Mini FF's ...Come show-off ur creativity - Page 10

let's have it from me once:
sumit returns back from office,completely drained out.Calls for kumkum.
sumit-kumkum....kumkum......pls coffee bana do...bahut thak gaya hoon.
veena cumes to him.
veena-are sumit tu aa gaya?
sumit-haan maa, aaj bahut thak gaya hoon.itna kaam tha aaj.Kumkum kahaan hai?
veena-kumkum to apne kamre mein hai...jaa...aaj use bahut yaad aa rahi thi teri...
sumit-meri...?
veena-ja uske paas woh wai8 kar rahi hogi...
sumit-haan maa...
he goes to his room.
sumit-kyun madam aaj bahut yaad.....
but sees her on the bed sleeping.
sumit-maa ne to kaha tha ki aaj ye mohtarma humein bahut yaad kar rahi thi....ye to so gayin...no problem..
(smiles)....
he goes towards her and kisses her on the forehead.he feels that her body is hot.he touches her cheeks.
sumit-kumkum...tumhe to bahut tez bukhaar hai..?
kumkum gets up from her sleep.
kumkum-arrey sumit...tum kab aaye?pata nahin kaise main to so hi gayi...woh actually aankh lag gayi...ruko main abhi tumhari coofee lati hoon...She tries to get up.
sumit (holds her)-chup chap leti raho.tumhe bahut high fever hai...abhi tum kahin nahin jaogi..samjhi..
kumkum-nahin sumit..i m fine kuch nahin hua hai mujhe....
sumit-aacha ek minute.
he brings the thermometer and takes the reading.
sumit-thermometer galati nahin karta.dekho tumhe 103 fever hai..
kumkum-nahin woh...
sumit-shut up....tumhe batana chahiye tha ki tabiyat thik nahin hai..aur tum...sorry main phir tumhe daantne lag gaya..wai8
he brings a cloth and cold water and applies it on her forehead.
It is 11:45.
kk- su tum khana to kha lo..main ab thik hoon...
su-tumhe kya lagta hai..main khana kha paoonhga...
kk-par tum office se bhi thak kar aaye ho...
su-tumhe thodi bhi takleef hoti hai na to mujhse dekha nahin jaata hai...par ye baat tumhari samajh mein to aati hi nahin...
kk-sorry sumit...
su-actually sorry to mujhe kehna chahiye..tumhaara khayal nahin rakh paaya...
kk- su pls aisi baatein mat karo..
su-to thik hai tum abhi chup ho jao aur close your eyes....
kk-(smiles and closes her eyes.)su, u know what..shaayad tumne aaj shahrukh ki jagah bhi le li hai..
su-sach...
kk-much.
su-to thik hai issi khushi main hum kal uss hare hue , i mean mujhse haare hue shah rukh ki movie dekhenge dvd par.ok?
kk-ok.
suu- to bas ab apne shahrukh ke liye so jaao aur jaldi se thik ho jao.
kk sleeps and sumit continues 2 do her sewa.How was it?not bad na?actually i dont have time at all.mushkil se 15 mine ke liye free hoon.

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Great going JJ...

Well written 😉

Ok I m back with my story after so many days.... 😳

Pls chek my earlier story for this continuation... 😛

Everyone in the family is happy and are full on with the celebrations of the marriage of sukk... 😉

There su has his busy day frm office and returns back and sees a wedding card on the table. He anxiously opens tht card only to find his and kk's wedding fixed. He gets upset over this..and asks for his father who is in the downhall for some preparations. 😃

He comes down and asks " Papa yeh kya hain" showing his wedding card.

Papa: Tumhari shaadi ka card.

Su: Lekin main yeh shadi nahi karna chahta.. 😕

Papa: par kyun

Su: Kyunki maine hamesha kk ko apni dost mana hain naa ki usey kabhi jeevansathi ke roop mein dekha hain. 😕

Papa: Toh ab dekh lo

Su: Nahin papa main yeh shadi nahi kar sakta.

Everyone comes in downhall after hearing ths convo..

Mamma: Su tum kya kah rahe ho.

Su: Main theek kah raha hoon, main yeh shadi nahi kar sakta.. 😭

Everyone tries to make him understand bt su is in no mood to give up.

He relently tells his mom : Tum toh samajhne ki koshish karo, main yeh shaadi nahi kar sakta..

And the moment he says this his father faints down and su rushes towards him and holds him... 😭

Next the doc comes and inspects his father and says tht he had a mild attack. Maybe he could not take some thing.

Dadi looks towards su and holds him and takes him wth her...

Veena asks her : Aap kahan le ja rahi hai isey..

Dadi: yeh dadi-pote ke beech ka mamala hai, tum beech mein mat aao..

She takes su in the mandir and says : Tum kyun apne logon ko mushkil mein daal rahe hoo..

Su: Par dadi maine toh..

Dadi: Aaj agar tere papa ko kuch bhi hua toh main tujhe kabhi maaf nahi karoongi. Is ghar se ek aur laash jate hue main nahi dekh sakti..

Su: Dadi, aap kya keh rahi hai..

Dadi: haan su main theek keh rahi hoon...main tumhare aage haath jod rahi hoon, lekin is shadi se inkaar mat karna... 😭

And she bends down, su moves back... 😳

Su: Dadima...

Dadi goes frm there and su is left in thoughts... 😳

To be continued later...

vv good i think this story which resham is writting should be written in an different forum wht do ull think

great part and stooped at suspenses 😃

Originally posted by: panjwani

vv good i think this story which resham is writting should be written in an different forum wht do ull think

no this anybody can write no need for continuation of previous track u can start a fresh one also

no i mean which track resham is writting i think it is a good one tht story which she is writting is lovely and i think we can put it in a new forum and we can also help her to write it

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I LOVE HUSSAIN & JUHI AND KUMUM EK PYARA SA BANDHAN ALSO AND I LOVE ALL FF TOO PLZZZ COUNINF THE FF 👏 😉

great write up reshu 😉

finally got round to reading it... 😃

lehkin 1 thing... all throughout i jus wanted to know kk's reaction...

pata nahi kyun mind kept wondering bout this 😳

keep going reshu... doing superb! 👏

Originally posted by: shabzz123

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now y are u laffing shona?

ab kya hua tujhe?