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Posted: 16 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: Anhdara13

So Neel will save Kiran? I'm hoping, then they will start bickering shortly after because they don't seem the type to stop for any reason. And on the other hand, a PreetAsh story line? Ooh. But I'm waiting for Meher's reentry, loved her Ekta obsession. I cannot wait to see what you have planned for the rest of the family. And PremHeer, seem so happy together, despite having not had their family for five years, they created a new one! But what happened to the family during the five years?

Love,
Radz

Hi Radz! Neel maybe will or maybe won't save Kiran...you hav to wait to find out what happens😉. They don't stop fighting for any reason! Yes, a Preet-Ash love angle! Meher will make her reentry not for a while. Premeer decided to keep their parents happy in the only way they cld, which is to not keep any relation w/ them, so they moved on! You'll find out what happened to the other family, when they make their re-entry...i havn't forgotten about them yet!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: kamx2

Hey Deepika! Sat sri akal! Howz life yaar! Hi Kamal!! Sat sri akal!! Life is going great...how about u?

Firstly, Congratulations!!! On starting the second part of Mannat. Thank you!!

So sorry I couldn't comment on the first part, padha tho tha, but as usual, couldn't comment. Right now, I am sitting in my room, with my laptop, Saturday nite, actually lol its Sunday morning 3:12 am, and I finally got to 2nd part, and finally got to comment. It's okay! You're up that late or tht early to comment...awww you're very sweet, but you need to sleep😃!

So far so good hai ji! Actually, not only good, I am loving it, as if thts new lol! Aww...thank you! You're soooooooooo (times a thousand) sweet!!!

Its pretty sad tht nobody even tried to contact Prem, Heer or even anyone else. Sad tht Lalit and Balraj even lost close frenz (Neel's parents), and still haven't realized tht they were wrong. But I am reli reli happy kno tht Neel's parents were with Neel and the rest of the kids. I am totally loving this whole new gang'tho I m certainly missing Meher's filmy-ness and even Sunny and Shubh and Simran'kaash! Well jo hota hai, woh ache ke liye hi hota hai na? U'll surely do sumthin or the other, I knw hehe. It is pretty sad, but they lost contact right from the beginning & Premeer, etc. didnt try to contact them either. Lalit & Balraj are very stone-hearted. I miss them too, but some of them will re-enter, but not for a while!

I absolutely LOVED the way Premeer met, hehe wat a typical Prem-Heer way to meet, a fall hehe and the lil'meeting in the room was shooo shweet! Ur an amazing writer I tell you!'sad tht they couldn't meet in 4 years, but the separation totally made way for sum special moments. The Premeer meeting had to be grand and romantic!! I'm glad you like my writing!

I am totally lovin Kunal, and the elders. Even more, I am LOVING the interactions between Preet, Neel, Ash and Kiran. Personally, I love this family more! They're relationships are more developed and solid!

I hope nuthin serious happens to Kiran tho. And I love your habit of ending on cliffhangers! It's a reli tough thing, for a writer to be able to come up a different cliff-hanger nearly everytime time, and you do tht perfectly'I knw, cuz I write smth like a "private" ff hehe'like I write, but for my own pleasure, and I haven't shown it to anyone except my sis, cuz I am scared it wont be liked by anyone'so, I knw how difficult it is to write smth, and especially to cum up with sum totally cool twists. You should definitely post it or pm it to me!!! Seeing tht you're busy, you should get a few chapters typed and then post it, but you should *definitely* post it! I want to read it!

So, Hats Off to U! I totally cant wait for yur new FF. btw, 28th feb ko kya hai? U mentioned it's a reli special date for u'kuch khaas? Khaas toh hai😉!! The date & the # 28 are very special to me! Very long story😆!

And I am totally dying to watch Delhi-6 yaar! I cant wait! My parents went to watch it, and my dad was pretty disappointed, and my mom said it was okay'so thts an indication, tht I will LOVE it hehe'they hated Saawariya, and I loved it so much tht I could think and talk of only Saawariya'and now, its gonna be the same with D-6'.the fact tht u liked it so much, only makes me even more confident tht I will love it hehe. I loved Delhi-6!! Though, to tell u the truth, I didn't understand Saawariya, but i thought it was okay. Delhi-6 is much different & it makes logical sense! It has everything in it: humor, tension, drama, romance, etc! You should definitely watch it!

