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aishwarya gayen

@aishwaryagayen

Rocker

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Posted: 15 years ago

#81

Originally posted by: luv_kdmhmd
Hi aishu
Mera ff bilkul bhi tragic nahi hia, infact it is passionate and romantic story. I know right the situation I have portrayed in it, does not say this, but trust me it is. I think u will like it how I will unfold the story between premeer. I liked this update, premeer dialogues were so good, full marks to you for the comedy described by you. I hope you solve the problem of arohi soon. I know this comment isn't long but not feeling well so dimaag mein dieas bhi nahi aa rahe, but know this that I loved this update.

hi sia accha accha ab mujhe kaise pata hoga yaar tu aage likh main parke bataungi mujhe tragic laga ya horror aur accha hai koi to kuch passionate likhe u know romantic and all hmmm i dont trust u jab tak tu nahi likhti bhooniyon ka kya baharaosa yaar hihihi dialogue main soch rhai hun kdmhmd ke dialogue writer ki post ke liye apply karu haha main koi arohi ki prob solve nahi karne wali yaar mujhe tragesy likhni hai samjhi yaar hwat happened to u ?? jst relax dont take lots of stress ok tc

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aishwarya gayen

@aishwaryagayen

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#82

ANTAHEEN

CHAPTER – 3

THERE WAS A FIGTH BETWEEN MIND AND MATTER
On one hand she doesn't wants to lie to her friend aditya and she damn don't care what will be the results of her honesty.
On other hand her heart was throbing really fast like a pendulum because she has many confusions and suspection why doesn't he came why ??//

Then she just shook off everything out of her mind and said to herself that arohi let the moment pass. Time will heal everything ……………..

AT A HOSPITAL MORGUE WE CAN SEE A DEAD BODY LYING
AND ITS RELATIVES ARE Crying AROUND THE BODY
And then we can hear a woman saying
Ye kya ho gaya mere bete ko !! ye kaise ho gaya
Arjun ! beta arjun uth na

THEN A DOCTOR CAME AND SAID
MAM ! INKI LAASH EK HAFTE TAK NAHI MILI THI KYUNKI USSE PAANI MEIN DHOONDNA BAHOT HI MUSKIL THA AUR ISSI KARAN HUM BODY KO JYADA DER NAHI RAKH SAKTE APPLOG PLZ FUNERAL KI TAYYARIYAN KIJIYE JYADA SE JYADA ADDHA GHANTA NAHI TO BODY KHARAB HONI SURU HO JAYEGI

THEN A HAVALDAR CAME
MAM JIS TRUCK DRIVER KE TRUCK NE APPKE BETE KI GADI KO HIT KIYA THA WHO BHAAG GAYA HAI AAP KYA FURTHER INVESTIGATION CONTINUE KARENGI ?
AUR INKE PAAS SE HUME YE MILA HAI
EK GOLD CHAIN
MOBILE
CREDIT CARD
AND TAJ RESTAURANT KE DO PURANE BOOKING TICKETS UNKE AUR KOI MS.AROHI KE NAAM PE

THE LADY WHO WAS STANDING NEAR ARJUNS DEAD BODY WAS HER MOTHER

HEARING THE NAME OF AROHI SHE EXCLAIMED THAT SHE DOESN'T KNOWS ANYONE NAMED AROHI BUT AS HER MENTAL STATUS WAS NOT GOOD AT THAT MOMENT SHE DIDN'T DISCUSSED THE TOPIC FURTHER ----------------------
HEAR IN THE MANDAP
Pandit ji said that vivaah sampan hua ab var vadhu bado ka ashirwaad le le

Arohi and aditya took everyones blessings and after getting some taunts from people around they were taken to their room

After much of thinking arohi decided that she will remain quiet about arjun and his chapter is closed in her life
Might be she cant love anyone else like she loved him but she wont even disrespect her friend no her husband now

THEN ADITYA ENTERED THE ROOM
WE CAN SEE TWO PICTURES

AROHI WAS SITTING IN A BED FILLED WITH FLOWER
AND ARJUN WAS LAID UPON A BED OF WOODS FOR HIS FUNERAL

ADITYA CAME AHEAD AND ITS OBVIOUS THAT WHATEVER A MAN WANTS ON THE NIGHT OF HIS MARRIAGE ADITYA WANTS THE SAME AND HE DOESN'T HAVE MUCH HESITATION AS THEY KNOW EACH OTHER FROM A LONG TIME
AROHI DIDN'T LET A WORD OUT OF HER MOUTH AS SHE KNOWS THAT WHEN SHE IS MARRIED TO SOMEONE ITS HER DUTY TO COMPLETE HIS WISH

ADITYA CAME CLOSER TO HER AND STARTED UNPINNING HER DUPATTA
ON THE OTHER HAND A WHITE CLOTH WAS SHIFTED UPON ARJUNS BODY

ADITYA BITED HER KISSED HER LOVED HER THE WHOLE NIGHT
THE FIRE THAT WAS BURNING INSIDE HER WAS A FIRE OF HATRED FOR ARJUN THAT WHY DIDN'T HE CAME , A FIRE OF LOVE FOR ARJUN , A FIRE OF GUILT FOR LOVING AN UNKNOWN PERSON , A FIRE OF DISBELIEF THAT SHE IS LETTING HER TO BE USED BY SOMEONE WHOM SHE DIDN'T LOVED

ON THE OTHER HAND FIRE OF DEATH WAS BURNING OVER ARJUNS BODY , A FIRE WHICH TUNED HIS BODY INTO ASHES

NEXT MORNING THE BED OF AROHI HAS FLOWERS WHICH WERE CRUSHED BY THEIR WEIGHTS
ADITYA WAS SLEEPING BESIDE HER BUT AROHI WAS AWAKE WITH TEARS IN HER EYES
ON THE OTHER HAND ARJUN SLEPT PEACEFULLY ON THE BED OF DEATH FOR HIS LIFETIME LIVING HIS LOVE ALONE TO BE AWAKE …………………….

ANTAHEEN ……………………………….

Love
Aishwarya gayen

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meeshti jain

@meeshti.

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#83

hiii aishu

thats a very sad update

well shocking tooo

arjun died ?

oh my god

wats gonna happen now

i think prem is going to inspect this case

and heer will report everyone about it

well just wait and watch

update soon

Edited by meeshi. - 15 years ago

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anumol

@sweetanu2314

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#84

poor arohi...........who do u want us to picture aditya as?..arjun is dead.....so?anyways..........do continue soon....................

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aishwarya gayen

@aishwaryagayen

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#85

[QUOTE=sweetanu2314]poor arohi...........who do u want us to picture aditya as?..arjun is dead.....so?anyways..........do continue soon....................[/QUOTE]WELL adityas character is as a best friend of arohi who is good but , he is right in his place as arohi never said no to him

and i think his character is portrayed by i think u remember the person acting as shabd in mayka
the person who is now arohis boss in pyaar ka bandhan
i think he suits the character
and as arjun is dead the story will be focused about his and arohis intimacy
heers love
heers bf
prem and heers chit c

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saba khan

@premeeristry

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#86

sssuupeeerrrbbbb update really 👏
comparison b/w arohi n arjun was damm gud
updaye soon.

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srikrithi

@srikrithi

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#87

the way u described both arohi and arjun's situation was............👏.

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topsyturvy23

@topsyturvy23

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#88

hey i just loved the last two updates just now thanks for the pm

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Afreen

@asyasahil928

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#89

wow....that was an amazing update 👏👏👏...but so sad...poor arohi....😭 cant wait for the next part....continue soon...and thanks for the PM...😊

love
Afreen