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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: sanju_veni

hey nice update felt like killing rishab thanks for pm plz update soon



wellthanks
well if u all inissnt i can try and ill rishabh
and even if u say i can even kill prem and bring a new match for heeerrr hahahah

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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: luv_kdmhmd

Hi aishu hi sweety

See I am back to bore you again.šŸ˜†u never bore me no one bores me actually mere ko pakane ki shamta kisi mein nahi u know m the award winner in this section

If really you have started to talk more then it is good, we will more longer updates nowšŸ˜‰, see I am so optimistic. So be you. Yaar see work comes first, so better not neglect it.hahaah longer updates ok surely will giveu longer updates yaya i l b optimistic from now ........ hmmmmm m working only so i l keep up my work i mean studies and all stuffs here

Hey how did you get hurt? Batana toh hai hi nahi na madam ko😔. How are you now? Hey don't pay attention to such weirdos. Ek kaan se sun aur dusre se nikaal. You know why people comment in this way, bcos they are jealous of you, as you are a better student and much better human being than them. Aur agar tu bole toh chal pette hai unhe.šŸ˜‰šŸ˜† Don't give heed to such stupid talks. Ok sweety? Hey sirf main hi nahi hoon tumhe aishu bulane ki list meinšŸ˜†hurt hona mere liye mamuli baat hai main chalte phirte gir jaati hun so dont worry about it actually main apne second floor ke balcony pe baithi thi and we have stairs through it and i was standing right up there and was talking on my celll aur usi time main trip kar gayi aur do stairs pe pair ko balance akrne ke chakkar mein i got a sprain
and m fine now hahah m a better human being i though i was an animal a big elephant good to know that m a human being hmmmm
ha chal peette hai unhe peet ke meribhatakti aatma ko shanti milegi
ha bahot koi hai jo mujhe aishu bulate hai

see I was right it was rishabh. 🤣hahah tu to antaryami hai

God he is such a lier, prem kabhi nahi kahega aisa.😔 fevicol ki tarah heer chipki hai ya tu, ullu. Heer ek thapad nahi dus maaro isse. He deserves much more. Rishabh prem is far better than you. Don't even dare compare yourself with him. rishabh ke bachche main vahan hoti toh main tujhe chapal se marti. Prem plz usse punches maaro. Jaise-2 uske dialogue badte ja rahe hai, mera gussa😔 badta ja raha hai.saare villains lier hi hote hai hahaha rishabh ulluuu hahahhašŸ‘kahan prem aasman mein kaha rishabh narak mein chi ahaha sia thank god tu whaa nahi thi nahi to rishabhke chehre ka geographybadal deti hey bhagwan ahahhaa tera gussa tu gussa bhi hoti hai mujhe pata nahi tha pagal o ko bhi gussa aata hai

Aur prem kab aayega, saari ram katha khatam hone ke baad. Late hi aana tum. 😲😔.hahhaa prem abhi sapne dekh rahah haia rre use pehle le aungi to woh heer ke saath nahi lag jayega toh phir hamara kya hoga yaar

What I expecting from prem, preet is doing. Yes bro go ahead.šŸ‘bolo preet baba ki jayeeeeeeeeeeeeee

I feel she just asked prem was he involved in the bet with rishabh or no. Answer to which is yes, and after that she would not give him a chance to speak. I hope this doesnot happen. Plz prove me wrong Aishu.dont worry she l give him a chance aur waisa kuch nahi hoga asking and all woh toh baad ka drama hai kkuch aur hi hoga jo prem ko wrong prove kar dega

Again your emotional athyachar starts😭. Lovely update sweety. I loved it. I am really excited for next update, plz jaldi karna. Chaho toh promo ko zarorat nahi hai, seedhe update karnašŸ˜‰. Just kidding, do what you want to do. But plz update soon kyunki I am dieing to read that update.tauba tera jalwa tauba tera pyaar mera emotional atyachaar ok i l update only for u i thnk tomorrow or on wednesday ok

Love you

Sia

P.S.: I have replied back to your comment at my ff, do read it

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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: -fsn-

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hiii aishwarya i m really sorry i always reserved & forgot to edit my comment *sigh* plz forgive me i m quite busy with studies hope u understand hey hey dont be sorry sweetheart its ok atleast u read m happy with it only plz dont embarasse me saying sorry i really love my readers and i dont expect sorries from them and being a student i understand the presure of studies and m glad that i got a frnd who is dedicated towards her studies
*back to comment*this story is really amazingthanks
gosh i hate rishab can i plz kill him?šŸ˜³šŸ˜†u sure na ok i l kill him
aww prem is soo sweet & premeer r soo hurt can't see them in painhahaha thats the twist
plz finish their misery soon.i am trying my level best par ye dimag isme naughty ideas ke alawa kuch aata hi nahi
preet is such a good friend
wait for the next update asap
thanks for pms *really help me to catch up with the story*ya sweetheart i l always pm u
luv luv aishwarya gayen
Fatima


