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Posted: 15 years ago
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hi guys.....

so me back after a weeks time with an update....
thankyou all who commented and pressed the like button....
i wanted to post this update last night itself but i was soooo sleepy that i got scolding frm my hubby ...😕
and today the net was sooo slow .....
but against all odds iam posting the update now...😆

chapter 84

"uff Meher..!!! don't do THAT!!"

Preet whined as he struggled to duck the pillows and cusions coming his way....

"and you..??!!what about THAT ..what you are going to do to me...."her voice was nothing less than a yell...

Preet whined and a giggle burst at the door....

"are wah!bhabhi ...!aap to bhayya ko achi practice de rahi ho....see how well he holds whatever is hauled to him....kya aap inhe worldcup to nahi bhej rahe hain...?!!!

Ash's sarcastic wit brought a loud roar of laughter from Sneha ,Nihaal and Adi....

Preet gave all a sheepish grin ..his hands moving up to his head where some feathers were struck.....and Meher went red in embaressment...

"oye...waise meher ..mere saale ko tum itna kyu maar rahi thi...?"Adi asked with a naughty smile..his intention to irritate Meher was not missed...

"yeh jaa raha hai...India...aur mujhe yahaan ..."before she could finish a sob swallowed her words...

Sneha looked up at the men sending a stern warning not to stretch the game...

"Meher ..cool it yaar..."sneha and Ash were at her side as Meher slumped onto the couch....

"tum log bhi jaa rahe ho na...mujhe akeli chodke...."meher said in between sobs...Sneha too was tearing and Ash looked even bad..

.

it was decided that as Preeth is going to join JH soon and Sneha 's course was completed ,they both will return to india ...

Ash too had to go back to her studies...

Preet moved to Meher ...and sat on his knees....

"dekho meher ..aisa nahi hai...you have a goal for you ...and you hav to beat my grade too..."he chuckled deliberately...

"aur dekho...kya tumhi ek ladki ho jiski aankhon main bichadne ka dard saaf dikhayi deti hai...???

meher looked at him in a mild shock as realisation dawned in her ....

sneha and Ash too were in the same state...

but then they were not so alone...like her...this thought made her sob again..

preet wrapped his hands around hers kept on her lap and squeezed ...

"see how sneha and Ash are facing this ...!"

but he could not go further as a sniffle from his side caught their attention...and before any one could comfort Ash...Adi was by her side...

he looked at Preet a bit skeptically but neverthless drew Ash to him ...soothing her...

"well it seems like a cry party now..."nihaal tried to lighten the mood ..but even his laugh went throaty...

"party...!!nice Idea..." preet jumped up his enthusiasm saving the atmosphere..

why don't we have a get together at Heer di's home....its intruding ..but ...Dev bhayya is already there...!!"

the Idea of an evening by the sea was really appealing to the couples and a brightness spread on the gloomy faces...

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Prem sat on his chair relaxed... a smile playing at his lips.....

he was content ...content beyond description.....and felt as if he was the happiest man upon the planet...he closed his eyes as her image came to his vision...

a soft laugh escaped his throat as he recalled the morning incident....

as Prem opened his eyes .....his face broke into a smile .....she lay on his arms ,her silky strands set spawled on his chest...,her petite figure snuggled closely within the hold of his right arm....

"ummm...heer..."

she moved a bit and opened her eyes....a pair of dark choclate eyes were waiting patiently for her eyes to open up...

suddenly she remembered.....

oh!no!aaj to servents ki chutti hai aur prem aur dev ko office bhi jaana hai..

"oh!prem ..thankyou aap ne mujhe utha diya....aaj nauker bhi nahi hai...."

heer said as she fumbled with her night gown...

ba sudden pull made her hit the bed again......before she could understand his nose was tickling her sensitive skin by her throat....

"thode der aur mere paas raho na....ab iske baad kitni ghanton ke baad tumhe itni kareeb milega..."

his voice was husky....and pleading ..heer could not help pinch his nose.....

