FF - Pati, Patni Aur Woh!- chapter 17 on page 150 - Page 113

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sshirley thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
sorry for commeenting so late but got caught up with my own ff... actually facing aa writers' block too soon in my ff.
Wow u r such a beautiful writer sujata, i loved this chapter too without any reservations... i was initially apprehensive to read an SR written by you, but dear i m glad i read this part - this is what a SR should be in my opinion, where two people bare not only their bodies but their soul their deepest buried thoughts, aspirations and desires with each other.
"You'll probably laugh...but I feel strange...my face feels hot and bothered...and I am sure I must be the colour of a beetroot!"
Just loved this line... even in these modern times, i m a sucker for blushes
"Silly...I am not coming down with anything...I am just...I am just...oh what the heck..I feel shy...embarrassed..I am blushing!"

and she actually had to spell it out to the completely clueless ashu...this was the cherry on the cake.

And ashu's reaction.

"How do you anticipate dreams that I had given up on in this lifetime?"

haye, these 2 are surely made for each other...

"Nidhi...I am no chauvinist. Yet, somewhere deep within, I think there is a traditional man in me. It is probably cheesy even. But every time I heard Mukesh croon, I used to fantasise that there would come a moment in my life just like this!"

He started singing in his deep voice.

Suhaag raat hain ghoonghat utha raha hoon main

Suhaag raat hain ghoonghat utha raha hoon main

Simat rahi hai tu sharma ke apni baahon mein

Simat rahi hai tu sharma ke apni baahon mein

Kabhi kabhi mere dil mein khayaal aata hai

Ki jaise tu mujhe chaahegi umr bhar yoohin

Uthegi meri taraf pyaar ki nazar yoohi

Oh goodness...this is the ultimate SR song imo. in fact i was thinking of a way to include this on Ashni's SR in my ff... chalo good in a way that u used it...ab mujhe apna dimaag nahi kharab karna padega...frankly, their SR is so far awa in my ff but already break into a sweat when think i have to write SR.

"You are my dream come to life and you make even long buried dreams come to life...even dreams that I had never dreamt...don't ever leave me, Nidhi..I don't think there would be breath left in my body to raise a monument to our love!"

just loved this line

"I am no great believer in tradition or rituals. I think our love supersedes all of this. And yet, it suddenly feels so different. As if some unknown dimension has been added to make our feelings even keener! This intimacy is not new and yet suddenly, it feels so. I don't know how and I don't know why but it feels like we are coming together in a whole new way today!"

These lines are so true...we may claim that we are very modern or that we dont believe in rituals and traditions...but there seeped deep into our subconscious and they do make a huge impact.

Ashutosh moved back to kiss her tenderly on her maang that he had filled with vermillion just a few hours ago. He picked up the locket on her chain and touched it to his forehead and then his lips. He did the same to the ring that bore his name.

Simply loved this begining of their touching...

"If I flaunt, then so do you. I am confident enough of myself, Ashutosh. I do not feel branded or chained. These are symbols that I sport with pride for they do not make me less than who I am. Yes, I admit without reservation that I am yours just as you are mine, If you have power over me, then so do I. This is no duel!"

I am totally fida over these dialogues...dont have any other words to describe

Clothes seemed to dissolve rather than being torn off in a hurry. It was all so seamless.

Loved this line...too good

What else can i say? loved the SR to the core...esp, nids dreaming abt their kid...
Armaan is such a darling...love him in every ff.

and the way they easily settled into a routine - excellent piece of writing

Coming to the question u asked aftr ch-14, no they did not do anything wrong at all. AshMal never had a marriage at all, or maybe it was a marriage in the begining... but as time went, become more of an arrangement based on convenience, and even that arrangement had lost its sanctitty the momenr ashu asked for divorce and mallu refused. In essense mallu has become the 'woh'

Finally coming to the latest discussion, yes SK ia S**y. As for mb, well i reserve my comment, but yes sk is too good - can make any woman go weak in her knees
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Posted: 12 years ago
Sujatha, a very beautiful chapter. Cliffhanger... waiting for the next chapter.

