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Originally posted by: Blushsarika

Lovely post Mudra ,
here is my instant Khichdi :-

On there first wedding Night , Ashu gone to hospital to attend some emergency case and Nidhi waiting for him.

Khaali baithe baithe Ashu ka intezaar karte karte suddenly Nidhi got serious and worried.

Nidhi talking to herself - maine iske baare me pehle kyu nahi socha.

At the same time Ashu Entered and heard her.

Ashu - pehle kya nahin socha Nidhi
Nidhi Ashu ko dekhte hi harbada gayi
Nidhi - Aap Aa gaye , surgery kaisi thi
she was still talking in harbarahat
Ashu - Nidhi kya hua tumhe , tum theek toh ho
Nidhi - mujhe kya hua , kuch bhi toh nahin , Aap jaakar change kar legiye.
Ashu - Are you sure
Nidhi - haan
Ashu - Ok
Ashu goes to Washroom , After he was gone , nidhi picked up her phone and called to Anjie at 3 am in the night
Nidhi - Anjie phone utha...
She did not pick up , Nidhi tried again , this time Anjie took up the call.
Anjie - Nidhi itni raat me phone kyu kiya , koi problem toh nahi hai.
Nidhi - Anjie tu mujhe bolne degi tab toh mai bataungi
Anjie - Aachcha bata
Nidhi - Anjie Dr. Ashutosh ne mujhe kal se hospital join karne ko kaha hai
Anjie - toh isme problem kya hai tu bhi toh apni internship poori karna cahati hai
Nidhi - Anjie tu samajh nahi rahi , bahut badi problem hai isme .
Anjie - yaar tu kis problem ki baat kar rahi hai , mujhe toh koi problem nahin dikh rahi , waise bhi tu ab KGH ke Dean ki Biwi hai , teri toh aish hai Nidhi.
Nidhi - yehi toh sabse badi problem hai .
Anjie - kya problem hai Nidhi
Anjie got irritated this time , she was in half sleep

Nidhi - Anjie problem ye hai ki Hospital jane ke baad waha par sab mujhe Mrs. Hardstone kahenge.
Anjie - What ? She could not control her laughter.
Nidhi - Anjie tujhe kya ho gaya hai , mai itni badi problem me hu aur tu has rahi hai.
Suddenly she heard someone laughing from behind , she turned around , Ashu was standing there laughing . She switched off her phone .
Ashu was laughing uncontrollably
Nidhi realised he heard them
Nidhi gusse me - isme hasne ki kya baat hai
Ashu -Nidhi is problem ke baare me apko mujhse sadi karne se pehle sochna tha
Nidhi - agar aap hospital me itne strict nahi hote toh ye problem hi nahi Aati
Ashu - but nidhi you loved me for what I am
Nidhi - ye toh sahi hai

Ashu closed her in his arms seeing her cute face

This is really really cute..just like saarika.

and thank you for giving us this cute scene...
we all love to see certain small bits... but do not have clue about how to write the entire scene or story...

Thanks once again

@ Mudra - thank you so much for appreciation .
Yes we wanted to see some cute moments in the show , thanks for making this post .

@Dev,
nice little suspense... please finish it

Originally posted by: mudraswathi

@Dev,
nice little suspense... please finish it

aaw u realy lyk it mam.thnx u so much 4 appreciation! Yup wil finish it anyhow! Hehe

Guys m again giving a try to writing... Although I feel it is not my cup of tea, but still giving it a chance.. It has gone a bit longer, n m myself not happy wid the continuity, still posting it... Plz let me know, where I went wrong...

Ashutosh was highly engrossed in discussing a case with the junior doctors, when the door of his cabin got flung open. It was Dr. Ranganath with a worried face. R: 'M sorry sir to interrupt u so abruptly. I got a call from the police station, that a lady is found wounded due to an accident, n has been identified to b Dr.(Mrs.) Nidhi Ashutosh Mathur, n is on the way to KGH. They say, its a severe head injury.
Ashutosh could hardly stand up from his chair n the file in his hand slipped out to fall on his table. He got so dumbstuck for a few minutes that he had to b shaken out of his shock.
He rushed out of his cabin,along with others to the entry gate,to see if they had arrived. As soon as he reached the gate, he saw the stretcher hurrying in. His eyes quickly recognized nidhi. Her face becoming pale n the beautiful yellow sari she was wearing, no longer looked yellow, with the blood stains all over.
He ran to her, looked at her n immidiately ordered for a CT Scan, n an OT to be done ready.
He went along wid nidhi, she was swinging in a conscious n subconscious state. She held his hand saying 'Dr. Ashutosh, I dont wanna die, I wanna live a bit more longer. Wanna live 4 u, for us, for the people around us. I wanna live a complete life, giving birth to our children. Dr. Ashutosh, please save me. I dint wanna die so soon'.
Ashutosh was already shattered seeing her in such a state, n to top on it, Nidhi speaking such life dreading words. It was becoming a hard to hardest task 4 him to control his tears, seeing his love of life in such a condition.
A: ' main bhagwan nahi hu nidhi, lekin phir bhi, main tumhe kuch nahi hone doonga... I promise... Trust me...

Till then the anesthesia had started working on her n now was calming her down so as to start with the surgery. Ashutosh went to his cabin to complete the formalities as her guardian, for nidhi's admission in the hospital. His hands shaking heavily due to nervousness. He hadnt felt such nervous even for his first surgery. He felt as if he is playing wid his own life... He was getting ready to give the toughest test of his life as a doctor, to work on the body of his beloved...
Everytime he did a surgery earlier, he trusted his collegues to do their specialised work, or even the end sewing work, he trusted his juniors to do the favours... But today, he made everythin done, infront of his eyes...not becoz he dint trusted them, but coz, he juz wanted to make sure, he doesnt leaves a single chance for anything to go wrong with nidhi... He did the surgery n even sew the endings on his own...
After the surgery, he went out to see both his n her family standing out,wid worried faces. He assured them of the successful surgery, n asked them to return home as she wud not b conscious for hours now.
He went into his cabin, closed his eyes n silently kept praying for her recovery. Ashutosh kept checking her after every half an hour... After few hours, the nurse informed him of her being conscious. He ran in towards her bed in the ICU. She looked pale, due to heavy blood loss, n the extreme pain she was in. After checking on her n being assured of her recovery, he sat down on the chair beside her. He held her hand and kissed it so gently, as if it is the most fragile thing he could ever see.

Nidhi finally tried speaking up ' Thankyou so much Dr. Ashutosh, u saved me.' Ashutosh close her mouth with his finger,' shush! Dont talk nidhi... N please stop insulting my love honey!!! I wasnt doing any favours dear... It was a surgery, had it been even giving my own life to u, that too I wud have happily given u...
U know Nidhi, it was the toughest of all the surgeries I have done so far...'

N: ' ya, I know, thats y in the movie 'Munnabhai MBBS', Dr. Asthana told, that dont sympathise with ur patient, or it would b the toughest task 4 u to work on it.'
A: ' What??? Nidhi u r unbelievable!!! Even in the extremes of pain, u seem to b remembering movies n its scenes? ( nidhi slightly laughs on it). Hmmm... So what were u saying, before the surgery.. U wanna give birth to our children? Hmmm...?

Before nidhi could react, DB came in running in. DB:' what? Nidhi. Meri bachhi, u gonna have children? When? Am I becoming a Par Dadi??? ' nidhi with a mock anger said 'DB, not again please'... As everybody else smiles...




Oh finally I made it... People, if u dont like it, please let me know where I went wrong... Ok...