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Posted: 13 years ago
Misssh the much promised review ... sorry for delay sweetie...

Hehe mish here am back with my review part 9 very close to my heart... i just love every feeling that it evokes. The much awaited meeting, the face a face is here. The part also allows for the pent up feelings to come out loud and clear.

Hmm one could almost argue that ashu agreeing to the talk is kimet at work... so it seems as we watch the story unfold. The easy banter between A and M serves a good purpose as preparing the audience and Ashu about what's gone happen.

And then the voice... what Ashu had been longing and dreading...just when he thought he was safe nids comes in. The way you present it nice... you can almost feel the tension for him and the shock for her. Mathew serves as a good buffer here... both are fighting for composure in their own way and Doc Matthew here business as usual introducing and praising,

This post-lunch bhi meri duty nahin hai. Hints that there is more in store for these two and now there will be time for letting feelings out.

Nice build up of the tension as they go to the restaurant... his "I am sorry" is bound to elicit a myriad of feelings... sorry what for... for coming here... not telling her... when finally all starts coming out the confusion of ashu is endearing to me... he is so helpless here [MB would have been brilliant here... ]

"Nidhi please!" Ashutosh pleaded with her. He had no answers to her questions.

This continues to build things up... he is so clueless about it all... i feel it is a mixture of not knowing and fearing... fearing that he might break if he speaks and as we know its just delaying the moment.

The joke about pay hike is just to bring calm before the tempest i should say. And wow i would say that tempest sure unleashed all the feelings...

"Mujhse bahut naaraaz ho Nidhi?" Ashutosh asked her after they reached her home.

"Aapse naraaz ho kar kissi ka kya kar loongi main," Nidhi replied sadly.

"I want you to move on Nidhi. I want you to be happy."

Tears came to Nidhi's eyes when he said that.

"Nidhi..."

"Dr. Ashutosh. Duniya mein do log hain jinse main bahut pyaar karti hoon. Aur itni khushkismat hoon ki won do log bhi mujhse bahut pyaar karte hain. Hamesha meri bhalai ki sochte hain. Lekin phir bhi - woh dono jo karte hain, usse main khush rahne ke jagah hurt hi ho jati hoon. Unke intention mein to koi burai nahin hai. Main unse shikayat nahin kar sakti. To mujhme hi kuchh galat hoga na? Mujhme hi koi kami hogi ki mere aas paas itna pyaar hote hue bhi main khush nahin hoon. Bataiye na Dr. Ashutosh? Kya galat hai mujhme? Baba bhi meri bhalai chahte hain, aap bhi. Lekin phir bhi main khush kyon nahin hoon?" Tears were flowing out of her eyes staining her cheeks.

You have to be insensitive not to have some kind of display of emotions here... this is superbly executed... all since the start was gone lead to that face. a face. One feels for both here... now in the privacy of her home the masks can come down. Reminded me of the previous part.. when she comes in his office. The break down had to happened... she has been strong so far... but seeing him and my guess the fact that he did not tell he was coming broke her down...one hand her love the other baba and his wish to see her married. When you look at things from her sight one can say that he has been selfish...in his bid to protect her he is hurting her more.

Her outburst has been the protective dam she had built being shattered... she has reached the end and does not know what to do. As much as we feel for nids Ashu is not far behind... his fears are combined with guilt and this time clearly not because of society ya baba but simply because by his actions he has ignored her feelings...

Nidhi here is unstoppable... the damn has broken and she out to reveal all... you feel her frustration but more her pain... almost she questions why should she have to suffer when all that she wants is for the men of her life to allow her to be.

Nids comments about him cutting the phone are simply mindblowing... she lets it all go... her pain is beautifully expressed.

This explosion was a much needed happening for the events to go forward and gooosh i wish they could have shown sth smilar in KTLK before MB left. Why was it needed simply because ashu needed that eye opener.. and maaan the new Ashu is so yummy... he clearly now is ready to assume his part in the relationship...his demeanour and actions clearly show that now he will be in control... nids need not be on the lookout for him, he will protect her, care for her now.

The way he discovers how something is wrong very nicely executed. In a way he has shed his inhibitions and now is having a good look at her.

"Nidhi! Hum dono doctors hain. Cut that crap."

Ohhh love the tone of authority... starting to hint at change... she does not have to hide. I could visualise the whole thing. Love the way you make her reveal whats wrong... the shyness is just awww and from then you see the other ashu starting to emerge more.He takes control and is not gone let go till her knows

"You fool. Can't you see it is not normal, then?

