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Originally posted by: war_is_peace

res 😊

unresd 😆

I was so waiting for this! 😆

maya meera viraj scene

i love the way maya and meera are slowly and gradually coming close. in their hearts they feel for each other only, they dont say it. viraj comes with the unfortunate news and both the girls are left in despair. its interesting how both feel so immensely for rishaan and yet its clear that meera loves rishaan whereas maya feels almost indebted to rishaan. to show this stark difference is excellence!! 👏

So glad you could see the difference clearly! It's just not the way I wrote it... but how you read it as well! And yes... Maya and Meera do make an interesting contrast... and they do feel for each other...

rudra @ police station

omg! he has lost it already. but i dont blame him. who would be in their senses when their last left family member is in danger?? it feels terrible specially when he clearly has some guilt that he is riding on. the brothers havnt been talking normally like siblings since so long. rudra even made efforts on their road trip. i am sure he is guilty about something and rishaan is extremely extremely hurt to this level that in so many years he could not talk it out to his only family member!! 😭'

the way rudra said "it sould have been me...it always" broke my heart! 😭

Yes... that dialogue had a lot of meaning to it. I am glad you caught on it. And Rudra has truly lost it. He loves and feels for his brother so much. And in many ways feels responsible for him. Both brothers are actually tormented in their own ways...

rishaan scene
poor thing is already hurt from the accident...and then this! 😭

till wat extent must he be in self hatred that he had to be here ?!! how dearly he felt that rudra should not be in danger? ! and how unconditionally does he feel for maya, the determination to get her out of hell into which he unknowingly brought her back! "it was always better this way" 😭

Bang on Hiyu... Rishaan.. 😭

shaurya is a psychopath!

he almost admires rishaan or loves that he is addicted to madhubala and still hates him because he has RK's face...crazy creep! (oh il call him CC next time!😛)
Haha! that's an apt name for him! 😆 ... and yes... he is a twisted man.. he is very conflicted about his feelings for Rishaan.
oh i loved the witty dialogues and the kick!
I am glad you did... I did not have that kick planned... it just sort of happened! And I loved it too! 😆

Maya- rudra
i feel for them. maya is so deep drowned in guilt that her guilt hurts more than her past! 😭
i can't imagine wat it would feel like to lose someone u r so close too wen the last words u have told them were filled with hatred
I know right! she feels guilty... that all this happened because of her... even though she did not ask for this and warned him.. she cannot help but feel guilty... and now everything is sorted... she has forgiven him.. she has understood him.. and now ... it appears to be too late... she is overwhelmed with remorse.

rudra at police station
rudra the lawyer is back! shaurya's family called in and all in action.
Oh yes!! 😉

rishaan

oh my baby 😭 😭 it is so bad since so many years now that it really is all about dying for him as shaurya said. he has tried so hard to run away from some past that he doesnt want to be back to that inspite of beeing in pain. how ugly and hurtful is the past?!! 😭
a moment shaurya is admiring and interested in rishaan and the next moment he hates him! so he basically is fascinated by rishaan but hates him coz he has RK's face! thats fabulous maria! 👏

Thank you so much Hiyu!! And yes... Rishaan is ... what do I say... he is tormented by his past every second breathes... and what Shaurya says... it does makes sense, doesn't it? Oh you nailed it! Like always... with your analysis on Shaurya! 👏 He is definitely fascinated with Rishaan... almost admires him... or should I say he admires the perception he has of Rishaan... to him... in many ways... Rishaan is almost like a son... but then he cannot forget who Rishaan pretends to be... and who he looks like... and the fact that he went after him... it's almost like he feels disappointed... betrayed even.
shaurya wipped him and rishaan didnt care..he remembered his past days of abuse . i wonder how he survived so long with all of this inside him 😭
and shaurya branded him with an iron rod 😭 😭 how could he!! 😭

but one question shaurya asked was very valid...why did rishaan do this? to get killed or for maya?! i would say both. or should i say he doesnt mind both. he has given up already. but then who wouldn't ! 😭
Bang on! And how he survived? I don't think all of him survived... And Shaurya had to do that... no?
@Red- 👏 ... can I say I agree? Or no? 😆 ... I will say... that's very insightful.. 😉

ps - if u dont let me marry rishaan, i will kill you 😳

Hahah! Okay? 😛😆

Originally posted by: Mentally-Insane

@Steph Muahahhaha 😈 I shall be first (or at least beat u) till the end of this story!!! 😈 😈

Maria!! Thank you so much for updating!! I am not even going to lie, I seriously only come to this form for this story now 😳 U have me addicted to it and I cannot stop thinking about it. I am gonna try to keep this comment short because i have an essay to write for which I can't even come up 10 words for 😭 😭!

