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Posted: 16 years ago
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OMGD!!!* wooooooow* firstly a FF on preet wooo! and a murder mystery wow! sumfin differnt and unique eh? =D

and im in shockkk ure writin stylee is beuatifull i must say from the beginning till the end u had my eyes gripped onto the screen and veera dead!😆 and rishabs going too😆 as much as i cant stand them in the show awww!😆

uve gt me loving dis FF already =D do add me to the PM list please 😃😆 and update soon😳😆

Love Asma =D

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: indiandoll89

Eeee this ff is really going to be fabulous!😳 And don't worry I forgive you for not telling me....😛😉



Awww... thankoo so much!! Ahh that means a lot! --- Yayy! I'm forgiven. 😃

Originally posted by: ashmii

OMGD!!!* wooooooow* firstly a FF on preet wooo! and a murder mystery wow! sumfin differnt and unique eh? =D

and im in shockkk ure writin stylee is beuatifull i must say from the beginning till the end u had my eyes gripped onto the screen and veera dead!😆 and rishabs going too😆 as much as i cant stand them in the show awww!😆

uve gt me loving dis FF already =D do add me to the PM list please 😃😆 and update soon😳😆

Love Asma =D



Ahh heyy Asmaa! I wasn't expecting you tehehe... Yupp Just Preet. ☺️ -- Okay fine, not just Preet, some more people, but its in Preets Point of View. Yeaa... A murder Mystery, been wanting to do one forever. Like when I see them on TV, i wonder and wonder how them come up with such smart stuff... 😆😆 So I thougth I'd do one one day, and wanted to do something on just Preet... and when you mix it all together. 😆😆😆

Aww... thank you so much! I'm gald you like itt... I get Rinki to read it first... 😆😆 Yuppp! Veera dead... but nicely... She had a nice chracter, most I cud do after killing her.

Awww... thankss!! 😳😳 Added youu..

Thanks so mcuh for the comment Asmaaa.. means alot! 😳

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey everyone, how's your day been? Mine's been pretty stressfull, but lets not get me started... heh. Guess what! Its Sushants birhtdayyy! So this part is in dedication to him. Thank you everyone who left such sweet comments, love you all! The next update will probably be on Friday, since I have the next to scenes planned out in my head. Lets just hope I can do it on Friday. 😳 Anyways, here it is.

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Chapter 1

I should've known she was tricking me. Why would she ever be so nice to me? I tried to keep my anger within me as I quickly walked past the curious eyes that seemed to follow me. I couldn't blame them for staring at me, I was a mess. I just came from outside, and it was raining. As if that wasn't good enough, I had to trip into a muddy puddle. Couldn't she choose another day to bother me? Today was my birthday, and I really wanted everything to go smoothly. But she really wanted to rain on my parade, literally!

Taking a huff, I knocked on the door to my boss's office, Sujal Garewal. I was more than ten minutes late to the meeting, and this time it wasn't even my fault. But I couldn't snitch on her, that wouldn't be like me. I would settle the score, my own way, later. For now, I had to face the wrath of my boss. Hearing the stern "Come in" from the other side, I straightened my shoulder and opened the door with a sincere expression, hoping he wouldn't be too angry.

"So Mr. Juneja, you finally decided to come, eh?" Sir said with his hands clasped together sitting on the table. He was smiling, but I could tell he was mocking me. I looked around feeling quite embarrassed. They were all sitting around a large wooden table, this is where we always met when Sir was about to give us a huge case. I thought my appearance was a give away that I had been having problems this morning, but since Sir still had that look on his face I decided to say something in my defense. "Save it, and sit down," he ordered.

Arguing wouldn't be a very good thing to do right now, so I did as he told me to. I noticed the only seat left was the one next to my dear Rubina Singh, aka that Vixen. I growled at her as I noticed her stifling giggles. Shabd was sitting on the other side of her; he too was trying to hold in his giggles.

"Now that we're all here, I'm here to give you guys a special case." Sir started out. "Rishab Rampal and Veera Juneja..." I jumped up hearing the girl's last name, and saw Prem do the same. Me and Prem were cousins, and coincidently are now on the same team. But as far as I know, I wasn't related to any 'Veera'. "...You guys are in charge of this scene."

"Wait, this is murder?" I asked.

"Yes Preet, didn't I just say that. Or is your brain going to be late today too?" Sir replied in frustration.

