Together, Forever... (Premeer ff) - upd pg 7, pt 8 - Page 2

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Posted: 16 years ago
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heyy i'm back...
haha
actually, i was bored, so i am deciding to write another part...
will be up shortly...
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part 3
Raj is passing by the room, when he sees Heer faint, and fall down. Worried, Raj runs over to her, and takes her to the bed. And after laying her down, he calls the doctor.

"Mr Raj. Aap please Heer ka achche se dhyaan rakhe." The doctor tell him when she gives this times diagnosis.

"Kya hua Doctor?" Raj asks her.

"Heer maa banne waali hai, aur itna stress uske liye achcha nahin hai."

"Kya stress, Heer ko kya hua?"

"Kisi vajah se Heer ko tanaav aa gaya, aur uska blood pressure badhne laga. Aur is haalat mein, maa ki tabiyat theek hona zaroorat hai, varna…"

"Varna kya?"

"Pehle toh Heer anaemic hai, aur andar se bohot kamzor. Agar uska blood pressure kisi bhi vajah se badh gaya, toh uska miscarriage hone ke bohot chances hai. Upar se, Heer ki jaan ko khatra bhi ho sakta hai. Aap please dhyaan rakhiye ki ab se hi, Heer ko kisi bhi tarah ka tanaav nahin aayega."

"Theek hai doctor, main Heer ka poora dhyaan rakhoonga." Raj says, as he sees the doctor out, and then returns to Heer's bedside.

As he strokes Heer's forehead, Heer wakes up, and Raj asks her what caused her to faint like that, and get so stressed as well. Heer is hesitant in telling, knowing that if she does, Raj is sure to get his anger boiling, and rush over to the Juneja house to tell the whole truth, but if Gayatri somehow puts the blame on her again, then what…?

But Raj insists, and tells Heer to swear on her baby, and tell the truth, so Heer has no choice, but to tell everything she learnt. And Heer is right – Raj really starts fuming, even more than Prem does when he gets angry. Raj sets to go to the Juneja house, just like Heer thought, but Heer manages to stop him, with Raj listening because he does not want to stress out Heer anymore.

However, when Heer is sleeping in the night, Raj goes to his bedroom, and calls someone, telling him to meet soon.

"Hello." Says the person on the other line.

"Main bol raha hoon. Raj." Raj says.

"Haan Raj…"

"Dekho, kuch mat bolo, sirf mujhe aadhe ghante mein mere ghar ke baahar milo."

"Theek hai. I'm coming."

Both cut the line. The person on the other line is shown in shadow. However, she is heard crying.

"Raj, mujhe pata hai ki Heer tumhare ghar mein hi hai. Mujhe yeh bhi pata hai ki tumhare aur Heer ke beech mein koi galat rishta nahin hai. Aur tum Heer se pyar karte ho – lekin ek dost ki tarah, ek bhai ke tarah. Lekin tumhein kab dikhayi dega ki main tumse pyar karti hoon? Sachcha pyaar…?" says the person, still crying, but somewhat more calmed down.

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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesome part
continue soon ur ff is addicting!!! please please contiue soon
can u please PM me when u update?????
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow amazing.....thanks for two parts.....n i hope dat girl must be ash...plz plz dat girl turned out to be ash.....n m loving ur ff its really gud..

plz if u can PM me when u update???
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey
part 2 and part 3 are awesum
super
loved it
do cont soon.......
can u pm me when u update next part
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part 4
Raj is waiting outside his house, for the person he called. Soon, she arrives, and Raj invites her inside.

"Aao, Ashlesha", he says.

"Raj, kya baat hai?" Ash asks, worried because Raj looks worried too.

As Raj tells her the whole truth about Heer, and what happened with her, including the blackmailer incident. Raj evens tells her the whole truth about Gayatri, and she listens, shocked and with tears in her eyes. Then, we hear it in mute as Raj and Ashlesha together think of a plan to bring out the whole truth. Ashlesha then goes back to the Juneja house.

Over the next few days, the Juneja family manage to come together for meals at least, sitting all together at one table. However, everyone still remains in a sombre mood as they eat their food, almost unable to taste it anymore. And then, Ashlesha decides to break the silence.

"Waise, main aapko bataane hi waali thi' Mujhe ek job mila hai." Ash says.

Meher and Preet, who have been let in on the plan that Raj has, decide to speak up, so that the plan can be carried forward.

"Haan' Woh, koi ek play mein part mila hai na'" says Meher.

"Haan' Lekin yeh aisa vaisa part nahin hai. Lead role hai' Aur woh bhi Arjun Bijlani ke opposite. Main sach mein kitni lucky hoon. Pehle audition ke liye toh gayi thi, lekin unhoney ne mujhe call back nahin kiya, kisi aur ko select kiya. Phir, chaar din pehle phone karke bataya ki ek din achaanak lead heroine ko pata chala ki use cancer hai, toh usne production waalon ko bataya, aur phir unhoney mujhe bulaaya. Varna toh, main select hi nahin hoti. Aur kyunki maine itne kam samay mein unka offer accept kiya tha, toh unhoney ne yeh faisla kiya ki pehli episode ke shoot par main apne parivaar waalon ko bulaa sakti hoon."

"Wow, Ash. That's great'!" says Preet, further breaking the silence, and trying to encourage everybody to lighten up their moods a bit.

Finally, Lalit, Kul di, Kiran, Maya, Harman, and even Gayatri manage to speak up. Ash then invites them to watch the rehearsal of the play, before everyone sees it, or in other words, before it is open to the public. Though hesitant at first, they all eventually agree, as they decide that it will help take everyone's mind off what has happened in the past few days, and probably also help to cool down Prem's minds enough to convince him that Heer is not in the wrong, and that he should go and apologize to her for accusing her, and bring her back into the house (this is actually what everyone is thinking, everyone except Gayatri that is who agrees because she hopes that her dear son will cheer up again, and eventually give up Heer).