You fool!!!! Anger as a means to hide his feelings... at the same time there is the undertone of disbelief how could she have been careless.

Absolutely loves the way he takes control... calms her fears, cancelling the ticket another hint that now he will be there for her...

"I hate you for doing this Nidhi. Tumne mujhse waada kiya tha ki tum apni health ka khayaal rakhogi.

Goosebumps moment... anger... fear... frustration all enfolded in one sentence... The confirmation of the diagnosis is well developed... ashu knows he has to be strong and for that he gets back in the doctor mode. Loves the way he takes control of things now.

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I think my Rehman analogy applies here as well. The confirmation of the tumour quickens the confrontation between past and present... past being baba and present being ashu now.

One feels for nids when she calls out for ashu, and more than anything we have to appreciate anji's logic here, she has finally seen beneath the mask and realises the pain that nids is having is not just related to tumour but her longing for ashu aswell.

Your Shyama is the exact copy for the serial wala... i like both for their ability to see things as they are.

The tete a tete ASHNI is simply awww... am seriously not getting the English translation but there is something in French that goes "force tranquille" i guess that would be tranquil force!!! And that is what ashu is now... he is here for her... you have to love the way he reads her right... and sets about to soothe her.

The outside scene is interesting as well... shyama applying her logic is good...giving them the time they need and i like Anji as well here very much assured.

I really like the face a face baba ashu... there might have been differences but they are here for the one same person and am glad that baba accepts his presence with out over reacting . The confidence of ashu is nicely depicted as he answers things in a direct way.

The doctor's shocker... once again here kudos for your ashu. He wonderfully assumes the role of the comforter/doctor and keeps his feelings under wraps.

Such an aww scene when he brings tea... that shows yet another facet of the new ashu.. he has come to terms with his feelings and his actions show it he is here not just for nids but her family as well.

she was grateful and it showed in her eyes. He was taking care of her as well as her family. Ashutosh blinked in assurance that he was in control and she smiled.

That shows the progress both ways...he is now showing her that he is there she should not worry and she is starting to feel soothed by his presence.

The way the two complemented each other could not have escaped hawked eyed Shyama. That shows in their conversation wid baba. Love the systematic approach of how they bring the fact that the feelings between ASHNI had not stopped.And way to go for anji... she shows how a true friend she is. And finally the truth has to hit home with baba accepting that he had misread their feelings and the depth of the emotion that Ashu and Nidhi shared. But will it be too late to accept it?

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To take your own words I hate you for doing this...mish two consecutive cliff-hanger updates. But never mind we forgive you as Armaan would say.

The tete a tete alone in the room... awww nicely executed... love the way in which the intimacy between the two is progressing. That's ashu for you he is not a man of many words but haila the look and actions awww. The scene reminds me a tad of HH when Ashu was sick.

Nidhi did not let him see that she had tears in her eyes as she saw him doing all this. She quietly wiped the tears, as he lied down on the sofa.

Another twist awaiting... in a way here nids adopts ashu's way keeping to helself and her pain is even more poignant as she is enjoying his presence at a time when she is unwell where her insecurities and fear are surfacing.

Baba's acceptance very poignant, when he finally does the right thing she does not at least in her mind is not worthy of it. Baba;s emotion very nicely expressed, the guilt of having deprived Nidhi of a relationship that should have been hers, and not accepting the depth of their feelings.

Again shyama proves to be a good judge and realises that they should talk to ashu and Anji as the faithful friend decides to take the lead.

Ashu Mathew chat... very nicely executed, it is a case of mutual exchange of information. Mathew walking ashu through the life of nids at AIIMS and indirectly ashu opening up about nids. In an innocent way.. Mathew pushes the right buttons but love the way ashu skirts past his queries.

OHHH i love ashu Anji convo.

"Kya mere jawaab se koi farq padega?"

He might have come to terms wid his and nids equation but our good doc is weary of the world.and this shows here.

The convo is nicely executed in the sense that ashu and anji don't hide behind niceities.

"Nonsense!" Ashutosh said emphatically, "Utter nonsense. Ye baat uske dimaag mein kisne daali?"

Our hero... you have to love him here... kudos girl for that . By referring to society anji brings back another nemesis that haunted their relationship... society ... log ...before it was about the age and now it is bound to be about nids kami... and of course we can trust you and our ashu to do the right thing...