"prem...abhi nahi...aap mujhe jaane dijiye...."

heer pushed him lightly smiling .

prem let her go with a sad smile....and heer ran to washroom...

prem looked at the closed door and sighed ...but in a second his eyes twinkled noticing something...

heer took her bath and turned to get her towel....

oh!God..!jaldi mein to maine kapde bhi nahi layi...

ab kya karoo....

she looked around and found a wraparound....

prem waited by the washroom rubbing his hands in excitement....

heer had forgotten to take her dress with her ....and in his hands he held the saree he picked for her...

heer opened the door looking cautiously around....wishing Prem had not gotten off from the bed...

she smiled at herself losing herself in his thoughts for a moment...

a hand slid along her waist and as he pulled her to him....she sighed ....

"prem..."

"shhhh...kuch mat kaho...."

his lips grazes her bare shoulders ...fingers moving aside the wet curls ....feeling the waterdrops glistening there....

her stomach churned in excitement and she took deep breaths to calm herself....

"kitne ziddi ban gaye ho aap ,Mr.Prem juneja...!"

heer turned and locked her hands behind his neck...

"hmm...ziddi to banna hi hai....tum to bahane banane main lagi rehthi ho mujhse door jaane ki...."

prem said poutingly....

"acha...!'heer smiled and noticed the saree....

"prem yeh...!"her eyes widened ...

"waise mereliye to nahi....i was making things easy for you....yeh pehenlo..."

heer smiled at him appreciatively....

as prem filled her maang and tied her dori..heer could not help laugh....

"ab tum hans kyu rahi ho....?!"

prem asked as he tried to remove the color of sindoor from his finger...

"kuch nahi...yehi soch ke hans rahi hoo ki aap mujhe itne pamper kar rahe hai ki ab ek din bhi aap se door nahi reh nahi paoongi.."

"to ek din bhi mujhse door mat raho na...."prem's voice was gentle and deep as he kept his chin upon her shoulder .

her heart filled with some unknown longing as she stroked his cheeks.....

"acha ..ab ..main jaoo...kitna kaam pada hai....jaldi tayar hoke aajao breakfast keliye ...mujhe Dev ko bhi uthana hai...

prem let go of her and nodded ...

"sir...we are ready for the conference ....!"

his secretaries voice brought him back from his reverie...

"oh!! yes Ms.helen..I'll be in the conference room in a minute....tell Dev to come ..."

Prem moved to take his files but Helen's voice stopped him....

"i was about to tell you about Mr .Dev sir....actually he is not feeling well...but he insists on attending the conference..so i thought it would be appropriate to inform you..sir."her voice trailed as Prem frowned in confusion...

"okay...i'll see him then first and do apologise to all for me for being late..."

helen nodded and Prem walked from the cabin...

Dev stared at his trembling hand and fingers...

he owned them....dev reminded himself sternly but his system won't obey him....

at times a sharp twitching pain in his stomach made him cringe....

he tried to get hold of himself taking deep breath ....never he had experienced such a symptom....then..he never was off the drugs either...

in these days he needed them more often trying to keep himself away from the pain Prem and Heer were inflicting upon him....

but today.....

"Dev...!"

he had freshened up and changed .he was about to open his cupboard that an enticing fragrance filled his room...

he turned and was left holding the half open door...

"ha heer....!"

heer smiled widely...."aaj badi jaldi uth gaya ...office day ha?!!"

he too smiled at her masking the sudden surge to take her in arms ...

"yeh lo prashad ...main to soch rahi thi ki tum abhi tak so raha hai..."

"wo aaj itne dinon ke baad office jaa raha hoo na...so i thought it is better to be early..."

"chalo acha hua ...Prem bhi tayar hoke neeche aagaye hai...tum bhi chalo..."

dev stood unsure of something ....