Anyways, bye for now, cant wait till ur next update! Aww...soo sweet of you!

Kamal

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: sanyoprithviraj

a absolutely terrific update but now please give us some prem-heer marital romance.u kept them away for 3 years!

did they even have their first night or not?

Hi hon! Thank you!! You'll definitely get more of the romance😉! Yes, they did hav their first night, but I didn't write about it b/c then i'd have to go into detail about exactly wat happend from the moment they left the Gill Haweli & they couldn't have it right away, so I would have wasted a lot of time to get to tht point.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: kis desh Rocks!

it was a nice and romantiv update... so finally now prem is back and he will be staying with heer and we will get to read some romantic monmemts.... wow sound interesting.... waiting for next part and i hope kiran will be alright...

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yes, he is back to Heer forever and you'll get more romantic moments!

Originally posted by: destinny

great part, the whole family is complete now, i guess. anyways the teri ore teri ore line of preet did make me smile and kunal's parantha statement too. waiting for tuesday

Aww...thanks! Yes, the whole family is complete...no new entries for a while now! I'm glad you liked those lines...they were my fav too!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey Deepika..the FF is going very well!!Fabulous indeed..but what a rollercoaster ride for Prem-Heer na??poor people had to leave their family but they were lucky enough to get another one,not just A family but a loving one..really nice..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: ~nikki1992~

hi Di!!*waves* how r u? sry i usualy catch ur updates the same day u update them, but i had family over, so sry, i coulnt catch ur update till now. do i even have to say anything??

Hi Nikki! It's totally okay! I can understand how family life can get busy!
u are an amazing writer.. like w-o-w. i loved how preet, just starts being preet rite in the beginning.😆 and how kiran and ash start to sing too, and then to top it off,, preet joins to sing too..cute😆
the relationship shared by the elders and prem is geniune..very nice.
Thank you hon! You are seriously very sweet to say all this! I'm glad you liked all the relationships!
and i cant forget kunal*pinches kunal's cheeks*. he is soo cute. looks like the relationship kunal-prem share is strong. and then ofcourse there is neel, who is just super annoyed with having to deal with everyone trying to get him married.😆
No one can forget Kunal...you'll get cute scenes w/ him & Nick (guneet-amar's son) & Prem considers Kunal more than his own son & are very close! lol...Neel & marriage!!
prem accidently spilt water..sho cute, gunnet noticed and helped prem spend some time alone wit heer.
heer just noes her prem..and his desires just too well.. 😆😳. and heer is still mad at him..wel i sure would too, but the ' i love you' part was cute,and sweet.👏
the prem heer scene was too cute.
lmao...he's lived with Guneet & amar for so long tht they know him quite well now😆! Heer knows Prem way to well!!
preet was eavsdropping???!!!*giggles* oh gosh, that leads to the part where they start to tease poor preet, and then prem and heer start to take different sides...thats the cute relationship they all share, really love it.
cant wait till tuesday...till then take care
Preet is just being Preet😆!! I'm glad you loved it!
~nikki😳😃 *big BIG HUG to u*🤗
Hai...ur are very very very very sweet..so a bigger bigger bigger hug to you!!! 🤗🤗...😃

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: ranrags

Hey Deepika..the FF is going very well!!Fabulous indeed..but what a rollercoaster ride for Prem-Heer na??poor people had to leave their family but they were lucky enough to get another one,not just A family but a loving one..really nice..

Hi! Thank you...I'm glad you think that! You're very sweet! Premeer were very lucky to find such a caring/loving family and support. I'm really happy the new family is soo loved😃!
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Chapter 40

"Patha nahi kab tu shaadi karke iss ghar se jayage!!!" shouted Neel as Kiran reached the edge of the stair case, causing her foot to slip.

"KIRAAANNNN!!!" everyone shouted.

Neel reached and grabbed her arm, pulling her towards himself to save her from falling. However, he pulled to hard causing her to bump into him hard and fall over on top of him. They awkwardly looked at each other for a moment, before everyone came rushing to see if the two were okay.

"Are you alright Kiran!?" asked a panicky Heer.

"Yeah di…I'm fine" replied Kiran, not once looking at Neel.

"Oye Hello…koi mujhse bhi poocho ki mein kaisa hoon…I'm the one that had the load fall on him" said Neel.

"Who are you calling load?" asked Kiran, turning to face him.

"You!" said Neel.