On a final note... love the way things are shaping up... looking forward for how our good doc is gone drum in some home truth to nids as to how she could have thought that the op would change something in his feelings...

SO writer saheba looking forward for a dhamal exchange between Ashni and looking forward to see him caring for her post the op.

Yeh dil definitely mange more

Hugs

Shari😉 [who is lost somewhere in dk/ashni /mb land]
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Posted: 13 years ago
Thank you everyone for your lovely comments and reviews. My individual replies are still lagging behind. But they will come.

Meanwhile, I think I owe you an update for being such wonderful readers. So, posting shortly.

This is going to be 2nd last part. The next one will conclude the story. And although a lot of Ashu-Nids talk is going to happen in this one, do look out for last part for something that is my favourite! 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
Continued from Part 11

Part 12

"Tum comfortable ho na Nidhi? Dar to nahin rahi?" Ashutosh asked her. The operation was scheduled for that evening.

Nidhi smiled and nodded in negative.

"Aur..." Ashutosh started speaking again, but hesitated and stopped. He wasn't sure how to bring the matter up with her.

"Aur?"

"Aur Nidhi. Tum ye baat dhyaan mein rakhna ki ye opeation sirf ek medical problem door karne ka tareeka hai. Iske baad tumhari problem solve ho jayegi. Isse aur kuchh nahin badlega. Isse tum nahin badlogi Nidhi."

"Aap kya kah rahe hain, meri samajh mein nahin aa raha hai," Nidhi had no clue of where Ashutosh was coming from. She didn't know that Anji had spoken to him.

"Nidhi,"Ashutosh suddenly went to her and held her hands, "Nidhi. You are a wonderful woman. The most wonderful woman in the world. Aur jo bhi ladka tumhari zindagi mein aayega, woh bahut khushkismat hoga. Ye ek fact hai, aur ye kabhi nahin badlega. Tum kabhi bhi ye mat samajhna ki is operation ki wajah se tumhari zindagi ruk gayi hai. Tum... tum meri baat samajh rahi ho na?"

"Ye ek doctor ki rationality bol rahi hai Dr. Ashutosh," Nidhi replied sadly, "Logon ki khushiyan, unki wishes hamesha itni rational nahin ho sakti. Aur mujhe nahin lagta ki hamein khud ko itna rational banana chahiye, ya doosron se itni rationality expect karni chahiye ki woh hamare aur unke gale ki phaans ban jaye. Main kissi se ye expect nahin karti. Khud se bhi nahin. Kissi aur se bhi nahin. Aapse bhi nahin."

"Ye nainsaafi hai Nidhi. Tum apni rationality ki defintion mujh par bhi thop rahi ho. Aur waise bhi - agar khushiya irrational hoti hain, to who sabki ek jaisi to nahin ho sakti na? Warna to jismein sabki khushiyan ho, use hi rational maana jayega. Lekin... unfortunately main ye prove nahin kar sakta ki jin khushiyon ki, aur wishes ki tum baat kar rahi ho, meri wishes unke comparison mein kitni irrational hain. Mere haath bandhe hue hain aur... Oh God! Main ye kya kar raha hoon," Ashutosh noticed that Nidhi was crying. He wiped her tears, "Ro mat Nidhi. Don't work yourself up like this. Aise operation se pahle nahin... Aur... Nidhi main Baba se phir baat karoonga. Main na to khud bardasht kar sakta hoon, na hi tumhein aur aise ghutate hue dekh sakta hoon. Aur... woh maan jayenge Nidhi. Woh bhi to tumse pyaar karte hain. Kuchh aur nahin to main unse bheekh maangoonga apni khushiyon ki, tumhari khushiyon ki..."

"Bas Dr. Ashutosh," Nidhi interrupted, "Uski zaroorat nahin hai. Baba to maan gaye hain..."

"What?" Ashutosh was taken aback, "Baba... maan gaye hain... To tumne mujhe bataya kyon nahin? How could you not tell me Nidhi?"

"Baba aapse baat karna chahte the. Maine hi mana kiya tha."

"Tumne mana kiya tha? Kyon? Oh God! Nidhi... You thought... Tumhein laga ki tum pregnant nahin ho sakti, is wajah se main tumse pyaar karna chhod doonga. Tum itni bewkoof ho kya? That was really bad, and very cruel of your Dr. Nidhi Verma..."

"Dr. Ashutosh, please," Nidhi tried to control his excitement, "Aise jaldbaazi mein decision mat lijiye. Ek baar future ke baare mein soch lijiye. Ye itna trivial bhi nahin hai."

