Rishbala SS- Broken Ties -Pt.9/Pg 58-[18/10] - Page 4

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Posted: 11 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: lwrimaforever

Awesome start Lubeeda Di!Thanks for the pms!Finally I'm able to comment!.LOL.Pls post chapter 1 soon so that I can suggest the title based on that!pls continue soon!


Ur welcome for the PM and yh lol finally i am seeing ur comment!!! Chapter 1 will be updated tomorrow but No RK in it...sorry..hehe

P.S. u don't know how happy u made me by just calling me 'Di' Lol...u see i don't live in India and my bro, sis, cousins they all call me 'Api' as we r Muslims and so on..so ur the fist one to ever call me that and lol it feels awesome..hehe i know i am a bit weird but oh well😆😉
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: lubzzxxx



<font color="#666666">Ur welcome for the PM and yh lol finally i am seeing ur comment!!! Chapter 1 will be updated tomorrow but No RK in it...sorry..hehe</font>

<font color="#666666">P.S. u don't know how happy u made me by just calling me 'Di' Lol...u see i don't live in India and my bro, sis, cousins they all call me 'Api' as we r Muslims and so on..so ur the fist one to ever call me that and lol it feels awesome..hehe i know i am a bit weird but oh well😆😉</font>

No RK??? 😭 Waiting for tomorrow!.LOL.Toh jab tak SS mein RK ki entry nahin hogi tab tak mere comment mein title ki entry bhi nahin hogi 😛 I'm glad that Ur happy about the 'Di' 😊 From now onwards I'm going to call u Di so be ready to be more happy 😉 I know it feels awesome as my younger Brothers & sisters (Cousins) call me Lipi Didi 😳 & U r not at all weird 😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: lwrimaforever

No RK??? 😭 Waiting for tomorrow!.LOL.Toh jab tak SS mein RK ki entry nahin hogi tab tak mere comment mein title ki entry bhi nahin hogi 😛 I'm glad that Ur happy about the 'Di' 😊 From now onwards I'm going to call u Di so be ready to be more happy 😉 I know it feels awesome as my younger Brothers & sisters (Cousins) call me Lipi Didi 😳 & U r not at all weird 😛



Lol I think then I will be looking forward to ur comments the most..hehe
Btw may I ask u ur name or something with which I shoulf address u as...u c I don't really knw many people on this forum and am also kinda one of those silent readers or observers...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: lubzzxxx


Oh please to write a story about them i would need them to inspire and grab my attention but they haven't managed yet..so writing a story about them is still far off...

😆 please do continue. I would love to read it.




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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice start dear...plz post 1st chap soon bcoz without knowing the theme and story,i can't even suggest a name😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Nice start
Madhubala... Superstar!!! Interesting.
Continue soon ... Plz pm me when u update next part...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Clara20

awesome start...plz countiue...



Thanks guys :D
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Posted: 11 years ago
#38

Originally posted by: meiejrishbala

nice start dear...plz post 1st chap soon bcoz without knowing the theme and story,i can't even suggest a name😊


don't worry am updating chapter 1 in a short while but No RK so sorry for that..thanks anyway tho😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: arorasurbhi

Nice start
Madhubala... Superstar!!! Interesting.
Continue soon ... Plz pm me when u update next part...


thanks and surely i will have accpeted ur buddy request😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#40

Everyone thank you sooo much for those wonderful replies!!! Am so glad everyone liked the story so far and as promised here comes Part 1 of the story...hope u lot will like it so please do leave feedback and also i need another favor...after i think of hours of thinking i have come up with the name 'Broken Ties' so please do let me know how u guys like it or if i should change it?😊
P.S. it is not long as i have given u a Prologue as well this week but don't worry next week's part will be longer..

Part 1

"Are you really Madhubala?" she said in excitement.

"Really is it this hard to believe that i am Madhubala?" i said a bit irritated.

"No...it's just...you in our house?"

"So?" i said raising my eyebrows

"Well you are Madhubala...the Superstar!"

"And?"

"And...we are just normal people...not related to the film industry..well except Di but that

doesn't count.." Really? Only because i am Superstar doesn't make me different to all

these people. Aren't we Stars also just as much humans as these people. Before i could

reply i heard another voice, but this time a familiar one. The voice i had been waiting 6

years to hear...my moms...

"Romaaa! Why did Payal just scream? Is everything fine?" she shouted coming down

the stairs. It was Maa...she still looked the same...well accept the few white hairs and

maybe the few wrinkles. I had tears in my eyes which i let flow down. I never realized i

had missed her this much. As her eyes feel on me she froze. She stood still. I saw that

tear escape her eye and then that smile which formed on her face. I slowly started taking

steps towards her, which fastened up a bit with every step. She spread out her arms

inviting me for a hug and quickly i ran in her arms which she then wrapped around me. I

couldn't hold on to those tear as i cried in her embrace. I could hear her sobs aswell,

after all we were meeting after 6 long years. Parting i immediately cupped her face and

wiped off those tears and shook my head in a no. She also wiped away my tears and did

the same action, to which i gave her a smile. Once again i gave her a tight hug.

"I am sorry...i shouldn't have done what I did. I shouldn't have gone against your wishes.

I am sorry Maa...please forgive me" i said as i parted with teary eyes.

"No Madhu we should have understood what you wanted out of your life. Your dreams,

your life, we should have understood them all, we failed as parents" she replied back still

crying.

"No Maa, i let you both down...i failed as a daughter..."

"No Madhu...look what you have become...i am so proud of you...you struggled but

never gave up...and on top of all you proved our doubts wrong. You never let that film

industry change you, the person in you, the human you are."


"Padmini?" now who was this? I felt a bit irritated but then turning back i saw all those

people staring at us. Wait where did they all come from...it was only my aunt and that

weird girl at the beginning. I noticed some of them even had ears in their eyes, and my

aunt was one of them. The next second i felt my mom holding my hand and then slowly

taking me towards an old couple. I guessed they must be my grandparents, so i quickly

bent down to take their blessings.

"Yeh, Madhu hai...meri beeti...appki pooti..." my mom said with a smile.

"Wait, Wait, Wait...so let me get this...Madhubala...the Madhubala is your daughter...

meaning MY Cousin"said that annoying girl jumping. Really can't she see how serious

and emotional everything is? I could see my aunt giving her a death glare, to which she

shut up, so turning back..

I once again faced my grandparents and then my Daadi took me into a hug which i was

not really expecting but i also hugged her back. I could feel my Daddu's hand stroking

my hair. I felt loved again, which i hadn't felt since i left him. No not him again...i have

moved on and forgot all about him.

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Hehe so how many hearts did i break by not introducing RK in this chapter? Well some already knew but i don't think all did..😆


But because of the comments u all had given me let me tell u this chapter had no Mention of him at all but i edited it a bit to give u a bit more detail about these two characters so please do tell me how u all liked it..


And also tell me about the title i have thought of (Broken Ties)..


Do LIKE is u did...and also please leave feedback😊


P.S. i have replied to all of u so do check that out...

Edited by lubzzxxx - 11 years ago

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