hellooo sana better late than never! you know I was busssy as a demented fool frying to end the saagai bits of my FF.. thanks for your pms . yes my friend ,just finished reading both parts in one go ,in order of course .the OS idea is quite good because one can write as much and then in a given time end it .I'ts the meat inside the middle that has to be packed in ,but you did a great job in parts. ~part 1:lots of exciting scenes eto capture the readers interest;his entry ;knocking ice crea;showing his demeanour;her recgonition;her receiving bullet gave the reader calm and thrill.then thre were the romantic bits in thee FBwhen he first saw her ,stood on her bag,read her dairy ,realized that he loved her.Then you have the must scene in every love story that of he damsel in distress and the knight in shining armour who saves her.Sana I particularly en joyed the scenes when being a womman wants thhe asurranced that a man loves her .In between there were some funny bits ,that of the mouse ,bringing them closer,and also the earler one when she thinks he is one of the goons and tries to cub him! so great mixed bag of ideas well arranged and written!
~part 2:opening auditory imagery was great.There is a mystery about him ,and Naku wnts to know why he tries to leave her,plus never or has not once told her that he loves her! .The scene near the fire was endearing to read..don't know about the slap though ,for what ever reason...but the flowers she collected for him seemed to give him the message and he said the words she wanted him to say...Finally as we near the concusion of the OS we eran about Dutta's reality ,an orphan raised by another man and that Digu the man's son is an up to no good guy,why Dutta protected Naku,and who she was in danger from!
Great!we get a marriage between the two Dutta and Naku..but Sana for hammie the best bit were your one liner after their wedding"I leave to the imagination of you guys...mujhe badi sharam aa rahi hai" haaa Sana hammie cracked up!haaaha hehe!
great fun ..loved it carry on writing more ..thank you xxhammie
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