"You know what, I'm just going to end this fight forever…I'm NEVER going to talk to you again!" said an angry Kiran as she stalked off towards her room. Everyone looked at Neel with angry expressions.

"What!?!" asked Neel.

"That was very mean, Neel" said Heer, while shaking her head.

"Haan beta, I think you went too far. If you had said that to any other girl, she would have killed you right this moment" said his mother, Nishi.

Prem walked up to Neel and put his hand on his shoulder saying "I think you should go say sorry to her."

Neel started feeling a bit guilty and said "fine" as he left for her room, while everyone went back to their work.

***

"Patha nahi apna aap ko kiya samajtha hai…gadha" Kiran said to herself as she opened one of her suitcases to put her clothes in her closet, until she heard a knock at her door.

"Come in" said Kiran as she saw Neel walk in. She rolled her eyes at him and went back to her task.

"I'm sorry" said Neel as he walked closer to her, but she just ignored him.

"I said I'm sorry" Neel repeated, but she still didn't respond, so he went up to her and turned her around so she could face him.

"I'm sorry for what I said earlier" said Neel.

"And…" Kiran said quietly, leaving Neel confused.

"And ??" he repeated.

"And what do you want me to do about it?" she said.

"To forgive me" Neel said.

"And what makes you think that I'm going to forgive you for it? Oh, I get it, everyone probably sent you up here to apologize to me…well, for their happiness and peace of mind, you can tell them I forgave you…And now you may leave" Kiran said as she returned to her task.

"They did send me up here to say sorry, but I came here on my own will. I didn't have to come, but I did because I know I went a little too far in what I said to you" said Neel.

"A little?" asked Kiran with her eyebrows raised.

"Okay, I went way too far" Neel said, while giving in to her, but continued saying "but you provoked me! Whenever you come, you always irritate me and…"

Kiran cut in saying "I provoked you...Ash said the same thing to Preet, but he didn't go as far as you did. I joke around with everyone and no one else minds, in fact they usually all join in, but you have to be a spoilsport and kill the mood every time. We're just joking with you, if we can't joke with our close ones, then who are we supposed to fool around with?"

"I…uhh…"started Neel, but Kiran's reply left him dumbfounded. After a moment he finally realized how to reply saying "Fine, I guess I do overreact, but whenever anyone jokes around with me, then it has to do with my marriage. I wouldn't mind if it was for anything else, but no it has to be about my marriage."

"Yaar…then get married! The joking will end then, why are you stalling? Do you love someone? Everyone is ready to let you have a love marriage, so what's the problem? Doesn't she love you back?" said Kiran.

"Woahhh…hold on there. I never said I was in love. I'm just not ready for a commitment yet and I haven't even found that perfect girl either, that I'd want to spend the rest of my life with. Look at how in love Prem-Heer and Amar-Guneet are. I want to find someone that I can truly love, not just be thrown into a well" said Neel.

"Awww…I never knew you had such soft feelings" said Kiran as she sighed at what he said.

"Oohh…no, no, no, no, no! I told you all this, so now it's your job to get everyone off my case!" said Neel.

"Teek hai…but only if you don't fight with me to that extent anymore, because I still enjoy fighting with you" said Kiran.

"Deal!" said Neel smiling, as both of them headed back downstairs.

Everyone was sitting joking around, when the saw both Neel and Kiran walk down smiling.

"What happened…both Neel and Kiran are smiling rather than fighting? Am I going blind?" Preet asked Ash.

"If that's the case, then I think I'm going blind too" Swaran said.

"What happened beta…why aren't you arguing?" asked Kanwal.

"What is this uncle…when we fight, you all complain and when we don't, you all still complain" said Neel as he sat down between Karan and Prem.

"We made a deal. If you all don't want us to fight anymore then you can't bother Neel about his marriage anymore" said Kiran.

"You, Kiran, as in K.I.R.A.N are saying this?" Preet said shocked.

"Don't ask Preet…we made a deal, so just go along with what we want" Kiran replied.

"Whatever you say" Preet said as all the ladies left to make lunch.

***

It was late in the evening after dinner, when Prem entered the study looking for Heer.

"Papa…have you seen Heer?" Prem asked Kanwal.

Preet and Neel came up from behind him, laughing as Prem asked them "What's so funny?"

"Nothing PB. It's just that it's funny how we know more about bhabi's whereabouts than you" said Preet as he Neel joined the men in the study.

