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Suhasini

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Posted: 15 years ago

#31

hey hi..............u will give ur xams to best.......................all d best for ur xams......................after dat give us a fab update...............................long update...........................

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...Nikhita...

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Posted: 15 years ago

#32

hiiiiii

just read all the parts.....great ones!

hope heer forgives prem....

all the best for your exams.....do continue soon!

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haajoo

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Posted: 15 years ago

#33

okay thankyou both of you and i wil pm u when i wil update okeh g tomorow is my fvt exam EEENGLISH needing your prayers a lot pray 4 me dat i secure 72/75 in ds subject atleast. PLEASE N I M WAITING FOR 14TH eagerly tata til den. take care bye love u all

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haajoo

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Posted: 15 years ago

#34

Note:

All your comments whether Criticism or Appreciation are fully welcome and your complaints too. I like complaining peope.

Eternity

Chaper 6

She was really very angry at that man. She was very cross at him.

Prem: Heer tab jo b hua tha that was just an accident that was not what I had planned

Heer: Wow Interesting really very interesting So you always plan

hmmmmmmm......... Lovely

Prem wanted to make himself clear infront of her. As at that night all had happened just by a mistake But she dint want to hear a word frokm him. But now hje strictly wanted the cute skinny angel to listen him. He moved forwards and cupped her face by his hands

Prem: Quiet Now Pin Drop Silence

Heer: Ye tumara office ni ha

Prem: But thats my hotel

Heer: Correction needed ye tumhara ni mera ha

Prem: Tumara b ni hai ye

Heer: hamara ha

Listening this his lost smile had returned

Prem: Does that mean you forgave me

Heer: No I dint

There's a condition on which I will think about forgiving you. Promise me you'll do that

Prem: Whats that

Heer: aaa.......uuhhaaaaaaaaa

Prem: Okeh......................

Happy Princess

Her canines were on her lips and she noded yes

Heer: Yeah I do think. But after the condition you won't be happy

Prem: Have i ever said no to you

Heer: No. Okeh you are not going to date any1 you are going to keep your eyes on

Prem: On You

Heer: For next three months

No
Flirting
No
dating
No
sexing
No
drinking
and

YUPP full attention to
our family
Prem:
One second............. One second..........hold ur breathe............ Hamari family......... matlab.......................Mein aur tumare sath wo b aise. That will be a nightmare meri aur tumari family. Never I won't even dream that
Heer:
Yeah yeah like i m interested in a hidden flirt no 1. Our family meant k Barrey papa bari Maa Herman Preet Mumma Papa Meher Nihaal n TT. Got it
Prem: Heer tum ne pehle kya kaha tha NO what

Heer:No
Flirting,No dating,No sexing,No drinking I am serious
His eyes opened up in shock

Prem: For forgetting one stupid bloody birthday I have to avoid all of this. All girls are psycho but .................

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Nine Months Later

(India)

Things had changed.

Heer who was a chatterbox had turned quiet. Her family had died ( guys i had to follow a bit of the KDMHMD stuff itni si bat he) in a plane crash. She would sit alone by the window and see the fields beyond the mansion. Her eyes which were filled by dreams n happiness were now filled with tears. She had beeen robbed of the most precious asset she had. On the other side by now Prem had began to understand his responsibilities He had turned very sensible just cuz of Heer.

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Prem returned from the office and after greeting parents He headed to Heer's room. He slowly took steps in her room towards her. He saw Heer was sitting by the black ebony window and was looking outside through it. He knew that Heer was sad so he just moved to her and put his head in her laps and made her hands rest over his chest. Fatigueness could be easily seen from his face.

Prem: Kya he udhar

Heer: hmm...ummm.... Nuthing

Raising his head He kissed her teary eyes. Though she was silent but her eyes could speak alot.Prem always love her more when there was a chance for a him to have an eye to eye convo with her.

Prem informed her that he was going to take a bath.

Prem: Apna towel do

Heer: Mera towel

Prem: Normally we quarrell over this

Heer: Yeah but things have changed

Prem: Everythings the same.

Same me

Same u

Same towel

New towel

Heer: Take the towel and go

(Heer's hand was in the towel so taking the advantage he pulled her hand with towel his lips were just saying Aao Na)

Dont do that.

Prem: Theek hai but ab mera towel le kar aao.

Heer: Kitne towel use karo ge. Stay here till I bring your clothes

Prem: Ab Maa ki tarah ye ketay hue mat jana

Ye Prem b na

She smiled at him

Prem:

Sho shweet of you

Ab khadi mt ho kaprey lao mere.

Heer: M not your servant. n yupp keep your eyes off me.

Prem:

Heer sirf two days hain tumhein dekhne k becuz phir aap kahan hum kahan

Heer: Yeah yeah I know. I will be on

cloud ninety nine I will be far away from you.

Prem: Maid Heer be quick

Her eyes came full of anger now she ran after him n he entered the washroom. She ran after him n both slipped in bathtub. They both glared at eachother n then laughed at eachother.

Heer: Prem I wana say that I

Prem: I know u wanna say that you love me.

Heer: Yeah Love okeh but with you not okeh

only a smal interaction

Prem: Heer you're looking so..............

Heer went out and began to dry her hair and inside Prem was taking a bath. She changed her clothes.

He came out and saw Heer was brushing her hair

Prem: Heer abhi meri maid ayee theee kuch pata hai us ka

Heer: pata nahin

Prem: Heer wo bht he cute si hai.