I heard Rinki and Shabd snicker again, this time they were accompanied by Prem and Heer. I looked back at my hands, dumbfounded, deciding to stay quiet until the meeting ended. As I looked at my hands, I remembered something. Prem and Heer's hands were missing. I jerked my head up as everyone continued their conversations of the murder. They were sitting together, with one hand on the table and the other underneath. Though Heer was fully concentrated on what Sir was saying, Prem's gaze didn't avert once from Heer. Now that I thought of it, Prem and Heer had been coming in and out together these days. I was so busy thinking about them that I never noticed the glare Sir was giving me.

"Preet!" he yelled out. He wasn't being formal, which meant he was quite agitated by my behavior. "What is wrong with you today?!" I gave him a helpless look, to which he sighed, I think in disappointment, and walked out of the room.

As soon as he shut the door behind him, Rinki burst into laughter. I frowned at her; all that had been happening to me today was her fault. "Why you little...!" I said getting up from my seat, but before my hands could reach her neck Shabd came in front of her and stopped me. I felt a tug at my arms, Prem was pulling me back.

Rinki hid behind Shabd, while sticking her tongue out at me. Did she want me to kill her? I tried again to get out of Prem's grip, to no avail. "Did you find your car?" she asked in her usual mocking tone while keeping Shabd in front of her.

Everyone gave her a confused look, but I knew what she was talking about. Since her little prank was what had started my inauspicious day. It was evening, and I had been very tired, so I went to the cafe for my normal black coffee. I had left all my stuff at our table; little did I know that there was an evil Vixen lurking around looking for the perfect opportunity to start jinxing my day.

I guess she had come in the cafe for the Caramel Frap she always drank, and had gotten a beep from Sir for the meeting. She had probably noticed that my beeper wasn't with me, because I didn't check to see the message, since the message was out for our team. She had even asked me where my beeper was, why didn't I catch on to her plan? Because then she told me that she saw my car being towed outside. So I ran outside looking for my car, I didn't know it was raining, because it hadn't been raining in the morning. Maybe God himself wanted me to have a bad day.

Once I stepped out, I looked around everywhere for a bright red car being towed, but didn't find anything. Eventually I did figure out that Rinki had just made a fool out of me. I was angry then too, but my anger built up as I slipped and fell in a puddle, ruining my perfect white shirt. Finally I got to know that there was actually a meeting when I went back to the cafe.

"Aw... looks like you had a really fun day today." She mocked me further. If it wasn't for Prem, I would've gotten my hands on her by now. I puffed, and walked out of the room with all the dignity I had left, which probably wasn't much. I could hear her giggle like a typical high-schooler as I left; which was okay since she was the youngest on the team. Even though I hated how miserable she made my life, I wondered how boring life would be without her. We fought a lot, but I couldn't imagine a day without her. She was what brought life into my live.

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"So this is my present... dead bodies?" I complained while making my way into the hotel room. As soon as I entered, a light smell stung at my nose. Though it was light, I could still smell it, and it wasn't the decomposing bodies.

"Stop complaining," Rinki said to me while rolling her eyes and looking around. I think she could smell that smell too. Shabd was supposed to collect all fingerprints, while Rinki and I were supposed to inspect the bodies. Prem and Heer were supposed to interrogate all the people that were at the inauguration party, to see if anyone had scene anything suspicious.

"I think I have the right to complain after what you made me go through," I growled at her. I wondered if she felt even a little bit guilty about what she made me go through, on my birthday. She didn't answer back. "Shabd, you think you can get a test of the air here?" I asked, finally acknowledging the smell that was bothering me.

"I can try," he replied while opening his kit on the dresser.

"Take fingerprints and samples of all the perfumes she has too. I think there's something in the air too," Rinki said, while getting on her knees next to the bodies. I knew she wouldn't be able to lift the man of the woman herself, so I bent down next to her to help her. After uncovering the woman, I saw that she was purple. I held the woman's hands, to look at the tips of her fingers, they were purple. Catching on to what I was doing, Rinki checked the man's hands; the tips of his fingers were purple too.

"They've been poisoned," she stated in wondrous manner. I had figured that out before her, I thought.

"Yea and I think the poisons in this room..."

"... In the air..." She finished for me. We both quickly got up and away form the bodies. If there had been a poison sprayed in the room, then it must have spread out by now, making it less deadly.

"Don't smell any of the perfumes," I quickly warned Shabd.

"I'm not a dimwit, I can still hear your guys' conversation too," Shabd snapped back. I really don't know why I had warned him, it would have been so much better if he had smelled one of the perfumes.

"The poison could be in her lipstick or something too," Rinki suggested while shrugging. Even Shabd looked at her with a wry look. "It's possible!" She hung on to her theory.

"You just wanna go against me, don't you?" I asked her with an eyebrow raised. "Or you really are that dumb. The lipstick would have to have a very strong scent, and it would be very hard to hide a poison in lipstick." I smiled at my own intelligence.

