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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: bawaswift

Good narration to the horrifying events ! πŸ‘ Loved the way you have made all the characters in their place. All horrified in a way or the other. ! Nice chapter Sagi ... liked it ! ⭐️

I laughed at Mansukani's fears.. which are more than even Mallika πŸ˜›
And Nidhi s fearing a black cat.. A cat it was ? or... 😲
Me too fearing here.. of some untoward black magic.. 🀒
Most horrified is the skeleton on the bed.. and for Mallika, its gonna say sumthing.. all are dead..

Mansukhani's reaction was the strongest. The visual image captured by his retina was conveyed to his midbrain, which promptly perceived it to be highly disturbing. The midbrain activated a section of neurons in his medulla, as a result of which some nerves supplying to his pelvis started firing actively. Out of these, a particular nerve was the hardest hit; at a result of which his detrusor contracted without warning, the sphincter relaxed and a trickle ensued down his legs.

He looked down his trousers in sheer disbelief and to his girlfriend. Her vision was locked on to the specimen on the bed.

She clutched his hand tightly as the jaw moved a little. It was as if the skull was about to say something...

Ueee.. Ma...

Chalo ji.. Ashni are also here.. n Vardarajan is safe ... hehe..

Nice depiction of how these inmates are gonna make their life easier by making it more difficult.. ! Sneezing part is the best.. All knows abt a presence of other.. but unknown to any of it.. .!

Now Ashni , the couple in love.. who dont have to do anything of that treasure.. are here.. Will be waiting to see how the things shape up next.. !

Thanks Sagi ! 😊 I am having nightmares right now... 🀒

Maine bola tha na...don't read it before going to bed?
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Posted: 11 years ago
you posted the chapter?? when??
OK. will read a bit later and get back to you. Sunday haina. So just woke up.

Good morning Sagi
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Suvika.

you posted the chapter?? when??

OK. will read a bit later and get back to you. Sunday haina. So just woke up.

Good morning Sagi

Good morning aunty. POsted it yesterday night 1.am (technically speaking aaj ki morning huyi na?) And this Bhavit Uncle read it then, abhi nightmares aa rahe hai.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: s_danger

Good morning aunty. POsted it yesterday night 1.am (technically speaking aaj ki morning huyi na?) And this Bhavit Uncle read it then, abhi nightmares aa rahe hai.



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you put the disclaimer and yet he went ahead and read it before going to sleep?? πŸ˜†
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Suvika.



🀣

you put the disclaimer and yet he went ahead and read it before going to sleep?? πŸ˜†

Aur nahi to kya? Delhi main se Psychiatrists ke phone, Pappa ko asking about an antidote to my writing. Then Pappa suggested a good eye specialist, so that Bhavit uncle theek se red main bold likha hai wo bhi padhe. Right now BHavit uncle is sedated.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Suvika.



🀣

you put the disclaimer and yet he went ahead and read it before going to sleep?? πŸ˜†

Bawa kya Sujatha... even I went and read it now! πŸ˜† Luckily I never get dreams, so it will be fine... I hope! πŸ˜‰ See, disclaimers in general are meant to be ignored!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: aardhan


😲dude...then what do i do with MY disclaimers?? πŸ˜›πŸ˜†

anyway, me going to read this around noon. i tried reading but these two gundas here are driving me crazy. not able to concentrate. noon..one gunda down for nap and second one with his papa. will read and review then. πŸ˜ƒ

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Posted: 11 years ago
Chapter 6 Review
Wow, what an end to this chapter... a skeleton on the bed that was covered but its eyes and jaw moved... a moving skeleton! πŸ˜† Nice mystery you a building up... pseudo horror, and I like it. I used to love mysteries, action, murders when I was younger, so I am enjoying this tale...

And Ashni... a cat! just a cat! I had imagined you would say something like a snake lying in a basket in the corner stirred or something... that would have freaked me out a lot, but a cat! πŸ˜† Though the description of the at, the green eyes is lovely, it all adds to the eerie feeling. So Nidhi wants to leave because of a cat! πŸ˜† And then they reach the house with Varadarajan fooling them into a false sense of security... good! πŸ‘πŸΌ

Now, who hit the detective... guess that is part of the mystery now. Is it that elusive watchman? And the thing with the door that was first locked and then somehow just opens... nice touch there, definitely added to the fear factor and goes so well with a mystery. πŸ˜› And Mallika, with all her false bravado thinking if Masukhani was better or Dadlani was hilarious even in that situation!

Now, two things, where you manage to imbibe scientific descriptions in your narrative... one where you describe Varadarajan sneezing and second Mansukhani's reaction to the skeleton is truly a 'Sagi' touch! Honestly, this is something I cannot write. I really enjoy reading them...

Now, what next... where is that watchman... and more important;y what is the mystery of the skeleton?? Very good continuation Sagi! Keep it up! πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸΌ

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Suvika.

Good for you... at least your older gunda lets the younger sleep. Does not happen in my house...older will not let the younger sleep... both badmash's will be running around all day in the weekend! No break!

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: aardhan

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you put the disclaimer and yet he went ahead and read it before going to sleep?? πŸ˜†

Bawa kya Sujatha... even I went and read it now! πŸ˜† Luckily I never get dreams, so it will be fine... I hope! πŸ˜‰ See, disclaimers in general are meant to be ignored!
Bang on. Its something like telling my sister, ":Don't do this" and she will do exactly that. Something like cigarettes being sold, packaged in paper with a print, "Smoking is injurious to health..."

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