*~ OS: Sand Castles ~* - Page 5

My dearest Preeti and Grace,

This was a wonderful OS you both came up with and I really enjoyed it very much.

I am very sorry for not being able to comment earlier. With my parents' visit, my kids and other (unfortunate) things that came up in between, my time got tied up. I know my apology is not enough but I am grateful to you both for your patience.

I am very touched and honored you two have included me in your OS. I was very surprised and happy. Thank you very much. 🤗 🤗 to you both.

Now let me comment on OS

Preet's comment about women and why everyone was such in a negative mood was funny. Abby being Prem and Preet's sister had me laughing. I realized right away why she would come after you guys with her pans.

Love the description of Grace and Sophie. It was perfect.

My jaws dropped when I read Preeti's description. I was able to picture Preeti clearly. Like we see in the movies, we won't see the person's face only after some time and that is how I saw it.

I couldn't stop laughing about Preeti and Prem's reaction when Sophie and Preeti were talking about their handbag and purse to them. Men, I wish they understood why purses and handbags are important to us.

I couldn't believe Preeti never liked Heer. While I was reading the story, I was hoping she wouldn't interfere with everyone's plans to reunite Prem and Heer.

It was very exciting to see Grace, Sophie and Preet working together to come up with a plan to reunite Prem and Heer. I loved how Grace got teased about the lifeguard she likes. It was funny. Sophie's shopping addiction was hilarious. She did some shopping less than couple of hours ago and she was already thinking about doing more shopping. Very well written.

Uswah and Fatima's concern for Heer was really sweet. Uswah's protectiveness for Heer is understandable but I never knew how protective she was until I read what was coming up.

Abby, Grace and Preet shouting their love for Sophie not only surprised her but me also. I felt bad for Sophie because she was worried if she said something wrong and was going to be teased about again.

Preeti keeping an eye on Grace, Sophie and Abby was concerning. I was afraid she was going to ruin everyone's plan. I couldn't stop laughing when I read that she was a lot nicer when her boyfriend was around.

Grace's idea to distract Preeti was excellent. I was really happy everyone got to continue with their plan without worrying about Preeti. Preet and Prem conversation was funny but when Preet started talking on the phone and loud enough for Prem to hear, I couldn't stop laughing. Preet telling his "friend" how Prem was fine with Heer flirting with half naked men and later him telling Prem indirectly how some couple becomes moody when their partner is away was hilarious. Prem's jealousy and suddenly changing his mind to join him at the beach was perfect. It was funny when Preet was leaving Prem's room, he noticed his brother flexing his muscles. You know I would have loved to see Prem doing the same thing on the show. What an awesome scene that would have been.

I loved how Uswah and Nabz were teasing Fatima about the cute guy. Uswah's reaction to the cute guy's friend when he took off his shirt was too funny. I couldn't agree more with the ladies about hairy chest men, it is just simply unattractive about a man. Sadly, I know some women who find men with hair chest sexy. Yuck is all I can say.

Uswah comment about asking the guy about how hairy his chest is was funny. That would be one bold question to a guy. Can you imagine Uswah telling her parents she doesn't like the guy because he is too hairy?

Another thing about Uswah that made me laugh was when Nabz commented about Uswah chasing Prem around the house with a pan. Also, later on, when Prem sees Uswah, he remembers what happened. Those scenes really made me laugh. I really loved those two parts.

Prem and Heer bumping into each other while Heer was searching for Nabz was unexpected but it worked for everyone that trying to come up with a plan to get them to see each other. I loved it when Prem said that whoever injured Heer will be their last day on this Earth. Even after their fight, Prem was still worried and caring for his Heer.

It was a shame everything downhill when Prem and Heer started arguing again. I am not blaming Uswah because like I have mentioned before, her protectiveness for her friend was understandable. It was very clear that Prem and Heer had some lack of communication and understanding with each other that wasn't addressed earlier or sorted out after their first fight. I was glad to see Krish and Prem have a very good relationship with each other and Prem's heart softened up when he was looking after Krish.

Prem coming to Heer's defense when that creepy guy was hitting on her was very good scene. I am glad Heer was able to defend herself on her own and Prem's timing was perfect. I was happy that creep finally got the message loud and clear and left them alone.

Poor Krish getting innocently involved with Prem and Heer's competition with each other about who can build the best sand castle. It was good both teams had enough people to help and I was glad it came down to a tie but it was funny how Prem and Heer were not ready to surrender.

When Prem accidently got sand on Heer's eyes, this line had me laughing:

"Ehhh...shhh...it hurts..." Heer whined as she tried opening her eyes.

I don't have say anything further that because it was perfectly written line and I loved it.

By the end of the story, I was glad Prem and Heer made up and Preeti's boyfriend was coming back to town.

Excellent OS my dearest Preeti and Grace. I would love to know how you two came up with a wonderful idea. This was a very different story. Both of you did a great job to include everyone from the CC in this story along with Prem and Heer. It was perfect OS.

Thank you again for including me in this story. I have to admit you both got the ponytail part right. I always have my hair in a ponytail no matter where I go. I was happy to see I have a son in this story. That was very sweet.

Thank you both for your PM. This is why I have asked earlier for all of our KDM forum fic writers to get together to write a script. You guys come up with great ideas.

Thank you for taking the time to write this OS and share it with us. 👏 ⭐️ 👍🏼