New SS: Tanhai Part 9 pg69 Dec 27 - Page 3

Originally posted by: *Guli*

Okay so like.... i am finally here... and omg!! that was sooo freaking short!!!! i started reading it.... and boom.. its over!!! kya yaar... i swear! i have to like hound you and patches...not fair 😭😭😭 vaise...you wont be complaining for part 1...you know why...😛...how was wedding?

anyways...... back to my comments..... haila.... they are sooo nice and loving right now!! why... why do u want to ruin people's happiness!!!😡😡😡 wats wrong with u??? they both love each other.. let them go!!. but nope.. ur last line about washing away happiness.... uff!!😭😭😭 so sad!! omg...dont yell yaar...not fair...its a story...calm down...😆😆😆 someone is getting hyper...one of these days you are gonna call me a cow 😡😡😡

i dont even want to know wat the heck will happen next! poor kids man!!!.......... well.. i am waiting..... i am here and i commented....... so can i just get my update now?😆 makes my life easier!!!!😆...... lol...🤣🤣🤣🤣 🤣🤣🤣🤣 🤣🤣🤣🤣 🤣🤣🤣🤣 im laughing and you know why 😉😉😉

man i didnt even catch typos.. i think its becuz... i didnt pay attention thats why!!😆😆😆.... cant expond our dictionary today!!!!!!😆 oh well.. next time..... tauba...not paying attention to my story 😲😲..im hurt jaani...like HURT 💔....🥺 (more effect 😛) ...jaao...me not talkin to you! *hmph*


plz cont soon jaani!!!!!!😳

Originally posted by: indiandoll98

my spot! 😃

Originally posted by: purplestar22

Reserved..

Originally posted by: sourpuss

OMG Di this was amazing! I cannot WAIT to read the next part! So yeah, in case you haven't figured out, I DO want you to continue! 😃 lol...did you or did you not...i didnt quite get it 😆😆...how have you been yaar...😃😃😃

The way you wrote the prologue was just fantastic. It totally gave a little taste of what's to come, and that taste just gets you craving for so much more, that there's no way anyone can be content with just one little lick. (What is with all the taste metaphors?!) were you hungry when you read or commented...he he...i do that a lot when im hungry...relate everything to food...lol 😉😉😉

PM me when you update? 😳 of course 🤗

Love,

Bhav (:

Originally posted by: stunninstar

wowwwwwwwww...................awesome......continue soonnnn....waitin fr more..

Originally posted by: -Pooji-

yes i also want u to continue
wow the prologue was awesum
if u can plz pm me when u update

Originally posted by: Momana

Reserved....
luved it can't wait for part. one... plzz me pm me wen u update.it... thnxs
nd plzz cont

Originally posted by: rit435

thanks for writing a new fresh story. do continue to write. can not wait for the next update.

Originally posted by: premeer928

awww...thats an awesome beginning... loved it. 👏 wow yaar...what a cliffhanger...first part and after that only all happiness will be gone...😭 cant wait for the next part...hope u update soon and do PM me when you update again. 😊

Originally posted by: angel82

wow jaz , a new one.....am soo happy......love reading ur stories.... thanks yaar...im glad you enjoy it 😳

as usual , interesting prologue and very well written ....I loved how you describe the intensity of their love from childhood to adulthood.... you will see glimpses of Premeer love over the years...you will understand once i get the story going 😉😉😉

I am sure its prem and heer ......it has to be ....those lines of how he protected her from other school boys, those dialogues, it has to be Prem...😃 and if it is prem then the girl will surely be his heer...isnt it? right on...great guess...you really know Prem's character even before i got to him 👏

eagerly waiting for the next part to know....

oh but the last line was indicatiing misery and sorrow ....but i'm sure they will live it together... 😈 just wait and watch yaar...main kya kya karti hoon iss kahani mein 😛😛😛

Do continue soon next update soon 😳

luv

angie

Originally posted by: sanju_veni

hey nice start i do want u to continue...plz add me to ur pm list

Originally posted by: Intellienough

can't wait for next update..so u will be updating next week only...good start as usual

Originally posted by: aati1429

interesting concept... continue soon!!

Originally posted by: Anhdara13

So ominous that end. I cannot wait for the next bit.

You know, the first thing I thought when I read the prologue, what with the three elder brothers, and middle class elder boyfriend was that the pair are Veera and Nihaal. *raises eyebrow* If it is, it'd be damn interesting to see how you write them, that's for sure.

Cannot wait for more!

Love,
Radz

Originally posted by: cute_bear

omg another ff....and u have to continue..and who is this couple...im thinkin nihaaal and veer coz veers only gt 3 brothers....but forget that u have to update soooonnnn

Originally posted by: shabo24

Hell ya continue it. :) 😲😲 shabbo!! language 😉😉😉

Ohh now I think it's Nihaal and Veera as well. And than they go home and than...something. Don't look at me like that, you are the writer, you tell me what's going to happen. 😆 lol...tu bhi...Nihaal aur Veera...sorry to burst your bubble...aage aage what pairing i have made 😃

Awesomly written, loved how he stopped everyone from bullying her but my fae part was the description of the girl as a bride, it was awesome, and the idea of her walking down a dark street dressed in bright red is so eerie. Loved it! aww...thanks...i actually wanted to add more but ran out of time and patience...lol...im glad you caught the red against black contrast...not many did...actually no one else mentioned it 👏

--shabz

Originally posted by: brainychild92

whats ss stand for..secret shaadi..lol

im really liking it.. have no idea who the couple are tho... but seems intereesting.. plz let m eknow when u continue *NOTICE: i said when and not if !!*lol

Originally posted by: maha_k

great yar continuee

Originally posted by: 9rpatel

awesome prolouge
please u should continue!!!!!!
if u can pm me when update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Originally posted by: kis desh Rocks!

seems interesting,, can't wait to read it.. I really hope u continue writing it.. You are such a good writer seriously... I love all your FF and SS..

will wait for the PM...