PriDa SS: Entwined. Updated part 03 03feb10

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sonika.d

@sonika.d

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Posted: 15 years ago

#21

wow skorpion fantastic job.very emotional.i really cried reading dis.it's heartwrenching 2 see prida like dat.nothing can come btw dem even death.ur precap made me speechless plz update soon

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Fatima

@desigirl_18

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Posted: 15 years ago

#22

Wow Skorpion that was intense and soo serious!!! i have a glum face on now, and am really sad 😔!! But u have written it soo beautifully, i really liked it!! Really wasn't expecting something like this from you, but it was really great!! Waiting for more!!

P.S- the new siggies are great, especially the KUS and SAB one!! and ofcourse i love Ganna and Channa!

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snehakapoor

@snehakapoor

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Posted: 15 years ago

#23

he skorpian.........this was wonderful.........pls update soon.....

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skorpion

@skorpion

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Posted: 15 years ago

#24

@pridafan
hey, i am aware how much u love PriDa
its jus a story pal.
wanted to highlight how much Prithvi loves Damini

@beauty_niki
thanxxX for ur comments
will update da 2nd part soon

@sonika.d
u said it. nuffin can come between dem
thanxxX for commenting

@desigirl_18
predictable is not wot i wanna be associated wid eh.
liked my siggy eh thanxxX. i try.

@snehakapoor
thanxxX for commenting
update coming up soon

wen da wind is calm, we dun bother abt looking @ da sky
wen da windchill picks up all we thinkofy -
*Are our windows closed tight enuff*
Har khushi ke baad ek aansoo gawana jaruri hai.
usss khushi ki yaad me wo ghum sehna mumkeen hota hai.
skorpion

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Sonikins

@Sonikins

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Posted: 15 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: skorpion
@pridafan
hey, i am aware how much u love PriDa
its jus a story pal.
wanted to highlight how much Prithvi loves Damini

@beauty_niki
thanxxX for ur comments
will update da 2nd part soon

@sonika.d
u said it. nuffin can come between dem
thanxxX for commenting

@desigirl_18
predictable is not wot i wanna be associated wid eh.
liked my siggy eh thanxxX. i try.

@snehakapoor
thanxxX for commenting
update coming up soon

wen da wind is calm, we dun bother abt looking @ da sky
wen da windchill picks up all we thinkofy -
*Are our windows closed tight enuff*
Har khushi ke baad ek aansoo gawana jaruri hai.
usss khushi ki yaad me wo ghum sehna mumkeen hota hai.
skorpion

call me soni abt prida yar i was litterly weeping

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alu5123

@alu5123

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Posted: 15 years ago

#26

interesting scene, waiting to see where this goes.

Alpa

Edited by alu5123 - 15 years ago

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skorpion

@skorpion

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Posted: 15 years ago

#27

*Ghum ka sagar jo chaahe, to Hmmm muskurate rahe
apni aankhon me ashaaonke deep jalate rahe...*

PriDa SS: Entwined (Oththancha mohor) part 02

2 hr later

she does not seem to be responding positively to da medication Mr Saxena.
perharps if u cud hold her hand
we know how close you two are
da doctor interrupted HIS thots

He had stood still for da last 2 hrs jus watching her face.
All those needles piercing her arm
n all he cud do was watch helplessly
In a trance he walked up to her bed.
sitting on da chair, he held her frail right hand in his grasp

Tears wer now freely flowing down his cheeks
Daaminiii. why. cant u hear me
cant u feel anything
dun u remember our vows
holding her hand between both his, he touched it to his forehead
sliding down he brushed his lips against dem
da tears streamed down washing da 3 joined hands
*It looked like sumone from up der was cleasing dem wid holy water...*

Daaminiii...she stirred. it was not HIS voice. who was calling out to her??
she cud now see a blurry entity calling her tru da white lite
but, she wanted to sleep. relax. she had so many things to tell Prithvi
she cud feel PrithviS presence in da far distant
he was still disturbed
he was panicking for sum reason
Go away - she screamed at dat blurry entity.
i cant talk now
she felt herself pulled towards da white lite
wot are you doing. wer are you taking me
i cant come now. Prithvi needs me
we have jus got together. we have a long way to go
a long lasting lifetime to share together

Daminiii, I am not taking you anywer dear--
she interrupted da voice. cant u hear Prithvi crying
Cant u see his pain, she shouted in anguish. he needs me

Daminiii, Listen.
Dis is not about you my dear.
This call is not for you
You want to go back...go
watch...da voice pointed out

Damini saxena frowned at her confusion

Real men do not cry. but dat nite he defied dat logic
he cried for her. he cried for dem

*Prithvi!! Mr. Saxena U R Fired* His cell rang.
It was a common joke between da two
long time ago, wen he had first started on his job as her personal bodyguard
his first day of work,
he had reported late n she had gifted him his walking papers
saying da now famous 3 words *U R Fired*
De had made it his ringtone.

