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Posted: 13 years ago
#21
Sujatha...you and your innuendos!!! agar iss mein 5% bhi monday ko dikhade na...mein toh udne lagoongi...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome loved it to core thank you so much...par dil mange more one more please at Angies sangeet please...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Suja, isn't that the whole point...we know they are not likely to show anything like this...so we make up our own stories...you guys are going the whole hog with a fresh approach, taking off from a particular point in the story...I am just trying to give my own flavour to certain points in the story...twisting it my way to see at least in my head what i would like to see on the show!

Shalini...baap re...one more and that too, the sangeet...give me some time...will try and put something together tomorrow...!
Edited by Sujatha.rao - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sujatha.rao

I absently run the brush through my still damp hair even as Dadi Bua screeches into my ear!

"Tu kahaan chali gayi, meri bacchii...kya hogaya tujhe...yahaan sangeet bas shuru honewali hai aur tera ata pata nahi...aur tera doctor...uska toh main kya karoon...tere Baba ne toh usko do teen baar phone bhi kar chuke hain...par woh phone utaye tab na...kaisa damad paya hai humne!"

"Dadi Bua, chup hojayiye...woh mere saath hi hain...hum donon bas abhi wahan aarahe hain!

I interrupt before she can continue her diatribe against my man!

" Phir phone kyun nahi utaraha hai woh...aur tu ne bhi abhi utayi...kar kya rahe te tum dono? "

My eyes involuntarily look towards the bed with its tangled sheets at that last question and I feel a heavy blush coming on!

"Bas ready ho rahe te, Dadi bua...aur kuch nahi...aur woh phone bhi silent pe ta...isliye dekha nahi...ab aap phone rakhiye...hum bas nikal rahe hain...10-15 minute mei pohanch jayenge!"

I cut the line and look up to see him standing at the doorway to the restroom, looking at me through the mirror...

He looks so delicious that I could practically eat him! I blush harder when I think that we had just taken the edge off that hunger hardly a while ago. He looks at me and raises an eyebrow and asks...

"Ready ho rahe te?"

I wrinkle my nose at him.

"To phir sach bolna chahiye ta?"

I look meaningfully at the bed and this time it is his turn to blush.

He walks towards me, picks up the brush from the dresser and starts running it through my hair...

Such a simple gesture and yet, the way he looks at me as he does it makes it seem so sensual..I grab the brush from him...

"Hum already bohot late hain...Anji toh aaj zaroor mujhe maarne wali hain..."

He looks at me innocently.

"Maine toh mana kiya ta...tu ne hi zabardasti..!"

I deliver a mock punch to his chest and he laughs.

We had lost all sense of time, space and occasion. The peace we had found in each other's arms had given way to a raging hunger, a need to replenish our vows in the most basic way possible. We could not have gone without. It was fast and furious for we were racing against time as well. It felt borderline illicit almost and, to be honest, there was a whole new thrill. We were doing something we had no business doing, for there were people waiting for us. But, our mutual passion just could not wait and would not let us out of its clutches unless we had fed it just a bit at least.


When I came out of it, I discovered that we had lost a good twenty minutes and were now left with less than half an hour to get ready and reach Anjie's place. After that it had been a mad rush. We had considered a joint shower to save time but realized that it would be an exercise in futility. I had gone first since I needed more time to get ready.

I have already done my face and all that remains is my necklace. I pick it up and am struggling to fasten it around my neck when he places his hands over mine. I withdraw my hands and allow him to do the honours. God, what sensitive fingers he has! They could turn a simple task into sensual torture.

"I missed you like crazy last night. I was going out of my mind at the hospital today. Aisa kabhi nahi hua ki main apne kaam pe dhyaan nahi de paaya...but you wicked witch...its like you've cast a spell on me...jaise mere dimag ki andar ghus gayi ho..I just wanted to barge into your home and carry you away in my arms and to hell with your family!"

" Aapko aana chahiye ta...unhe bhi toh pata chale..unke damad jinhe woh log bohot shareef samajte hain woh kitne besharam hai "

"Accha...agar aata toh phir yeh bhi karta un sab ke saamnee..!"

He presses his lips to my shoulder and trails them up my neck and nips it fairly sharply.

I gasp but the sound is drowned out by the ringing of the phone. Saved by the bell! It is Anji and she is breathing fire!

"Anji, hum bas..."

"Tujhse baat nahi karni hai mujhe...jijaji ko phone do.."

I silently give him the phone and walk around the room, picking up my clutch and putting the clothes that we had strewn all over the room into the basket.