Thank you so much, Lubeeda! The fact that you like this story so much makes me really happy! And I hope you did well on your essay! 😆

There was so much Rudra today that I completely loved it!! So many new shades 😈 You certainly upheld what you had said, that there is still so much more to Rudra than we know! And today we saw that glimpse. Worried, we already had established that, but crying? Someone so desperate to get through to is brother, whom he let go in the past! Honestly i am smiling in such excitement just by finding out more about these brothers!! Forget the "Rishbala" story...if you were to give me a story completely and solely on these RK brothers i would be your number 1 reader!! 😆 (I mean that)

Hahaha! see I told you so! 😆 You mean a brothers' spin-off? That won't be necessary I guess... this story has plenty of their twisted and fractured bond. However, I won't lie that the idea isn't tempting! 😆

I don't even know where to begin from and where to end!! Lets start with..Shaurya & Co? Yes, we're gonna save the best for last again 😃 You know, i kind of feel bad for the family. Many people say It's not only the victim who suffers but the family too, that may be true but they kind of just forget that the criminal's family too is dragged into this and them too suffer and become a victim of the crime that they never commit. So in that sense, I feel bad for the family. The children had no idea that their father is a mentally disturbed psychopath; for them he was a loving father, one who cares for them, fulfills their every wish, loves them, takes them on family vacations, is an honorable man, someone whom they trust blindly! So of course if some guy and the police comes up to them and says that he is a criminal, they will deny the truth! Hats off to you for keeping it so realistic! 👏 👏 The fact that you dedicated half the chapter to minor characters who we might not even see again, is truly well done. It just helped us understand the double life Shaurya has been living all the more! He was able to live with his family all these years, and no single doubt arose on him. And even if the kids found anything dodgy...he had them fooled just like Sonia...

Thank you so much! Actually... I wrote it all in a flow... but it was only later, when I split the chapter into two, that I realized I wrote so much about this family and that readers might not like it. But then I did not want to change anything. It would have been wrong. I tell the story the way I want to. It would have been an opportunity not availed for me if I had not written from their point of view. It is the destruction of a family... a household... the ultimate betrayal actually. I really wanted to show how truly unforgivable Shaurya is. A tragedy... or anything really... should be seen from all angles as only then we can know it's full effect. And I also wanted to show Rudra with Shaurya's family... it was very important for his character and the story. Ever since I began writing small scenes of this family at the end of every chapter, I had this idea to show the collision of the two worlds. So yeah... I stuck to it. I didn't change anything... I really felt bad for this family... honestly.

His wife though, meh, I got my doubts to be honest. No way that not even for the smallest friction of a second she never felt something off about this guy whom she has been sharing her bed with! And for 22 years that too!! That's a very long time!! All those bodies are after he met Maya in Canada, meaning he wasn't such a psycho always. He might have been obsessed with Madhubala, which he had hid perfectly, but you are telling me that after their short separation, after her small dip into depression, when she snapped out she felt nothing odd about this husband of hers? Yes she might not know the truth, nothing about it at all even, but she must have had doubts at times. So i support the sarcastic and annoyed Rudra on his one.

Okay... I will clarify... She didn't know. And Rudra knew that too. Like Prakash said... they both have enough experience with criminals and their families to know that. And no, Shaurya was never a normal person. He was always a psychotic criminal. He killed RishBala when he was a teenager. Yes, he killed those girls later... but he was always a closet psychopath. He knew how to wear his mask. is wife trusted him blindly as he said in his monologue couple of chapters back. Now, Rudra said what he said... because he was talking to Shaurya's wife... he was filled with this venom... this disgust... bitterness... otherwise he knew deep inside ... she didn't know just like the kids... and that she was probably already blaming herself. But that's just one shade of Rudra... as I said... there is a lot more to him.

