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Pixiepixel11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#131

Awesome update loved it so much.

Continue soon please.

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-Nive-

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Posted: 9 years ago

#132

Chapter 4 thoughts

I must confess that I have read this few months ago but I forgot I read this and read it again until I realized I have already read it.

He took a deep breath and then smiled politely. "Aur aap kaun hain?" (And who are you?)

Abhi was polite even when he was confused. I love this. Not that show Abhi wouldn't be polite but this Abhi is calm even when he doesn't know things.

Pragya wondered if he might ask for Aaliya or Tanu next

For a second, I also wondered why he didn't ask about Tanu. But I am following this weird habit of reading it from reverse, so I really don't know what happened before or whether Abhi has broken up with Tanu. From your summary of story till now, I think nothing like that happened. But then I had read chapter 5 already, so I realized it's because of memory loss and I am glad you made him forget Tanu but remember everyone else in his family.

Before he could finish his sentence, Abhi registered the flash of the man raising a cricket bat he had been hiding behind his back.

I thought he might be someone sent by the villains until few paragraphs later where I found me scolding myself for expecting soap twists in your fiction 😆 and MM security is weak here too.

Hopefully Robin would be there to make him an energy shake.

This made me feel uber sad for Abhi with this sentence. No Daadi, No Aaliya and No Chashmish. Rockstar's life would be boring without them.

Was she planning to initiate a divorce? Maybe she was plotting how to get the best settlement out of the whole mess? Or perhaps she was still busy looking after her mother, and hadn't made any decisions yet?

The second question - 😲
He is not fully out of the thought that she is a gold digger. He knows she doesn't love Purab but still has some doubts that she might be after money? The word 'plotting' made me think like this.

Daadi had reached Ludhiana

How I wish Daadi was like this on the show too. A good way to show that she is angry on her grandson. Though its painful, I like this Daadi who doesn't force her thoughts on the kids or forcibly make them do things when they are at fault.

and most of all I liked that you made him not reconcile with Purab but made him ask for Purab when he woke up. 😃

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Mina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#133

Originally posted by: vlhs12993
How did I missed this update😲
Loved it Mina👏👏 Wish cvs read your story and give us something like this!
I like the abhi in your stories more than the show abhi Mina.
can't wait for next update!
and an update for Black anarkali too😳

If CVs do it then what will be left for me? It's hardest to write when they're actually doing their jobs well 😆

I like him too Harsha...what's why I write him 😳

And yes will try to get you some Anarkali!!

Thanks for reading and commenting ❤️

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Mina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#134

Originally posted by: --simmi--
Wow Mina! I am jumping in excitement for when I get time to read all these! They sound fab!

And Congo on your meeting with Shabir! <3

Heehehe not as excited as I am to know you will read them! Thanks for the reads and comments already!

And thank you, it was magical, I got very lucky 😳

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Mina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#135

Originally posted by: _Ms.Funnybee_
Awesome update loved it so much.
Continue soon please.

Thank you, so glad you enjoyed!! ❤️

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Mina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#136

Originally posted by: -Nive-
Chapter 4 thoughts

I must confess that I have read this few months ago but I forgot I read this and read it again until I realized I have already read it.

Heehee! Thank you for re-reading and sharing your thoughts, makes me soo soo happy Nivu!

He took a deep breath and then smiled politely. "Aur aap kaun hain?" (And who are you?)

Abhi was polite even when he was confused. I love this. Not that show Abhi wouldn't be polite but this Abhi is calm even when he doesn't know things.

LOL. I'm not sure Abhi on the show would be polite 😆 But, thank you for describing how he is calm when he doesn't know things. This is a good way to put it and will be important going forward in this story...I think!

Pragya wondered if he might ask for Aaliya or Tanu next

For a second, I also wondered why he didn't ask about Tanu. But I am following this weird habit of reading it from reverse, so I really don't know what happened before or whether Abhi has broken up with Tanu. From your summary of story till now, I think nothing like that happened. But then I had read chapter 5 already, so I realized it's because of memory loss and I am glad you made him forget Tanu but remember everyone else in his family.

No Nivu, he didn't forget about Tanu...

Before he could finish his sentence, Abhi registered the flash of the man raising a cricket bat he had been hiding behind his back.

I thought he might be someone sent by the villains until few paragraphs later where I found me scolding myself for expecting soap twists in your fiction 😆 and MM security is weak here too.

LOLOLOLOL "scolding myself for expecting soap twists in your fiction"! Too cute!! The random violent attack is my attempt at a soap twist, along with the memory loss. I argued with myself for many months before deciding to go with this track...good to know it's not "too" soapy compared to if the villains had been involved 😆

Hopefully Robin would be there to make him an energy shake.

