fAn fiC - - UPDATE pg. 3 !! - Page 2

thanks for the nice feedback 😃

arre are u gunna awnser fans all daii or actully rite sum more 😡 😆 😆 u noe im jkingg buh seriously shazzy WRITE MORE PLZZZ 😳 nd uur very welcumm 😳

Originally posted by: ~bella~

arre are u gunna awnser fans all daii or actully rite sum more 😡 😆 😆 u noe im jkingg buh seriously shazzy WRITE MORE PLZZZ 😳 nd uur very welcumm 😳

hehe today im goin to a party..hehe..so today i dunt think is poosssiible..tomorrow yah cuz no school coz of presidents day ... and im waiting for kimi 2 read itt hehe 😃

Shazeeen!!!!

Your FF wasnt boring at all.....on the contrary it was HILARIOUS!!🤣

Do continue yaar.....its a good laugh we all can share!😆

~diljaani

cpntinue yarrr...........we r allllllllll waiting 😛

I guess u guys liked itt soo i will conitnue!!
1st i need some ideas on wht u wanna see happen
and then i'll add somee moreee masala intoo itt.. 😆
so give me sum sugesstions pleasee 😳

Originally posted by: miss5stars

hi people! i hope u guys wont mind if i make a FAN-FIC , im rly bored and yah lol so i hopee u enjoy itt :D and hopefully im allowed to make oneee..hehe 😳

A= Agni

N= Niyti

S= Shourya

V= Vikram

R= Rajlaxmi

RA=Rajveer

V= Vasu shouryas mom

P= Padma Dadisa

DD= Shouryas Dadisa

C=Carol

when i get a lil lazi i will start using the letters..lol

and soooooo on...lol not even sure if im using all of them today hehe

well here i go..:D

i'll try to have everything in it... not sure about comedy tho.. coz u noe..lol ok now finally here i go

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Setting: Rathore House Cooridor

(Niyti is walking down the hall)

Shourya: Niyti Merii Jaan!!!
Niyti: (thinking what the heck) Shourya App Itna khush kyon hoon!

Shourya: Because, I Love you Niyti

Niyti: Kiya??????????? Mein tum sa nahi agni sa pyaar karthi hoon

Shourya: AGNI??????

Niyti: my stupid shouryaaa..!! nahii mein sif app sai pyaar karthi hoon aur kisi sa nahi mein app sa humasha sai pyaar karthi thi

Shourya: what? mein tho sif maazak kar ra tha

niyti : (gets all teary) Mee too (niyti starts walking backwords for some reason and is falling)

Before niyti falls.. someone catches herr.. its none other thenn

"oooooo surya surya agni joyti joyti agni swahhhhaaaa"

agni: (angry face) deek kar chala karo

niyti: uuuuuhhh uhhhh sorrrry (runsss)

shourya: (grabs her arm)

niyti: (getting all nervous n tense pushs shourya away)

niyti is runninggg...

Vikram: Niyti baata...thum bhag kyon ri hoon?

Niyti: uhh baara papa ....uuuuuuuhhh kyon ka shourya mera peecha para hai ..

Vikram: haha. shourya ki adath gay nahi ha..

Niyti: (smiles)

Agni over hears this and says to himself

agni: (thinking ... yeh ladka sif mera ho gi.. sif meri)

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DD: oyyyee vasu, shourya aur niyti ki PARTY ki thiari kari ha yah nahi

V: haa maSa abhi sif thodi baaaki hai

DD: yeh rajlaxmi ... where is she?

V: room mein check karo maSa

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in the meantimeee... Niyti is getting ready in a Red & Gold Sari with lotss of shinnyy glitterrry things on itt.. she lookss rly pretty!!

Knock at her doorr

Niyiti: who is ittt

Agni: Shourya!

(Opens doorr!)

*ooooooooo agni joyti joyti agni swaaahhhaaaaa*

niyti: (shocked)

agni: (grabs niytis hand)

.......

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meanwhile downstairss guests are arrving and some light musik is playingg in the backround tht music tht came in ek ladki anjaani si "dil pa maar da gohli ,mein teri peecha choorroo na na na )... &&& pardesiya and lots of other party Music!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Guests are comming in and Shourya is also downstiarsss and greeting them n everyone is downstiars having funnn!!

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so agni grabed niytis had and then...

Niyti: kiya kaar ra ho tum?