"are khade kyu ho chalo..."heer caught his arm and he followed her without a word ,forgetting evrything.....

he should'nt have forgotten the thing....Dev scolded himself mentally...lekin Pari to kuch karne se pehle hi mujhe room se leke gayi....

"aaah..!"he gasped as the shooting pain pierced him like a burning sword...

his shivering arms moved to the glass of water....

his condition was alarming himself...as he gulped down the water cooling his insides a bit....

he tried to calm down by taking deep breaths....he need to fight this too....if Prem comes to know about this....even the thought of such a possibility horrified him...

the sound of approaching footsteps alerted him....

the cabin door swung open and prem entered concerned....

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heer bit her lower lips in intense thought as she sat there with her phone in her hand....

the first thing she did when she found out the prescription and box of ampules inside Dev's cupboard was to call Sia....she had casually asked about Dev ...his illness..and between the talks she could gather that Dev was under treatment for depression.....Now she was sure that Dev was buying these ampules OTC and was sort of addicted to it...she was about to inform Prem but prem called her at the moment telling her about Dev's illness and that he had an important conference to attend...
she was not able to believe herself ....
sonu ne itni badi baat mujhse chupayi hai aur ....aur ...

the door knob clicked and her face set in a grim expression.....

Dev walked in slowly...unable to face heer....Prem had called heer in front of him informing about his health and he had forcefully sent him back home to take rest...even though he wanted to come to the safe haven of his room .....he had protested ,dreading the prospectus of facing Pari....,and being with her....

"wo ...i am not feeling well..."he gritted his teeth as the spasm of muscles pained him....

heer stood there still her hands folded stiff about her chest...without another word Dev walked up to his room....

wasting no time he went to his cupboard and searched for his drug....

"tum kuch dhoond rahe ho?!" an icy voice enquired from his back....

he jerked in horror....

heer stood next to him....

"wwww..wwoo wo mein....medicine...."

"ah!medicine....kahi yeh to nahi?!"heer brought her hand forward ....she was holding a box of ampules ...and packets of disposible syringes....

blood drained from his face ......he looked at her in shock....

as he looked her ...he saw her lips quivering .....her eyes welling up and her body shake in sobs .....

"tum yeh sab kaise kar sakthe ho sonu...mere saath,..Sia ke saath....Ma ke saath....jo tumhe apna beta maanta hai ...aur Papa ...papa to tumpar kitna bharosa kartha hai....aur Prem.....tum...kitnon ko dhoka de rahe ho pata bhi hai..?"

heer slumped down to the floor as Dev looked down.....

"Pari...mujhe....please pari aise mat ro.....mujhe maaf kardo...lekin ...mein majboor...."

he could not say further as her hand shot up stopping him.

"enough ...sonu...!!yeh to har insaan is situation mein kehtha hai....majboori.....?!kya majboori thi tumhe...kya dard tha tumhe ....ek ladki tumhe chodke gayi aur tum us wajah se apni zindgi lutane pe tule ho"

her voice was filled with anger....

and he had nothing to say i response ....dev looked at heer ...his heart paining ....

"i don't know who is she...tumne bataya bhi nahi....lekin agar tum use is kadar chahte ho to use kuch to pata hoga na......and if you could not open up to her she could have sensed you....i hate ...."

Dev was by her side the instant and his hand shot out to her lips ....

heer looked at him with wide eyes brimming with tears...

Dev's eyes were also flooding as he nodded his head negatively....he could never tell her that she was blaming herself.....

heer was now sobbing uncontrollably ..."nahi sonu...yeh theek nahi hai...tum uske khilaf kuch bhi sunne ko tayar nahi..lekin wo tumhe chodke jaa chuki hai....tum uskeliye hume nahi chod sakthe...."

before he could reply a voilent wave of pain shook him and he gasped ....

heer was shocked by the sight before her .....sonu was lying on the floor clutching his stomach and gasping for air...he was sweating profusely....