Mr Shaurya! The amazing Villain! You know i love this little Batman theme you have 😆 Earlier you compared the brothers to Batman and Robin, and i compare this psycho to the Joker!! No offence, the Joker is still more bad ass, but the resemblance i see in them is that both don't really have a oh so huge motive 😆 They both are just being evil because they enjoy it 🤣 Shaurya here might have had a motive to kill RishBala, but did he really have a motive to go behind Rishaan and find out about his past? I know now he kidnapped him because they kinda ruined it all for him, but he knew he was caught now, the best he could have done was to actually let Rishaan go and then tried to prove himself innocent, but nope he didn't that that! He took him, he tortured him, took the pleasure of inflicting pain, and thereby shutting off all ways to escape being charged guilty! And they both wear masks! (I am not even a Batman fan 😆 but I love the Joker!! Hahah the villains for me are my heroes 😈)

😲🤣 Batman theme? I didn't even realize it! And offence? Are you kidding me? I am a die-hard batman fan... ever since I was a kid! I am honored that you used Shaurya's and Joker's names in one sentence... Joker is the King! 😆 ... I love Batman... he is the only superhero I love (I love daredevil now too)... because he is not a superhero.. he is a vigilante with the most real superpowers... money and intelligence. (and a hot mysterious personality is always a plus too) 😆

Anyway... coming back to entwined... 😆... see... Shaurya is a very twisted man... extremely twisted... so twisted that I will be happy to get him out of my mind once I am done with writing this story. He is a nuisance in my head. 😆 ... He actually has feelings for Rishaan. In his own twisted way. He almost admires him... sees him as a surrogate son. Beating him, scolding him... patching him up... kissing him on the forehead... it's like ... he is giving tough love to his child. He feels for him more than his own son in many ways. Though when he first met him... he was just curious... because of what Maya told him in her trance. He wanted to see if that was true. But what he found... it took him by surprise. It caught his attention. So you can say... he approached Rishaan for RK... but then he kept tabs on him... for who Rishaan really is... or rather... what perception he has of him. Now coming to why didn't he run away... well.. as he said... it doesn't matter now.. he knew he will be caught... he is not the one to live life on the run. He knew it was over. His cover was blown. This was just one thing he wanted to do before he is taken away.

So no this villain is interested in Rudra *smirk* Only fair to torture both the brothers right? 😈 😈 I am really hoping he goes and digs into Rudra past and also confronts/tortures him! That's where the real fun lies!! But i am actually surprised that he didn't bother looking into Rudra. And that just now he figured out that he resembles Rishabh more than Rishaan. He knew that they both are twins, remember that message he sent Maya on the party night? Saying that you found both your RK's. So our villain has his clumsy side too 😆

Actually Rudra has lived a life in shadows mostly... he is not the one to socialize... he doesn't talk if not necessary... if you remember the initial chapters of the story... he was very isolated from the world. People only made assumptions of him. They really didn't know him truly. Shaurya knew he was the twin of Rishaan and he did write that note. But Rishaan was the RK ... who took the spotlight and so took his attention as well especially since he acted like RK as well. And then Rishaan brought Maya as well.. so yeah. He thought he is the adversary... Also he said Rudra looks more like RK not just because his eyes... but because of the aura and the look he had about him when he held the press conference... he seemed like RK...

Now my poor Rishaan😭 😭 😭 Dare you do anything to him! My heart goes out to him yet again 😭 😭 You tortured him to that point that he was losing it!! Swinging between present and the past! Those last few paragraphs have to be my favourite in the whole story so far!! I can't even describe it, all i can think of right now is that you broke my poor Rishaan! I want to say so much but i don't think I am emotionally stable right now for it (such a drama queen i know 😆 but deal with it!)

I know right! Poor Rishaan! 😭 😛😆... I am waiting for your comment on him! 😆 And I am glad you liked the last scene.

Am gonna move on to Rudra, just because i do not want to talk about Rishaan right now 😭. Now this guy was fantastic! I loved him!! He showed us his cunning side, portraying himself as a harmless, sweet and oh so gentle guy in front of the kids. Then someone who is careless of the problems others might face, because for him, he only cared about one thing! To reach his brother Aditya (I have always loved this name btw) aka Rishaan! Then we saw a violent side of him. A side which actually scared me slightly tbh with you. Aditya done something disgraceful, but he was not ready to listen to any explanation, and straight up disowned his own brother. Now wasn't that harsh? But i love it! *_* And then that breakdown!! I am being legit serious, just give me a story on the RK brothers!! And i will Love you forever!!

