FF: Point Blank Protector (TaSha) | FF: Safe By His Side (Baaji) - Page 20

Originally posted by: -daya-

So sorry dear friends...i was planning to UD Monday but I got writer's block

Anyway am on a roll right now and of course I don't want to rush it...

it'll be a long UD but it'll hopefully be decent😆 I'll have it up tomorrow for sure😃

PS. Aish...thanks for your comments me will annotate them tmmrw before I post up the UD

Originally posted by: Hamlet53

ayeee baji! tera writer ka block pata hai mujhe.. doon ghuma ka..
nautanki!
your nightmare..roarrr..

Originally posted by: swati2008

promo...this is making me more curious...where is the update...😭😭😭

Originally posted by: aishwish

Sowiee😳''for being late. Been caught up with something or other.😳

No problem Aish, good to see you. Hope all is well on your end :)

Anyways, now that I'm here, without wasting any more time here's my thoughts on

I'm already excited to read them 😳

Chapter 3

Wow''.I'm quite impressed with the way Jagtap's character is being shaped up. He is a very sensitive person at heart, and the same time has the sharp wits of a businessman and at the very same time a very calming kind of approach which comes from age and experience. His reaction to the whole gun shot incident'''he was equally worried for naku and shristi, as he was for his wife, pakhi. He has gained all the more respect. The conversation he had with nakusha'' the way he was getting judgmental towards dutta, he was angry still when he asked "should I hate him", there was a hint of helplessness as well, for being unable to do anything substantial for his daughter somehow there was something very fatherly about jagtap's conversation!! And even his better half's take on this whole issue was so appropriate, I mean she didn't even needed a proper declaration from the horse's mouth, to crack the code, naturally women are smarter than men,😆 but I'm quite liking the silent support and encouragement they are giving to the idea of tasha coming together. Thanks, Aish. I'm glad you liked their characterization. They are after all adoptive parents. They care for Naku but they are not blind to the signs of affection and love...they would know what it looks like😉 and they also know their daughter...and how her not moving on said much about her feelings for this man...

So, as you said, I got to know about dutta's feeling on the encounter with nakusha. Once again I'm impressed, it was so similar to nakusha and yet so different. While they share the same longing for each other, they don't label it as the same way, for nakusha it's love, for dutta'..well he's still figuring out!! I it was so pleasant to see this distinction being maintained, when we got a close observation of their feelings, their thoughts on the encounter. Moreover I superliked the fact that their feelings for each are reviving from the point it has been left'.love for nakusha and confusion for dutta as usual :P and how once nakusha knows what she feels feels less exhausted then dutta.

Yeah thinking can exhaust a person😆 and he's does a lot of that where she is concerned. I am glad to hear that you've liked their state of mind so to speak. You're right, in their minds it's different though in reality its the same thing...perspective makes all the difference...

New characters are entering '..making room for lots of suspicion and suspects, and I loved apart from the conversation about those suspects made over the list,many of the characters kept popping here and there in the story without causing a hurdle to the flow of the story. Dutta's assistance team is adding more crispiness to dutta's profession and ultimately to the story as well. And how they had their own moments of humor''it was interesting.

Yes, the more characters there are the easier it is to confuse everyone😆 Even i was confused writing it...but it was important to throw them in here and there...and of course good team dynamics is important in work...and that was a point i wanted to make :)

Well shristi was clearly the show stopper, I was skeptical about the girl, I told you, did I🤔. but she is the soul'..a man deceived by his bride at the altar, is bound to be oppressive to the idea of love, and to make him believe in love all over again''.only a love so innocent and pure like shristi's has that capacity. I don't see that any gesture could play a catalyst to the long slept soft feelings of dutta as convincing as shristi's insistence to dutta's safety,

You're absolutely right, a man who learned to reject the idea of love is learning to love again through his own daughter...it is exactly wat you pointed out...the innocence and purity of it leaves him with no defenses against it and he is pushed to see brighter things...