"sonu...kya hua...tum theek to ho...main docter ko ....."heer was about to get up from his side ....

but a hand caught her wrist....

"n..nnahi...main theek ho jaoonga ..tum...wo mujhe de do..."he pointed to the ampule lying on the floor.....

"sonu...nahi sonu....main....mein nahi de sakthi...."heer looked around helplessly...

"nahi Pari please...ek baar ...aakhri baar...."Dev pleaded ...

heer was passing through the moment of indecision....

"please pari...mujhe yeh dard aur nahi saha jaata....."Dev writhed in pain and her trembling hands automatically went to the box....

later ...dev opened his eyes .....

he was feeling normal and he sat up....

his eyes then fell on the figure sitting upon the couch ...her eyes fixed upon him.....

"heer.."his voice was apologetic....but strangely he felt happy that she was with him all these hours....

he could dimly remember the way she comforted him ,holding his head ....

"i am sorry....pari...."heer eyed him painfully and sighed .....

"sonu....main ab tumhe yeh sab use karne nahi doongi....that was your final one....understand...?!"heer said with a finality...

Dev nodded....

"aur..maine ma ko yeh baat bata diya hai....!"heer said in a low tone...dev looked at her in disbelief....

"no...!!you did'nt..?!" his voice was shaking....Pari ne Gayathri ma se keh diya....?!!!

"mujhe kisi se salah to leni chahiye ki main tumhe kaise sambhaloo...aur,ma ke hote hue.....tum unke baat kabi nahi taloge is liye..."her voice trailed off and she stood up to hold him as he walked to her unsteadily...

her phone rang.....after taking a look at the caller heer looked at dev.....meaningfully....

"tumhareliye..."

dev looked at heer and then to the phone with terror filled eyes....

his hands shook violently as he took the phone from her .....

what he heard was a muffled cry from the other side....and it broke his heart several times....

"i am really sorry ma...main aapki kasm khata hoo....aaj se main sab chod doonga...sach main ma..aap mat royiye,...mujhse saha nahi jayega..."

he broke down to his knees holding the phone .heer too was crying as she tried to comfort Dev...

"beta ...tum jo kuch bhi kiya wo mein bhool jaati hoo...."Gayathri said..sobbing...."lekin abse apna vaada yaad rakhna ...aur heer jaisa keh rahi hai waise hi karna...main yeh baat lalit ko nahi batana chahthi ,aur Prem bhi yeh baat na jaane to behthar hai....main har roz tumhe phone karoongi aur tum apne man ko kabhi bhi puranibaaton ki taraf nahi le jaoge....samjhe..?"

"ha ma...main aap jaisa kahenge waisa hi hoga...."

"acha heer ko phone do..."

gayathri talked to heer for sometime giving her some instructions and disconnected the call.....

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Prem went straight to Dev's room as he returned from the office.....

dev was at his study reading a file....

"are ?tumhara tabiyath theek nahi hai aur tum yeh files dekh rahe ho...."Prem snatched the file and kept it aside....

"main ab theek hoo Prem..."dev said avoiding Prem's gaze...

both looked at each other when the doorbell rang.....

"ab yeh kaun agaya...?"prem asked Dev and he shrugged....

heer opened the door....

"good eve deeeeeeeee....!!!!"

the three girls squealed .....

"are tum sab....achanak..."heer was so happy seeing the six people grinning widely at her door....

"di..."meher hugged her tight ....

heer ushered evryone in ....

'wow di aapne to ghar ka mahol hi badal diya....."Ash said looking around at the arrangements and antiques ....

"sach mein...wow..yeh photoframes .....it blends nicely with the room...."Sneha too was ecstatic

Preet hugged heer ..".kaisi ho di?mere jiju aapko pareshaan to nahi kar rahe hai na?"

he asked her naughtily making heer blush....

prem and Dev joined the group and as he learnt the motive of this sudden visit

Prem 's eyes twinkled...

