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Salma

@salma_786786

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#51

first of all welcome to the forum... im Salma

second...y didnt ektaji hire you as the script writing... my god you are brilliant.... this is exactly how i wanted and expected the show to go.... u a barrier of excellent writing...... all the characters are jus right and OMG a candle light dinner all ready for Prem and Heer

thank you for this..... absolutely brilliant...
would love to read more!!!

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Samina

@Iqbal Neha1

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#52

great part
it was written beautifully i liked the way u made all the other charachters go 2 different places and only got heer and prem alone for their first meeting this was even better than the way the serial introduced them.
heers entry was really good and mehars charachter is really cute hope preet is her prince charming
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Shafaq

@shafaq92

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Posted: 17 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: salma_786786
first of all welcome to the
forum... im Salma

second...y didnt ektaji hire you as the script writing... my god you are
brilliant.... this is exactly how i wanted and expected the show to go.... u
a barrier of excellent writing...... all the characters are jus right and OMG
a candle light dinner all ready for Prem and Heer

thank you for this..... absolutely brilliant...
would love to read more!!!

Hey Salma

Firstly thank you for the warm welcome. You're welcome but I should be
the one thanking you. You've given me such lovely compliments. I actually
wouldn't mind writing for Ekta you know 😆. I'm sure I can do better
than her writers at least. Do keep reading and thanks again!

Shafaq

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Shafaq

@shafaq92

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: Iqbal Neha1
great part
it was written beautifully i liked the way u made all the other charachters
go 2 different places and only got heer and prem alone for their first
meeting this was even better than the way the serial introduced them.
heers entry was really good and mehars charachter is really cute hope
preet is her prince charming
👏
👏
👏 👏 👏

Thanks a lot as for Meher and Preet well I haven't really thought about it
but now that you've suggested it who knows. I really wanted them to
meet alone so their true emotions could be shown and I hope I've
succeeded in doing so. Do keep reading!

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Shafaq

@shafaq92

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#55

Part
3

I'm back with another part. I will be updating this fanfic regularly. I'd like to say a big thank you to all my readers for their lovely comments. Its really encouraging and urges me to write more. This part is specially dedicated to Zainab and Nandini for their
amazing comments. I truly don't want to disappoint any of my readers after all the excellent comments you've given me in the past. Enough of me now, here's the next part. Enjoy!

Dinner was a silent affair and the awkwardness between the two was clearly evident. Half way through Prem excused himself to make some business calls. Here he was on vacation and still could not help but think of work. Prem sure was a workaholic. Whilst he did that however, Heer was busy cleaning. Prem's arrival had interrupted her earlier and she still had a lot to do.

That night was a sleepless night for both of them. They both couldn't help but think of each other. Prem wanted to be with Heer that very moment but had to control himself. Tomorrow Balraaj, Teji and Meher would be back and soon his family would be here as well. Then no one would be able to stop his marriage to Heer. He had fallen in love. Yes love and no one could make a place for themselves in his heart the way Heer had with her simplicity today.

The following day until Heer's family arrived, she helped Prem get acquainted with Ambala or should we say now is Sasural. Their eyes spoke more then they did themselves. Both were extremely shy. As they were making their way back home they met Balraaj and Teji. Meher had already reached home. Prem introduced himself to Heer's parents and was very polite. Both Balraaj and Teji grew fond of him immediately. The rest of the day, Balraaj spent with Prem, finding out everything he could about his best friend. This prevented Heer from spending anytime with Prem but she didn't mind at all as she could clearly see how happy Balraaj was with him. Meher teased her elder sister to the core and Teji was all praises for Prem. They had all never been this happy in such a long time. As promised, even Preet had arrived in the evening and settled in quickly. It was after his arrival that Prem and Heer's alliance was discussed for the first time and that too at dinner with everyone present.

"Aunty yeh khana aapne banaya hai kya?" Preet asked as he ate away.

"Nahin toh, mujhe Heer kitchen mein jaane degi toh main kuch baana paoongi na. Yeh sab toh Heer neh hi banaya hai." she answered.

"Wow bhabhi, kya khana banaati hain aap. Ab toh aapki aur bhai ki shaadi paaki hai. Aakhir usi keh liye toh hum aye hain itni door." Preet stated still fully engrossed in the food.

An embarrassed Heer ran to her room and even Prem looked quite flustered. Everyone else couldn't help but laugh at their behavior. They truly were a match made in heaven.

"Preet beta hum bhi yahi chaate hain. Keh jald se jald in dono ki shaadi karwaadi jaye. Bas ab Lalit ka intezaar hai. Let him come." Balraaj added.

