SS: In Search of Chahat Prt5pg26 8/10 - Page 11

*gussa muh*

Shall I thank you in advance for the PM that you DIDN'T send me about this one? (yes, sarcasm)

The rule is, if you are writing it, I am reading it...in the future, do me the kind favor of sending me a PM, please madam.

Okay, lemme go ready your short masterpiece...hope you've been well...i'll get back to u with my comments...

Love,
P

(PS: I'm not really gussa at you - but I just wanted to get my point across....please PM me when you write!!!!!)

Alright...here we gooooooooooo!!!!!


First of all let me inform you that I am absolutely in love with Muskaan and adore all of her scenes...even more than Premeer these days, I look forward to her scenes.

So naturally, when I saw that you were writing a SS that focuses on her, I more or less jumped for joy. It was my excitement for Chahat coupled with my excitement over another masterpiece from you. Double whammy? I think so! =)

Getting to the story - let me just say that it was...predictable. I mean, anyone could have guessed the direction in which the plot would flow...but the beauty of it was your words...the way in which you wrote it - of course.

I was also pleased to see that this is the first story of yours (that I have read - dunno if you've written more SSes...) that featured the same Prem-Heer that we see in the show. You handled them wonderfully - keeping every nuance of the character in tact...incredible.

Ok...I"ll stop blabbering and comment now...

Part 1:

I LOVED how Heer was imagining Prem picking Chahat up from school....😍...I can imagine it tooo.....what a beautiful scene...he would indeed, as Heer thought, make a wonderful father. 😍

What can I say about the light-hearted banter between Chahat-Heer...its so very characteristing, and so entertaining....she really is Heer's daughter, isn't she? Dono ek se badh kar ek hai... I just love Chahat...hahahaha loved her - its not my fault that the Ice-Cream man is standing there....and how she used Heer's lines on her about khali pet ice cream nahi khani chahiye...that was very very well written. Loved it.

Heer's panick over losing her daughter was wonderfully written too...I love how independent she was shown to be in the beginning when she automatically decided she didn't have 2 crores and no where to get it...shows how over the years, she's really distanced herself in every other way from Prem and the Junejas...how she doesn't even identfy herself as part of their family anymore...I like how you were able to shine light on that. Even after the guy mentioned going to Prem for the money, she hesitated a little...I liked that. But in the end, of course, I would want nothing more than for her to go to Prem so that they could go get their daughter back together.

Part 2:

The part where she hesitates to claim herself as Prem's wife...that was too painful...how hard it must be for her - understandably. She hadn't said the words in 6 years...and after all that time, she was being all but forced to spit them out. I can't imagine it would be easy after building a wall of defenses for six years...its funny how this one incident will break all of Heer's barriers that she's worked so hard for so long to build.

What can I say about Preet? Lakshman the great...I will forever be in awe of his loyalty to his Heer Bhabhi and...yes, Prem Bhaia too - despite everything.

When he finds out about Chahat, you could tell that he was almost disgusted with Prem for leaving both of them this time while the 1st time it was just Heer...I am glad in your story, Heer tells him that she was the one that told Prem to leave...I am glad that it was her words that restored a bit of Preet's respect for his brother.

Notice how at this time in the story, the brother's weren't even speaking to one another (of course, I'm sure you noticed) and as soon as one is in trouble - in this case someone they love...they forget all else and run to their Prem bhaia...thats what I love about these guys...that no matter what, at the end of the day, their love and loyalty ...their bond stants supreme.

I love how Preet took things into his hands while Prem couldn't be there...how he handled everything just the way Prem would do...he really is Prem's parchaii in a whay, isn't he? 😳

I just have to take a minute to say again how much I LOVE Preet-Heer's relationship...the amount of respect he harbors for her...her adoration for him. It just gives me the warm fuzzies...😳😆

Hehehehe....I can totally imagine Mr. Prem Juneja all heated up at the airport over not knowing WTH is going on. hehehehe...

Love how when I read it, time seemed to stop for a moment at the airport when Heer said "Prem" under her breath and then he realized that she was there and she, without thinking twice, forgot all else and ran into is arms...the one place where she could find comfort and solace. The whole bit was sooooo beautifully written, Jaz.

I am surprised the brainy Prem Juneja didn't figure out that Chahat was his daughter right off the bat...hehehe I wanted to hit him on the upside of his head at that moment. It was cute tho - for Heer to retort with a "humari Chahat"...I loved that...and then how realization Dawned on Prem...how he realized that she had named their kid Chahat just as they had planned. The whole thing was t tooooooo sweet....that is of course, until Prem's anger unleashed...wait, no...that was cute too. 😳

Okay...I'm going to stop there for now - I dunno if its FF or my computer, but I am having one hell of a time trying to get this written and posted - its just being slow and finicky...soooo I will stop here, and comment on Part 3 on Monday when I get back...