"wow...preet !you have come up with a blast man! camping out...!!heer ...what do you think....?"

heer smiled at his question as she arranged tea for all ...but when her eyes fell on the unconfortable look in Dev's eyes her face sombered...

"well di...hum sab tayari karke aaye hai...tent , poles ..you name it we have it...aapko kuch karne ki zaroorat nahi hai...bas jiju ki saath aana hai..."

Ash said with excitement...

"hmm..Prem ...i don't think I'll be able to join you people...you go and enjoy...."

Dev said with a forced smile....

"its ok Dev bhayya ....maa ne kaha hai ki aapko disturb mat karna...aap rest lijiye..."sneha assured him quickly...

heer looked at dev....

she knew very well why he was avoiding the camp....if the pains resurfaced he won't be able to hide it in front of all.....or ...is it the access to the drugs making him stay...?

As it neared the sunset all changed to comfortable dress and were about to leave...

heer looked at Dev who sat on the sofa ,still in his kurtha ....

"Prem ...mein Sonu ke liye khana garam kar leti hoo....aap log chaliye mein abhi aati hoo...."

"theek hai jaldi aana ....Dev take care dude.."Prem rushed out as Preet yelled him to come and help with the things....

"tumhe apna vaada yaad hai na....?!"heer muttered in low voice ...

"pari ...main maa ki kasm khaya hai....pata nahi main wo dard paar kar paoonga ya nahi....lekin koshish to mein zaroor karoonga....tumhareliye...!"his voice was earnest.

heer looked at him with tears in eyes .....she patted his cheeks mumbling a thank you....

as he sat there all alone the days happenings rushed into his mind in a haze......

his feeling uncomfortable.......

the shooting pains........

the shock of heer finding his truth.......

the way she reacted......

"i don't know who is she...tumne bataya bhi nahi....lekin agar tum use is kadar chahte ho to use kuch to pata hoga na......and if you could not open up to her she could have sensed you....i hate ...."

her words echoed in his mind.....of course she was right .....main tumse beintehaan pyaar kartha hoo heer ...lekin tumhe iska ehsaas tak nahi ho raha...?!!

itne kareeb the hum dono....phir bhi tum mere dil ka haal nahi jaan payi ho?!!

he leaned back to the sofa .....waiting for the pain to drown him ..away from the more paining thoughts....

so guys do give me comments ...i know the pace of the story is slackening a bit ..but its important ...😃 do press the like button.... take care surya
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Posted: 15 years ago
#82
awsum update......

preet luv u........

wa8in for the nxt update..........///

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Posted: 15 years ago
#83
lovely update
sorry couldn't reply before but i read each update on my cell(net)
sorry wont get tym to reply for all
but as uasual they were too gud
i hope ab ye dev ka suspence khatam ho
thanks for the pm
and do cont sending them
will be waiting for next update
tc
heer193
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Posted: 15 years ago
#84
Yay u updated😆... seriously surya you dont have any idea how badly I want to see ur story in celluloid... I mean u write each expressions so vividly I can literally see those things happening.

To start with... Mr. Preet getting a good thrashing from Meher.. I actually expected a teeny weeny emotional scene between the two... ya I loved the whole family scene but u know.. they r departing and they r so much in love atleast we can expect a scene later what say? Like the one we got between Premeer when Heer was to stay away from him for work???

Then Premeer scene was 😳 I loved how you did one samajhdaro ko ishara hi kafi hai wala part😆... still I want to know.. did he dress her up?? really? you have no idea how much I am blushing while typing it😳😳😳

This Dev.. the maha devdas...!!! I mean the highest form of devdas....he is one stage ahead.. he dopes himself.. ya he's a gud man no doubt.. but please send him to rehab pretty please.. addicts are dangerous u know!!!! I have no idea how u r going to shape his character..

Ok one more pt... this Heer will be chupaing this whole doping thing from Prem na! I hope this does not create any misunderstanding... Heer being the mahan soul will comfort Dev for sure and our Premu being a possesive lad can take it in other ways na..He can become insecure thinking what is my wifey always khusar phusar with Dev!!!!