That was the best sequence, undoubtedly!! In particularly I liked that how before this sequence, we get a shristi following every move of dutta in the room, and dutta noticing it as well. The girl is too young to sense the lack of father in her life, yet the fact remains the same, she lacks a father in her life, and that leads to insecurities'is the nightmares has to do something with it.? I'm loving the gradual comfort level between father and daughter duo, well the daughter has always been for that matter, but now seeing the father making moves is a pleasant experience. I absolutely loved shristi's take on her newly found father'.bang on!!! A child of four would react in the v same way'it's only when they start interacting with the outer society on a larger level children with single parent, gets aware of their deprivation. For shristi, the world still means the hotel. I always maintain that you always do a commendable job with the mind set of your characters. Quite appreciate the fact that it was ultimately it was dutta who got to declare to shristi that he is her father. I equally appreciate that even with a very posh background to the story shristi address her parents as "aayi- baba".

I am thrilled that you've come to like Srishti's character considering you've mentioned its hard to do for you 😆

They say children sometimes acts as bridge to their parent's relationship. Our shristi indeed is an example. Her cold ice creams revive some hawt memories😉 in between gosh naku is too strict with ice creams'..but I guess that's why dutta is here to compensate.

I just loved the update, shristi is making dutta believe in love all over again, as far as falling in love in concern her mother is there to take care of that😉

Thank you Aish. I am glad to hear how much you've liked the progress both with characters and plot...thank you for reading and commenting. I do enjoy reading them.

Originally posted by: aishwish

Ch 4

Okay Mr. Patil is not always a confused man when it comes to relations, he does know when to make a move or wait a second, may be he is sooo confused that out of that confusion he kissed Ms. Mahale.😛😆 or maybe he used strategy afterall he is a PI 😆😆😉 I wonder what if shristi would have waked up''..but smart kid just like daddy!!😆haha yeah she made sure she remained sleeping 😆

Well, on a serious sound, the kiss did felt right, how much they ignore, but they can't deny the chemistry, the sparks that transpires between them, so when he kissed him,yes it was all of a sudden. But it left me with a "this was bound to happen" feeling'..and I liked, the way dutta was musing over it, man he has fallen badly!! I also liked, that the uncertainty, he has, is still is, but slowly melting down, not all of a sudden but in a gradual course.

Yep it was only natural to make him do it and then think about it after...in the moment of the kiss his brain clouds then when it clears he wants to kick himself and not at the same time...oh yeah he is slowly slowly melting 😛

So nisha saxena, gets a huge chunk of lime light in this update. Well I don't know, who's the culprit, but definitely you have presented a very interesting suspect, to us. She adds a lot to the on going suspense, and her characterization is brilliant, though you have kept it short, but you not even for once, compromised on the depth of the character, she has the every layer needed for an interesting character, who can hook the readers o the story. And as you have promised, Baaji did came back, thanks to that desperate criminal, who made a mistake, and had his case an early wrap. And this time Mr. Rao, tends to have a special interest in the case, I hope his smarty, doesn't turns out to be the over smarty!!😛😉😆

Oh her character is built that way for a reason and in time you shall know why...

It's always a treat to watch duji together, the unspoken coordination they have is heart warming and brings a wide grin at the same time. And interestingly we got a very similar attributed pair''..tarak and suman, beginning of a yet another dostana??😉😆. I must compliment you on at this point, about dutta's professional sequence''.the whole ambiance, is so real, the people their actions and reactions, everything is very real and entertaining, I really liked that you showed them having a very casual temperament, people in a job, which keeps them at the edge, they do tend, have a very easy going attitude, while, they are indulged into a jet speed though process, and always ready for a battle at the very same time.

Thank you, it takes a lot of thought to bring these people to a full circle...really makes my day reading comments like this 😃

I loved how dutta realizes during one of his conversation, with his employee that how stupidly he could have acted to think shristi just as a responsibility. The thing naku always dreaded, knew and which made her leave, '.and it clearly makes dutta heart heavy, good for him, he deserves this much of punishment for being so moron. I liked how they were teasing the soon to be father''.men won't go all "awww" over such matters, they react like this only, but they are definitely sensitive and respectful as well, just like dutta been by making sure that the expectant father gets enough time n facility for his family'..well dutta always been a responsible guy, he just needs to do certain things just for the sake of heart. And our shristi madam is here to take care of that, her cute innocent antics, are slowly turning this man once again to someone, who's no longer afraid of love, and the commitment it requires, and it's already showing, he is more than willing to make shristi lean on him. But I guess dutta still has a llong way to go, if he wants mommy dear as well, just a kiss won't do.😆

Yep...everything is making him think ...and soon he'll get around to figuring it all out.