Go ahead and post Part 4 if you want...I will look forward to having something to read upon my return. Have a great weekend, and oh yea - I don't think I ever congratulated you on graduating...CONGRATS dear! 🤗

Okies...gotta rush...see you soon...

Loads of Love,
P




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Originally posted by: indiandoll89

mine! 😛

because i love you...i wont complain tht you didnt comment...but...i expect a double comment after the next update 😃😃😃

Originally posted by: Pachu.P

OMG...loved it jaani !! OMG! you know...im not digging the name change ...abhi jiju ko hata diya...😆...jagda hua hai kya...😉

Bechari Chahat..still yet in the hands of those kidnappers...uff !! 😡 Jazu tu mujhe un log ka address de and ill go fix them!! I shapath!! 😡right...you couldnt be bothered to come come to your twinnies dance graduation...and you will do this...tauba...muh maat kulva mera 😛😛

Prem the bull is here !! Woot Woot!! Ab aayega maazzaaa since he also went lookin 4 her !! Wohoo!! Aur Prem-Heer scenes were just too 😳 i can imagine Prem feeding Heer sandwich n juice..hayeeee 😳 sandwich aur juice se yaad aaya...im hungry!! 😆 already at work and didnt have breakfast 😭

Aur Preet Harman...waah !! Laxman-Bharat pairing to the T!! Kya support hain apne Prem Bhai aur Heer Bhabhi ke liye...👏

Loved it jaani..hopefully in next part or so...Chahat will b back..😳well...chahat is 'back'...so to speak...just u watch...aage aage kya karti hoon main 😈

aur haan..kaunsa brain u talkin abt? hehe..i have brain jaani..its just that i use it only "sometimes" 😉 like we ALL Saalis do...gtta stick together naa..😆oh ya...saali's zindabad!!! speaking of which...omg...its nearly august...wedding is just around the corner!!! 😲

Continue sooonnn 👏

Originally posted by: LilyGurl

I'll Be Back😎

😆...where'd u go..must be far...j/k 😉
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Originally posted by: -Pooji-

Hey
Wow that was fantastic
toooo gooood
i am now really curious who is the kidnapper?
thankz for pm
i loved it

thanks yaar...glad that you liked it...all secrets will be flushed out in part 4 😃😃😃

Originally posted by: yoyojazzy

that was really good..........i wonder if theyll find her...........eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeh cant wait

i think its rampal

thanks for reading...and good guess with rishab...but the truth will come out soon!! 😛😛😛

JAZ

Originally posted by: stunninstar

lol... wonderful.... waiting fr next part...

thanks...next part up soon!! 😃😃

Originally posted by: Dark Love

Who could it be? RR? 😲nice guess...next part will explain everything 😉😉

You, little child, are REALLY GOOD w/the suspense and emotions! I've been gripping to the edge of my seat (bed) this whole time...Prem's reaction is amazing! *hugs Prem* omg...speaking of edge of the bed...my niece just like rolled off of the bed and knocked my fan over...🤣...it was so funny...i laughed til i cried!! 😆

And Heer...expected act from a mother! i thought she as a bit nagging but i guess that is natural 😉😉😉

I loved the dialogues, especially the "if something happens to her main zameen aasmaan aik kardoonga aur un kidnappers ko maardoonga"...something along those lines...was fab! thanks...i liked that one too 😳😳

And I'm EXTREMELY sorry for not commenting last time, I haven't really been in the commenting mood these days =/ aare yaar...why sorry...happens to everyone...has happened to my many times 😆😆😆...i hope you are inspired to comment after the next update...i think you will have lots to say 😛😛

Anyway....looking forward tot he next part! will be posted soon! 😃

Originally posted by: angel_60107

awww! so touchy.......plz do continue asap...........😊

thanks...will do...😳

Originally posted by: Momana

luvvvvv it..XD

thanks 😊

Originally posted by: premeer928

wow...that was awesome. 👏 loved heer's motherly love and pain she was sensing for her child...it was so sad though...😭 prem's scenes were amazing as well. cant wait to see what the juneja bros do to save chahat...plz update soon and thanks for the PM. 😊

thanks hun...im glad that you enjoyed the update...then next part will be up soon...😃

JAZ

Originally posted by: sweetness4eva

Umm, i m sorta outta words? I know I have said, it was awesome/superb etc etc etc countless times! So i have NO clue what this was? Fantabulous? Man, I love the way you write Jaz!!! Its just wonderful!! I loved this whole part, and i ll be waiting for the next one!! and Thank you for the PM!!!! Plus, did i tell you i loved the Premeer moments? And for some reason i seem to be obsessed with the three brothers? I loved how they go out together for chahat..its all unsaid, the unity is JUST there! Prem doesnt have ask them to come along, they get in the car BEFORE him!! And absolutely loved the end!!!