"She took Nick and Kunal with her to the gurdwara" said Neel.

Prem then turned to leave the room, when Preet said "Oye, bhabhi ke ghulam, zara roko! Until bhabi comes back, why don't you sit and chat with us!?"

"Maar kahna chahta ho tum kiya? I'm going to sleep" said Prem as he left for his room.

***

It was almost 11 at night, when Heer finally made her way to her bedroom. She had been so busy all day that she hadn't found time to mingle with Prem at all since their morning encounter. Now, as she walked to her room after putting Kunal to bed. She slowly opened the door and headed inside to find Prem not there. Suddenly, someone slipped their arms around her waist, pulling Heer closer to them.

Heer stood there with her back to Prem's chest as he whispered into her ear "I missed you" as he rested his head on her shoulder.

"Pp…Prem..." Heer started, but couldn't continue as Prem turned her around so she could face him.

"Shhh…" Prem said before he kissed her. A while later, they broke apart and Prem headed towards his closet. Heer looked at him confused. A few moments, he returned with a small box in his hand. He opened it and took out a silver locket, with a heart that had 'PH' engraved on it. He moved behind Heer and put it on for her. She looked at it and then turned around to face him and said "you didn't need to get me this…", however Prem silenced her with a kiss and his love.

***

It was early the next morning and Prem was sleeping, when he heard something fall. He slowly opened his eyes to find Heer not next to him. He quickly got up and found her all ready, wearing a black Patiala salwar kameez suit and picking up fallen files from the floor.

"Heer…why are you up so early? It's not even 8 yet?" Prem asked wearily as he watched her quickly gather some stuff.

"You used to be a heavy sleeper…what happened? Aaj toh badi jaaldi uht gaye?" Heer asked as she went to grab her cell phone.

"I heard something and then you weren't sleeping, so I got worried" Prem said " but where are you going?"

"I got a call from the office, so I have to go there" Heer replied as she dialed a number on her cell. A few moments later, she said into the phone "Preet…are you ready?Teek hai, meet me downstairs in 5 minutes" and quickly hung up.

Prem walked up behind her and hugged her from the back asking "Do you have to go? Weren't you supposed to have the next 2 weeks off?"

"You're stealing the dialogue I'm going to be using in a few weeks" Heer replied.

"Well, if you stayed then I wouldn't have to use it" Prem said.

"Well, I still have to go, but I'll be done around lunch, so maybe you can come up and check out the final touches being done to your office and then we can go out for lunch!" said Heer.

"Bas wohi toh ik cheez hai jiska mujhe intezar hai…having lunch with you" said Prem as he released her and pouted.

Heer kissed his cheek and said "well…I guess I'll see you then!" as she left.

***

It was around noon, when Prem entered Heer's office. This was the same building where Neel's office was and now his would be too. Ash and Kiran insisted on coming along with Neel and Prem too, but they soon saw a small shop and headed there, promising to meet up with them soon. However, Neel left with them as well as he needed to grab a few things too. So now it was just Prem. He walked towards the receptionist and said "Excuse me…can you tell me where your Heer ma'am's cabin is? The receptionist looked up at Prem and stared at him in awe. He snapped his fingers in front of her face and asked again "Hello…can. you. tell. me. where. heer's. cabin. is?"

"Jjj…ji, sir woh ma'am busy hai. You can wait for her here" the receptionist replied.

Prem sighed and said "I'll go wait in her office, can you just show me where it is?"

"Sorry sir, but I can't let you go" she said.

Suddenly Preet came up from behind Prem and walked over to him saying "What happened PB, why are you waiting here?"

"Heer's busy and this receptionist won't let me go wait in her office" he said.

Preet turned to the receptionist and asked her "What did I tell you this morning!?"

"Jjii, jii sir…" stuttered the receptionist.

"Yeh ji ji kiya laga rakha hai…Did I not tell you this morning that Heer bhabi's husband is coming today, so let him go wait in her office" he said glaring at her.

The receptionists face suddenly fell, hearing this piece of information as Preet continued saying "From now on, if Prem bhaiya ever comes to this office, he shouldn't be stopped from going into bhabi's cabin" and turned to Prem and finished saying "chalo bhaiya, I'll show you your better-half's office" as he smirked at Prem, while he led him to Heer's office.

Both entered her cabin, which was quite large, spacious, elegantly decorated. Preet forced Prem to sit in Heer's chair as he looked around.

