First of all sorry for just one liner review for chapter 8.
Overall chapter 7 and 8 are your areas of expertise in writing to me. I always loved the way you portray each character's emotion and developing relationships in words. Great work!
I have no words to express how impressive chapter 9 is! . You tried your hand at murder mystery with bang and so far proved yourself to be a great story writer at that too.👏👏
Should we start talking to potential publishers?
i don't know..lets see how the rest of this FF shapes up and then decide..what say?😳
Reception party has been described very flawlessly, full of emotions and excellent song selection. Extra praises for it. It emotes everyone's emotions so well and very appropriate to the situation.
thats what i felt when i first heard the song and went through the lyrics in google..
Anji starts walking towards the dias and Nidhi. Images keep flashing before her. An image of a 12-13 yr old mischievous Nidhi making faces and running away before she could catch her, Nidhi jumping the wall of her house to go and play cricket in the street, Nidhi pleadingly looking at Anji and extending her camera to her, Nidhi all scared and hurt with the crude comments from the boys, hiding behind Rohan, Nidhi completely hidden behind a blank doll face. She goes and hugs Nidhi tightly and places a soft kiss on her cheek:
Lines are very touchy and actually shows the depth of relation between Nidhi-Anji and Nidhi-Rohan and explains how strong of support system they have been to Nidhi during the last 10 years.
Rohan revealed' the secret' of his Chulbuli that Ashu failed to recognize or notice and she succeeded in hiding it for so long.
Isn't it strange that Ashu could not read Nidhi's love which Rohan could, Nidhi could not read Rohan's love that Ashu could! But love blindfolds you to everyone else's feelings other than the one. One person becomes center of life. Perhaps Ashu also missed Nidhi's feeling because he was in love with Aditi and that realization is very painful at this time for Him.
correct...and very well said...this is a strange triangle indeed...
What a twist and turn of the event! Beautiful transition. I was looking forward to read how you connect this love story to unfold murder mystery. Rohan's character is very essential character here to connect the story. very wisely and thoughtfully described. Attack on Nidhi? I totally misinterpreted the reason of last scene of chapter 7. Frankly expecting Armaan-Ashu confrontation before Aditi's case but you again mannage to give a 😲!
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So far I was very much in sink with the story and suspecting Aditi's dad for the murder and motive being money and power in MVM with Ashu-Aditi wedding and Aditi aware of her dad's intention supported him and would have agreed to marry. She probably never loved him. Her pregnancy might have turn out to be an huddle to fulfil his plans gave the all reason for him to miffed and during that rage in heated arguments he must have ended up killing Aditi unintentionally and to save himself he had mislead the case to suspect Ashu. But now with this new turn and someone trying to kill Nidhi, I have hard time progressing my case against the suspect... What is the motive for him to attack Nidhi? So again back to square one... Unless Nidhi knows something more about the murder and he wants to get rid of her as he is afraid that now Ashu is back and Nidhi will open up.
(she bites her lower lip to stop herself from saying all the things that she wants to tell him) kuch chahiye? (she shakes her head) then why have you stiffened up?
Am I reading too much between the lines?
Nidhi gets migraines whenever she is stressed out..and the incident in the party shocked and scared her. nothing more to it.
Again, who ever it is doesn't want Ashu to stay closer to MVM or Nidhi.
Hope we won't find there was ex of Aditi who plotted it against Ashu with motive of money and power in MVM! 😉
keep guessing...at this point anything is possible na..😳
Exceeded the length of all my previous reviews. Bottom line fantastic update with keeping all the excitement alive of this murder mistery without compromising the emotional touch of the entangled love story. Another great quality of novel writer. 👏
