Abhigya OS - Rituals

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@rbb1

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+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Amazing story I like how he has finally realised that this marriage means so much to her, his questions and her answers were great

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Miss.M

@Miss.M

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Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Wow Rani!!! That was so beautiful!!! Loving how you explained the ritual and Abhi's feelings!! it was amazing!!!

The last line was simply beautiful...

And i'm a sucker for longer stories so I'm going to say it...what happens after???

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rutu83

@rutu83

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

what a lovely os!

if only abhi in the show had capabilities for this level of introspection and observation

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917659

Hibernated

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

AMAZING! 👏

Perfectly written & I loved to read the story in Abhi's POV

But... only a OS? Really? PLEASE write more chapters!

I'd love to read more!

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kdsubs

@kdsubs

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

Rani - this is absolutely beautiful. Will come back for a more detailed comment but just had to let you know - dil ko choo gaye aap aaj.

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Trisha

@-Trishh-

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

Hayyye Rani!! This is a masterpiece!! The way that you crafted the story was brilliant!! Except I want more!! It's like you stopped at the climax!! Dil mange more lol!!

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@putturani

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: -mina-
It's GORGEOUS Rani. You have done justice to the occasion and to all the mixed feelings between them. Your take on Abhi is so beautifully heartfelt...and even though from a narrative perspective, Pragya is at a distance in this story...I think you got her just right too.

Really loved and will surely reread because sooo manyyy feeelllsss. And I think one maasi will like it also (and I will tell one mumma to check it out too :P).

And mina's monkey mind wants moreee...more. Because when the feelings boil over...!!!

I mean ok I respect your choice to end where you did since it was built around that not-at-my-feet moment. But as a reader...aur chahiye plzzz

Thanks for this Rani!!! 👏

PS nutella sandwiches 🤣

Thank you Mina!😃 I am glad you think I got the characters right. Since where the characters are in this fic is very different from where they are in the show now, I was worried about keeping them in character. Also, nutella sandwiches was a bday reference but also a real thing that my younger cousins eat. 😆

As for more...let's leave that up to your very fertile imagination! I never planned to take this one further but might come back to it once I finish Vulnerable.

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@putturani

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: simsim25
Aww! Loved it and im sure the twins will do!

Thanks Simsim! Hope so!

Originally posted by: kmh2lover
this was amazing! 😃
if only Abhi grew a brain in the real show like he did in this story!

Thank you! I think he is SLOWLLYY getting there soon now though 😆

Originally posted by: Asma-
This is amazing
You need to continue
It's so great

Thanks Asma! I wasn't planning on it originally but now I might after completing Vulnerable

Originally posted by: nilmi
Amazing...loved it...

Thank you Nilmi!

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@putturani

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: Diahh
Rani awesome!! 👏
I want to read more!! Seriously so beautiful! Loved reading this from Abhi's view!! And also especially thank you for this KC scene!! Way better than the actual KC scene!! 😉

And love the little references here and there!!! 😆 Nutella sandwiches! Indu Daasi patting Abhi's chest!! 😆 Haha twins are gonna love it!!

Love & Hugs!! ⭐️

Thank you Diahh! 😃 We get so much of Pragya POV in the show I wanted to get Abhi's thoughts for a change.

haha actually it was first daadi who talks to Abhi and pats his shoulder but I made some changes so that our Daasi could actually get her hands on Abhi's chest 😆😳

Originally posted by: -mina-
OMG just noticed!! Because you make everybody I love smile.
This is so perfect for Pragya, and for the relationship of Abhi & The Arora plus Abhi & Daadi. Beautiful way to encapsulate it. And sooo many feels to spin off of it!! Great insight! :D

Thank you Mina! I wanted to go beyond her loving him solely for the KKB issue expressed in material terms.

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@putturani

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: sudanindia2014
Rani ..what a BD gift for the twins not just because it is amazing and beautifully written but also because they can share it with everyone and it will still complete and perfect ,,best type of gifts

Thank you for your beautiful words Nuha! 😃