"Well look at the bottles of the perfume, there all glass, and the tops are sealed. It would take a long time to put poison in them too," she argued.

"Which means someone left it here..." I said thinking. "But wouldn't she know if she saw a new bottle of perfume on her dresser...? Then again... she's a girl. She would have probably been happy to see a new bottle of perfume and sprayed as much as she could." I put my hands on my hips, smiling at my explanation. I managed to catch Rinki's jaw dropping, probably in offense, and I enjoyed it.

"Are you trying to say something?" she demanded an explanation.

"I think I am saying something... unless you're going deaf and can't hear me anymore," I smirked at her. I found revenge through talking to her. Her expressions were the greatest prize of it.

"You..." she said while pointing her finger at me.

"Me?" I asked, taking a step closer to her. I could feel the awkwardness in her body; she hesitantly took her finger back and turned around quickly, not before huffing as loudly as she could.

"Would you two cut it out?" Shabd asked, looking back at them from the dresser. I gave him a victory smile, which seemed to annoy him. "Both of you come here and help me out with the fingerprints," he said handing me a brush. I took it, and decided to help, since I was done analyzing the body.

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Hope you enjoyed! Can't wait for your comments! 😳

kimz

Edited by kimmu - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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helloww...yesh i am finally updating this!
heh
firstly...its shushi's b-day [was] but w/e! so lemme scream this out "Happy Belated Birthday Shushant" 😍🥳 i hope all of his wishes came true, and he always rules the TV and our hearts with his acting, and sweetness...
now on to the actual prt, hehe i loved this part...its so cute! i felt so bad for preet, im causing trouble for him but...*rofl* i AM too good at pranking him 😆 aww preet is gussa with me...*erm* maybe i shouldn't have been so rough on him...*thinks* NAHH...😆 besides i cant just not bug him, tht isn't like me...*looks arnd* i think...heh sujal is such a party pooper, u can totally tell frm the beginning of his intro, all strict...heh me and shabd are busy "giggling" to ourselves 😆 poor preet, so embarassed and unable to say anything in defense...
i swear i rlly do start blushing when i read this line, ""I noticed the only seat left was the one next to my dear Rubina Singh aka that vixen"....haiii *goes to preetland* hehe he growled...i giggled...again...lmaoo shabd is giggling with me! alrite partner! lolz...i love this guy i swear, he's gnna be awesome as my best friend...heh...imagine the pain we would make preet go through...plus preet already hates shabd for some reason...🤔
aww tht premeer scene was too cute, all subtle and making preet think carefully, causing him to not hear sujal talking! aww he leaves all gusaa and dramaticly...trying to act like us when we do our *dms* 😆
yikes! preet tried to attack me, thanks shabd! or else, i bet preet would've tried to choke me heh i am so evil...hehe telling him his car's being towed...*rofl* but haiii he know wht i get...*blush* heh byyeee preet!!! im the youngest...oh yea! they're all oldies for me now....especially Sujal!! 😆😆
haii these lines..."Even though I hated how miserable she made my life, I wondered how boring life would be without her. We fought a lot, but I couldn't imagine a day without her. She was what brought life into my live. " *sighs dreamingly* i luuurve preet! 😳😳 damn u kimz for making me blush!! *glares*
dead bodies as presents...poor preet! tsk tsk, lolz ahh shabd is too funny! "im not a dimwit" ah i rlly wanna know abt his and preet's rivalry thing...
heh that comment abt girls doesnt offend me rlly...i could care less wht i look like, i just get up, do the norms and then change, brush my hair and do something simple and easy with it and leave the house...sometimes putting on eyeliner, but thts it...😆 ah poison in lipstick? hmm...i just dnt wanna agree with preet in front of someone and him especially! 😆
tht prt abt me being awkward i totally get...its the whole "i like u but i dnt wanna show it, but dnt go near some other chick or else ill kill u with my bare hands" 🥱 heh i think at least 😆😆
well i loved this part, u know tht already...anything with preet in it, im happy as a ducky! 😆
luv Rinks
[should i say vixen instead now then? 😆]
Edited by ~Rinki~ - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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this one's mine! :D