Thanks for writing such an awesome SS!!!!

😆...im glad that you found your words...i LOVE your comments 😃😃...ooh...btw...i like the word "fantablous"...its catchy....ha ha...thanks for reading that commenting yaar...the next part will be up soon...not too many Premeer scenes...but major drama and stuff happening...i think you should enjoy it...😳...
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Originally posted by: Ayesha24

It was awesome...!!😉
Loved all the scenes...👏
Premeer scenes were amazing...😃
cant wait to see how prem n his bro vil save chahat...😊
Update soon...😉
Thankxx for the PM...😊

Ayesha😉

hey yaar...thanks...im glad you enjoyed it...i love the brothers!! they should have them more on the show 😃😃

Originally posted by: Innocent02

fantastic !!!👏👏👏
such an emotional scene between Prem & Heer
written very well !👍🏼
it was really very emotional & touching !
everyone is balming themsleves for Chahat getting kidnapped😆
gud point she didn't scream so maybe she knows that person.
Maybe its Jasmeet aunty🤣
aww....poor Heer.She got soo weak but we got another PH moment 😉
loved the last scene "Humari Chahat ko vapus...." shooo shweet heer!🤗
then Prem cumz to heer...this scene was wow !!!!
this scene reminded me of Main Hoon Na when SRK was going on the mission n his mom said"mujhay apnay dono baytay wapus chahiye"
awesome update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
loved it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
sudnay isn't tht far.....we'll b waiting😉
Thanks for this part😊



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thanks yaar...im glad that you liked the update...and ya...she didnt see the person...but like i had mentioned...think chemical sedative 😉😉😉...lol...jasmeet aunty...now that would be a nice twist...too bad i didnt think of it...😆😆 sorry for the delay...had some stuff come up...sorry...😕...but next part will be up soon...😃😃

Originally posted by: resham12345

The Update was really really good.
I loved it, can't wait to see who kidnapped Chahat.
Update soon.
Thanks for the pm

thanks luv...glad you enjoyed it...next part up soon.. and the truth will be out 😉

Originally posted by: aati1492

beautiful gesture of love.. really nice!!

Too much love.. please continue soon

thanks...next part will be up soon 😃

JAZ

I love you too Jazu! *hugs* But seee seee seee I commented on Ek Pal, which believe it or not took a lot out of me! 😳 😳

Originally posted by: kis desh Rocks!

nice and exciting part... waiting to read how are they gonna free her form the kidnappers and who the kidnappers actually are...

glad that you enjoyed the part yaar...the next part will fulfill all of your wishes...stay tuned 😃😃😃

Originally posted by: Suhana Ahmed

awesome...'

very nice update...

update asap...

regards,

Suhana.

thanks...next part up soon 😊

Originally posted by: reenasv

hope chaht will be back in next part.
premheer scenes were amazing .
super update.
continue soon. waiting.

glad that you liked the premeer scenes...😳😳 i tried to make it a bit touchy with out making it too much 😆😆 next part up soon 😊

Originally posted by: cute_bear

oh..that was so gooodddd...prem and heer are coming together...and i just wish chahats ok...i hope they get the kidnapper.....but who could the kidnapper be?....i thought g3 but it cant be because why would she want him on his knees...i agree shes mean..but..oh well i have to think about it and wait till the next update dont i?...hmm..nywyz loved the update and premeer comforting eachother and looved when heer said to prem hamari chahat..yay..update soon...

guess yaar..try and guess who the kidnapper is...either way...the truth will be out soon...😉😉...in the next part 😃😃...gayatri...kidnapper...no...but nice one...she wouldnt do that...or would she 😛😛😛...next part will be up soon...promise 😳

Originally posted by: shabo24

That was totally not a filler part! So much happened!

And fine, no Preet, no accomplice. Maybe it's Gayatri. *hmm* 🤔

You could kinda see their love gushing out in times of need - maybe that's what the show needs now? And I really, really feel bad for Chahat. Make sure nothing happens to her di. Separate Premeer but don't do anything to Chahat. :P

Waiting for the next part...

--shabz

shabbo!! 🤗...ha ha...whats with all this gayatri stuff 😆😆😆...someone else mentioned her too...do you really think she would kidnap her grand daughter...😳😳😳...aage aage dekho...main kya karti hoon 😛😛😛...shabbo...im sad...tussi jaa rahe ho?????