" Anji, apne jijai pe bharosa hain na...toh just give me ten minutes and we will be there with you...and I promise hum poore sham tere aur Ranganath ke saath hi rahenge...aaj ke sham sirf tum donon ke naam ...aur ek baat...maine tumhare liye aaj kuch karne wala hoon jo maine kisi aur ke liye kiya nahin...you just wait and watch...okay, toh ab phone rakho aur humein nikalne do...bye saali saheba..!

I shake my head at the ease with which he has defused the bomb and take a quick peek at the mirror one last time before we can leave. He is standing behind me as he runs the brush through his hair.

Just as I am about to turn around, my eyes catch something that has me closing my eyes in despair.

"Shit man, main toh margayi!"

"Kya hua"

I quickly pick up the concealer and cover the fresh love bite on my neck. He smiles naughtily as says...

"Rehne do na...tumhe batana ta na tere family ko ki main kitna besharam hoon!"

"Achcha...thodi der aur intezar kijiye.,..main aapko dikhati hoon ki main kitni besharam hoon!"

"I can't wait!"

We laugh together and walk out of the room with our arms around each other. A loving family needs and waits us!



thank you for this continuation Sujatha. this was wonderful. If i hadnt been married for 24 yrs already, I'd be getting ideas.😳
i think you should continue with your version for the duration of the weekend.😊
Edited by Libra - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hi Sujatha,

I owe you a detailed reply but was caught on the mad Olympics' traffic.. but that was not at all grumbling as blissfully I have engrossed my self in your 3 back to back updates...

about first two parts:

I liked your take very well as, Ashutosh had that fear of going orphan again... which was very much evident from his past... He distanced him self from everybody when BB left him...and was longing for the real soul touching love... Now, even with a smallest possible instigation, again that dirty and ugly animal is raising its head..

I didnot consider him as a head strong or MCP as many described for not making the first move... he has this smallest insecurity still living inside him... and though he was sharp with words on Nidhi's splurge... more than the money she had spent, I very much agree with him, the concern he had about the worth of the money...

and Nidhi is a child like woman... she is not childish... child like is more adorable... she knows him very well... she felt his emotional need to be with her... and you have described it all very well...

and about the third part, I liked it because... this is an honest statement I am making...and purely my POV... many times while describing the intimate scenes in the name of passion or romance they tend to become more direct ... and that makes the entire scene 'hot'.. and I could never relish that remotely even... here you ahve cleverly converted the entire scene as seen from a third eye...the same passion and romance was subtle yet visible...

and yes.. many times this is a natural and simple gesture between the couple to convey each other.. we are together...

loved them thoroughly... please write more..👏


Edited by mudraswathi - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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QUOTE=shalini.malik72]awesome loved it to core thank you so much...par dil mange more one more please at Angies sangeet please...


yes please, i second that. we want more please 😃
Edited by Libra - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thank you, Anu...have promised Shalini the sangeet...am not too great at detail but will give it a shot 😊

Mudra, am so glad I could make your ordeal in the traffic bearable...and am really glad that you liked what you read...

Yes, I too don't see Ashutosh as arrogant or an MCP...he is still finding his way when it comes to relationships..and the fear of abandonment is still strong...it is going to take a long time before he starts feeling fully secure and confident of Nidhi's affections...Nidhi has chosen to fall in love with a complex man...this relationship will take a lot more from her than a normal relationship might have...she may have to give a lot more to begin with...but am sure she alone knows what she gets in return...it is something that makes every giving in on her part worth it...reason why she keeps doing it again and again...

On the intimacy part, I feel that even as a writer I cannot cross certain invisible boundaries...for me, my characters are flesh and blood and I cannot intrude into their personal space beyond the bounds of decency...we want to be part of their celebration of love...not feel like voyeurists...so I always resort to innuendo...glad you liked it 😊

I think what I have written can actually be shown on a 11 o clock show with ease...!
Edited by Sujatha.rao - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow!!! Great post! Enjoyed every part. Looking forward to the next part. Thanks for making our weekend.👏

Yes, this can be shown at the 11:00 pm slot. I wish they would.

Edited by SSA777 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#29
Thank u SSA777 and Ava...glad u liked what u read!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow sujata di ... That was quite sizzling... 😳And It was brilliantly written👏

Loved the first two parts as well... U showcased their emotions sooo well... It was a treat to
Read this OS😃

Cant wait to read more😊 plzzz do PM me when u update 😆

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