Well .. I should stop now... otherwise next time comment k liye kam par jayega😆


Luv
Priyo😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
#85
i am hating this dev day by day...😡
the premeer part was...😍haha naughty prem....kitna accha hai woh...😳
cant wait for their camp...⭐️
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Posted: 15 years ago
#86
ohh god premerr bathromm n all so cute huff ths ff is mking me fall in luv wth prem more n moree
nd this dev is otc addicive my godd he needs some psychiatrist m afraid for heer
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Posted: 15 years ago
#87

Surya - an exquisite update……⭐️ 👏

Again u begin with a new & different scene from the cliff-hanger where u stopped. Meher with her childish nature can't control the parting from her soulmate for a while....Sneha & Ash little matured in their outlook but no one can hide their inner pain for seperation from their lovers….Preet& his consoling words , Adi start to show his care for Ash …even in front of his future BIL…bubbly Preet know how to enligten the gloomy face & party place ….very nice that he not forget the most & inevitable couple for romantic eve…….😉 😍

Prem with his lively thoughts ..that too naughty to remember the romantic times in office …no words for his moments with his love…he really enjoys & tries each chance to spend valuable times with Heer…..Dear - each description u given in an adorable & drowning way for readers to that situation…..i think u added that for sharpening pulse of dkcl lovers…😛.very good & thanks for Helen to retrieving prem from sweet memories to earning points…..

Dev with his in & out suffering….the physical pain he going through was u described in a realistic manner…now I got little bit know-how abt the addicted persons struggle..& here u termed the mental suffocation of Dev as well …..its the lack of good sense that rules- due to high use of drugs, Dev fails to keep away his nasty thoughts on Heer & on the contrary side - i really admires this Heer on her true bonding & care towards Dev.. she treats him in a way- by making jealous in readers mind on such kind of friendship.😉 😊

Again u making Prem more loveable human ,he who cares his friend like a sibling & by sending him back home ,that Dev's health will be well cared by his Heer…

Surya…the shattered Heer with unanswered questions & searching how to solve the misery… she came to encounter abt her own sonu…the interaction b/w these buddies. They really spoke with their heart …both knew the heaviness of other ….as she know its harmfull …she can't get backward by without offer the sedation to Dev for relieve himself from the pain…heart wrenching words from Heer..its superb…👍🏼.Heer narrates the throns Dev giving to the loved ones who cares & treats him like their own family….she stayed with him till he came back to his normal phase & Heer found out the best ever solution to tackle Dev back in his old charm… Mother's love 😊…the best trap Heer can place & save Dev …the promise he given to both … hope he will keep his promise ….😕

Heer taking some assurance before leaving Dev alone in home & Dev recollecting the depth of Heer's painful words.Now me too so confused. Is Heer completely unaware abt her Sonu's mind ….. & Wht u r storing for the couple's party …wants more Premeer ....😍 😍

Thanks for this fabulous update & eagerly waiting for next ……👏 ⭐️ 👏

Continue soon…..😊 ❤️

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Posted: 15 years ago
#88

nice part par dev ke liye koi aur ladki dhoondo

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Posted: 15 years ago
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awesome update. loved premeer romance naughty boy.poor meher everyone is going back india. finally heer knows abt dev's drug use. hope she'll help him to get well but hope tht wont create misunderstandings between premeer. agar huwa then i won't leave u. yad rekna. 😆. good tht heer informed gay3 eveything. i wish heer tell prem too wht wrong in it. he will support her more right.....update soon.

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Posted: 15 years ago
#90
awesome!!!
preet,sneha and ash are going back 2 india....that is sad!=(
wow!....all of them are going 4 camping.....surely they will have fun!
OMG!....dev is addicted 2 medicines so that he can 4get his pain!....i never expect this!.....
continue soon!

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