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achiever

@achiever

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Posted: 13 years ago

#301

Originally posted by: ritu3kumar
fatafat par toh liya lakin i thing i need to read it again and than come back to u 😉

k.. yeah.. even i was exhausted first writing and thn reading such a long chapter..

my mind needs a brk.. so will b back to read ur comments..

tc...

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ritu kumar

@ritu3kumar

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Posted: 13 years ago

#302

Originally posted by: achiever
well, on re-reading i found myself confused! 😕..

My own review of my Chapter..😆

Plus pnts:

1. The phone convos..wer interesting..

2. The age difference issue handled interestingly..

3. Them opening up a bit and growing more close after tiff was entertaining..

4. Ashu was getting jealous! Yahooo!😆

Minus pnts:

1. The terrace part was total downer!

2. Ashu shud've acted more actively thn jst drifting into thinking mode!

3. Nidhi behaved totally immaturely.. her part was entertaining bt I shud've thot some interesting plot for this scene and her role!

4. Thr growing physical intimacy being highlighted was good.. bt it cud've been more good in description.. i found it pretty confusing and overstretched! The emotions cud've been brot out more beautifully if i had kept it more simple..

in short the terrace plot was the weakest part of this chapter..

and lots of editing errors.. his/her confusion gotta bear with it.. coz attempting to correct it will give more of those question mark symbols which takes away charm of expressing words in certain way!

k.. I know its big big chapter.. and to comment over it after reading is gonna b pretty difficult.. bt i wud b waiting for ur comments.. do write..

k.. c ya..😛..

*****Teaser********

Upcoming chapters r gonna b interesting.. as our AshNi r slowly gonna get a little bit more bold and naughty...😉..esp at the convention! 😆

Mallu is gonna strike! bt wud she b successful?

Wat is Nidhi's baba doing abt this r'ship?

so upcoming interesting chapters..b4 the big twist! so keep tuned..

come on they r humans like u and me and they both them r not perfect and everything is very new.
they didnt even express their lov . they r exploring each other. terrace part for me is very much ok . pyar mein achehe pagal ho jate hai. and for ashu this feeling is very new. plus may be he had missed her too much.😉

Edited by ritu3kumar - 13 years ago

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achiever

@achiever

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#303

Originally posted by: ritu3kumar
come on they r humans like u and me and they both them r not perfect and everything is very new.
they didnt even express their lov . they r exploring each other. terrace part for me is very much ok . pyar mein achehe pagal ho jate hai. and for ashu this feeling is very new. plus may be he had missed her too much.😉

luks like this update aint a winner.. fewer comments.. hmm..

well, it taught me lot.. for one i tend to repeat my mistakes..

1. Dont write wen ur mind is not at its proper place! - u wont get many interesting idea for plots and scenes..😆

2. Dont overstress urself .. - u will most probably end up with overstretching ur plots! twice bitten not learnt..😆

3. Dont put long longer longest updates.. - u wont receive many comments..😆.. well frankly, u all not 2 b blamed at all.. its really really pretty exhaustive.. i wud say.. it cud've been put in 2 parts to make it more interesting.. and some parts cud've been made more crispier.. my folly totally!

Well, lets hope tht i learn from my mistakes nxt time..

--smaller and frequent updates with interesting twists!😳👍🏼

--keep it simple and more effective..👍🏼

Edited by achiever - 13 years ago

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heydoc27

@heydoc27

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Posted: 13 years ago

#304

hmm thnks a lot for dis biiig update,hmm strtd goin thru it now..itni badi update ki review ke liye thoda time toh maangtha hai boss😉

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achiever

@achiever

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Posted: 13 years ago

#305

Originally posted by: heydoc27
hmm thnks a lot for dis biiig update,hmm strtd goin thru it now..itni badi update ki review ke liye thoda time toh maangtha hai boss😉

absolutely fine yaar.. will wait for ur review.. take ur own time..😳

luks like will need to give u all more time...😆

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ritu kumar

@ritu3kumar

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#306

Originally posted by: achiever

luks like this update aint a winner.. fewer comments.. hmm..

well, it taught me lot.. for one i tend to repeat my mistakes..

1. Dont write wen ur mind is not at its proper place! - u wont get many interesting idea for plots and scenes..😆

2. Dont overstress urself .. - u will most probably end up with overstretching ur plots! twice bitten not learnt..😆

3. Dont put long longer longest updates.. - u wont receive many comments..😆.. well frankly, u all not 2 b blamed at all.. its really really pretty exhaustive.. i wud say.. it cud've been put in 2 parts to make it more interesting.. and some parts cud've been made more crispier.. my folly totally!

Well, lets hope tht i learn from my mistakes nxt time..

--smaller and frequent updates with interesting twists!😳👍🏼

--keep it simple and more effective..👍🏼

how could u 😈

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Sarika

@Blushsarika

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#307

Fabulous update Achiever, it was a lenthy update, but I love to read long updates ,
you are so good in descibing the phone convos, all the phone convos are so romantic and looks so real ,there enthusiasam to speak to each other is so... Sweet
overall I liked the whole chapter.
Ashu was concerned about what others think and speak about there pairing , when Nidhi teased him by saying knees and niece ,he got very angry. In anger he told her not to do any changes in his life and told her to take away the curtains which she bought with so much love.
When he didn't see her in two days after there fight ,he got worried for her, ultimately gave his ego and called her,
when Nidhi said I missed you ,his heart ached to see her .This whole convo was so... Beautiful. This was my favourite part.
I liked the terrace romance,first time they were feeling intimacy for each other, there excitement and Nidhi's nervousnes was so obvious for the first time kiss.
When they found that they were locked in the terrace Nidhi was more concerned about his reputation. Finally they came out without taking anybody's help. And thought of good excuses also.

Next chapter -chocolates and there first date ,heading itself is a very good teaser
eagerly waiting for the next update.
And thanks for the pm

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achiever

@achiever

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#308

Teaser...No. 2..

Oh.. u all r in for a grt grt treat.. with the nxt 2 chapters.. The chocolates.. and Thr first date..

the chocolates is pretty much as delicious as its name! 😛..

So hurry on with this biggie.. so tht u can get the new one!!😈😆

p.s.: I have edited a bit in the terrace part romance to make it more effective.. so u can go thru it if u want..😳

Edited by achiever - 13 years ago

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nandinidavid

@nandinidavid

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Posted: 13 years ago

#309

Hi

I'm waiting with bated breath to catch with the next chapters...chocolates and first date...words are enough to increase the zeal

Please update the next one soon

thanks

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achiever

@achiever

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#310

Originally posted by: nandinidavid
Hi

I'm waiting with bated breath to catch with the next chapters...chocolates and first date...words are enough to increase the zeal

Please update the next one soon

thanks

I know.. even i have completed the chocolates chapter.. but will need to give other readers time.. with these biggg chapter.. b4 i put it up.. 😳

but the onscreen romance is already getting interesting with thr cute SR segment..😳