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me is here!!!!😃
before i start blabbing on and on i want to say *blows kiss* HAPPY BIRTHDAY SUSHANT! *smiles shyly*
wow wow and WOW! the update was just fantabulous kimz!!!! amazing, superb, awesome, great, fantastic!!!!!!👏 (sorry running out of words!😳)
hehe bechara preet!😆 he's always getting in trubble! array rinki....bechari ko apna janam din tho peacefully guzarni do!😆😳
haila! *nodding head disappointdly* rinkz! i never knew you were this naughty!😆 tsk tsk....hehehe but you gotta admit it preet and rinki's little fights are so adorable!😍 they really do make a cute pair!
aww this line was so sweet! "We fought a lot, but I couldn't imagine a day without her." kimzie! you are just such a fab writer...could imagine all the scenes! especially premeer being sneaky and holding hands!😍
overall, fab updateee!!!!!! luved it so so so much!!!!😳 will be waiting for friday....eagerly!😃
Edited by sonali09 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Reserved
Unreserved
Hello *waves*
How are you? I thought it was about time I unreserved😛
Aww poor thing. Having a bad day on his birthday though Rinki is funny. I love thier relationship. And I love how Preet got side tracked by Prem and Heer. It shows that he pays attention to the little things. And Rinki's hilarious, tricking Preet. She's seems like a lot of fun.
See! It was the perfume! Preet agrees with me. Even though it hasn't been proven, Preet seems to think so and I like to believe he's right about it. I love how Rinki makes up another theory just to go against Preet's.
And I just realised it's Friday which means you're gonna update😃
Edited by ravioli_11 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Mine! 😛

Yay! You updated on Sushant's Bday!😳😳😳

I loved this line! 😳 "But I couldn't snitch on her, that wouldn't be like me. I would settle the score, my own way, later." (sounds sooo like Preet!😆😆😆)

Loved her nickname!😆 ooo yay for Shabd!😃 Loved the subtle Prem and Heer romance...sounds uber cute!😳😃😆

YAY though! They're not related to Veera...thank god!😆😆😆 oooo yum Caramel Frap!😳 Great! 😔 now I'm seriously craving one...😆😆

This has to be the cutest line you wrote for Preet and Rinkz! "We fought a lot, but I couldn't imagine a day without her. She was what brought life into my live. "😳😳😳 So shweet!!!😃

Preet's girl comment...😆 Made me laugh...even though it was offensive to girls!😳😆😆

But seriously this type of ff makes it just soooo intriguing! 👏 Continue soon!😛😃

Love you,

Meera😳

P.S. Thanks for the pm!😛😃


Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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kimmu this was an awesome part... so the boss' name is Sujal garewal??? r u obsessed with him too???? Prem and heer's hand under the table..aha majra kya hai...look at me... I am here for murder mystery and I am drooling over Premeer....totally gone case... I loved Rinki's plan...kash I could use it over someone...well well investigation has started let's see what happens next..loved it a lot..post soon..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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I'm here! *runs in, pauses to catch breath*
*edited*
Firstly, HAPPY BIRTHDAY SUSHANT! I LOVE YOU! *blushes*
Secondly, that was fast.. Didn't you like, just post the first part? 😆
Sujal Garewal? *sigh* I miss KTH.. And Rajeev Khandelwal.. 😃 Aw, poor Preet, he's had such a bad birthday so far.. I'll, er, I mean, Rinki'll make it all better? 😆 Ah, Shabd as well? So will Mahi be making an appearance? 😆
Preet's more worried about PremHeer's relationship then their case? 😆 And Prem, Preet aren't related to Veera? Hmm.. interesting.. And he got yelled at.. Poor Preet.. *gives up* Come 'ere, give me a hug! *cuddles him* Nevermind Rinki, she'll become less annoying soon, and the Prat and the Vixen will end up together.. 😆 Does Rinki know it's his birthday, because then she wouldn't be so mean.. right??
And he gets payback! *cheers* Go Preet! Annoy her, yeah! 😆 Okay, so Veera and Preet aren't related, and Shabd is apparently really annoying.. Erm, did I miss anything? Other than the fact that Rinki feels awkward standing very near Preet.. This isn't like first grade right, where the kids pull each others hair to show that they like each other? Because Rinki's behaviour suggests that mentality! 😆 (Even in real life..)
I'm intrigued.. I need more!
Love,
Radz
Edited by Anhdara13 - 16 years ago
Posted: 16 years ago
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No need to applaud, I am here! Calm your pants...

HAPPY BIRTHDAY MY SUSHI! I LOVE YOU! *hides behind H* Rinkz...?*angel face* Cookies? *bats eyelashes*

OK, I didn't comment on the prolouge, I absolutely loved the concept really intriguing AND YESH VEERA IS DEAD...not that I am happy or anything..🤔

Loved all the characters, ohh Prat and Vixen, adorable lil things! *pinches cheeks* I love her lil jokes and pranks towards Preet, they are so cute!!!👍🏼

Aye hai...Prem and Heer's hands made an apperence ☺️ loving it!!! =] =] So cute...and aww the lil chemistry between them when they were investigating!!

Loved it Kimz....

Shabz =]

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