I'm fallen in love with this girl, trust me you have done a brilliant job, you don't know, how difficult it is to make me like a kid, but girl you did it''''.I ready to dance on her tunes just like all the other men are!!!

that certainly means something coming from you. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. Much appreciated Aish. Love hearing your thoughts 😃

Yet to read the fifth chapter'''.see you soon with the comments!!😳

take your time no rush...me have an appointment to run to now...later !

Chapter 5:

So, the story is progressing towards the end, thanks for extending the ss for one more chapter…..it's always a pleasure to read stuffs worded by you!!!😳 Okay coming to the update, Dutta patil is a clever man, wow, first kiss a girl, and then drive her crazy out of jealousy😆, but it was nice seeing him flirt, there was constant mentions of he being a man of flings in the previous update, but today got to witness how he actually flings😛😆. And she want's to smack him………I'd say go ahead, he had been enough stupid to have one😆.I particularly appreciate the li'l teasing moments tasha shared. When it's about rekindling old flames, it's not only the love that needs to resurfaced but also the comfort zones(like old friends) as well. What a moment you chose to pause the sequence, have to appreciate your marketing skills.😛

Nisha saxena is a very ummm intriguing (if I'm using the correct term🤔) character. It's not like that she'll make you fall in love hopelessly, even not necessarily one may form an instant liking, but the she does attracts you and then leaves you with a desire to excavate on a deeper level, what I liked is she is contrastive, She is intelligent I guess super intelligent (I remember my computational linguistic classes, and how miserable I was with a simple programming loops😆), and that's why I suspect her, and that's where I realized, how uncomfortable she is with something she is gifted with, and why exactly she is, it must be traumatizing for being judged or distinguished, or bad mouthed for you I.Q. wait a sec am I sympathizing with someone, I m perceiving as a suspect…girl your pen definitely has the capacity to maneuver my thoughts!!😛

And, Baaji ji is full on maroing chance pe dance😆. No. seriously I loved how you have blossomed a very endearing alliance, the girl just need a li'l bit of genuine assurance and she is all herself, and then one can't stop but fall for her. I liked the idea of interrogation via nisha and via interrogation both of them coming close. So, nisha is here for a very special purpose, that raises my curiosity all the way more….btw looking at the chunks of space she is getting, is baaji's love life gonna get a full fledged attention by our writer.😉

So, we are back to tasha sequence. Finally moron has figured out that it's not about commitment or other issues, never been, it's only him!! *sigh* why does he always has to take eternity to understand the simplest of the things and at the same time be in a profession that demands him to be super brainy. I guess he's not at fault, he is just being what he is……man!!😆But that's make him all the way moredesirable……his ultra manly traits.😳 Okay I can see myself getting carried away😆…..before I actually do let me come to the point…….I loved how he had a little monologue in his brain, I have always found this a trait in your characters in your other works as well, a very remarkable trait of your writings.

I guess you had to keep the SS short that's why we won't get long chapters on dutta winning back nakusha, anyways it's never been about winning her back , she has always been his, all he needs is to convince her that her feelings are equally reciprocated without shristi anything to do with it….since it's the second last chapter, convincing thing also has to be quick……so I like the determination dutta showed through out.

And girl, what are you doing here, step into show making business, you clearly know when to freeze and have audiences at the edge!!!! But I'm glad the suspect is a he!!

In between, I'm glad you extended in to one more chapter, somehow I feel if this would have been the last one, it would have rushed or may be not, it's just I'm thing too much😕😆

Well as you said……. their would be no rush from my side for the 6^th chapters comments.😛 Actually vacations are over, so I'm going back to university, but do update soon…..I'm dying out of curiosity!!