"PB, sach sach batao…Kaisa laga? Laga kaisa?" Preet asked, while seating himself in front of Prem indicating he was talking about Heer's cabin.

"I love it" Prem said.

"OHH HOOO!!!!" sang two voices from the doorway. The two Juneja brother's looked over and saw Ash & Kiran grinning, with Neel standing between them.

"Keh raha hai…dil deewana…jaana jaa kah ke kasam! Hum ishq mein…marjayenga!! Kuch bhi sanam… *kehjayenga*…" sang Ash and Kiran as they sat down on the sofa in the cabin, while Neel sat down next to Preet.

"chordenga na daaman yaar ka…vaada raha, vaaada raha…" joined Preet in the singing.

"Vaada rahaaaaaa pyaar ka!!" sang the 3 sang together, ending with Preet, Neel, Ash, and Kiran laughing at Prem, while he grinned at the four.

"Hai, I never new jeeju was soooo romantic!" Ash said smiling.

"Jeeju ka chota bhai bhi bohat romantic hai" Preet cut in, while grinning at Ash.

"Why would Ash care if her jeeju's brother is romantic or not, PREET?" Kiran asked with her eyebrown raised and smirking at Preet. Just then Heer walked, looking tired as she sat down with the girls.

"What happened Meeti? You looked tired" Neel asked.

"Nothing" she replied.

"I'll tell you, bhabi's boyfriend…she's cheating on you, Neel!" Preet said.

Neel pretended to look shocked and said "What!?! Waheguru kept me alive to see this day…to see the day of my girlfriend cheating on me! Kam se kam Prem aur Kunal ka toh sochti" as he dramatically put his hand on his heart and shook his head.

Heer rolled her eyes and tried to keep down a smile.

He started singing "Mera saath chalte chalte, yeh kahan tehar gaye tum…yeh safar katey kaisa jo ab se darr gaya tum"

"Arre yaar, she's cheating on you…not PB. She never finished her work this fast for you and look, for PB, she finished it by lunch!" Preet said.

"If you're Indian idol rehearsals are done, then can we please go out for lunch? I'm starving!" Heer asked.

They all got up to leave and made their way out of the cabin and past the reception desk as the receptionist glared at Heer. However, this was not caught by anyone except Kiran as she glared back at her, causing the receptionist to quickly look down and get back to work.

***

It was around 3 and they had finished their quite long lunch and decided to go sight-seeing in Chandigarh, so they finalized to visit Rock Garden. They called up the rest of the family and decided to meet up there. About an hour later, they were walking around the garden looking at the waterfalls and taking pictures. Prem and Heer were walking a bit behind the group with Kunal between them, holding both their hands.

(Rock Garden)
Swaran turned around and said "Hai…what a cute family", causing Heer and Prem to look behind them, but they only saw a bunch of college students walking around.

"Where?" Heer asked.

"Heeriye…Swaran bhabi is talking about you" Amar said.

"You three are a cute family too" Karan said looking at Amar, Nick, and Guneet, who shyly smiled.

"My dear son-in-law…I think it's your turn to complete your and my daughter's family" Kanwal said as smiled at them, while Swaran and Karan's face turned pink.

"Look at today's youngsters Kanwal… they're so shy. Back when we were young, men were never shy or looked embarrassed, but what can we say about this generation. They act shy and they don't even want to get married. Look at Neel, kithna drama kar raha hai shaadi ka peecha" Deep said.

"Dad!" Neel said and turned to Kiran, who pretended not to hear, until he playfully hit her on her arm saying "Oye, you're supposed to stop them"

She looked helpless and said "Uncle, Neel ki chodo…aaj kal ka kuwara lardke toh men hi nahi…they're just immature boys"

"HEY!!" Preet and Neel said together as all the ladies and girls started laughing.

"Mamma…are preet chachu and neel mammu horshes? Hay is for horshes, na?" Kunal said as he looked up at his mom.

Heer and Prem smiled at Kunal and Heer said "honestly beta, I'm starting to have doubts that. I don't know" as Kunal giggled and ran off to play with Nick.

"I'm going to throw a coin into the water" Kiran randomly said as she took out a coin from her purse and finished saying "to make a wish".