Agni: (kisses her hand)

Niyti: (pulls away and moves back while agni follows her)

Agni: (lookin h0t and is follwing niyti )

niyti: agni !!! what the hell are you doing

Agni : Niyti thum siif mera hoon aur humasha raho gi

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downstairsssss...

people are dacing and partying ...until they hear this big crash and the lights goo offff... and pple hear a big SCREAM!!!!!!!...

everyone is shocked

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thts all for now..!!!

YAH this was LAMEEEEEEEE too...lol

well if u want more just tell me and ill think n postt !!!

hehe sorry if it was boring.. lol 😆

everyone is shocked at this scream..!!

shourya runs up the stairs as fast as possiblee!!

he busts niytis door open!

(the lights comee onnn)(it was a power surge coz of a storm)

Shourya: Niyti Kiya Wah?

Niyti: (nerovus) Kuch nahin kuch bee toh nahi ...

Shourya: chillayna ki avaz pheri kasa i ?

niyti: oo yah mein na ek rat ko deek ha tha and i feel n broke the vase

shourya: r u sure jaan, do u want me to stay with u

niyti: nahi .. thum jaa

shourya: kiya thum kuch chupari ho?

niyti: shourya thum jao... pleaseee

as shourya close the doorrr

*agni joyti joyti agni swaaaahaaaaa*

niyti: (swallowing her spit n nervous)

agni: thum kuch nahi bholna OK?

niyti: kissi ko be nahi bhologi

agni: ok abb mein jaa ra hoon aur thum kisi ko be batha mujhse sa bura kyon nahi hoga!

*agni joyti joyti agni swaaaahaaaaaaa*

agni leaveeeeeeessssss..

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meanwhile downstairs. shourya tells everyone niyti saw a ratt n tht she is fineee n dandy!

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partyyyy timeeeeee... pple r screamin n dancing n havin fun as the rathore nayi kulvaddhu is commingggg

everyone is staring at niyti ... shourya comes near her..

shourya: waah niyti waah thum both cupsorath lagri hoo

niyti: *blushes* aur nahi toh kiya paagal ..

shourya: u rly look sooo beautiful! !!

vasu: arre shourya mamaan ko bhi humari beeti ki tareef karna do..

everyone is sayin niyti looooks soo pretttty...

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meanwhile

rajlaxmi: *on the phone with sum1* haa thum aaj hi ana teek sara eeghara paar (teeek 11:30 paar)

rajlaxmi:: the job better be done!

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*aaaaagniiiii joytiiiii joytii agni swahaaaaa*

agni goes to niytis room to get the tape recorder he had puyt in her closet becuz rajlaxmis room is there n he can here her baatha.. but niyti thought he was doing sumthin elseeeeeeee...

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agni finds the tape recorder and is shocked to hear thiss!!

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meanwhileee..

niyti: *talking to guestsss*... all of a suden she sees none other then

( u thought it was agni rite but its nott lol)

*shouryaaaaaaaaa !! *

he calls her over to himm n gives her a bigg kiss on her cheeeeek and

shourya: niyti humari shaadi mein sif bacha hai charr din.. !!

niyti:: blushes n hugs shourya!

while hugging himmmmmmm

she seeeeeeees

yup u guessed it rite this time

**agni joyti joyti agni swaaaaahaaaaaa*

sheee leaves shourya n goes to agni

agni: niyti thum teek sara eegra (11:30) paar shourya ka saat hoo na aur thum meri ma ka pass nahi hoo na? ok

niyti: kyon?

(agni tells her the story) ( she agreees)

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DUN DUN DUN!!

its 11:30

niyti is with shourya standing by the window..

niyti: shourya mein thum sa pyaar karthi hoon

shourya: WHAT?

niyti: haa mein sif app sa pyaar karthi hoon

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Right after she said "hoon" we hear a bullet and niyti screamsssss

*SHOURYA*

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i got no sugggestionss.. soo i jus made it alongg.. hehe hope u like my part 2

please give suggestionss...!!

and tell me if ya liked itt !! 😃

and wht u wanna see more of

romance, action, etc, etc, !!

thankss

~*~$H@Z33N~*~

haillaa jannu awsumm work😳!!the 2nd prt is great 2!!👏continuu soonnn😃😉

😡

Originally posted by: miss5stars

everyone is shocked at this scream..!!

shourya runs up the stairs as fast as possiblee!!

he busts niytis door open!

(the lights comee onnn)(it was a power surge coz of a storm)

Shourya: Niyti Kiya Wah?