JAZ

Originally posted by: Anhdara13

Filler chapter my foot.

CONFRONTATION NEXT BIT?? *hyperventilates*

I cannot wait.

Love,
Radz

radzie...😲...baas...itni si comment 😭😭😭...dost dost naa raha....ha ha...😆😆😆j/k...next bit...yaar...if you are hyperventilating now...when you read the next part...jaane kya hoga...😛..ill be posting soon 😃

Originally posted by: Star-Crazy

hope they get chahat back

and hope premeer get back together again

who is the kdnapper anyway..

is it rishabh

so many hopes yaar...ill see what i can do...😉...but...no promises 😛😛😛...all questions will be answered in next part...😃

Originally posted by: 9rpatel

awesome update
continue soon
PM me!!!!

thanks....will do😊

Originally posted by: Magpie

Hi Jaz,
You described Prem's helplessness very well at every step. The contents of the envelop gave me shivers down my spine ! Liked the way Prem comforted Heer all along...atleast this brought them together. Chahat has bridged the gap between them.

Look forward to the next part.

Meera.

hey yaar...im glad that you enjoyed my writing....the envelop was a last minute idea...no idea where it came from...😆😆...it was a bit gruesome naa...sorry...lol...next part will be up soon...watch out for it...😃😃

Originally posted by: purplestar22

Reserved!

wow...long reservation...kithe ho? 😛

JAZ

Originally posted by: natashaa46

HEY WOWOWOWWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW!!!!!!!!

👏
⭐️

my first reactions n now a bit calming down.........

wow........gosh i was at the edge of my seat and biting up my nails
with every twist n trun of urs...........

cant wait for next part
plzzzzzz do sooooooooooooon 😍

love your first reactions...thank u 😳😳😳...the next twist will knock you out of your seat...aage aage dekho...hota hai kya 😛😛😛...next part will be up soon...

Originally posted by: *Gui*

Haila....... man jaani.... this is soooo sad!!!! sooo not cool!!! I am still waiting for the butt kickin scene!!! uff!!!... I am waiting here!!!!!!!!..... they better hurry up!!!...... HAPPY BIRTHDAY BABE!!!! 😃😃😃...🥳....next part will answer all of your questions...just watch...😛😛😛...i mean ...read...

Of course u cant update tomorrow which is sat! uhh... cuz i got u occupied!!!.....😃 lol...yupperz...and you did awesome babe....loved it!!! 😃



Happy Morpeech Dance!!!!😆totally!!!

dude we should make that a holiday!!!😆😆.... Morpeech Day!!!....... and that day u eat a candy cane and dance to Desi Girl!!!!!...........😆 its a religion thing!!!!😆hell ya!! im so down...desi girl...morpeech style!!! wait wait...ishtyle!!! 😉😉😉



plz cont soon jaani!!!😳

Originally posted by: sohail2additi

thanks dear
awesome
lovely concepttttttttt

thank yaar...😊

Originally posted by: angel82

wow that was fantastic jaz....eagerly looking forward to read prem -in-action.....you have written this wonderfully ....Prem 's emotions and all that...I have a feeling the kidnapper is RR....will wait for the next part to know...

you want actions...its action you will get 😉😉😉...next part is filled with action 😃😃😃...next part will be up soon and all questions will be answered...😛😛😛...but maybe a few new ones will come up 😉😉😉

Originally posted by: -Ayushi-

Hey Jaz...!!!

First of all sorry i cudn't reply earlier.

It was just fantastic, awesome, lovely ,amazing.

Poor Chahat.

Loved d description,.dat situation and Premeer's condition their love. everthing perfect.

no worries yaar...i myself am super late in updating...its like a week over due ...next part will be up soon!!! 😃😃

JAZ

Originally posted by: meiskan

Great update! Honestly 😊 I hope Chahat is ok..no idea who kidnapper is.....anyways cant wait till next update!

thanks....glad you enjoyed it....everything will be revealed in the next part 😉😉...it will be posted soon 😃

Originally posted by: mehvishrainbow2

plz post part 4

will when i can

Originally posted by: aspatel2

Hey Awesome SS

pls cont. sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooon

-Axita

thank you! 😃

Originally posted by: Soaps1

WOW another great part ... very well written ... i love reading fics when i am able to visualise in my mind what i am reading and your way of writing certainly allows me to do that ... can't wait for the next part update soon!

hey yaar...thanks...im glad that you liked the upddate....im glad that you can visualize it...thats how i try to write it...😳😳😳...next part will be up soon...😃

JAZ