This made me feel uber sad for Abhi with this sentence. No Daadi, No Aaliya and No Chashmish. Rockstar's life would be boring without them.

Awww!!

Was she planning to initiate a divorce? Maybe she was plotting how to get the best settlement out of the whole mess? Or perhaps she was still busy looking after her mother, and hadn't made any decisions yet?

The second question - 😲
He is not fully out of the thought that she is a gold digger. He knows she doesn't love Purab but still has some doubts that she might be after money? The word 'plotting' made me think like this.

He never really got to know her...this was quite early in their "relationship" after all. Sadly on the show itself we saw plenty of instances where he knows she doesn't love Purab, knows she's a simple girl, but still talks about her being after money.

Daadi had reached Ludhiana

How I wish Daadi was like this on the show too. A good way to show that she is angry on her grandson. Though its painful, I like this Daadi who doesn't force her thoughts on the kids or forcibly make them do things when they are at fault.

Haha! Yes! An adult Daadi treating her adult grandchildren like adults!! Giving them space to make their own mistakes.

and most of all I liked that you made him not reconcile with Purab but made him ask for Purab when he woke up. 😃

The one, the only Bhai Jaisa Dost. I didn't have much planned for use for him in this story but Nivu somehow you are making me want to bring him back. I will have to think on it!

Thank you again for reading and commenting Nivu ❤️

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hailly

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Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#137

Awesome update Mina.
Loved it, continue soon please.

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littlegurl

@littlegurl

Beginner

Posted: 9 years ago

#138

Hi Mina

Loved the story

Please update the story soon

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anishapoudel

@anishapoudel

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#139

puneet fiasco was one i can never forgive abhi knowing all how he hit him to hide the stuff minu i hv no words for u u r just just a amazing story writers i love the way u hv written with such a positive note i m really to glad to read next part watiting 😊

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-Nive-

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Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#140

Chapter 3 thoughts - RES

I need my laptop for this 😆

UNRES

This is so far MY FAVOURITE CHAPTER in this FF (well chapter 1 and chapter 2 are still not read but I think this would anyway be my favourite). I love everything about the chapter - much needed Pragz and Sarla Maa confrontation, Bulbul and Sarla Maa talk and Purab-Abhi confrontation yet I couldn't help but share some of my favourite parts!

In all the weeks she had spent trying to hide the truth about her marriage to Abhi, Pragya had forgotten one basic thing.

Her mother had a temper.

To be honest, even I forgot that Sarla Ma had a temper so I kinda had the same thinking that Sarla Ma would collapse or her health would detoriate if she came to know the truth about Pragya's marriage. Got to see her real nature only after MMS.

I couln't quote the entire paragraph here since the comment would get bigger but I loved all the things you mentioned to show that Sarla Maa was a fierce woman who had faced so many struggles with courage before.

To her surprise, she even found herself admitting to her mother that a small part of her had somehow grown fond of Abhi

I am always fond of this kind of situations in story where a person admits to another person about their feelings when they aren't even consciously aware of it. And I am even more happy this time, because she got to share it with a person close to her i.e. her Maa. Also because I never got to see Pragya and her Maa having a heart to heart talk about their thoughts and feelings without any walls in between them.

Neither liked it when Sarla basically said that they were behaving as children, but still both of them knew that in some way she was right.

Yes she was right and I am glad, they also accept it 😆

The day after Bulbul's final rejection, Purab gathered his courage and went to meet with Abhi.

Though I don't like Bulbul rejecting Purab, he deserved it at that time. He hid Aliya from Bulbul and Bulbul from Aliya, it was wrong though he didn't do it purposefully. So he needs to face the consequences.

Purab was dismayed to realize that Akaash had developed an impressive professional manner. It seemed he was doing a great job as Abhi's manager, and it was galling to think he'd been so easy to replace.

These little details (can I call them little details? I doubt it) is what makes your story more professional and realistic. You are making me feel bad for Purab when I am supposed to be angry with him.

"Stop calling me Bhai. You have lost that right, Purab. You hid from me like a coward, and you betrayed my sister. I don't need a brother like you." Abhi put his sunglasses back on and started to walk past Purab.

Mera Purab 😭 Why is he the only one getting punished? What about others who did mistakes - Abhi and Aaliya? He deserves a chance to be heard. I don't want to quote the last two paragraphs because you broke my heart. (Hope you will bring Purab in later chapters )

(This makes me think about the show Aaliya and what kind of treatment she is getting even after everything)

Edited by -Nive- - 9 years ago