SS: Colourful colours Flashback Story|Chapter 2, Page 3

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello Guys,
The forum is being very silent and all are eagerly waiting for Monday cursing this weekend. Even me too waiting for monday eagerly wanting to end this weekend as soon as I can.
So This would be second time trying to write something but first time on KRPKAB forum.
This will be some what story of Dev and Sonakshi, both's POV. The starting of my story will stare Dev and Bunty, Dev's friend having conversation outside the mall, the same mall where DevAkshi met first time and Sona dropped wheat/aata on him. And after the conversation U will see most part of story in Flashback and then a confrontation between DevAkshi and If needed then epilouge. Willl try ending it in 3 to 5 parts if not then will extend it.😊This is after Sona's three year job contract getting finished and Dev falling in LOVE with her but...
Written from phone so sorry for mistakes
So here by I stop my blabbering and Countinue my Stupid peice of writing :

CHAPTER 1: Down Page 1
CHAPTER 2: Page 3

Dev had called Bunty infront of the mall (as mentioned above) at midnight that's 12:30 and Bunty comes there as he sensed Dev's voice tensed and as a true friend he didn't wasted a time to know that why he is tensed and came directly even if he was sleepy.

~~~PRESENT~~~

Bunty : Abe Dev aaj kal tujhe ho kya gaya, Raat ke 12:30 baj rahe hai aur tu mujhe yahaan konse mall ke samane khada kiya hai, aisi kya baat thi ki abhi tune urgently call karke yahaan bula liya, haan? Bol?

Dev: Baat important thi isliye bulaya, as u r my best friend whom I can trust and share everything aur agar aaj nahi toh phir kabhi nahi, baat meri zindagi ka hai Bunty!

Bunty : Achaa chal bata kya hua itna senti kyu hai? Hmm?

Dev : Wo... Wo..wo...Mujhe kisi se...

Bunty : Kisi se kya?

Dev : Kisi se...( and then hesistantly) PYAAR ho gaya hai!!!

Bunty : Kyaaa? Dev Bukhar toh nahi chadh gaya hai matlab tujhe kisi se Pyaar ho gaya, Kaise? Kab? Kahan? Kis se? bhai main puri tarah shocked hoon yaar!!!

Dev : Kahan hua? Kab hua? Aur kaise hua? Ye toh pata nahi bunty par tujhe mall ke samne isliye laya hoon kyunki yahan par pehli mulakat hui aur issi road par jahan par apni gadi parked hai.

Bunty : ( now fully awake and eager to listen) Toh Dev Uss ladki ka naam kya hai? Haan? ( Little bit mischievously)

Dev : Ms. Sonakshi Bose .

Bunty( now fully shocked) : Whattt????? Are You Serious????? Nahi matlab You are telling the truth only na kahi galti se Illieana D'Cruze se hogaya ho pyaar aur galti se Dr. Sonakshi Bose ka naam le liya hai tune? Haan? Kyuki dono ek dum same same dikte hain na!

Dev : Tu pagal ho gaya hain kya Bunty, I am clear about my feelings as jab main use kisi aur aadmi ke saath dekhta hoon to maan karta hai us aadmi ka gala dabba doon, phir jab wo mere paass rehti hai toh lagta hai jaise sab poora ho gaya ho jo adhura reh gaya tha kuch , Zindagi main jo andhera tha who uske aane se jaise door ho gaya aur mano life main mujhe usne saare rang dikh diye par Pyaar ka rang nahi dekha jo main chaata hoon ki sirf aur sirf uske saath dekh hoon, Shona ke saath...

Bunty : ( Knowing the situation) Par Dev, mere bhai ye realization tujhe kab hit hua ki ( not feeling sure weather to ask or not)

But Dev completed the Question : Ki muje pyaar kab hua us se aur realization kab hit hua? Hain na?

Bunty : Haan!

Dev : Jab main pehli baar us se mila tha tab toh uska naam tak nahi pata aur ye bhi nahi pata that ki meri pehli baat jise se hui aur usi ladki se usi din jo takrar hui wahi pagal ladki mujhe apna deewana bana legi!

And asks Bunty: Sune ga toh na tu Patiently, ye meri story I mean all flashbacks nahi toh main tujhe bore nahi karna chaata as main sirf aapna Burden halka karna chaata hoon ( And remembers the day when his mama's house was burnt and Sonakshi tried to console him by saying that he should share his burden with anyone as it would help him feel nice and beautiful from inside) as Sona kehti hai ki burden share karne se hume accha feel hota hai!!!

Bunty : Waah tu toh abhi se use Shona and all kehne laga aur uski baton ko yaad rakh kar , parkh na ( test karna) bhi shuru kar diya. Chal anyways main toh balki tadap raha hon ki ye hua kaise as wahi do log jo ladte the usme PYAAR jaise bahumulya cheez kahan se aagayi ? Waise who bhi tujh se pyaar karti hai ya nahi?