Agree with the entire forum... Sharad is very HOT.

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Posted: 12 years ago
Sujatha ji this chapter was indeed a masterpiece...👏👏👏
It was full of pure n sincere love n emotions..❤️..😳😳
SR was how it should have been...😳😳
The quality of ur work never fails to mesmerize me...👏👏👏
I loved it so so much...😃
It just doesnt get any better than this...👍🏼
SUPERB...⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Cliffhanger...Plzzz bring us out of misery really soon...😲
Will be waiting...😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
Sujatha Di!!! I was so happy to see the update from you :) The updates are rocking as usual.. you could give the CV's a run for their money in no time! But I have something to tell you.. Even Mother Teresa had her critics Di.. pls never let anybody's opinions cloud your insights! We love you.. and for people who love you, you'll always be the same! Sorry for the late philosophical thoughts.. was off the forum myself! Blame it on my hectic work schedules and the holiday season :( But now I am back and waiting for your update!

love ya
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Posted: 12 years ago
@shirley

thank you for taking the time to savour and react in such a detailed fashion...I am truly humbled 😳..

Like I told you earlier, this relationship began as an incredibly overpowering physical attraction. They had to break out of the bounds of social convention, morality and just about everything to go forward in their relationship. It was an act of rebellion. The physicality of the act acquired great significance there. As a result, I dwelt elaborately on the same. Even then, it was about communication, The sheer intensity of their feelings, their desperation to be with each other, their need to please each other to the extreme, the delight they found in each other - It was non-verbal communication.

in contrast, what happened in this chapter was an almost spiritual experience. Their desperation had been toned down by the fact that they were now surer of each other, The divine blessing seemed like a guarantee of sorts for the future, From the physical, they moved on to the emotional and the spiritual realm.

as a writer, I let my characters and their emotions guide me. They wanted a spiritual and an emotional union this time and so, I gave it to them.

On Sharad, I have already said enough. I have nothing against MB. He is a good actor and have liked him in Sooraj Barjatya's films. However, his Ashutosh was rather unidimensional and somewhat stuffy, At least that is what I felt. With Sharad, Ashtuosh has acquired a lot of shades. And, of course, it helps that he is seriously hawwt 😳
Edited by Sujatha.rao - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: hilarious44

Sujatha ji this chapter was indeed a masterpiece...👏👏👏

It was full of pure n sincere love n emotions..❤️..😳😳
SR was how it should have been...😳😳
The quality of ur work never fails to mesmerize me...👏👏👏
I loved it so so much...😃
It just doesnt get any better than this...👍🏼
SUPERB...⭐️
Cliffhanger...Plzzz bring us out of misery really soon...😲
Will be waiting...😃


Thank you Fatimah 😳

like I told Suja, they are now a respectable married couple,,..so I can't write wild encounters anymore 😉

but yes, I wanted to focus on the emotional and spiritual aspect to the experience 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Poolicious

Sujatha Di!!! I was so happy to see the update from you :) The updates are rocking as usual.. you could give the CV's a run for their money in no time! But I have something to tell you.. Even Mother Teresa had her critics Di.. pls never let anybody's opinions cloud your insights! We love you.. and for people who love you, you'll always be the same! Sorry for the late philosophical thoughts.. was off the forum myself! Blame it on my hectic work schedules and the holiday season :( But now I am back and waiting for your update!
love ya


thank you Pooja 😳

And no, I don't let people cloud my insights,,.nor am I looking for approval...all I wanted was mutual respect...in the absence of which, I have chosen to keep my insights to myself and confine myself to this space...but thanks for the reassurance...and love you too!
Edited by Sujatha.rao - 12 years ago
jyothi_cool thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey awesome fic loved the way you have delt with the topic
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: SSA777

Sujatha, a very beautiful chapter. Cliffhanger... waiting for the next chapter.


Agree with the entire forum... Sharad is very HOT.


Thank you Sha 😳

Btw, only aunties find Sharad hot or so we have been informed 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool

Hey awesome fic loved the way you have delt with the topic


Thank you Jyothi 😳

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