Reserved :S hopefully all those Res will be gone by tonight ...
@yuvi ...haha an accomplishment on ur part after a long time no? :P
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Hiya Partner...me here with my comments for you last four chapters ...so here we go!
imma post them all here so its easier for you :)
Chapter 18...
Now need I say the relationship between these two has arleady been set and ever so present and bas all that was left for DSP to accept that completely and Naku to hear that lovely confession. Of course at the present moment in time little did Naku know what was about to hit her and she's hesitant and in fear of the moment...where as her man is so concerned over her behavior and more importantly the hurt wrist...and upon asking her reason for it, automatically he reasons with her that she should've told him ...lol well maybe she would've if she was home, near him :P technically although physically she wasn't there, she was still in his mind everywhere perhaps making him, for a split second, forget ...now Naku's behavior is leaving him curious. And of course he has that little issue of how to tell her how he feels and LOL he asks Baaji...you know its easy to say advice but when it comes to yourself it becomes difficult to follow...no matter what advice anyone gave Dutta would still have ended up doing it in his very own style...
So he's returned home for his evening meal with his wife dearest who is still acting all strange in his presence...but family forbids him from pressing on the matter futher for there is more important work to do...mission sabotage staring contest...jagz! i used to play this game when i was younger with my siblings ...haha point being the 'when I was younger part" LOL haahaa it was cute still and loved how Dutta made Baaji loose haaa...now they want Dutta to join but with Naku of course that spikes interest in Dutta but Naku leaves...and he recalls probably why she is behaving the way she is...
Omg that confession was the cutest...it was like pent of feelings + seeing her state ...burst right out of him in hopes of mending that hurt heart ...and then drenching in the rain, what fun ...especially when the person who happens to be ur life is there with you ...sharing the moment...start afresh ...then the kangan scene haaye...and to top it all off ...pulling her close to sleep in his warmth...gosh this guy will be the death of me :P
Hmmm so Dutta all concerned about the kangan hurting Naku would like it fixed but Naku of course would like to leave it be...who wouldn't I mean she has the added fact that her pati dearest will do the honors of taking it off for her so gently with all his love and affection...now is that something she'd like to give up? I think not :P
Alright one chapter down 3 to go ...me running over to the next ...
Chapter 19 ...
See it was the love she gets through that little act of his ...its always the little things...can leave such big impressions your left overwhlemed or speechless...
omg this was just soo cute me was smiling throughout...time to check the laddoo...and as much as that was defo a job for baaji ...but need I say that D's presence alone made it all the better...and haaayee wat a scene...him untucking her pallu and sending her chills with his touch ...quite a tease he is haha ...and stepping closer...creating that anticipation on Naku's expression only for all to be interrupted by who else...our favo kmh ...baajirao! bless him, keeps his character so consistent ...and on top of his work 24/7 lol
Loved how you have brought the colors of holi into this UD ...very beautiful ...he defo listens to his wifey ...look shes gotten him all ready to be colorful...I loved the bit on how he had accepted to be a part of it all but still limited all to the way the apply it...only as tilak ...but the exception was his lady love...now their little moment was just beautiful...way he fills her maang...and she goes for his feet...and the little point for her to go ahead and spread some on his cheek ...and the hug...
So Baaji and Madhu issue ...madhu wanting for Baaji to tell Dutta while Baaji is having a hard time telling his best friend...brother...the man who gave him a good life...that he is in love with his sister...understandble but definitely feel it needs to be done...Dutta already knows that there is a girl but I am surprised he did not take much steps in at least asking who it was and getting more involved to help his hesitating friend...
Hmm Dutta's eyes searching for who else but Naku who happens to head up to their room...now D looking around before heading in that direction...ahem i sense some mischief :P chal let me continue on with my marathon and figure it out...2 down ...2 to go :P
Chapter 20...
Alright so DSP walks in ever so casually into his room and shuts the door knowing Naku was showering...now as she comes out the mans eyes are set on her...loved Naku's words on how she knows he can read her...and I believe long back i had mentioned this too..when he had very well known from the very beginning what she felt for him ..through her eyes...he could read her just like she could read him...loved her questioning what he could see ...read now ...bohot saara pyaar, thodi si hitkitchahat aur ek gusarish...haaayee look whats back ...sweet nothings..whisper whisper...whats said between husband and wife is not needed for our innocent ears LOL ...now what he said is going to remain a mystery na...but glad to have it back in this FF too :P
awww Dutta leaving and Naku although upset over the fact that they will have to be distant for a little while pretends all is well to send him off on a good happy note...bless her...and love how he knew that and reassured her that its just a matter of a week and he'll be back before she knows it...but wen in love...even a second feels like eternity no :P
omg Madhu left and Baaji went after her only for both to return as husband and wife...uhmmm well i would say that was a bit drastic...although I understand Madhu's feelings and Baaji's hesitance but going as far as getting married like that..err ...but anyway it happened...they got blessings from AS and family...and am glad they made the decision to wait to behave like husband wife until they have full blessings from Dutta aswell...no if I were him I would be pissed not that they liked each other but their reason for marriage...but anyway will see how DSP takes this...
So Dutta now back and after is beautiful moment with Naku happens to ask for Baaji and Madhu who show up in I guess the least expected presentation... looks like my run is going quite well Jagz...3 down ...1 to go ...and am going right to it :)
Chapter 21...
So as expected DSP showing his anger the way he normally does...I can't blame him ...for not only did they suddenly marry but without even giving him any heads up about it ...Oww he was so outraged that he almost caused a blow to baaji's face...but luckily AS intervened...and as he came to realize that this was completely accepted by AS and her complete blessings had been given he feels that he did not have much to say or do...leaving the place...am glad to see he opened up with Naku but began his guilt trip ...blaming himself for being obivious to the fact..now the guy took forever realizing his own love who was staring him in the face day and night ...let alone figuring out the love going about in the air between Baaji and Madhu...to be honest in my opinion regardless ...it would seem more logical to think to face his wrath in telling him their feelings for each other compared to showing up in his face married...but anywho ...we know they will come around this...and Dutta's soft heart proved that no matter what the situation be he would always care and be concerned for them...loved how when Madhu didn't eat as she was waiting for Baaji, Dutta called him later and told him to get home now ! ...full on caring yet all masked in authority and anger...Hmm but glad they all sorted the issue out the next morning...D softened towards them and told them staright up from now on they are to come to him and let him know straight up with anything...
now the mandir wala scene...owww Dutta naming a baby girl and then teasing and hinting to naku about wanting to name his own baby girl soon..and loved her sudden concious behavior as she asked him what if she has a boy LOL and oh Dutta ...saying then the next will be a girl ...bless the couple...long live tasha !!
now what a surprise it came to a conclude ...FF is done ...but it is definitely complete...and my note for the writer...its a beautifully penned story...the ease at which you deliver the scenes...and dialogues ...the consistency in flow and characters...the importance you give the each one...wonderful...you know I am a fan of your writing and I do look forward to another FF ...whenever you have/get the time partner...thank you soo very much for such a lovely story...enjoyed it from the very beginning to the end...its ur magic and will miss it ...alright partner...looks like the run has come to an end ...so phir milenge chalte chalte...see you and me will continue with my occasional pm wala checks :P take care!
Edited by daya0628 - 13 years ago
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