DevAkshi~At Sixes & Sevens|Chap 2 (updated,buddy for PMs)

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Prologue

"What do you mean you will not listen to me? Any thing and everything that happens in this house is decided by me and only me. You have no say. Like always. So no more arguments".

"Oh yes how can I forget that? You are the queen and we must obey your commands. Oh please! I have had enough of you and your annoying attitude and I am not going to take in anymore of it. So keep your commands to yourself because I'm not listening. Do whatever you want. And you don't need to remind us all the time that whatever happens in this house is decided by you. Whenever something goes wrong, we ALREADY know it was your decision, so don't waste your energy. So please give us all a break! " and out the door went Dev.

By now, Ishwari was throwing daggers and fuming hearing all this from Dev. It was quite visible that he has had enough of his mother. Not that he was wrong, everyone in the house was tired of her and her tantrums. But she is another person outside the house. Not the outside world, other than her children no one knows how she really is.

Walking in the nearby park, Dev's mind was rolling with a million thoughts. He felt helpless, tired, angry and not very good. He could not do anything. His mother was his biggest headache. She and and rules, her decisions...everything.

Everything she always cared about was her reputation. After that, she was one blind person. She could not see anything further than that. She had ignored her kids, their happiness, their success ...all of it. Never had she given them her time, a mothers love, and all that they had craved for.

Lost in his own thoughts, he bumps into someone pushing her to the ground and hearing a loud ouch!', bringing him back into the present.

"I am so sorry. I did not see you coming and I really did not mean to hurt you like this" said a concerned Dev.

"It's okay" she said. It's okay? That's all? Dev was ready for the typical "Dekh kar nahi chal sakte ho kya?" And all other things followed by that... But it's okay?

"Are you sure?" Said a confused Dev helping her standup. "I'm alright. Thanks." She said walking away.

Still confused, Dev walks away coming back to his mothers thoughts.

Turning around, she looks at his frame disappearing into the the dark . Something is not right... He looks disturbed.. So disturbed that he didn't even recognize me..' Lost in her thoughts, she walks away too.


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Hello everyone! I am a new fan on this forum ... And I'm obsessed... So here is a little piece of something I wrote...hope you like it ..read and let me know should I continue or not... Thank you! 😊


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INDEX :

CHAPTER 1 : https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/133548791


CHAPTER 2 : https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/133600028

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krystle123 thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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WELCOME TO THE FORUM DEAR. 🤗
AWESOME START. CONTINUE SOON.
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Wowww...What a terrific start...Entirely new concept and new shades of the same characters...needless to say u r a fab writer...the first few lines itself were so impressive that I am eagerly waiting for more scripts from your end...
Keep writing and fans like me will keep u encouraged and motivated...


Go ahead sweety with fulll on power packed writing...
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Hey, this was an interesting read. Do continue this story. Will look forward to the update
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Originally posted by: krystle123

WELCOME TO THE FORUM DEAR. 🤗

AWESOME START. CONTINUE SOON.

Thank you! 🤗

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Originally posted by: Kurup

Wowww...What a terrific start...Entirely new concept and new shades of the same characters...needless to say u r a fab writer...the first few lines itself were so impressive that I am eagerly waiting for more scripts from your end...

Keep writing and fans like me will keep u encouraged and motivated...


Go ahead sweety with fulll on power packed writing...


Oh my thank you very much! That was big 😃
Will surely continue !
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Originally posted by: kennashreign

Hey, this was an interesting read. Do continue this story. Will look forward to the update


Thank you ! Sure will 😃
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I liked the concept
Pm me also when you will update
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I liked the concept

Pm me also when you will update


Sure will! Thank you 😃
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Its an amazing and different concept
Love the writing style... Pm me when you update 😊

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