"You know what Nidhi. You have been such a fool ki ab main tumse poochhoonga bhi nahin ki tum mujhse shaadi karogi ya nahin. Mera wash chalta to abhi tumse zabardasti shaadi kar leta aur is operation ke consent papers par khud sign karta. Abhi nahin kar sakta lekin jaise hi tum recover karogi... Nahin... Ek shabd aur nahin. Koi bakwaas nahin sunni hai mujhe tumhari," he stopped her when she made to say something, "Itni saari baatein samajhti ho tum mere baare mein. Lekin kabhi tumhein ye realize nahin hua ki mujhse behtar ye koi nahin jaan sakta ki rishte khoon se nahin, pyaar se bante hain. Main khud adopted hoon Nidhi. Tumhein kabhi ye realize nahin hua ki main bachche adopt karna chahunga. Aur in sabse pahle... tumhein ye realize nahin hua Nidhi ki agar tum mujhe mil sakti ho to mujhe duniya mein kissi aur cheez ki koi parwaah nahin hai. Agar tumhari is ek medical problem ki wajah se tum mujhe mil gayi, to main is problem ke liye oopar waale ko thanks kahna chahta hoon. Jo bhi hua, bahut achcha hua. Bahut hi achchha hua..."

Nidhi let go of herself and leaned on him for a hug. He happily obliged her and embraced her tightly. They lost themselves in each other's arms until Nidhi stepped back and said jokingly, "Operation ke pahle mera BP badh gaya to achchha nahin hoga Dr. Ashutosh."

Ashutosh laughed slighlty, "Yes. You have been trained well Dr. Nidhi Verma."

They were still holding hands and laughing, when Anji entered, "Nidhi. Ye kapde... Oh!" she was embarrassed to see Ashutosh there, "Main thodee der mein aati hoon."

"Nahin Anji," Nidhi stopped her, "Kya baat hai?"

"Woh ye kapde. Tujhe change karne honge operation ke liye. Sister ne kaha hai ki thodee der mein woh aayengi tujhe operations ke liye taiyaar karne ke liye."

"Nidhi. You get ready," Ashutosh said and got up to leave with Anji.

"Thank you Anji. Main sach much aapka bahut shukraguzaar hoon," Ashutosh said when they had come out of their room.

"Thank you - kisliye?"

"Agar aapne mujhe Nidhi ki pareshaani ke baare mein nahin bataya hota to shayad hamari saari pareshaaniyan aaj resolve nahin hui hoti. Lekin kuchh aur kahne se pahle mujhe Baba se baat karni chahiye."

Anji understood what would have happened, "Sure. Although it isn't so difficult to guess," she said smilingly.

Ashutosh nodded.

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"Ouch!"Nidhi had tried to sit up too fast and it hurt her.

"Sambhaal ke Nidhi," Ashutosh hadn't left her bedside since she had been operated, "Itni jaldbaazi mein kyon rahti ho har waqt?"

"Main bistar par pade-pade tang aa gayi hoon."

"Poori duniya kaam kar-kar ke tang aa gayi hai. Sabko aaraam ka mauka chahiye aur tumhein woh mauka mila hai to tum uski izzat hi nahin karti."

"Aap kab tak rukenge yahan?"

"Ek hafta ho chuka hai Nidhi. Parson mujhe wapas jaana hoga. Hospital ka kaam itna ignore nahin karna chahiye..."

"Mujhe bhi wapas jaana hai Lucknow."

"Pahle to tumhein recover karna hai, aur phir jitni padhai chhooti hai, use cover karna hai."

"Nahin Dr. Ashutosh... Mujhse ab aur kuchh nahin hoga... Main... Main wapas Lucknow jaana chahti hoon."

"Lucknow kahin bhaaga thode hi na ja raha hai Nidhi."

"Aap to bhaage ja rahe hain na wapas Lucknow?"

Ashutosh smiled patronizingly, "Pagli. Ab kya problem hai. I promise, main Lucknow pahunchte hi wapas se mobile loonga aur use 24/7 on rakhoonga."

"Aapke liye woh kaafee hai kya? Mere liye nahin hai. Agar mujhe ab aapke saath aur meri padhai ke beech mein chunna hai to main aapko chunoongi."