"This isn't a wishing well, smart one" Neel said as he walked up next to her. She rolled her eyes at him and said "Well Captain Obvious, it doesn't say anywhere that it isn't…and why do you care if I make a wish or not. In fact I think you should make a wish too. You can wish for a wife that…" but quickly stopped as she remembered the deal she made with him.

Nishi, Jeeti, and Sweety walked over and took out coins as well.

"Haan beta, I'm going to wish that you get married quickly" Nishi said.

"I'm going to wish that you get a beautiful wife" said Jeeti.

"I'm going to wish that you lead a happily married life with lots of kids" Sweety said.

"And I'm going to wish that aap sab mera peecha choordo and don't force me to get married" Neel said as he took out a coin quickly and tossed it into the water.

"Kiran, Sweety aunty toh teri band bajana par thuli hai" Preet said grinning at her.

"What do you mean?" she asked.

"Sweety aunty wished that Neel has lots of kids, well that'll be a problem for you, na? I mean you're the one that will have to give birth to them and take care of them..." Preet said as he ran away from Kiran and accidentally ran into Ash, almost making her fall over, but caught her in time. He looked into her eyes for a moment and then quickly balanced her again before he ran off to avoid getting hit by Kiran.

Heer laughed at the sight as she sat on the bench with Guneet and Swaran, when she noticed that Kunal was nowhere in sight. She quickly got up and said "Yeh Kunal kahan gaya?" as she looked around. She headed straight for Prem and said frantically "Where's Kunal and and Nick isn't here either!"

**Hello everyone! So usually I write a very long note at the end, but I have no idea on what to say. However, I do hope you take some time out and comment on how you liked or disliked the chapter. I will probably update Sunday. I'll see what I can do about that. Anyways, I'm leaving you with a cliffhanger once again! Hope you enjoyed the update! Oh and I won't be able to start my new ff until the end of next week as I have midterms next week.**

~Deepika

Edited by Deepika G. - 16 years ago
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YAY!! I'm back!! only a day late...that's not so bad, is it??😉😆 and once again...I'm FIRST to comment!!!! wooohoooo!!! *jumps up in the air* LOL, sorry but I kinda have to express my happiness in some way when I'm the first one to comment, especially on your FF!!! hehe!!! hope u don't mind...😆😆

WOW!! Ur update was AWESOME!!! I just loved, loved, and LOVED it!!!! Omg! Thank god Neel saved Kiran!! I knew that was coming!! ha! I'm so good!! lol!!😆 But it was shooo shweet how he saved her, and then they landed on top of eachother!!! Neel's my man!!😉 U know, I was wondering if um, for some reason Kiran ditches him in the near future (god forbid that happens) I'm always u know um...Free...to hook up with him!!😉😉 LMAO!!🤣
🤣🤣🤣 hahahahahha!!! I'm just kidding Deeps!! No one can seperate Kiran and Neel!!!

Now to the beatiful Premeer scene!!! awwww, Prem got not one, but TWO kisses from Heer!! Wah Wah!! Bhaisabh ne 2-in-1 waala deal lagaya tha kya? hahahahhaa!!! But it was really really cute!! I just hope their jodi stays like that, and they get all the happniness in life!!😳😳

YAY!! They're on a picnic type thing!! I love picnics!! Especially when all ur family members are there..it's so much funn!!! and Their family is so wonderful!! I love them!!! Hope kisi ki nazar na lage unko!!😛😆

OMG!! another cliffhanger Deeps??😲😲 Kya yaar...hum log ko kitna marvaaogi?? LOL jk jk!! I luv ur cliffhangers!! OMG!!! Kunal and Nick went missing?? NOOOO!!!!!😲 That can't happen!! I hope nothing bad happens to them!! *prays to God* Otherwise, fantastic update Deepika!! I luved it!!😳

Btw, Sorry for the lame comment😔 It's just that I've had a really long day at school with two tests in a row, one in Bio Honors, and one in Geo honors, the Bio one wasn't that bad, but the Geo one...I think I B.S'd it😕😕 and I slept really late last night bcuz of studying...so if this comment doesn't make sense AT ALL!! then blame it on my lack of sleep, I'm soo tired right now that my eyes are drooping, I might go take a littel nap now, so c ya later!! Byeee!! *waves*

Luv, Garima 😳😳




Edited by Garima93 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey Deepika,

Your ff is reallyy verryy good! 👏
Because of my studies I haven't been able to comment
The premeer scene was awesome
You have left us on a cliffhanger, so you've to update soon!!
Bina

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