Abhi-Pragya fiction: 'Proof' reloaded (a dedication to -mina-'s Proof) - Page 2

Originally posted by: Mkgp88

Beautiful Tia! Absolutely beautiful...I'm speechless...loved it!!! Hope you write some more!

And now I'm going to go read it again!

Originally posted by: -mina-

TIA

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TIA TIA TIA TIA TIA TIA

TIIIA TIIIAAA TIIIAAA

I'm just gonna make a hundred posts that say Tia because omggg I have no words!

oh IF! if only you didn't truncate repeated letters! then only could I express all that is inexpressible in the emphatic repetition of Is and As to go with TIIIAAA

oh ok if I found words to make a ridiculous joke about IF i can probably find other words to tell you more about my response to this this this THIS AMAZINGNESS

ok i will go find words and come back

TIA TIA TIA TIA TIA!!!

OMG TIA!!!

Originally posted by: deefan

woahhh, i'm speechless!!!!

Tia you need to write more often 👏

Originally posted by: -mina-

OMG OK!!!!

I am so glad you found the time to write this!! A case of writing fever having its way with you even when life is against you?? Ahhh well whatever it was lucky me, lucky us!!

Uff as I have said before, you have a special way of making me believe in true love for AbhiGya, and especially from Abhi's side. I don't know exactly what it is about how you write Abhi, but his deep emotions and vulnerability are just so easy to enter into in your stories. It's lovely gorgeous wonderful - and such a relief, since the show makes it hard (for most of us? maybe not for you?) to see this side of Abhi! Thank you for giving us a loving Abhi even when he's confused and angry...in your version the sincerity of his positive feelings is undeniable.

Apart from what I told you about a personal insight into Abhi like men, it's also what they show in the show. Abhi/Shabbir's eyes and certain actions are a contrary to what Abhi comes across as in reality. So yeah, I take that as Abhi's ability to be vulnerable and true to his heart.

And so omg ok!! You found a way to turn my skeevy problematic premise into something so many hundred times better! It's Pragya's idea, Abhi automatically rejects the idea that there could be any such proof, eventually he finds his proof but it's not about sex, and then you even find a way for them to be hotly intimate and move forward in their relationship without going "all the way". SO. MUCH. MAGIC!!! Big time congrats to you for putting it all together like this! Thank you for rescuing the concept and for putting your own spin on it and for delivering awesomeness and yeah just thank you!!! 👏

OK OK! let me quote stuff because ahhh amazingness!

Thank you, Mina. Now I am speechless.

"No, I can't do this. There is nothing between us. We are not husband and wife in real sense" Abhi said looking away.

YES YES THIS!! This response is so perfect and right and I love it!! It's kind of insane because he's in the middle of fighting about how she's betrayed him as a wife, and yet it is the only sane thing to say to that proposition. Well put and so glad you included it!!

You got my point so well. This was the thing I wanted to convey. Here he is trying to make her prove her loyalty to the marriage and he himself admits they aren't really a married couple.

Abhi just kept looking at her as he felt like his heart was opened layer by layer, giving him a clear meaning of emotions that he was afraid to interpret. A corner of his heart was doing a victory dance, a corner that always found something genuine and true about this girl.

awww this is just so meaningful. Lovely way to describe these heavy emotional moments!

"I don't know what I said, I am sorry for all this. I know you would never want to sleep with me. I know you don't find me attractive or beautiful. I don't know what came on me. I remember when I got drunk you said, you never would like to kiss my lips. And here I am..." saying that Pragya tried to walk away.

Pragya gestured him to make space for her to walk away given he was standing in her way.

OK YES THIS TOO!! I just need to thank you so much for including this. Pragya saying this kind of thing - it's just, gah, I love this kind of moment. The huge vulnerability and sadness lack of self-value that makes her say this and then want to walk away ASAP, and at the same time how completely wrong she is - ahh I just love it love it love it! And I think it actually does suit Pragya, quite aside from my enjoyment of it as a story moment 😆 Yay!! 👍🏼

This is one of the most important aspects of Pragya's character, as I see. Something that Abhi needs to change for her.

He had wanted her to be his from a primal place in his heart but was always afraid to give voice to his emotions because he had considered her to be forbidden for himself. She was supposed to be a negative energy from which he had to stay away. But in that moment, he felt like a dark cloud he looked her through had suddenly disappeared and all he saw was light. There was a reason why he would get lost in her eyes, there was a reason why he wanted to protect her, there was a reason why he wanted wanted to kill any man who would lay his eyes on her. It was a simple reason that he wanted her for himself and just himself.

Uff so much perfection here. Primal place in his heart, considering her forbidden, negative energy, dark cloud lifting for light, wanting to protect her, wanting her just for himself - I just don't even know how to explain how this all works so well, it just does! And put together it's such a powerful explanation of Abhi's state of mind. It even makes me sympathetic to his possessiveness in a way that I'm not usually able to understand. Again Tia you're making me feel stuff I can't explain, so I'll just have to say that I found this all really affecting and awesome!!

