|Estranged|One Glance-p5/AltEnding-p10

Posted: 16 years ago
#1
Estranged

Prem twirled a stray branch around and around his finger, mindlessly waiting for her. He knew that she was shattered that he and her couldn't be and he also knew that she didn't like the fact that he was going to be alone, while she become someone's amanat. That's why he was going to change that. He was going to lie. To the love of his life.

~~~

She hummed aimlessly as she walked through the dusty fields the separated his house from hers. Smiling at nothing in particular, she mused over the last couple of days. In her wildest dreams she could not have imagined such a change of events. Till yesterday she had been engaged to be married within the week to her father's friend's son; Ajay. But as fate would have it, her mother overheard her tearful conversation with Shifali and had been aghast that her daughter had quietly accepted her father's decisions. Her mother canceled the wedding that very day and ordered Meera to get get her love, her prem.

~~~

Prem's eyes snapped open, he could feel her standing behind him. Slowly he turned to look into her eyes. Bring and animated, they stared back. For Prem, time stood still. Looking at her brought back such sharp memories he thought he would never have to face again.Falling in love was one thing, to lose his love was killing him slowly. He knew it was selfish for him but a part of him was hoping desperately that Meera would come and beg him to run away because for her he would leave everything behind in a second. But looking at her know, the happiness glistening in her eyes told him one thing. She was falling out of love with him and into love with Ajay.

~~~

Thunder crashed, music to Meera's ears as she waited for the clouds to break loose. Prem's face so resigned, so defeated before her, and she knew she would bring him happiness in mere seconds. Never before had she gone through such a whirlwind of emotion but standing in from of Prem, she knew her future held nothing but happiness.

~~~

There was nothing for it. Prem pondered. He didn't think it would matter if she told her or not seeing as she looked so happy to be with Ajay. But he had promised himself and honoring your word, your thoughts was something Meera had taught him. Taking a deep breath, feeling as if all the world's bricks were being shoved down his throat; he spoke.

"I'm getting married."

~~~

Her stomach dropped, deeper then she had known it to exist.

~~~

He watched her face, still frozen with the excitement from, earlier.

~~~

His image swam before her eyes as the filled with tears. Finding her voice, she croaked.

"T-that's great!"

He smiled feebly at her.

"We'll be getting married at the same time.


Meera stared at him, only one thought running through her mind. 'But to different people.'

~~~

Prem watched Meera talk to cover the awkwardness and his eyes dropped in shame. Lulling Meera into a false sense of reality was not something he wanted to do, but something he had to do. She always thought of everyone before herself and he knew she wouldn't be happy and would not be able to live with herself if she knew Prem was alone. He didn't think lying would hurt so much.

~~~

Meera turned to go, her heart clenched in pain. Walking slowly back to her house she understood. That love is not forever. It's a phase in life, a beautiful phase. Once it's over, its memories evade the mind, heart and soul till death brings its sanctuary of tranquility. Shutting her eyes a lone tear ran down her cheek.

The clouds opened.

~~~

There you have it! My first Prem/Meera shot! 😆 Basic storyline, (in case you didn't get it) Meera was supposed to get to Ajay but then her mom made her cancel when she found out about Prem. When Meera went to tell Prem to good news, Prem, thinking that it would be for the best (because of Meera's nature) told her that he was getting married. Both left their own ways, not knowing they could have been.

Thanks to Meera for the FANTASTIC concept, all credit goes to her! Comments or hits of the like button always appreciated!

--shabz

Edited by shabo24 - 16 years ago

Created

Last reply

Replies

72

Views

5.6k

Users

11

Likes

60

Frequent Posters

~Rinki~ thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 16 years ago
#2
Muahaha! Firstly...the title is deliciously yummy! ☺️
Second...hayyeee My poor bhabhi jaan and bhai jaan separated...🥺
Oh i loved this Shabz...u knw anything tragic is beautiful to me *wipes tears dev-muski-style*
🤗 awesome job turtle!
- Phoenixx. [i missed this]


indiandoll89 thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Trailblazer Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 16 years ago
#3
My spot! 😳

*edited*

Do not credit me for the concept...it's so cliched! 😛😳 I just wanted to see what you could do with it and once again...I was proved Right! 😃

They were both so right in their own ways...although I feel worse for me😛😉 He lied! 😛 I wonder what would happen when he found out the wedding was actually cancelled...😆 Reminds me of KANK in a way😳 😳 I'm soo glad you wrote it Shabzie, the emotions you put for both of them were perfectly apt! 😃😳

And I liked the open ending! 😳 Makes it mysterious somehow! 😛

Anyhoo....I'm still touched that you wrote this for me, so thank you! 🤗

Love you loads,

Meera😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
sourpuss thumbnail
16th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 16 years ago
#4
My spot. :D
😲 You wrote tragic PreMe! But you did it so well!
The pain that Prem had when he found out Meera was getting married to someone else...Him lying to make sure Meera would be okay...and then she forcing herself to be happy...
You realise you need to continue this right?
Love,
Bhav (:
Edited by sourpuss - 16 years ago
-Jwalamukhi- thumbnail
18th Anniversary Thumbnail Engager Level 4 Thumbnail + 9
Posted: 16 years ago
#5
Fine! I HAD to comment on this and this broke my deal with strike with KDMHMD!
indiandoll89 thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Trailblazer Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 16 years ago
#6
😲 YAY Shabzie! 😃 you did something I could NOT do! 😳
indiandoll89 thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Trailblazer Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 16 years ago
#7
I wrote SOOOO MANY one shots, I updated my ff's I made vm's...nothing worked! 😔
-Jwalamukhi- thumbnail
18th Anniversary Thumbnail Engager Level 4 Thumbnail + 9
Posted: 16 years ago
#8
I know Meer, you wrote shots, tu ek baar bol kar toh dekhti?
indiandoll89 thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Trailblazer Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 16 years ago
#9
😲 Are you saying I never said anything? Me and Ravs always tried so hard to make you come back...😔
-Jwalamukhi- thumbnail
18th Anniversary Thumbnail Engager Level 4 Thumbnail + 9
Posted: 16 years ago
#10
^Well yes...*blush* but I saw this shot just cus of you..wanted something KANK and Shabo's shot with you in it based on KANK...who would miss that? and believe me, Shabo barely writes

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".