Okay and can we talk about when this guy threatened his brothers kidnapper!!! I was so enjoying that part!! Rudra was just hands down epic, EPIC! in this chapter!!! A huge round of applause to you and your writing!! 👏 Keep it up!! And i will comment on Rishaan probably...once i am mentally ready 😆

Rudra... what do I say about him... he is so complicated... trust me. I know Rishaan is too.. and I always have to think before I write each one of Rishaan's dialogues or even expressions and body language... because it all needs to add up and not give too much away... but Rudra... God... lately he has been giving so much tough time.. 😆 ... so I am happy you saw all these shades and liked him.

Originally posted by: war_is_peace

the rudra- prakaash moment was so heart warming...like a father son. i can imagine what rudra must be going through right now! so terrible, that he is anticipating if his brother is even alive anymore...i dont know how he is even tad bit sane

I am happy you liked Rudra-Prakash scene... yes... they are like father and son, aren't they? Since your post is so deep... I just want to put something forward... there is contrast.. you see? Between Rudra-Prakash scenes... and Rishaan-Shaurya scenes... Prakash is a father figure for Rudra... whereas shaurya sees Rishaan as a surrogate son... the way Prakash wiped Rudra's hands... and there... Shaurya cleaned Rishaan's wound... make whatever of that you will.. 😆

and just like that the shrewd rudra is back
Yes... he needed to get a grip and do something...
i feel so bad for shaurya's family
i loved how you changed the case from against to in favour of rudra👏 👏
I felt bad for the family as well. They will have tough lives ahead. How does one get over such a betrayal and such a tarnished image? And I am glad you liked that Hiyu...
rudra is trying every possible way to get to rishaan! no matter ethical or not! but, u cant blame him...he is alive on that mili second of hope that he will save rishaan and talk to him finally and not have million unanswered guilt filled questions anymore. little does he know that this storm is actually the silence only and the storm is yet to come. he never realised his brother's needs. he never saw how hurt rishaan was to not even ask for rudra's help anymore. i dont even want to think how broken he will be when all of rishaan's past unfolds in front of rudra . but, at this point i want to pity rudra and yet i cannot. i only hate him. at this point i hate rudra more than i hate shaurya. atleast shaurya is loyal to his obsession. rudra couldnt be loyal to his blood brother even. he doesnt deserve rishaan. not till i c redemption.

Okay firstly... 👏

secondly... I think Rudra is the most flawed character of the lot... second only to Shaurya. He has so much guilt and remorse... but then he cannot seem to give in to it. Reach out. even if he tries... he never tries his best. So, there is definitely something that is stopping him from doing so... maybe it is the fear of confrontation... why though? But more on that later.

Aww... don't hate Rudra.. but I know what you mean. He is a walking talking tragedy this man.

i feel like thanking shaurya for putting rudra through this. rudra needed this...almost a path to redemption. i feel like thanking shaurya to do this also because rishaan needed an outlet to get all this out and as shaurya said, ''cleanse'' himself. the extent rishaan went to, to avoid his younger days is almost unbelievable. shaurya put rishaan to that point from where he couldnt come back to present. he was so deeply hurt that he had killed his true self. in a way shaurya killed rishaan to bring aadi back. thats splendid maria 👏

Thank you so much, Hiyu. I don't know what to add to that... 😆 ... but yes... this was needed... not just for the story...but for the characters as well. As Shaurya said... Rishaan would rather get his skin peeled off than his mask.. so Shaurya did just that... to make him see who he is... that is entirely a different matter... that no one really know who Rishaan really is... everyone seems to have different perceptions. for Meera he is an enigma... an inexplicable pull... the love of her life... for Maya he is her mentor... her companion... for Shaurya... he is just as twisted as he is... And for Rudra... well.. you know.. he will always be Aadi... the Aadi he doesn't even know he wants back...

if pain can kill you then pain can change you...pain can also push you to your true self. thats how we are. humans. unintentionally and yet intentionally shaurya has done what rudra couldn't in so many years. YES he liberated aadi by killing rishaan. its so ironical really that aadi's hatred for himself made him rishaan and rishaan's love for aadi turned him back to aadi. BRILLIANT! 👏
Thank you Hiyu... but really the way you wrote it .. 👏 Haha... we look so pretentious ... applauding each other... 😆 ... but no! I loved what you said!

i am amazed rishaan still thinks so high of rudra. i think he has just realised that rudra was wrong, he wasnt! omg! 😭
Oh yes he does... he always speaks so highly of Rudra... hmm.. I don't think he still realized it Hiyu... but let's see...