Dev : Pata nahi par main toh karta hoon na us se behintehaan pyaar aur tu ye sab sun ne ke baad muje baat ki main use kaise baataoun that I LOVE HER and ONLY HER aur ek problem ko bhi tackle karna jisme in sab main mujhe teri help aur guidelines chaaye hogi

Bunty : ( Stiff hokar kehta hai ki ) Chinta mat kar Dev kyunki Ye Bunty Tayiyaar hai Saare Amrish puriyon ko nikalene ke liye sirf Raj aur Simran ke Milan ke liye!!! Bolo Wah wah wah wah wah wah!!!!

Dev and Bunty have a laugh on this.

Then Dev asks : Bunty kahan se shuru karu?

Bunty: Lo kar lo baat aree jahan se har love story start hoti hai ya actually yahi mall aur road aur phone call se Kaise mila tu aur pehli baat chit jaisa tune kaha nahi tha abhi abhi, Chalo beta shuru ho jaao, abhi toh samay ki kami nahi so go slow and calm down OK Dev Beta!! And smiles at him.

Dev Rewinds all past moments spend with her which are too beautiful and memorable too forget it too easily.


So Here by I stop and first time writing so very nervous. PLEASE REVIEW, COMMENT. AND LIKE. And If not liked then Chappals and tamatars are welcome!!! But Review is must weather bad or good as it encourages the writer. Will try to give another update Tommorow as my studies are there so can't be pakka but will try my best!!! All the scenes like Dance sequence and power cut and more will be in Flashback but will include both's POV and then my imagination will be also there in between and after story.

WITH LOTS OF LOVE, ANUSHKA





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Choclate... thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Looks like no one liked it😭
As no one is commenting or liking, If no one likes it then I would stop
In this DevAkshi are not a bit but would be there in Flashback starting from next chap
where both's POV would be there. And all romantic moments
But Looks like no on liked.
Anyways If I won't be getting reviews then I would not countinue this.

Wih Lots Of Love,
Anushka
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Choclate...

Looks like no one liked it😭
As no one is commenting or liking, If no one likes it then I would stop
In this DevAkshi are not a bit but would be there in Flashback starting from next chap
where both's POV would be there. And all romantic moments
But Looks like no on liked.
Anyways If I won't be getting reviews then I would not countinue this.

Wih Lots Of Love,
Anushka

no anushka
it is not that no one liked it
maybe a few of them have seen this
It is awesome
i loved your way of writing
lovely👏👏👏 do continue dear
dont stop

and plz pm me when u update😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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This is so beautiful... 😊
awww...dev is in love with sona...i hope sona loves him too...
pls continue...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awww
Anushka you shouldn't get disheartened by lack of comments! Never do that dear... You should always continue writing whatsoever!

Res for the comment. Am sure its gonna be awesome!😉

Do continue very soon though

Lots of love and appreciation,
Mahishee😳


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Good start 😊
Liked it.
Waiting for you to continue.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#7
Lovely .. <3 <3 <3 <3
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Great going anushka!
Do continue soonish :D
I was dying to read something new on devAkshi!!
*sigh* coz this weekend is most unbearable than others coz of the batti gull situation!!!
I would to read more!
Plzz update soon!
If possible plzz pm me!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Beautifully written
And this fb concept is interesting
Plz cont soon
And if possible, plz pm me
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi, Anushka ! 😊
I read your story yesterday, and wanted to review it then and there. But, Alas! the woes of a newbie.😭 No more than 10 posts a day, and I had already filled my quota😆
Coming to your story, I really loved your narrative style😉
I looking forward to read how the story will enfold, Plz continue soon...
I demand to be PM'ed when you update!😆 *scowls*

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