OS: Iss raat ki...Chap 7 and epilogue pg 60

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Sagi97

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Posted: 11 years ago

#221

Hi Friends

Posting in another hour or so.

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Aardhan

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Posted: 11 years ago

#222

Hi Sagi... how are you?

Chapter 3 review...

Once again your use of adjectives to describe places or event is fabulous... the times when you described how Mallika's father woke up or the dark passage or that clandestine building where they take refuge, well done! 👏

Again Mallika as a rebellious teen if rather funny to me and he even runs away! OMG! 😆 Finally Asni make an entry and really your Nidhi is too much! She kidnapped her own husband... where sis you get that hair-brained scheme, it as funny! Really, your imaginations for Mallika and Nidhi are too good! Mansukhani-Mallika seem so far fetched but again it somehow works here... not hard to imagine them, but definitely I start laughing at that thought...

so more suspense... the two loafers and Mallika are in that make-shift building and they or rather Mallika is being traced. What is that builder's scheme...and looks like the care-taker has a secret or two to hide! And final suspense, no one has seen the owner...that's intriguing! So, builder has sent chors in a mysterious building... followed by GF Mallika, then HM couple Ashni and since Mallika is being followed, now there will be cops too...

Waiting to see what secrets lie hidden/... nice chapter Sagi!

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Aardhan

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Posted: 11 years ago

#223

Originally posted by: s_danger
Hi Friends

Posting in another hour or so.

Well, I will comment tomorrow, its late and I am about to sleep...

And sorry for the late comment this time...

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Suvika.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#224

me first...outside now...will come back and post review

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Aardhan

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Posted: 11 years ago

#225

Me second... but kal padhoongi.

About to log off, very sleepy now. I tried to read but not a single word is being registered in my brain... 🤔

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ttrocks

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Posted: 11 years ago

#226

All updates r nice Sagi!! 👏

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Suvika.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#227

Courtesy of the village gossip and horrible weather, we now have everyone in that house or headed towards that house. By everyone..

1. Mallika

2. Mansukhani

3.Dadlani

4. Ashutosh

5. Nidhi

6. Varadarajan

7. Detective

8. Ghanshyamdas

9 The guy in the boot of his car (Is it his driver?)

10. That other girl who heard Dadlani talking over the phone.

Have i covered everyone??

achcha hain achcha hain...you are building it up really well.

when is the next part??

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Bhavit Kapoor

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Posted: 11 years ago

#228

Wow Sagi, good moves ! 👏

So, the grills are of gold and it seems that every one is after the gold treasure inside the derelict house.. sound very interesting ! 😊

But will Ashni be on the same mission once they enter to take shelter here.. ?

Waiting to watch it ...

Good that all are inviting themselves here.. now even the detective is thinking of taking the voluntary retirement.. to seek for the gold.. 😛

Nicely woven.. ⭐️

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Sagi97

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Posted: 11 years ago

#229

Originally posted by: aardhan
Me second... but kal padhoongi.
About to log off, very sleepy now. I tried to read but not a single word is being registered in my brain... 🤔

Theek hai. I will wait for your review.