Niyti: (nerovus) Kuch nahin kuch bee toh nahi ...

Shourya: chillayna ki avaz pheri kasa i ?

niyti: oo yah mein na ek rat ko deek ha tha and i feel n broke the vase

shourya: r u sure jaan, do u want me to stay with u JAAN!! why JAAN!! use only NIYATI!!! NO JAAN FOR HER.. NOOO!!!

niyti: nahi .. thum jaa

shourya: kiya thum kuch chupari ho?

niyti: shourya thum jao... pleaseee

as shourya close the doorrr

*agni joyti joyti agni swaaaahaaaaa* hahahhaa.. you had to put that in right..

niyti: (swallowing her spit n nervous)

agni: thum kuch nahi bholna OK?

niyti: kissi ko be nahi bhologi

agni: ok abb mein jaa ra hoon aur thum kisi ko be batha mujhse sa bura kyon nahi hoga!

*agni joyti joyti agni swaaaahaaaaaaa*

agni leaveeeeeeessssss..

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meanwhile downstairs. shourya tells everyone niyti saw a ratt n tht she is fineee n dandy!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

partyyyy timeeeeee... pple r screamin n dancing n havin fun as the rathore nayi kulvaddhu is commingggg

everyone is staring at niyti ... shourya comes near her..

shourya: waah niyti waah thum both cupsorath lagri hoo

niyti: *blushes* aur nahi toh kiya paagal ..

shourya: u rly look sooo beautiful! !! so much flirting with shourya.. what aout agni??

vasu: arre shourya mamaan ko bhi humari beeti ki tareef karna do..

everyone is sayin niyti looooks soo pretttty...

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meanwhile

rajlaxmi: *on the phone with sum1* haa thum aaj hi ana teek sara eeghara paar (teeek 11:30 paar)

rajlaxmi:: the job better be done!

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*aaaaagniiiii joytiiiii joytii agni swahaaaaa*

agni goes to niytis room to get the tape recorder he had puyt in her closet becuz rajlaxmis room is there n he can here her baatha.. but niyti thought he was doing sumthin elseeeeeeee... DILLY!! our super HOT DECTATIVE IS BACK!!! YIPPEEE!! thanx shazeen!!!

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agni finds the tape recorder and is shocked to hear thiss!!

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meanwhileee..

niyti: *talking to guestsss*... all of a suden she sees none other then

( u thought it was agni rite but its nott lol) you big teaser...

*shouryaaaaaaaaa !! *

he calls her over to himm n gives her a bigg kiss on her cheeeeek and NO KISS FOR HIM!!.. ONLY FOR AGNI YAAR!!! SAMJA KARO!!

shourya: niyti humari shaadi mein sif bacha hai charr din.. !!

niyti:: blushes n hugs shourya!

while hugging himmmmmmm

she seeeeeeees

yup u guessed it rite this time

**agni joyti joyti agni swaaaaahaaaaaa*

sheee leaves shourya n goes to agni

agni: niyti thum teek sara eegra (11:30) paar shourya ka saat hoo na aur thum meri ma ka pass nahi hoo na? ok

niyti: kyon?

(agni tells her the story) ( she agreees) our hero.. Agni.. coooooooo chuuuuuuuuuteeeeee

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DUN DUN DUN!!

its 11:30

niyti is with shourya standing by the window..

niyti: shourya mein thum sa pyaar karthi hoon

shourya: WHAT?

niyti: haa mein sif app sa pyaar karthi hoon

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Right after she said "hoon" we hear a bullet and niyti screamsssss

*SHOURYA* WAHHH!!!!!! he is dead!! so soon.😕..hehe.alright.it's all in ur head.. all we can do it wait!!

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i got no sugggestionss.. soo i jus made it alongg.. hehe hope u like my part 2

please give suggestionss...!!

and tell me if ya liked itt !! 😃

and wht u wanna see more of

romance, action, etc, etc, !!

you want comments.. u want comments....😡.. kidding..😆.. it was awesome.. keep on going..and make it longer.. i DEMAND longer scenees btween agni and niyati (or me.. if you want me as a character yaar😳..)

thankss no no..thank you

~*~$H@Z33N~*~

SHAZEEEN..that was awesome yaar..i loved it. hehe..andyou are such a teaser.. you killed off shourya.. soo soon.. hehehe.. but let's see what happens..

great work hon...👏.. keep up the good work hon!! sorrie couldn't resist myself and just added a few comments yaar.. hoepe you dont mind.. k.. luv pri