Heer: muje ni pata na

Prem: Ooper dekho. Ye rahi. Cute hai na

He made his hand curl around her neck and the other below her chest. He tickled her on neck. She felt the tickling alot that she just tried to jump and opened her mouth. Prem put his thumb into her mouth. She bit his thumb when Prem screamed then she took it in her hand and after pressing it she put in her mouth n then sucked it.

Heer: Bahut....... You are caling me your maid. Tum

Prem: Dekho maid her wo kaam krti he jo hum kehtay aur wo b jo hm ni kehtay. Thats it waise seriously

You are my sweetest angel that I can ever get. My saviour. My most trustworthy.

Ab muje khana de do na please

Heer: No! First I'll brush your hair then

Prem: Mein khana khata hun tum kar dena.

She nodded

Heer was brushing her hair while G3 was making him eat. He really enjoyed that. But she left soon

Heer: Prem your hair are hassling me.

Prem: They are hassling you

Acha ab brush karo ab kharab ni karta.

Heer: Mein karti ni hun.

Prem: Come Here

Heer: uhuh.....

He pulled her hand and made her sit on his thighs. His left hand was swaying around on her neck n chest. Heer's hair stood on one end.

Prem: You look cute in this leotard

Prem: angry

Heer: uhuh...

Prem: upset

Heer: uha..........

Heer: worried

Prem: Then here it goes. I mean comes.

He kissed her passionately His heroic kiss had done something great to Heer. Although she would be kissing Rish after two days but................. kuch hua to tha.

Precap:

Prem getting worried after the drunk night n thinking that he had sex with heer. Prem Confused after his act

Thats

Whats

Called

Long

Udpdate

Howz it first I thought to post in parts as 6a, 6b n 6c.

Will update on 18-4-2010.

Take care.

Tata

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haajoo

@haajoo

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Posted: 15 years ago

#35

I know i had promised 14th but i could not actually I was busy somewhere sorry do comment whoever reads

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...Nikhita...

@...Nikhita...

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Posted: 15 years ago

#36

just read the previous parts and this one......

great ff......

do continue soon!

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Savera Hayat Khan

@JoeJonasRoks

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Posted: 15 years ago

#37

Hey Hajs,

Loved your ff so just joined the site for your ff its outstanding

Awesome dialogues especially

No Flirting

dating

sexing

drinking

and

YUPP full attention to

our family

Prem:

One second............. One second..........hold ur breathe............ Hamari family......... matlab.......................Mein aur tumare sath wo b aise. That will be a nightmare meri aur tumari family. Never I won't even dream that

Heer:

Yeah yeah like i m interested in a hidden flirt no 1. Our😍family meant k Barrey papa bari Maa Herman Preet Mumma Papa Meher Nihaal n TT. And the way you described Heer's dialogue👍🏼 calling prem Hidden flirt...............👏 And the way prem reacts over all those things Heer' says to prem not to do.👍🏼 N then it reveals all that was for a single bday. perfect

And the leap..............

Wanna know the reason why u did that to the awesome ff.

Going in updates start all dialogues were so ver very very👏 n angry heer 😡 fab work

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Savera Hayat Khan

@JoeJonasRoks

Inactive

Posted: 15 years ago

#38

Hey Hajs,

Loved your ff so just joined the site for your ff its outstanding

Awesome dialogues especially

YUPP full attention to our family

Prem: One second............. One second..........hold ur breathe............ Hamari family......... matlab.......................Mein aur tumare sath wo b aise. That will be a nightmare meri aur tumari family. Never I won't even dream that

Heer: Yeah yeah like i m interested in a hidden flirt no 1. Our family meant k Barrey papa bari Maa Herman Preet Mumma Papa Meher Nihaal n TT. Got it

Prem: Heer tum ne pehle kya kaha tha NO what

The way prem tells that he had 4got her bday wow

AFTER THE LEAP

Raising his head He kissed her teary eyes. Though she was silent but her eyes could speak alot.Prem always love her more when there was a chance for a him to have an eye to eye convo with her.

Heer: Take the towel and go

(Heer's hand was in the towel so taking the advantage he pulled her hand with towel his lips were just saying Aao Na) Dont do that.

WoW fabulous work

Prem: Sho shweet of you

Fantastic you r the best Haj's

Heer sirf two days hain tumhein dekhne k becuz phir aap kahan hum kahan

Heer: Yeah yeah I know. I will be on cloud ninety nine I will be far away from you.

What duz that mean Hajs some hidden work huh. Is he the same but you had wrote hez changed whats this. the way he kalls her maid

He made his hand curl around her neck and the other below her chest. He tickled her on neck. She felt the tickling alot that she just tried to jump and opened her mouth. Prem put his thumb into her mouth. She bit his thumb when Prem screamed then she took it in her hand and after pressing it she put in her mouth n then sucked it.

Superb.

Its da Best of Both worlds.

You are my sweetest angel that I can ever get. My saviour. My most trustworthy.

Ab muje khana de do na please

Prem beging 4 food . spectacular bachelor pleading. hmmm

He pulled her hand and made her sit on his thighs. His left hand was swaying around on her neck n chest. Heer's hair stood on one end.

Prem: You look cute in this leotard

She was wearin a leotard amazing

Prem: Then here it goes. I mean comes.

He kissed her passionately🤬 His heroic kiss had done something great to Heer.🤗🤡

Thats fabulous.......😛

Everything was👏 superb👏 👍🏼Heer brushing pj'z hair👍🏼 g3 mking him eat food. the washroom part excellent. Precap😭 se kahin🥺 dil na💔 tut 😔jayye🤪

But on one hand precap was good

OVERALL RATING

🥳9/10❤️