"Nahin Nidhi," Ashutosh replied seriously, "No more sacrifices. Bahut ho gaya. Isse koi khush nahin rahta. Already humne bahut sacrifices kiye hain. Aur shayad meri hi wajah se... Maine kabhi situation ko face karne ki koshish hi nahin ki. Aur tumhein bhi aisa hi karne ko majboor kiya. Mujhe kuchh confess karne ki zaroorat hai Nidhi..."

"Kya?"

"Jab main peechhe mud kar dekhta hoon, to mujhe ahsaas hota hai ki maine kabhi Baba ko manane ki koshish bhi nahin ki. Pahle hi haar maan li. Aisa isliye hua ki kahin na kahin main insecure feel karta tha. Mujhe lagta tha ki I may not be the right one for you. I am too old. Isliye main peechhe hat gaya. Aur tum... tum mujh par itna bharosa karti thi ki bina koi sawaal poochhe meri baat maan gayi. Deep down mujhe lagta tha ki mujhse door ho kar, you will move on. Main galat tha Nidhi aur jab tak main tumse yahan nahin mila tha, mujhe ahsaas nahin hua tha ki tum kitna tadpi ho, kitna pareshaan rahi ho. I am sorry Nidhi. I am really sorry. Aur ab main dubara kabhi tumhein koi sacrifice karne par majboor nahin karoonga."

"Mujhe bhi nahin karna aur koi sacrifice. Isliye to main aapke saath jaana chahti hoon."

"Nidhi. No sacrifice means no sacrifice. Tumhare career ka bhi sacrifice nahin..."

"Lekin..."

"Meri poori baat suno. Tumhein Lucknow aane ki zaroorat nahin hai Nidhi. Main Delhi shift ho jaunga, jab tak tumhari padhai poori nahin hoti hai."

"Ji?" Nidhi was shocked.

"Dr. Mathew aur meri jaan-pahchaan ke jo aur log AIIMS mein hain, who sab kahte hain ki I should join this place. To usmein koi problem nahin hogi."

"Lekin aap Lucknow se bahar nahin rahna chahte..."

"Tumhare meri zindagi mein aane ke baad ek baat maine seekhi hai Nidhi ki hamara present aur future, past se zyada important hota hai. Lucknow main apne past ki wajah se nahin chhodna chahta tha. Lekin agar mera future mere Lucknow chhodne se behtar rahega, to main kyon na chhodoon? Aur waise bhi ye permanent thode hi na hai. Kuchh saalon ki baat hai. Padhai khatam hone ke baad to tum bhi wapas jaana chahogi, hai na?"

Nidhi smiled and nodded.

"Main tumhein ab hamesha khush dekhna chahta hoon, Nidhi."

"Aur main aaj is duniya mein sabse khush, aur sabse khushkismat insaan hoon!"

Ashutosh was overwhelmed. He brought her hands to his lips and kissed them. Nidhi blushed.

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Continued in Part 13

Edited by sharmishtha02 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Just read your last chapter. If I could write as well as you I would do a review. I love the way you show the love understanding respect and trust AshNi have for each other. Can't wait To read the rest. Thanks for a beautiful ff
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Posted: 13 years ago
Ashji ab Lucknow chhor kar Delhi ayenge.Sach me,pyaar kya kya karwata hai.Lovely update.Expecting the next soon with more emotional convos.
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Posted: 13 years ago
Fantastic...👏

Ashu and Nidhi r truly made for each other...

Happy that Baba relented and also that Anji told Ashu abt Nidhi's insecurities.

Ashu too admitting that he should have tried harder to convince Baba was so aww...

Shifting to Delhi to be with her and all that matters to them is each other's happiness...beautiful , true LOVE !

Waiting for the happy conclusion !!
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Posted: 13 years ago

wow...i am totally loving the conversation that aashu n nidhi had about her medical condition...

truly agree that they both didnot fight for their love...😭
but i cant believe that you r ending so soon😭😭,
please please continue...n make this long!!
update soon!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
Awesome...i know its too small a word but then i really dont know wat to say...😊
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: niniborn2rule

Very good update...absolute to the point ...bang on boss...am eagerly waiting for ashni convo on this issue...😊


Thanks dear. 😊
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Originally posted by: ruchshah

wow...i am totally loving the conversation that aashu n nidhi had about her medical condition...

truly agree that they both didnot fight for their love...😭
but i cant believe that you r ending so soon😭😭,
please please continue...n make this long!!
update soon!!

Yes, it'd be great if you could include the wedding celebrations. Its such a happy story...we would love to read more😆

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