anything shaurya would have done to rishaan wouldnt have hurt rishaan...he was enemy afterall. but rudra was aditya's superman...😭
Yes... exactly!! That's what the title even says... I am a little upset no one noticed ... I am childish I know.. 😆 ... both the chapter 26 and 27 title make up a sentence... "Of monsters, demons and wicked beings, worst are the fallen angels." The fallen angel for Rathore residence is definitely Shaurya... but for the Kapoor brothers... it has a much deeper meaning. And he was Batman... Rudra was Aadi's batman.. I know it shouldn't make much of a difference... but I am a batman fan.. 😆 ... but seriously... spot on Hiyu! 👏
ps - looks like rishaan fell in love with maya the moment he heard her past...he felt the need to be there for her because he knew how it felt when your own betrayed! puzzle pieces are coming together only to fall apart once again because the author is a kiddo who likes playing around again 😈
Hahah! Yes I like twisting things! But I guess everyone knows that by now.. 😆
About Rishaan and Maya... I won't say anything... but he definitely connected more to Maya after that.

Fabulous update as usual.Well written .continue soon.

WOW!! amazing chapter...but my favt part is the interview part where Shaurya saw Rudra and found that he is more like RK than Rishaan...the last part was horrifying...Did Shaurya damaged Rishaan's face? Oh no...poor guy...he finally gave up ...The part where Rudra was crying with the limp body of Rishaan made me cry too...waiting for the brothers to get united...& a face off between Rudra and Shaurya...

Maria, this is another intense chapter, new revelations about characters!

Let's start with Rudra, he is smart and very shrewd, he thought that maybe involving Shaurya's family will get to the latter and disturb him, when he couldn't take any information from Shaurya's wife, he decided to manipulate the children into giving that press conference with him, he was quite convincing, and could make them believe him he sent the message in a very subtle way and he actually succeeded in distrubing Shaurya who was more annoyed at seeing his children with Rudra than what the children themselves felt. Actually he could feel that Rudra is more like Rk than Rishaan, I think danger bells might have rung, so far he was after Rishaan thinking he might be the Rk but he was highly mistaken.

We could see many shades to Rudra's character : The shrewd manipulative Rudra who can really get his work done, the bitter harsh one who can snap at anyone when it hurts him inside even when he doesn't necessarily mean or believe what he is saying and the heartbroken loving and guilty brother who is agonizing at seeing the state of his wounded brother.

Rishaan, what can I say about that man, what have you done to him Maria, I was thinking what a sadist you are while reading about the torture he was undergoing, I mean the man is shattered like literally, physically, emotionnally, I admire he said nothing to Shaurya and didn't give him that pleasure but at the end he was totally broken and it's sad, so sad, one can't help but sympathizing with him more than any other one in the story!

I liked the fact that Rishaan/Aditya knew his brother was looking for him and doing his best to find him but towards the end when pain reached high limits and memories of the past came rushing to him, he was again heartbroken to remember his brother disowning him! Rudra had better have solid and strong reasons for his reactions! but even if he loves his brother he hurt him a lot no matter what are the reasons, I hope he realizes the extent of the damage soon! his brother's near death experience might help him, I would even say that maybe the way his brother will behave later would make him realize more, I suppose Aditya will be in a big trauma after this!


About Shaurya, that man is twisted but I get what you tried to convey, he hates Rishaan for looking and trying to behave like Rk but at the same time he sees a twisted person behind that mask though I think he doesn't get the reasons for which Rishaan is being twisted, he thinks Rishaan is like him but he isn't! but still he likes the twisted part of Rishaan and it makes him admire him and even relate to him as you said like surrogate son who he treats in a harsh way, punishing him and then kissing him and attending to his wounds just to punish him again in the worst ways as he doesn't want to admit what Shaurya wants him to admit!! but yaar Shaurya is a monster, how can his love even qualify as love, the amount of inhuman torture and pain, both physically and mentally he made Rishaan/Aditya feel, is immense!!



I liked the last scene of Rudra and Aditya, almost a lifeless Aditya in the arms of a heartbroken Rudra but I think it will have a continuity in the next chapter right?!, I think we will see more desperation of Rudra, he should utter the right words not only that he is there, he should say it outloud that he loves his brother and that he can't lose him !

Questions that you might give answers to in the future:

I suppose the reason, for which Rudra as a child was so harsh on his brother to the point of telling him that he is dead for him, is big and not only an overreaction to something not very serious.
Who was that person who was whipping Aditya when he was still a child?