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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: mish1996

šŸ˜›hey i like ur ff soo much plzz update 11th part as soon as possible..



thanksforlikingdear
ya will be updating tomorrow or on wednesday
t c

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Posted: 15 years ago
Authors note : hey friends m back but not with a promo but with a full update
This is a treat for u all as I have included many romantic and seductive scenes I think my friend sia was very much awaiting for some private romantic scenes of premeer and I was just making her wait and wait but time has come
I think u l like the first part and will think everything sorted but that not going to happen so do read it completely yups
So here u
goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo

This part is for three of my friends

YASU THANKS FOR UR REGULAR COMMENTS

FSN DEAR U WERE REALLY UPSET FOR NOT COMMENTING BUT ITS RELLY FINE WITH ME TUM PADHTI HO ITNA HI KAAFI HAI

SIAAAAAAA YE PART MAINE TUJHE DEDICATE KIYAAAAAAAAA



PART ---- 11




thadddd !!!!!!!!!!!!
with that the flashback ends



now heer could not even concentrate on driving her mind took over the matter and her drunkard state led to dizziness and sudden unconsciousness
and her car got screeched in a halt and then directly hit a tree all she could hear was prem shouting that heer watch out and then her eyes closed
might be this is the end of her life end of her life of pain as some new obstacles and circumstances are going to be created
and here prem could only hear a sudden screaming form the one he loved and life seemed to be stopped for him when the car hitted the tree and after that silence took over and he ran to the car only to see her love who has kept her eyes closed and blood was streaming down her hands and head

that moment he frozed but his instincts helped him to get over the sudden troma and he picked her up in her arms and ran upto his car to take her to the nursing home but he realized something else

she was druk and taking her to a nursing home would result into more troubles as drunk driving is a serious crime and police would surely arrest her
so he took up his phone and called for the doctor to his home
he was driving as fast as he can as he was fearing that loss of excessive blood from her body can cause harm to her


AT PREMS MANSION NIGHT 11:00 CLOCK

Prem is waiting eagerly outside his bedroom for the doctor to come out

Prem : doctor howz she ? is she allright ?

Doctor : relax mr.juneja she is perfectly ok
Actualy I think mental stress and insomenia has turned to her dizziness and even her drunk state was a small reason for the accident … she is fine jst a bit of cut on her forehead and she was hurted in her hands that it no need to be worried I have injected her to come over her hangover and she l be in a conscious state in an hour

Prem: ok thank you

Doctor : take care of her and I advice u to suggest her not to drink so much

Prem : yups

AFTER THAT THE DOCTOR LEAVES AND PREM ENTERS HIS BEDROOM

HEER WAS SLEEPING PEACEFULLY AND PREM GOES AND SITS BESIDE HER ON BED

He takes her hand in his hand and then watches her with some tears escaping from his eyes

Prem: meri ek galti ki sajah tum apne aap ko abhi tak de rahi ho m sorry heer ! m sorry !

And then the song plays in backkground(sorry frnds I know ading songs is dramatic but I love the song and I was searching for a situation to include it so her it goes )

Heerein moti main na chhau
Main to chhau sangam tera
Main to teri saiyaan
Tu hai meraaaaaaa
(prem stares with hi numb eyes to heer with holding her palm securely in his hands)



Saiyaannnnnnnnnn !!!!! aaaa saiyaannnn aaaaaaa !!

Tu jo chule pyaar se aaram se marr jaun
Aaja chanda baahon mein tujhme hi gum ho jaun main tere naam mein kho jaun (he stares at moon and then at her face remembering her first fall towards him at the corridoor and their staring at each other )
Siaynnaa saiyaannn

Mera dil kkhushi se jhoome
Gaaye raatein
Pal pal mujhe dubaya
Aate jaate ( he remebers their small fight art her first fall and then laughs on his childish behaviour he did that day )
Tujhe jeet jeet haru
Ye pran pran waaru ( he remembers some incident which is still foggy a clip ,heer standing there , her fall in love , ……………………..)
Haye aise main niharu
Teri aarti utaru
Tere naam se jure hai saare naate (
Saiyaaannnnnn aaaa saiyaan aaaaaaa