"Waise dad keh ane tak lagta nahi bhai intezaar kar payein ge. Dekho toh kitne bechain hain." Preet stated in an attempt to tease his elder brother who was now blushing like a newly wed bride.

Teji noticed Prem was embarrassed and changed the topic. They were soon back to talking about India, Canada and anything but their marriage. Soon Prem, excused himself to look for Heer. He wanted to make sure she was okay with this marriage. Not once had it been made clear to him that Heer had approved to marry him. He wanted to make sure rather than have his heart broken at a later stage. Although he couldn't imagine another girl in his life anymore, what if Heer was in love with someone else? What if she didn't want to marry him? He knocked on her bedroom door but when she didn't answer, very authoritatively he walked in casually only to find her half asleep on her bed. Without thinking once, he walked towards the bed and covered her with the quilt. Although the weather had cooled down it was still very windy and she looked quite cold. But this kind gesture of Prem's woke her up, startling her greatly.

"Aap?" was all she could say as she was shocked to see Prem so close to her that she could hear his heartbeat and was sure he could hear her's too.

"Woh...main tumse...main tumse baat karna chaata tha. But you were asleep." he tried to justify his presence.

"Magar aap mere itne kareeb kya kar rahe hain. Meri room mein ane ka matlab kya hai. This isn't Canada. Idhar ek anjaan larka kisi larki ke kamre mein aise chala nahi aata." she lectured him. This was a new side of Heer that Prem was seeing.

"Hogaya lecture pura? Ab main boloon? Main Canada se zaroor aya hoon lekin hoon main poora hindustani. Aaj bhi mujh mein wohi values hain jo ek Indian mein honi chahiye. I'm sorry for coming into your room like this. It was just so urgent dammit! Aur upar se tumhe sardi lag rahi thi. I had no intention of taking advantage of you if that's what you think" he was shocked at the accusations and couldn't control his anger anymore. One thing was clear, they both sure were good at giving lectures.

As Prem got up too leave Heer's voice stopped him from taking any further steps. "I'm sorry" she said this time more calmly. How could she have misunderstood Prem and his intentions. He was hurt, his eyes showed that. But it was clear that she was also apologetic.

When he didn't reply and just stood still with his back to her she probed him further "Aap mujhse baat karna chaahte the na. Will you leave without doing that?"

"It's okay. Bahut raat hogayi hai. We'll talk tomorrow. Everyone will probably be wondering where I am downstairs. Tum sojao....you look quite tired." he said in a hurt tone.

Edited by shafaq92 - 17 years ago

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swati

@sweta2005

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 17 years ago

#56

awesome too good very nice waiting for next asap.

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Lady_Impala

@Lady_Impala

Dazzler

Posted: 17 years ago

#57

awwwww. prem ko bura laga aur dard bhi hua, mujhe bhi.yeh heer bhi na.anyways 👏 this is for another excellent update
wish you the writer of kdmhmd.ekta your old writer is ok but isse hire karlo.ache trp toh samjho mil hi gayee 😆

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Nandini

@nandini27

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 17 years ago

#58

oww...thnx a lot jaaanu....soo sweeet.....again....am out of words...u r taking the story soo well yaaar....loved it......simply loved it....i mean...of course we need scenes like this in btw....or else it'll be totally like...only gud is happeniing......wow....loved premeer.....so prem wants to find wats in heer's mind...of course..i can feel her...she was like...shocked at tht moment.....and prem.....aww...he cares soo much.....and i loved her apology.....soo cute...can just visualise a apologotic heer's face...."sorry".....cute.....hehe.....again.....gud job done in the best way...loved it totally yaaar...am speechless...such gud writers r here in IF...and wats ekta doing??....she shud hire some.......am sure...her prod house wil be in full profit for sure....hehe...

luv nans

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Shafaq

@shafaq92

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: sweta2005
awesome too good very nice waiting for next
asap.

Thanks a lot 😊!

Edited by shafaq92 - 17 years ago

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Shafaq

@shafaq92

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: fijiana
awwwww. prem ko bura laga aur dard bhi hua, mujhe
bhi.yeh heer bhi na.anyways 👏 this is for another
excellent update
wish you the writer of kdmhmd.ekta your old writer is ok but
isse hire karlo.ache trp toh samjho mil hi gayee 😆

Yeah Prem ko jab bura laga tha, even I was hurting 😆. Thanks a lot! I'd
love to write for KDMHMD actually. Who knows maybe I could do wonders
with some of the other fantastic writers we have here. Thanks again

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