Losing u hurts ONE SHOT... UpDt........ Pg7....... - Page 4

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Posted: 16 years ago
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woooooooooooooooooooowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww fantastic.....i've read somethin soo good after sooo many days
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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesome part 2
Prem 😭 jaha dekho dukh.... i wanna know wht heer does.. please update soon......
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thanx a tonnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn all of u!...............I am soooooooooooooo glad u all liked this part too and well..........want another one too!.................😊
I thought it would be the last part..........lekin as u all want another one............here's the next longggggggggggg part.............I just hope u all enjoy it too............and plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz do send in ur valuable comments!................😊

Prem was shattered as he walked away from Gaytri's room ………into the hall…………where Preet who had witnessed evrything walked after Prem trying to stop him………but Prem wasn't listening!............Afterall the blind faith he had in his mother had shattered………….all these years the trust Prem had bestowed upon his mother had shattered!..................and as gaytri comes down too calling out---- Prem………..ruk jaa beta…………meri baat toh sunnley!................Prem for whom all was said and done………….walked put of the Juneja house…………into his black merc…………..and drove into the rainy night which was not dark at all when compared with the darkness Prem felt himself pushed into………..by the person who meant the most to him………………

There Chahat stood at the window……….looking up at the rainy moonlit night……….Heer who had somehow managed to adjust to the fact that Prem was the guy Geet had fallen for……….walks in tired……….the moment she sees an innocent chahat look up at the sky and smile………..all he worries seemed to have vanished………as she walked towards her and says--- Chahat?...............

Chahat turns around and is all smiles seeing who it was…………..she hugs Heer tight who in turn kisses her…………..

She then asks Heer---- Mamma……….Chahat ko pata nahiin kii aasmaan mein ek hii chaand kyun hai?..................

Heer picks up Chahat in her arms and putting her in bed she says--- Jaise mummy ka paas ek hii chahat hai…………waise hii iss aasmaan ke sitaron ke pass ek hii chaand hai!.............

Chahat replies—Mammy yeh kaisa jawaab diya aapney Chahat ko?............

Heer replies smiling--- Waisa hii jawaab jaisa Chahat ne sawaal poocha!...........

They both smile and Heer lies down next to chahat…………..

There a broken and sad Prem walked along a lonely road………….drinking he staggered along the pathway with his car parked near by………..He remembers Gayri's words………….and then how he had been mad at Heer in the restaurant years ago when he had accused her of going ot with Rajveer!.............and then that fateful night………..and how Heer left him at the station…………

Prem shouts out loud---- KYUUUUUUUUUUNNNNNNNNNNN MAA?...............KYUN KIYA AAPNEY AISA?................KYUNNNNNNNNN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

There Heer wakes up with a start……….she could feel beads of perspiration on her forehead……….Just when her phone rings!

She gets up and comes out of the room…………..thinking---- Yeh toh Prem kaa phone hai………..itnii raat ko?..........

She picks up the phone and says irritated—Hello?............

No one speaks…………….There u see a shattered Prem………..who stood wondering just moments ago wondering whom to turn to………whom to talk to?...........Who to tell how bad and betrayed he felt!?................It was then that he decided to call Heer!.................

Prem just listens to Heer's voice………tears flew down his cheeks and lost somewhere in the rain………….(Prem's sad music palys in the background)…………..

Heer says ---- Main jaanti hoon Prem tum ho!.............Aaj office mein itna kuch kehney ke baad bhi kuch kehna reh gaya hai kya?...............

Prem doesn't say anything as he realized how much Heer hated her!............

Heer says further--- Chup kyun ho Prem?............Chahtey kya ho tum?.............Mujhey akela chod kyun nahiin detey?................Kaise samjaaon?..........Kitni baar samjhaaon tumhey………..kii tumhaara mujhse aur mei beti se koi rishtaa nahiin hai!..............

Prem closes his eyes and cries …………in utter dismay!................

He sobs---Heer aaj mera har rishtaa mujhse rooth gaya hai………..ajj mera har apna………..jaise……….jaise kahiin peechey choot gaya hai……………kaash……….kaash tum mujhey samajh paati………..yaa phir main tumhey samjhaa paata kii mujhpe kya beet rahi hai…………Aaj………..yeh Prem Juneja apney har rishtey koo haar gayaa…………khud apney har rishtey se haar gayaa!.............Aaj yeh sab naam………… yeh shohrat ………….yeh paisa………….sab kuch benaami lagta hai…………aur yeh zindagi EK DUM BEMATLAB!.................

Heer listened confused…………somewhere down within she felt something was wrong somewhere but her ind didn't let her ask Prem what the matter was…………just then her residence phone began to ring………Heer looked up startled as she walked to pick it up…………

She says—Dekho Prem mujhey kuch smajh nahiin aa raha kii tum kya keh rahey ho?...............

Prem says softly--- Rehney do Heer…………..Ek aakhiri baar…………kuch kehnaa tha tumsey…………..(Prem walked on the road staggering at times………..not seeing the car which speeded toward him!)………..Heer falling in love with u was the BEST THING happened to me………….aur………..ho sakey toh mujhey maaf kar dena………..aur jab bhi yaad karnaa toh nafrat se nahiin balki muskuraatey hue yaad karnaa……………Kehney kii zaroorat toh nahiin hai par phir bhi………..HUMAARI CHAhAt ka khayaal rakhnaa…………jab who badii ho jaaye………..toh ho sakey toh ussey usskey Prem Papa ke baarey mein zaroor bataana……………..Kehnaa he loved him a lot…………….(The car made way towards Prem who didn't listen to the horn the driver was blowing!)…………Heer ALVIDA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😭 (The car hits Prem as the driver lost control of the breaks as the road was slippery………….and Prem falls on the ground unconscious………..his head bleeding………..and the phone falls from his hand and breaks)……………

Those last words caught Heer tght---- ALVIDA!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Heer remembered the last time Prem had bid her good bye…………

She says—Prem tum……tum theek toh ho?...............Tum ho kahaan?.................There was no reply………………

She picks up the other phone quickly…………it was Preet who tells her all that had happened in the Juneja house………..he asks—Bhabhi ……….bhaiyaa aapkey paas toh nahiin hain naa?.............

Heer was not listening………..She throws away the phone……….and runs downstairs…………and as she runs at full speed the song ORabba plays in the background!.................😊

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Posted: 16 years ago
#34
awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeee too good very nice part waitinggggggggggg for next asap.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#35
Great update. Plz do post next chapter. And continue SOOOOON
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Posted: 16 years ago
#36
Ohh my god such a nice part...👏👏
now there is a twist...😲
i m dying to c heer's expression n wht she will do now...😃
very nice update..😃
waiting for the next part curiously ... 😛


Ayesha😉
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Posted: 16 years ago
#37
my spot
awesome part👏
loved it ⭐️
update soon😃
Edited by noor arshad - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#38
oh this was so good and so sad at the same time...please update the OS soon....waiting for it...good work dear!!!
Edited by desichica - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#39
hey sheeba
that was so sad...😭 but I loved prem's dialogues to heer...they were amazing. 👏 Prem in a accident 😲...hope he is ok . thanks for the PM and continue soon...😊


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Edited by premeer928 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#40
Plz continue. This is better than even the real story.
Well done

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