Banke mala prem ki
Tere tan pe jar jar jaun ( he goes near heer and kisses her forehead with all his love and care )
Baithu naiyaan preete ki
Sar se marr jaun main
Tere pyaar se marr jaun
Saiyaan aa saiyaan aaaa



Ye naram naram nasha hai
Badhta jaye
Koi pyaar se ghughatia deta uthaye ( then a lock of hair was disturbing heer so he took his hand and with all safety he put the lock behind her ear )
Ab bawra hua mannn
Jag ho gaya hai roshan
Ye nayi nayi suhagan
Ho gai hai teri jogan
Koi prem ki poojaran mandir sajaye

Saiyannnnn aaaaaa saiyaan aaaaaaaa a

Saiyaan aa saiyaan aaaaa


Heere moti main na chahu ( he tooks the blanket and oulled it over heer )

Main to chahu
sangam tera

main na janu
tu hi jane


main to teri
tu hai mera


main na janu ( he is going to leave the room when someone holds his hand )
tu hi jane

main to teri
tu hai mere a ( he looks back and saw a pair of beautiful red eyes were looking in to his )

main to teri


Tu hai meraaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa ( and then a soft angelic voice called his name……………… prem!)


Prem: heer

She tries to get up as she is still dizzy and the hangover is not over yet soooo prem helped her



Heer : main yaha ……………….. she asked this looking aroud confused


Prem: who tumhara accident ho gaya thaa

Heer : who prem …………. But prem didn't let her speak he put his hand over her soft red lips

Prem: nahi heer aj nahi aj main bolunga plz
He puts his hand down of her mouth and heer stares her with love and her small eyes which were likely to be half closed ………………..

Heer main tumse bahot pyaar karta hua uss din cliff pe jo hua who sab misunderstanding thi and even uske baad jo college mein tumhari insult hui usme mera koi haat nahi tha that was all rishabs plan that scoundral presented everything in such a way that I was misunderstood even when arjun came up to me to ask me about I told him the truth and he believed but u didn't and even I didn't got a second chance as u have already left and I didn't have the courage to go back to you

I just love u love u with all my soul and heart and that's the truth
I love u like anything and I promise I wouls never betray you
We lost 3 years of our life now no more I cant live without you I cant
I just love you ( and with that prem shattered on the floor with his kness hitting the cinders)


Heer got up from her bed and reached him


Heer : I love u too prem
I love u toooo




And after that 3 words heer bent ahead to catch his cold lips
Her hands clutching to his shirt ( FOR HEER PREMS ARMS WERE LIKE HEAVEN AND SHE WAS JST THINKING OF REMAINING IN HIS ARMS )
They kissed each other with all passion and love which they kept aside in their hearts
Prem moved his lips softly on her lips creating sensation while heer kept her lips still in response
Prems hand moved to his waist and their bodies met each other ( FOR PREM GEETTING HEERS RUST WAS LIKE A DREEAM AND ITS COMING TRUE AND EVEN HE WAS ALL LOST IN HER FRAGNANCE AND LOVE )
It seemed like they were not ready even to breathe but afteer a few minutes when they felt the need of breathing they letted each other go and heer rested her head on prems shoulder
Prem then took her into his arms and he head still rested on his shoulder
He took her to the bed and placed her with all care and love in his eyes
He then kissed her bare neck softly followed by chain of kisses from her neck to her ears
He then kissed her forehead and eyes
And then they captured each others lips once again
Their palms locked into each others
And prem leaned over her body and heer unbuttoned his shirt
She took over the sheet to cover herself
And the passionate night began
They kept each other awake throughout the night on which they made love to each other






AND THEN THE MORNING CAME THE DREADED MORNING AFTER THE BEAUTIFUL NIGHT ………………..

Prem was still awake and he went to take shower and then he came and sat near heer
His gaze was not shifting from her as he felt like if he let his eyelashes fall the night , the angel and everything will just vanish
And his fear turned into truth




HEER WAKED UP MOANING AND GROANING CATCHING HIS HEAD FROM HER ONE HAND
Everything was foggy infront of her eyes she can figure out a man sitting next to her but her hang over was making her feel dizzy

Heer: where m I ????

Prem : (just bent ahead and hugged her)

Heer: now she knew whom was sitting next to her
Her head was paining like hell
And she was shocked to see her status of herself
Her dress was unzipped
And she was sleeping in someone else bedroom and she was feeling weird that the guy who hated the most was hugging her

She just took all her strength and made prems arms away from herself

Heer: what the hell r u doing ? and why m I here ??????…………………………………………..