Originally posted by: aishwish

Hiya Aish, good to see you again :)

Chapter 5:

So, the story is progressing towards the end, thanks for extending the ss for one more chapter'..it's always a pleasure to read stuffs worded by you!!!😳

Thank you, Aish. I'm glad you think so😳

Okay coming to the update, Dutta patil is a clever man, wow, first kiss a girl, and then drive her crazy out of jealousy😆, but it was nice seeing him flirt, there was constant mentions of he being a man of flings in the previous update, but today got to witness how he actually flings😛😆. And she want's to smack him'''I'd say go ahead, he had been enough stupid to have one😆. I particularly appreciate the li'l teasing moments tasha shared. When it's about rekindling old flames, it's not only the love that needs to resurfaced but also the comfort zones(like old friends) as well. What a moment you chose to pause the sequence, have to appreciate your marketing skills.😛

Oh he is indeed clever...he knows when to push the right buttons...
Yes, I wanted that too...them not only feeling for each other but being comfortable too...
LOL...it wasn't intended to be a marketing strategy😆😆 but I'm glad it kept you reading..

Nisha saxena is a very ummm intriguing (if I'm using the correct term🤔) character. It's not like that she'll make you fall in love hopelessly, even not necessarily one may form an instant liking, but the she does attracts you and then leaves you with a desire to excavate on a deeper level, what I liked is she is contrastive, She is intelligent I guess super intelligent (I remember my computational linguistic classes, and how miserable I was with a simple programming loops😆), and that's why I suspect her, and that's where I realized, how uncomfortable she is with something she is gifted with, and why exactly she is, it must be traumatizing for being judged or distinguished, or bad mouthed for you I.Q. wait a sec am I sympathizing with someone, I m perceiving as a suspect'girl your pen definitely has the capacity to maneuver my thoughts!!😛

You know Aish, having been able to make you feel sympathetic to a person you suspect is a big compliment for me. That was the intention...and her character is intended to make everyone curious...

And, Baaji ji is full on maroing chance pe dance😆. No. seriously I loved how you have blossomed a very endearing alliance, the girl just need a li'l bit of genuine assurance and she is all herself, and then one can't stop but fall for her. I liked the idea of interrogation via nisha and via interrogation both of them coming close. So, nisha is here for a very special purpose, that raises my curiosity all the way more'.btw looking at the chunks of space she is getting, is baaji's love life gonna get a full fledged attention by our writer.😉

I truly enjoy Baaji's character every time I write he is a must character for me. And I do enjoy writing him as the easy going chill sort of person...its fun and as for your assumption at the end of this paragraph...perhaps you're are on the right track😉😉

So, we are back to tasha sequence. Finally moron has figured out that it's not about commitment or other issues, never been, it's only him!! *sigh* why does he always has to take eternity to understand the simplest of the things and at the same time be in a profession that demands him to be super brainy. I guess he's not at fault, he is just being what he is''man!!😆But that's make him all the way moredesirable''his ultra manly traits.😳 Okay I can see myself getting carried away😆'..Not to worry, it happens to the best of us 😆😆 ... before I actually do let me come to the point''.I loved how he had a little monologue in his brain, I have always found this a trait in your characters in your other works as well, a very remarkable trait of your writings.

Thank you...getting into their heads can be tiresome and confusing even for me...and then defining their thought process by the person they are..and connecting it...my head goes in circles sometimes😆

I guess you had to keep the SS short that's why we won't get long chapters on dutta winning back nakusha, anyways it's never been about winning her back , she has always been his, all he needs is to convince her that her feelings are equally reciprocated without shristi anything to do with it'.since it's the second last chapter, convincing thing also has to be quick''so I like the determination dutta showed through out.

Yup. it is a short story so its more point blank...but you've nailed it...its not about winning back its about clearing the air and realizing what the other means to each.

And girl, what are you doing here, step into show making business, you clearly know when to freeze and have audiences at the edge!!!! But I'm glad the suspect is a he!!

Oh haha thanks for the compliment...you're too kind.

In between, I'm glad you extended in to one more chapter, somehow I feel if this would have been the last one, it would have rushed or may be not, it's just I'm thing too much😕😆

Actually if it had been this chapter only the events would have been different. I changed it half way...I have to say I like it better this way😆😳

Well as you said''. their would be no rush from my side for the 6^th chapters comments.😛 Actually vacations are over, so I'm going back to university, but do update soon'..I'm dying out of curiosity!!

Oh back to school...i remember dreading those days. But you have my best wishes for your studies. Hope it all goes well...and you're in luck ...I am done the chapter 😃 its coming right up!

Thanks a lot for commenting Aish. I truly enjoy reading you comments.