Thank you Mina.. It was important for me to hear that.

He felt peace and elation at the same time. The only feeling he could relate to this was when thousands of people gave him a standing ovation in his concerts, the feeling of euphoria mixed with gratitude and immense satisfaction.

Haaaye I loved this!!! Uff great comparison!

She knew from her understanding that he didn't love her or he didn't want to be with her but her gut feeling always told her otherwise. And the way he was gently kissing her was just proving it. Very soon, her thoughts were washed off by the never known emotions he generated in her whole body and she found herself trying to respond to his kiss.

Awww!! Thank you for giving Pragya these moments. Uff <333 😃

he had found a clear answer to one question that had bothered him. He had known she was his. To think of it, he did not care if she was a virgin, nor did he care if she had loved a man before, all he wanted was her to be his and the kiss told him she was absolutely his.

Oh Tia. Just, thank you!!

He wasn't punishing her for supposedly being with another man nor was he in a hurry to invade her body to make sure she was untouched, but he seemed to cherishing every moment of their closeness with utmost care.

And I think here is the difference in our visions, and I am so beyond glad you wrote this version out for us all to read. I couldn't see past his anger; you had him deal with and move on to something so much more genuine and beautiful. So lovely. Thank you! I'm saying that a lot but that's only because I mean it!! 😃

I guess your Abhis also pretty much get to this point. At different stages.. I actually think your conclusions were more realistic. This is more like imagining a perfect scenario!

He kissed her eyes, the eyes that could make him forget himself and his lips slid down along her nose to find her lips again.

ufff picture perfect moment!! aieee! love this detail!! 😊

His every touch was causing fireworks in her body that was trying to hide in his arms at its own will.

awww!! what a sweet and apt way to describe pragya's response! a little overwhelmed and a lot lost to the passion. uff wondrous <333

The very next moment she had found him slide down on her going on his knees. He lifted his head up to look at her with glazing eyes reading tender emotions that made her heart feel full.

Ok, WOW. also my heart might just have exploded. and my brain too. because! hot! but then it only gets hotter, so let me move on to that!! 👍🏼 😆

She was melting onto him moment by moment. Her hands pulled on his hair for she found it absolutely unbearable but his sole mission was to driver her over the edge.

He was working her frenzy like it was his ultimate duty. Pleasuring her this way felt like the least he could do for her with a subconscious guilt building up in his soul. He took ultimate pleasure in introducing her to a beautiful place he was sure no one ever took her to...

His name uttered in the purest form from a deep place in her being jolted him to reality.

oh oh oh I don't even have words. this was just. oh!! ☺️ but also ❤️. ufff. i just...love the way you describe her losing herself to the pleasure. love the way you describe his focus and motivation. love that you have brought them together in this moment to share this particular act. love that they got to that particular place together - well, he took here there, same difference to me. uff. just. so much love!!

Yep, he was there with her, for her actually.

He suddenly knew he did not deserve her. He had hurt her every single moment ever since he had married her. ... And that also meant he felt so little in front of her. He did not deserve to take pleasure from her... He needed to earn that on his own...

And this must be the best thing about your Abhi. He recognizes and responds to his own shame, he has a standard of behaviour that he holds himself to, and he is subject to guilt and self-punishment when he realizes that he's fallen short of who he wants to be. This is the Abhi we all want to believe in, the good, upstanding man at the heart of a hurricane of misunderstandings, making so many wrong choices but not fundamentally a bad person. The show makes it impossible to believe in this Abhi sometimes. Thank you SO much for giving us this story with this side of Abhi so prominent! 👏

I am very positive this side of Abhi will come out in the soap sooner or later.

Pragya's face turned even a brighter shade of red as she met with his eyes

Haha I can so imagine this! Love how you caught the awkwardness and adjustment of the after moments, but it didn't distract from the important conclusion of the big conflict/drama within Abhi. Well done!

but I have always fought with the wrongs my life put in front of me and made them right. Now I have to make myself right. Please allow me to do that.

ohhh!!!

THIS is what I want for Abhi. So so much. it goes with what i was saying above about his own standards. can we email/mail/tweet/message/bombard the show writers/CVs with this line so they remember, this is supposed to abhi's eventual track?!! ohh please oh please!! ufff so wonderful

ok!!! so somehow i have reached the end again! well basically as soon as i post this i'm just gonna go back to the beginning!! because i loved their argument too, all those angry words, and i know i'm gonna love re-reading the whole thing because it's just that good. thank you once more for writing this!!

i am so so glad my story and our conversations led to this, it's beyond amazing to see ideas evolve like this and i can't even tell you how grateful i am to see this version of the story. when i initially had the idea i thought it was so awful and it made me feel like a gross person for thinking that way, but now that one thing has led to another i have to say i just feel so lucky to be able to have shared thoughts about this scenario with you. you have taken it in a unique and beautiful direction, and this story really is a powerful read. thank you again - i can't seem to stop saying that, sorry, haha. basically - i just LOVED it!! yay!! congrats on this excellent work tia!!! 🥳