Hello? haa Avni. nahi she is not responding
tum wahi rehna. u r xpecting anytime in dis week
nahii, mujhe kuch sujh nahi raha hai
I need her.
Avniiiiiiiiii....he cud not continue... usse kuch nahi hona chahiye Avni
i... i cant go on widout her.
She has to come back to me
Haan me theek hu. Sameer Varun yahi hai.
He cut da line--

da white lite intensified.
Damini slowly turned away from da lite
she cud now see Prithvi looking at her still form
she felt his pain in her chest
was that wot de called soulmates??
wen one hurt, da other felt it
wen one cried, da other had da unxplained urge to wipe away da tears
she cud not see him like dis
she wanted to stop his pain...
maybe if she pleaded wid god...jus maybe

Her beepings slowed down
more doctors rushed in around her
Doctor, we r loosing her again...da nurse piped in

Prithvi felt his spine stiffen.
Damnini, i swear i will join u n pull u back from werever u are
we will alwaz be together. ALWAZ. u hear me !! Dont u dare leave me !!
Doctor !! Nurse !! do something
Sameer !! Varun !! help her!! help me god !!
dats wen he knew da meaning of *A chest pain*
He held onto her hand n tried to control his chest ache
He was seeing blurry.
He cud not see her features clearly inspite of the blaring lights in da room
Da beeps sounded low in volume
Da pain increased closing in on his sobs
last he heard Varun screaming near his right ear
*Sameer bhaiyya !! Prithvi bhaiyya ko bhi hum khone wale hai*

Damini saw him collaspe on da floor as he let her hand fall down on da bed
she watched his breathing slow down
she heard his rasp voice whisper da one word he lived for
Daaammmiiinnniii----------------
she watched as his eyes focused on her

Eye-Lock. dats all dat counted in dat one moment.

For da first time in 2 hrs, he smiled.
she smiled back.
For de both had crossed da white lite together.
Forever Entwined.

Da room hummed in silence.
Sameer Varun stood in shock
Doctors Helplessly looked around...

sumwer sumone was playing da old song on der ipod
in da hospital room nearby
* Hum bane tum bane ek duje ke liye,
Hmmmko kasam lage, Hmmmko kasam lage...
jo tere bin ek PAL bhi jiye*
while a Pheonix flew over da hospital...

to be continued----------------------

Precap

Ye kyaa kar rahi ho tum?
tum yaha kaise
Tum mere Toofaan se durr hi rehna
waise bhi wo tumhe mujhse jyaada pasand nahi karta
U R Fired !!

Raising one eyebrow she smirked at his attitude
sir, apke *GK* errr... i mean General Knowledge ke liye bata du
Mujhe yaha aapke papa, Mr Saxena ne appoint kia hai
to uss logic se..
Technically U cant fire me !!
mujhe aapka saaya banke rehna hai,
aap chaahe...
yaa naa chahe !!
He stormed outta his own room
muttering ye papa bhi na...

*skorpion*

Oththancha mohor:
another word from the Marathi dictionary
it means a treasure from da mouth.

Edited by skorpion - 15 years ago

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Archna

@achumen

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#28

Skorpie ... I HATE U FOR THIS...

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Dana Marie Saith

@Dana Marie

Explorer

Posted: 15 years ago

#29

ahhhhhhhhhhhhh
y did u kill them
very bad

but intrigued by the precap
please do continue

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Mrunal

@Mru_bee

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#30

ehh...yeh kya skorpy???

did ya just kill them both??

now are they in some alternate world now together but roles reversed??

what is going on?? yaar.

liked the update..esp the ringtone..

you better make it all right, skorpy...nahi toh i am sure achu ( i wll join her too) will be gunning for you...hahaha

-- Mru

Edited by MMM11 - 15 years ago

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