That's it friend I hope u l hate me after this but my mind didn't had any other idea so I used this but I promise next part ek aur jhatka dungi for sure


Do click on like buttons plz plz plz

And ya do comment I l be waiting eagerly for that

Take care all love u all

Regards
Aishwarya gayen


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Posted: 15 years ago
aishwarya, omg they slept together but heer wasnt in her senses....oh poor prem, whatever he appologised and confessed was atually unheard by her....
oh now she is going to misunderstand him and hate him more....gosh i cant wait to read ahead...
one sugeestion, can u use a smaller font...it is soo big ....lolz
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hey Ashwarya,

first of all i am really very very sorry for not commenting on part 10... that was really very sweet 😳 of you to dedicate that part to me... and me a stupid fool.... reserved a place but forgot to commentšŸ˜•... i hope you will not take that very seriously and will forgive my for my mistake...

i really am SORRY dear!!! plz naa forgive me... *holding ears*...

and i promise i will get back commenting for both parts,10 and 11... as soon as i finish reading your latest update...

so this spot is **reserved** for my comments on part 10 and 11...

**unreserved**


see i am back just as i promised...

so here goes the comment for both marvelous parts...

PART 10

ok first of all thanx alot for dedicating that part to me... i am so 😳 at this gesture of yours...

and next... the incident you had to face in the class... come on yar... some people are just jealous of your abilities... such morons tend to tease you and bring down your moral whenevr they get a chance of doing that... so the simple most solution to deal with all this is... IGNORE them... and give it a damn to all crap they speak about you... ek kaan se suno aur dosre se bahar nikalo... your life would be much more easier...

and oh my GOD!!! what you did to your leg??? i really hope you must have been fine by now...

ok now lets come to the main thing... THE UPDATE!!!

do i need to say time and time again... that you are doing a fantastic job... trust me dear... you really are too good with words...

though it was a bit short part but i really enjoyed reading...

so that's the real story behind... i knew that Prem isnt that much responsible for all.. i knew from the moment you mentioned rishabh, that stupid idot a**h*** had some serious relation with all the troubles in Heer's life... disgusting freaky psysho... ruined Premeer's life... plz yar Ash kill him... and plan the worst death for him... i can suggest very very painfull ways to end his life... and HELLO that doesnt mean that i am very brutal and cruel... i am a very sweet girl.😳.. trust me... bit jab Rishabh ka naam aata hai tou... errrr😔... my blood boils...

and Preet's reaction towards the situation was very cool... a true friend he is... i wish he wish he would have thrown that idiot down the cliff...

poor Prem... though he isnt totally innocent (it was a bet for him in the begining) but still he tried to clarify but she misunderstood him...

and then the accident... you described that scene very nicely... Prem's reaction and all was very well well written šŸ‘...

so that's it for part 10... i hope i made up for my mistake by giving such detailed comments...
now you are happy naa... and forgiven me naa???

and here goes for latest update...

PART 11


ahh... pretty hot... much awaited Premeer romantic moments finally happened...

very well written...

but again yar... part was very short... i couldnt get enough... plz hun... make a bigger part next time....

but what the hell??? Heer didnt remember anything... why why why???

plz yar clear up everything now... i just want them to be together...

and you were right that part really came up as a treat... except for Heer not remembering the night moments...

and now i am wating even more eagerly for next part as you said you will be giving a shocker in that one...

plz update asap... warna main pm bhej bhej kar tumhara jeena mushkil kar doon gišŸ˜‰... and mark my words dear i will really do that if i dont get an update in less than 4 0r 5 days...

ok i think thats enough of my chatter patter... agar kuch aur likha main tou you will think of me as a big time PAKAO... and i really dont want people to get that impression about myself...

**edit**
oops... i forgot to mention about the song "saiyyan"... you know what??? when i went to bed last night i remembered that i havent written anything about the song in my comment... and then i decided that i will do that in the morning... immediately after i get my hands on the pc... silly me naa???

the song was very well chosen... it fit the situation completely... i love the song from the time Mouni Roy performed on it in Zara Nach ke Dikha... from then since whenever i hear that song it gives me goosebums... and same happened while reading your update...

i really appreciate you for chosing this song... awesome job done...šŸ‘

ok dear...
have fun...
love you loadsšŸ¤—
Suhana.
Edited by Suhana Ahmed - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
kitni achi update hai
i love it
iam waiting for next part
update the next part asap
plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
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Posted: 15 years ago
beautiful update..loved it
OMG Heer was not in her sense? this is going to create more misunderstanding
Poor Prem..her confessed but she was not in her sense
can't wait for the next update
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Posted: 15 years ago
awesome update
please don't seperate Heer and Prem again!!! Please
continue asap
thanks for the pm
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