Preet then goes up to Prem's room, to tell him of Ashlesha's news. After a lot of convincing from Preet's side, Prem finally gives in, and agrees to come along.

Edited by NehAditya8791 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow....amazing part as always
do cntinue it n pm me if possible.....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part 5
It's the day of Ashlesha's shoot. Everyone gets ready, and heads over to the rehearsal hall. As Ashlesha is about to leave the house, she calls someone on the phone, and says "Hum log bas ghar se nilakne hi waale hain. Wahaan sab ready hai, na?... Haan, Haan, theek hai...Ok bye..." Ash then puts the phone down, and so does the other person.
And the other person is none other than Raj. Then, Raj turns around to see some people setting up some props, and getting the stage ready, and gives them some instructions. As the people set out to work on Raj's instructions, Raj calls Heer.
"Hi Heer, tum theek toh ho na?"
"Haan Raj. Main bilkul theek hoon. Bas ek love story padh rahi thi."
"Love story, aur woh bhi mere ghar mein? Kahan se mili tumhein yeh book?"
"Ash ne laake mujhe de di."
"Oh, Ash..! Achcha. Dekho Heer, tum apna khyaal rakhna. Pata nahin aaj kaunsa zaroori kaam aa gaya police station pe. Aur agar koi problem hai, toh mujhe..."
"Haan Raj, main tumhein zaroor phone kar loongi. Chinta karne ki koi zaroorat nahin hai. Bye."
"Bye" says Raj, and after he puts down the phone, he continues, but talks to himself, "Sorry Heer, maine tumse jhooth kaha tha. Main kaam pe nahin hoon. Mujhe toh yeh karna hi padha, taaki sab sach saamne aa jaaye."
Raj then gives more instructions to the people there, before going off, because if the Juneja's, especially Prem, see him there before the plan is carried out, then the whole plan will be ruined.
Soon, the Juneja's come to the rehearsal hall for shooting, and sit around, waiting for the shoot to begin. Ashlesha introduces everyone to the "director" and "producer", and after the make up and all, the rehearsal, which is a full dress rehearsal, begins.
This is actually Raj's and Ashlesha's plan - they had decided to act out a play, on Prem and Heer's life, telling the whole truth, from the time Prem and Heer first met as kids, to when they fell in love, the time everyone thought he was dead, even the time he pretended to be Gaurav Sharma, and finally coming to a climax at the point where Gayatri plotted against Heer.
When all this is being acted out, Gayatri has already realised that it is a plan to trap her, and so she gets up to leave, but Prem, who is also suspecting something, holds her back. Gayatri sits tensed throughout the rest of the play, and by the time it is finally over, her fears are worsened, and seem to be coming true when Prem confronts her.
"Maa.. Aapne aisa kyun kiya?"
"Maine kya kaisa kiya bete?" Gayatri asks, trying to sound confident and tries to hide the tension in her voice.
"Mat kahiye mujhe bete..." says Prem. "Mat kahiye mujhe bete. Aapne toh aakhir apne aur sautele mein fark kiya na?... Meri zindagi barbaad karke aapko khushi mili hogi."
"Nahin. Maine tumhari zindagi barbaad karni nahin chahi" says Gayatri, in tears now, and fearing that she will lose her son Prem.
By this time, everyone of the Juneja family members have come around to see what the matter is, most of them also suspecting that something is wrong.
"Par aapne meri zindagi barbaad ki. Heer ki zindagi barbaad ki. Hum sab ki zindagi barbaad ki.... Aur kis liye? Sirf apne swarth ke liye?... Main toh aapko apna bhagwaan maanta tha, lekin aap sirf swaarthi hain, aur bhagwaan kabhi swaarthi nahin hote..."
"Please Prem, please mujhe maaf kar do. Mujhe laga ki Heer meri beti Veera ka bura chah rahi hai, toh isiliye maine..."
"Bassss...! Aapki zubaan se aapne Heer ka naam liya na, toh... Khair, chodiye. Main aapse baat karke apna waqt zaaya kar raha hoon. Maine aapko apna bhagwaan samjha, aur aap kya nikli... Maine ek faisla kiya hai... Main ghar chodkar jaa raha hoon."
"Lekin Prem..." says Lalit, trying to intervene, but Prem cuts him off.
"Nahin bauji. Aaj aap please kuch mat kahiye. Mujhe jaane deejiye. Main Heer ke paas jaana chahta hoon. Usse maafi maangni hai, maine use kitna galat samjha. Uske charitra par bhi daag lagaya. Pata nahin woh mujhe maaf bhi karegi ya nahin... Lekin please, mujhe jaane deejiye."
"Theek hai Prem. Jaao. Lekin apna aur Heer ka khyaal zaroor rakhna, aur yaad rakhna, hum hamesha tumhare saath hai...." Lalit finally decides to let Prem go, afterall, Prem will be better this way, and Prem will finally be able to start a new life with Heer, with only Heer.
Prem rushes out of the hall. Gayatri falls down on the floor, crying heavy tears. The rest of the family members give a stern and extremely angry glance to Gayatri, and move out of the hall too. They sit in their cars, and drive back home, leaving Gayatri to be alone in the studio, crying her heart out as she finally realises the seriousness of what she has done.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesomeeeeeeeeee too good very nice part waitinggggggggg for next asap.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweta2005

awesomeeeeeeeeee too good very nice part waitinggggggggg for next asap.

oh..
thank u ji, thank u ji... thank u so muchhh
i will post up the next part soon
continue reading
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